|UNC supplement essays, University of North Carolina - something inspiring
5 - Jiang, by definition, an elder is described as any of the following persons: 1. a person of greater age...
ScholarshipBennyooooHolt - Jan 11, 2017
|Letter of Intent - MFA Child Culture Design - University of Gothenburg
4 - Ade, try to combine the first and last paragraph of your essay in order to create a more informative...
GraduateameadeliaHolt - Jan 11, 2017
|Are the real teachers replaceable?
4 - Hello, I found you've tried to discuss the both sides and, in my opinion, I think it is...
Writing FeedbackvonhuoclanArlen - Jan 11, 2017
|The possession of car in a proportion of no car, one car, two cars, and more than two cars in Canada
4 - Hello, First of all, the words account doesn't meet the 150 words requirement. I think your sentences address...
Writing FeedbackilmuholicArlen - Jan 11, 2017
|The Urgency of Prohibition to Mobile Phone Utilization in Public Places (Writing IELTS Task 2)
4 - Thanks for your suggestion @nandasharma. I have to admit that i did it intentionally, and that is my method...
Writing Feedbackilmuholicilmuholic - Jan 11, 2017
|Another late night at the hospital. Constructive Advice Needed on Nursing Program Entrance Essay
7 - Hi Chloe. I must say that you effectively applied the suggestions that I made for the improvement of your...
UndergraduateclrHolt - Jan 11, 2017
|Writing Task 2: People claim that not enough of the waste from home is recycled.
3 - Arlen, you have to clearly show your opinion. It seem that there is no a completion in your writing....
Writing FeedbackArlenilmuholic - Jan 11, 2017
|What do you plan to do after completing your master's degree in Sweden?
3 - @Holt Thank you very much Mary. I am really grateful to received valuable comments for my essay. I will...
ScholarshipStreetwalkerStreetwalker - Jan 11, 2017
|The Ethical Pitfalls of Orphanage Tourism
2 - George, your discussion regarding "Orphanage Tourism" is very one sided. It does not deliver a balanced discussion because you...
Research Papersgeo2149457Holt - Jan 11, 2017
|Art, music, poetry, knowledge, love of life and humorous spirit vs kalashnikovs. Pitzer- Core Values
2 - Narmine, your statement about student responsibility should be placed at the start of the essay and be changed to...
Undergraduatestudent58Holt - Jan 11, 2017
|Ivey AEO Activity Essay #1 - my candidacy to be enrolled in the HBA program
8 - Actually, you should only present one activity that clearly represent the 3 character traits indicated in the prompt. Being...
UndergraduateMT1Holt - Jan 11, 2017
|Design, graphic and art is in my heart. Statement of Purpose for MFA in Visual Communication @SAIC
4 - Astha, in the second paragraph, there is an implication that you changed college courses / majors. As I see...
Graduateaasthathakkar28Holt - Jan 11, 2017
|Words are secondary. Thoughts live; they travel far. RISD, MFA Graphic Design SOP
3 - Raman, in all actuality, you have said a lot in your essay without saying anything of substance at all....
GraduateRamanbhandariHolt - Jan 11, 2017
|Personal statement - Master in Analytics - Descriptive analytic to improve businesses' efficiency
13 - Thank you so much @Holt I wish you all the best....
Graduatecatnguyen181catnguyen181 - Jan 11, 2017
|Why I believe that Virginia Tech is the right place for me
16 - @Holt Whoa !! Thanks for that ! Really Appreciate the help :) and i promise i will improve my...
Undergraduateduboiduboi - Jan 10, 2017
|Personal Profile for University Admission - an episode that taught you something about yourself
2 - S M, due to the one essay per thread policy of the forum, I will only be responding to...
UndergraduatenhjoyHolt - Jan 10, 2017
|Raising driving age from 18 to 25.
6 - Unfortunately, that is not enough. You see the essay prompt is meant to test your knowledge of current events...
Writing FeedbackGemyNitronHolt - Jan 10, 2017
|Why Lafayette? Comparing myself to a French general
14 - Its a decent hook because it shows that unlike other students who just base their essays on the work...
Undergraduatengokhoa99Holt - Jan 10, 2017
|Passion for Neuroscience transfer intent essay
5 - Joseph, the portion about your excitement about research should be directly related to the university that you will be...
Undergraduatemasonn8Holt - Jan 10, 2017
|Describe leadership experience in 250 characters including spaces
6 - @digaprasiska Thank you for your feed back. I will look at yours and hopefully can give you some insights...
ScholarshipStreetwalkerStreetwalker - Jan 10, 2017
|Different forms of Diabetes Mellitus that a person can be affected by.
3 - Will, a peer reviewed article such as this still requires the same information be placed in it as a...
Research Papersshamus7555Holt - Jan 10, 2017
|McGill: A Contemporary Figure and how does he inspire me
2 - Alex, point of warning about the title of your essay. You can't use the prompt requirement and the name...
ScholarshipalexgzmHolt - Jan 10, 2017
|Topic is "Science, not art or literature must be taught at universities" do you agree or not?
3 - Hajar, first of all, you will need to learn how to develop more interesting titles for your posts other...
Writing FeedbackHajar rifenaHolt - Jan 10, 2017
|'the idea of being a doctor has developed in my mind' I am writing an essay for APIASF scholarship
4 - @Holt Thank you very much for your advice...
Scholarshipvynguyen050499vynguyen050499 - Jan 10, 2017
|How to write an essay about TV-watching habits?
5 - Your writing is good and cover all the question which needed to answer. If only you can expand the...
Writing FeedbackSaraspedilmuholic - Jan 10, 2017
|Nigerian activities and overview. Motivation letter for masters in Telecommunications Engineering
5 - @Holt @chizy7 Here is an improved version. Please take a look at it. Despite the positive trends in...
Graduateokorocyrilokorocyril - Jan 9, 2017
|Most countries allow 18-year-olds to drive a car.
6 - @eetester Just a few things I noticed: "While some people support 18 ... Others, believe that driver's license ..."...
Writing Feedbackeetesterclr - Jan 9, 2017
|Writing Task 1: average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in four countries
3 - A little inputs for the beginning. The provided line chart illustrates compares the trend average of...
Writing FeedbackArlenStreetwalker - Jan 9, 2017
|How did you solve a problem and the results? - Texas Austin MSBA Essay
8 - @Holt Thank you so much for the help. I am finalizing this essay....
Graduatepandamanpandaman - Jan 9, 2017
|A white paper ready to be filled. Kids' the best teacher is their parent.
4 - Housseyne, where is the statement? You gave the instructions for the discussion but not the topic for discussion. I'm...
Writing FeedbackNADOURHolt - Jan 9, 2017