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The potential damage for children when they are overusing computers. Write 250words

3 - Sorry, an important exam of mine is coming and I have to prepare quickly by writing two simultaneously. Thanks...

Writing FeedbackBlackrain - Mar 15, 2021Blackrain - Mar 16, 2021
Personal Statement For KGSP Graduate Program 2021 - Master's Degree in Psychology

3 - @Holt Thank you very much for your constructive comments. I will try to modify those information to makes my...

Scholarshipwyh99 - Mar 15, 2021wyh99 - Mar 16, 2021
Essay 1 - examples of the benefits that the GOI-IES would provide me

2 - The professional aspect does not have a convincing motivation for your application. The reason for your desire to receive...

Scholarshipnatfernandesss - Mar 16, 2021Holt - Mar 16, 2021
Sports science - Personal statement for KGSP-G (2021)

2 - The motivational questions you are using in this essay are very shallow and basic. These do not represent a...

ScholarshipBhardwaj7714 - Mar 15, 2021Holt - Mar 16, 2021
Traffic jams and traffic accidents are big problems in Vietnam

2 - This is a 4 paragraph essay that utilizes only 2 reasoning paragraphs. One for the causes and one for...

Writing FeedbackBlackrain - Mar 15, 2021Holt - Mar 16, 2021
The difference between men and women who did daily physical activity in Australia

NEW - fit people in aUSTRALIA The bar chart provides information about how difference between men and women who live...

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From a long time psychologists claim that colors can affect people's feelings. IELTS 2

3 - Hi, I think to strengthen your argument, you need to give some counter argument first then your rebuttal. Maybe...

Writing FeedbackDiepVu99 - Mar 5, 2021juliachung - Mar 15, 2021
2021 GKS Graduate Personal Statement: International Business Major

2 - - Talk more about your family background. Introduce your parents to the reviewer. Let him / her get...

ScholarshipJun0101 - Mar 12, 2021Holt - Mar 15, 2021
English Learning during Covid-19 and ESP for Young Adults - TESOL Master Degree Essay (AAS)

2 - The paragraph about the pandemic should be worked into the motivation for your desire to complete the masters program....

ScholarshipDA786 - Mar 15, 2021Holt - Mar 15, 2021
IELTS writing 2 - Topic: pros and cons of public transport

2 - You are not being asked to discuss why public transportation is so popular and some negatives of using it....

Writing Feedbackbaochau123 - Mar 14, 2021Holt - Mar 15, 2021
IELTS TASK 1; The rate of employed British people based on genders in various working fields in 2005

3 - Thank you for your advice. I know my essay is too long but I dont know how to cover...

Writing Feedbackjuliachung - Mar 14, 2021juliachung - Mar 15, 2021
Cross major - Personal Statement - GKS Graduate University Track

2 - - Do not use English slang words. This term is used as a derogatory reference to someone who...

Graduatehrdynt23 - Mar 14, 2021Holt - Mar 15, 2021
Do you like living with wealthy people or those who come from different social class?

3 - The writing might be too short for some people, like me. You should demonstrate more aspects of the problems...

Writing Feedbacklogin - Mar 8, 2021Blackrain - Mar 15, 2021
Doctoral Degree for AAS 2021

5 - Well thank you so much for the feedback @umbu richi. Is this Umbu that also followed Mr. Mau's class?...

Scholarshipkartini79 - Mar 6, 2021kartini79 - Mar 15, 2021
Examples how you will gain from your scholarship. Indonesian policy, collaboration with Australia

3 - I'll think about it again and try to be more systematic as you previously explained. Thank You Sir for...

ScholarshipUmbu Richy - Mar 9, 2021Umbu Richy - Mar 15, 2021
How have you implemented a change or reform? Controversial court judgments

3 - Actually, I have experience as a volunteer to teach students about the Laws of Electronic Information and Transactions because...

ScholarshipUmbu Richy - Mar 9, 2021Umbu Richy - Mar 15, 2021
Study impact on my career as a Policy Analyst and Planning Expert in government

3 - Oh, I see. I just realized that I didn't really discuss my career goal and just put it as...

ScholarshipUmbu Richy - Mar 9, 2021Umbu Richy - Mar 15, 2021
GKS Scholarship- Statement of purpose (Language Study Plan) - English and Korean

3 - Thank you so much for your help, I made the study plan as an essay form just as you...

Scholarshipjh13 - Mar 13, 2021jh13 - Mar 14, 2021
Spending money just when earn it or saving them for some future plans?

3 - @yasinb1377 hi there, "... but also learns us how ..." i think in this sentence it better for you...

Writing Feedbackyasinb1377 - Mar 7, 2021baochau123 - Mar 14, 2021
Due to the development of the internet our life has improved, but users may face some problems

3 - @Lilychau382 hi there, i think you should use :" children use internet excessively" and "people should use it in...

Writing FeedbackLilychau382 - Mar 12, 2021baochau123 - Mar 14, 2021
Fast food is becoming cheaper and more widely available. Do advantages outweigh disadvantages?

4 - Hi @grassil, I think you have misunderstood the main point of the question. It is to prove which side...

Writing Feedbackgrassil - Mar 13, 2021juliachung - Mar 14, 2021
IELTS Writing 2 - Rich Countries aid to Poorer Countries

3 - @Holt Thank you very much. I just wondering if my conclusion is clear enough? In your opinion, will I...

Writing FeedbackFarfarisca - Mar 14, 2021Farfarisca - Mar 14, 2021
Child care from centers or blood relatives

2 - You have presented an opinion in the first sentence that is not part of the original prompt presentation. You...

Writing Feedbackmeomeomeodhsa - Mar 13, 2021Holt - Mar 14, 2021
IELTS Task 2 - A majority of mature people are preferring to live with their families

2 - Wow! 496 words, way over the number of words that you can actually write within the 40 minute time...

Writing FeedbackSophienguyen - Mar 13, 2021Holt - Mar 14, 2021
The boss very important do work

2 - A formally written essay / sentence never begins with the conjunction "because". That is due to the word more...

Writing Feedbackchauthang5995 - Mar 13, 2021Holt - Mar 14, 2021
I'm able to understand how far I can go and the effort that it requires; UGRAD Program participation

2 - This is the most community relevant aspect of your discussion. Yet, it fails to portray you in a...

UndergraduateDavidaguilark - Mar 13, 2021Holt - Mar 14, 2021
IELTS essay about advantages and disadvantages of changing career.

4 - @baochau123 hi there, I think it is better for you to change it to "a job that...

Writing Feedbackbaochau123 - Mar 12, 2021Farfarisca - Mar 14, 2021
The Global UGRAD Program is.... Why would you be a great participant in the Global UGRAD Program?

2 - Your reference to PASTO App is not really along the lines of community leadership. It will not help you...

Scholarshipomarkamal - Mar 12, 2021Holt - Mar 13, 2021
Academic Goal and Study Plan - AMA+ Undergraduate Scholarship 2022

3 - @Holt thank you so much!! :D...

Undergraduatemiriyome - Mar 11, 2021miriyome - Mar 12, 2021
[WRITING 2 IELTS] In the developed world, average life expectancy is increasing. Ageing societies.

2 - In the restatement sentence, do not mention "fact" since there is no reference to such in the original prompt....

Writing Feedbackainekuraine1134 - Mar 12, 2021Holt - Mar 12, 2021