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The table below shows daily oil production in 4 countries from 2000 to 2004

3 - "while a gradual decline in oil production was seen during the period" I guess you forgot to mention about...

Writing Feedbacklavendar95 - Nov 2, 2022Thao4real - Nov 18, 2022
IELTS 1: The increases and decreases of CO2 emissions per person in four european countries

3 - I think you should use " between....and .....". In your sentence, you use " between 1967 to 1977". In...

Writing FeedbackLuana1017 - Nov 15, 2022Thao4real - Nov 18, 2022
The percentage of age groups in the population of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and predictions for 2050

4 - I think that you shouldn't use "firstly". After finishing your overall, you can write "According to the given chart",...

Writing Feedbackdat1234567 - Nov 11, 2022Thao4real - Nov 18, 2022
The charts; the percentage of boys and girls aged 5-14 taking part in cultural activities and sports

4 - I don't think you should use "while " at the beginning of the sentence, and "while significantly more males...

Writing Feedbacksofia0125 - Nov 5, 2022Thao4real - Nov 18, 2022
IELTS WRITING TASK 2 - TAX LIABILITY OF PARENTS OF CHILDREN ENROLLING IN PRIVATE SCHOOLS

2 - The opening paraphrase is missing one reference. Since there are 2 reference points in the original prompt, the interpretation...

Writing Feedbackvocongminhbuh - Nov 17, 2022Holt - Nov 17, 2022
Professional, cultural experiences, career goals, Information systems

2 - It was Sonali Bendre Behl who just yesterday, in her Instagram account mentioned how children from India are strongly...

GraduateAsmodeus4 - Nov 17, 2022Holt - Nov 17, 2022
Essay about hosting an international sports and how it effects a given country

2 - There is an error in the approach of the writer to the given discussion. He has decided to disregard...

Writing Feedbackdkhoa0206 - Nov 17, 2022Holt - Nov 17, 2022
Psychological Effects of Clothing & Confidence

2 - While the writer does provide detailed research reports and interpretations, what is missing from these information is the personal...

Research Papersvrodriguez0889 - Nov 17, 2022Holt - Nov 17, 2022
Motivation Letter - Russian Scholarship (Biology and Biotechnology)

2 - This is the actual focus of the motivation letter. This is the main topic the writer should show...

Lettersmaisaaziad - Nov 16, 2022Holt - Nov 17, 2022
These days, more fathers stay at home and take care of their children while mothers go out to work.

2 - Since the term "partner" is gender neutral, and the original reference is gender specific, the writer should use a...

Writing FeedbackHai Duong Do - Nov 16, 2022Holt - Nov 16, 2022
Biotechnology - Motivational letter for master program in university

2 - The letter could be more straight forward in explaining the motivation. Since this appears to be a continuing research...

Lettersuletrax - Nov 15, 2022Holt - Nov 16, 2022
Social media as the replacement for directly communication all over the world

4 - The last paragraph could use a bit more of work as it is the last one, it should impact...

Writing Feedbackngochongnhung - Oct 31, 2022Nanya_26 - Nov 15, 2022
People living in cities and towns in some areas

3 - I would recommend that you check your grammar. Some syntactic issues are interfering with the reading and I had...

Writing FeedbackDanielDang - Nov 15, 2022Nanya_26 - Nov 15, 2022
(Writing Task 1) The debris created by three companies

3 - I think the writer is lack of detailed number on the last paragraph, which could lead to a decrease...

Writing Feedbackdungqndt - Nov 15, 2022DanielDang - Nov 15, 2022
Tell us about who you are - My growth as a person

3 - @Holt I don't really understand what you mean by disengaging from my writing and to use the third person...

Undergraduatekevinxu - Nov 14, 2022kevinxu - Nov 14, 2022
Culture diversity in the host country

2 - The student is merely repeating the same errors using different prompt topics. This is his 3rd essay posted here...

Writing Feedbackhnguyn7 - Nov 12, 2022Holt - Nov 14, 2022
Children should be strictly controlled, this asserts by some parents and teachers. Others disagree.

2 - It is difficult to decide where to begin with the review of this failing score essay. Do I start...

Writing Feedbackhnguyn7 - Nov 12, 2022Holt - Nov 14, 2022
Robotics club and mentorship - Tell us about who you are. UBC

3 - So I am a little confused by this response. What exactly would I need to change to improve this?...

UndergraduateKrTh - Nov 13, 2022KrTh - Nov 14, 2022
Essay about the influence a dance competition had on me (CA Personal Statement Prompt #2) - critique

2 - The essay does not open with the correct focus point. Rather than a performance mishap that could have influenced...

Undergraduatevardaan2708 - Nov 13, 2022Holt - Nov 13, 2022
Children today play very violent games. This must be the reason for the increase in violence.

3 - @Holt ty very much i really appreciate that...

Writing Feedbackducanhng - Nov 12, 2022ducanhng - Nov 13, 2022
Erasmus Mundus - Excellence in Analytical Chemistry (EACH) Motivation Letter

2 - Try to develop the research team participation in the essay since that is an essential part of the discussion....

Scholarshipkuronoma_sawako - Nov 13, 2022Holt - Nov 13, 2022
Grandmother and Dominican Republic - my application for Global Ugrad

2 - The aim of the writer is incorrect. The target of the essay should not be what the applicant hopes...

ScholarshipNanya_26 - Nov 12, 2022Holt - Nov 13, 2022
My essay on height - "A Tall Package"

2 - The essay introduces what is a unique character description of this person based on his home country. Since Nepalese...

Undergraduatemightytallperson - Nov 12, 2022Holt - Nov 13, 2022
Information about European people visited gym

2 - A text composed of 190 words will find itself in a good position to receive positive scoring considerations based...

Writing FeedbackDanielDang - Nov 12, 2022Holt - Nov 13, 2022
Discuss benefits of extracurricular activities to secondary school students

2 - The student has not understood the meaning of an extra curricular activity. He has focused incorrectly on outside learning...

Writing Feedbackmai_anh_doan - Nov 12, 2022Holt - Nov 13, 2022
The data regarding how the rates of birth fluctuated from 1920 to 2000 in China and USA

3 - These are my comments: - The sentence "the Chinese counterpart underwent a comparatively similar pattern" should be put in...

Writing Feedbackhalinh2000 - Nov 8, 2022hnguyn7 - Nov 12, 2022
Children & Family topic, talk about pressure on children

4 - ... are the oneones who are ... (this sentence is too complicated, i reckon you should put 2 clauses...

Writing FeedbackMaria_Ph - Nov 7, 2022hnguyn7 - Nov 12, 2022
HKUST Undergraduate Personal Statement for Engineering Courses

3 - @Holt Thank you very much for your feedback. I have rewrite my essay, since there is a word limit,...

Undergraduateputrikhansa - Nov 11, 2022putrikhansa - Nov 12, 2022
Government oppression - why you decided to apply to the department/area of Sejong University.

2 - The information provided does not reflect that of a person who is truly decided on a career in Digital...

Undergraduatebunikjun - Nov 11, 2022Holt - Nov 11, 2022
Essay about my ambition to become an Astronaut - Common app prompt Some students have a background,

6 - @bunikjun and @Alao0702 Thanks for the feedback I think I have to rewrite the whole essay once again...

UndergraduateDestiny - Nov 9, 2022Destiny - Nov 11, 2022