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3 - You are being asked to consider a discussion point. You are not being asked to represent an argument. So...
Writing FeedbackClockWork - Oct 15, 2020Holt - Oct 16, 2020
|WHY DAVIDSON COLLEGE? I've thought of several things and these really stood out to me
2 - The first paragraph is of an excessive length. Remove the reference to the major you have chosen to pursue...
Undergraduateawelawi - Oct 15, 2020Holt - Oct 16, 2020
|Should students use smartphones at school ?
3 - You are not answering the main question as you are developing both advantages and disadvantages. You could separate both...
Writing Feedbacklynnx241 - Oct 9, 2020daigonzur - Oct 16, 2020
|Task 1: Information regarding the proportion of people doing volunteer jobs in six different spheres
3 - @Holt Many thanks for your comment. However, can I rewrite my essay in this way? The pie charts...
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|Chevening leadership essay - being a natural leader
Scholarshipdaigonzur - Oct 14, 2020daigonzur - Oct 16, 2020
|Sustainable development. - Chevening Scholarship Leadership and Influence essay
3 - I think you might like to change the word authoritative and replace it with more suitable word. I usually...
Scholarshipkte3005 - Oct 12, 2020Messiah - Oct 15, 2020
|Studying abroad becomes one of the popular students' choices
4 - some corrections here! First, it is an excellent opportunity to learn not only knowledge but also improve your language...
Writing Feedbackcamly178 - Oct 11, 2020Messiah - Oct 15, 2020
|(Active / Contributed / Art) outline your contribution and extracurricular activities
6 - Well, this is about your personal story particularly related to any extra curriculum activities you have engaged in during...
Essaysjustme - Feb 27, 2011Messiah - Oct 15, 2020
|College is not the only way to success (No word limit)
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|Got several awards at school - Personal Statement (KGSP Undergraduate application)
2 - In the motivation portion, tie in the advances Korea has had in IT that you admire the most. Find...
ScholarshipRarapta - Oct 15, 2020Holt - Oct 15, 2020
|A New Era For e-Commerce - research paper
2 - Separate the introduction of Chris Walton. You have to first give his background, as a professional, what are his...
Research Paperstavogodoy - Oct 14, 2020Holt - Oct 15, 2020
|The Safety of Workers at Nuclear Power Plants
2 - The opening paragraph is a bit confusing to read. You should open that by focusing on the increasing demand...
Research Papersslande41 - Oct 14, 2020Holt - Oct 15, 2020
|The conscription of Unpaid community service at high school - IELTS Task 2 agree or disagree
5 - @Hannah Robjn Thanks for your comments it helps me a lot,I'll try to make corrections as suggested....
Writing Feedbackxingyinglixi - Oct 14, 2020xingyinglixi - Oct 15, 2020
|Why "discovery" is important for me
4 - @Holt Thank you so much Holt😊☘💚 This was my first experience in writing.i try to apply your tips...
Writing Feedbackznb_jln - Oct 13, 2020znb_jln - Oct 14, 2020
|coursework - descriptive writing
2 - The essay itself is descriptive. However, the descriptiveness does not help the story move forward. The descriptions should not...
Writing Feedbackjameth - Oct 14, 2020Holt - Oct 14, 2020
|[WRITING TASK 1] The average on cell phone, national fixed line amd international fixed line service
4 - @Hannah Robjn Thanks for your feedback. Maybe i typed too fast so i made a lot unexpected mistakes. I...
Writing Feedbackelliemiller - Oct 13, 2020elliemiller - Oct 14, 2020
|Should Hong Kong set up a closed camp for non-refoulement claimants?
NEW - government discussion paper Topic: Should Hong Kong set up a closed camp for non-refoulement claimants? Hello, this paper...
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|Chevening Scholarship - Leadership Must Be Nurtured Since Childhood
4 - Hi, this is generally a good essay, but your make the eassay focus more on the activities which you...
Scholarshipabvsuward - Oct 13, 2020Ada1998 - Oct 14, 2020
|Leaders of Change - Leadership skills for Chevening scholarship
4 - Hi, Your Essay is great and you have good leadership ability. My comment would be that you should separate...
ScholarshipZainab Eid - Oct 3, 2020Ada1998 - Oct 14, 2020
|Increased human lifespans - IELTS task 2 advantages and disadvantages
3 - In the prompt paraphrase, you have to clearly indicate, through a restatement, the discussion instructions. You could have done...
Writing Feedbacksillyqa - Oct 13, 2020Holt - Oct 14, 2020
|TOEFL: Sad but true, we become less happier and unsatisfied than we were in the past
2 - Your opening paragraph is not very understandable to a native English speaker. You are making claims that are not...
Writing Feedbackolivia0926 - Oct 13, 2020Holt - Oct 14, 2020
|IELTS TASK 2 - WHETHER INTERNET-BASED SELF-STUDY CAN REPLACE FORMAL EDUCATION.
3 - Kindly review the question you are being asked to respond to. This is not an essay that is asking...
Writing FeedbackVoThuyPhuong - Oct 13, 2020Holt - Oct 14, 2020
|Teaching students for life, not just for a Test: A Leadership Essay for the Chevening Scholarship
3 - Thank you very much for your comment! I wrote about it thinking that not every teacher is a leader,...
Scholarshipenjoplin - Oct 13, 2020enjoplin - Oct 14, 2020
|It is widely argued that the railways are more in need of the Government's investment than roads
3 - @Holt Thank you for the very detailed reply! I will definitely look over those mistakes and make improvements following...
Writing Feedbackaliceewdoublee - Oct 13, 2020aliceewdoublee - Oct 13, 2020
|The topic of how necessary the public areas are
2 - You have misrepresented the original topic, which means you changed the prompt requirement. This deviation could result in points...
Writing Feedbackjanehello - Oct 13, 2020Holt - Oct 13, 2020
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2 - FAST FOOD RELATED DISEASES
2 - You are making claims in your prompt paraphrase that are not included in the original presentation. There is no...
Writing Feedbackdenis85 - Oct 13, 2020Holt - Oct 13, 2020
|Lifelong bonds - What is important to you? And why?
2 - There is a disconnection between the first few sentences in your presentation and the rest of your essay. You...
Undergraduateheheh123 - Oct 13, 2020Holt - Oct 13, 2020
|THE PERFORMANCE OF THE FOURTH INDUSTRIAL REVOLUTION IN KOREAN PUBLIC DIPLOMACY
2 - The first 2 sentences are not effective in helping you explain what the problem you will be discussing in...
Writing FeedbackHIENDONG - Oct 13, 2020Holt - Oct 13, 2020
|Personal Statement for Erasmus Mundus Joint Master : Tourism and Culture Development - TourDC
2 - Under Covid-19, the tourism industry and the business industry have changed. While the courses offered may still be the...
Scholarshipmaferc19 - Oct 12, 2020Holt - Oct 13, 2020
|Ielts Writing task 2: Art classes should be compulsory in high school. Do you agree or disagree?
3 - This is a task 2 essay, not an academic research paper. Kindly remember that you have 40 minutes to...
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