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Writing Feedbackbehnooshsamavat - Jan 13, 2020Holt - Jan 14, 2020
|Social anxiety, academic failure - My Common App Personal Statement
4 - "Show, don't tell" is vital to writing an engaging essay, and this is the point students struggle with most....
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3 - Start by stating how long you've known the person. Briefly provide details on how you know the person (for...
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|Unfortunate circumstances - UBC essay question for admission
3 - The essay doesn't respond to the prompt. You are telling me about your brother with special needs when the...
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|Regional household recycling rates - MY FIRST IELTS WRITING TASK 1
3 - Try to write at least 3 sentences for every paragraph. That way you increase the word count and your...
Writing FeedbackTria170393 - Dec 30, 2019Holt - Jan 13, 2020
|People consider computers to be the most important breakthrough
3 - Well, you certainly made your opinion clear in the essay, even with the problematic grammar and sentence presentations. You...
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3 - @Holt Thank you for your valuable feedback, I agree to the part that my impact is not visible...
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3 - Well,t his is certainly a very strong application essay that highlights all of the salient points of the prompt...
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|IELTS - Task 1 - Physical Activity awareness among different sexes and age people in Australia
4 - The summary paragraph is missing a trending statement at the end. The summary paragraph is the first paragraph of...
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|Personal Statement for Interaction Science - KGSP / GKS 2020
5 - This is an overall essay that has not taken the prompt guide questions into consideration as the draft was...
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3 - The introduction paragraph is incomplete. Since this is a summary of the graph information, it should contain a list...
Writing Feedbacktdung512 - Jan 9, 2020Holt - Jan 13, 2020
|Master in Finance & Accounting program - my first draft for personal statement
2 - It is a bit difficult to review your personal statement as you did not indicate if the university has...
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|Ivey MSc Business Analytics - Technical and Quantitative Aptitude
2 - The essay sounds more like you explaining what you understand about the course objectives. You come across more as...
UndergraduateXindy - Jan 9, 2020Holt - Jan 13, 2020
|UBC Personal Profile: Tell us about who you are. (The Idealist)
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|UBC application essay--- What is important to you? And why? To respect one another's views.
2 - The theme of the response should be found in the first paragraph. Since respecting the point of view of...
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|IELTS WRITING TASK 1 - Car theft, house burgling and street robbery - statistics in two countries
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|ADMISSIONS ESSAY: TELL MORE ABOUT YOU. RELATE ONE/MORE EXPERIENCE AFFECTING YOUR DEVELOPMENT.
2 - The essay theme is a good one. However, the presentation is not very good. It suffers from proper editing...
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|UBC PERSONAL PROFILE - study of psychology (WHAT IS IMPORTANT TO YOU AND WHY)
2 - The title of your essay could use some improvement. It is not as eye-catching nor interesting as you might...
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|Canada summer 2018 - Social10. Your reaction to a problem and/or an unfamiliar situation
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|IELTS Writing Task 1: the number of university graduates in Canada over fifteen years
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|@Forest Disaster in Australia
3 - @Holt Thank you so much. It is the first time I try to write something. Honestly, i don't have...
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|People who have a lot of money are the happiest. Do you agree or disagree?
3 - @Holt Thanks for your feedback. It is very useful. I want to improve my writing skills. If you were...
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|Teaching child and mental development - IELTS academic writing task 2
2 - First up, do not exaggerate the importance of the discussions being presented. The prompt offered you a simple discussion....
Writing Feedbackminhtrile010 - Jan 12, 2020Holt - Jan 12, 2020
|Erasmus Mundus Master - Public Health Motivation letter; motivations for the course and career plans
2 - Your essay exceeded the word count by 28 words. You will need to do some overall editing to make...
Letterseric_roth - Jan 9, 2020Holt - Jan 12, 2020
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|Essay about pros and cons of moving from home country
2 - Your presentation is riddled with grammatical errors and sentence structure problems. For starters, you seem to have a problem...
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|It is neither possible nor useful to provide university places for a high proportion of young people
2 - You created a contradiction in your introduction. In the first sentence, you claim that college education is important. Yet,...
Writing FeedbackRM_3313 - Jan 8, 2020Holt - Jan 12, 2020
|Healthcare costs in America - Peer Review research rough draft.
2 - Amy, the first paragraph should work as a summary of the content of the research/article you are reviewing. The...
Research Papersamc518 - Jan 12, 2020Holt - Jan 12, 2020
|SOP for Research Internship (machine learning project)
2 - The essay is too informal in presentation. Since you are writing an academic essay, you have to avoid placing...
UndergraduateShan99 - Jan 8, 2020Holt - Jan 12, 2020
|The Personal Statement for graduate KGSP Scholarship. Other field in master course
2 - Since this is a masters degree application, you can skip the family background since that is not required for...
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