|A very short essay for the European Commission traineeship
2 - Alessandra, this response is like a hamster on a wheel. Constantly churning out words but not getting anywhere. You...
LettersAlexxaStonemHolt - Jan 29, 2018
|The world of data. Statement of Intent for MS in Data Science program
4 - Hi! Since this is a statement of purpose I think you might missed the "purpose of taking the course...
Graduateutvkukas90 - Jan 29, 2018
|The impact of the Erasmus Mundus emPLANT master's scholarship in your home country
3 - BIsrat, you have presented very relevant information in relation to food insecurity in Eritrea.However, I am not sure what...
GraduatemeksebsiumHolt - Jan 29, 2018
|"Are all Whites generous givers?" based on a picture
4 - @Hueiru On your good essay, I suggest that you make a conclusive sting that can portrait the aim of...
Writing FeedbackHueiruGodluck - Jan 29, 2018
|To advance in the field of agricultural biotechnology. Letter of Self-Introduction for KGSP 2018
4 - @Holt This is the result of my revision. I appreciate your full support in helping us improve our essays....
Scholarshipzhayendzujizhayendzuji - Jan 29, 2018
|The methodology that you will use and the potential significance of the study to your discipline
4 - @TshimangeM If you are to write a detailed study plan, you need to write the basics in doing a...
ScholarshipTshimangeMzhayendzuji - Jan 29, 2018
|My connections with chemicals - first draft for personal statement for masters in chemical review.
2 - Muhammad, your personal essay is not focused on the development of your interest in Chemistry in the proper manner....
Graduateblackhawk9112Holt - Jan 28, 2018
|Strive for your goal ! : Self-introduction for KGSP
4 - I already revise my essay. If you have time, would you mind checking it again. yes, if Urgent. ...
Scholarshipparnnaveiyparnnaveiy - Jan 28, 2018
|First SOP Draft Msc in CS. English is my 2nd language and change in background is making it hard.
2 - Balaganesh, this is a personal statement. So you cannot use this for a statement of purpose (SOP). The SOP...
GraduateGanzdoodleHolt - Jan 28, 2018
|Plan of study relating to HIV in Nigeria
3 - Ahmed, there is no clear course of study provided in your essay. Your earlier statement, the opening portion of...
ScholarshipSgh_p910Holt - Jan 28, 2018
|Age limit, Who is obliged to work?
3 - Any sentences shouldn't be too long (probably within 20words). There is a very long sentence in the 2nd paragraph,...
Writing Feedbackellielou_alipoonyungcwy - Jan 28, 2018
|Motivation letter for MSc in BA and SCM at a Dutch university
2 - Natalia, the content of your essay is more in line with a letter of self introduction than a motivational...
LettersNatalie513Holt - Jan 28, 2018
|'One of the best data science course' - SOP for MS in Data Science at Syracuse University
Graduateakshita_1102akshita_1102 - Jan 27, 2018
|Sports and social activities great influence on study should be noted and supported by goverment
2 - Do, I understand that you are most likely self studying for the IELTS test and as such, you are...
Writing FeedbackdohoangvananhHolt - Jan 27, 2018
|Teacher is a person who believes in you, tugs, pushes and leads you to the next plateau
3 - @Holt I passed my CBEST exam. Thank you so much for your constructive and quick feedbacks. :)...
Writing FeedbackKhushbooVohraKhushbooVohra - Jan 27, 2018
|Video games having an adverse effect on the people who play them - is that truth, give your opinion.
Writing Feedbackchitrinh_389Holt - Jan 27, 2018
|Introduction "Impact of Globalization"
2 - @loveofenglish As I read this introduction, I found it wanting in terms of specific, introductory information. The first missing...
Writing FeedbackloveofenglishHolt - Jan 26, 2018
|Need review on my application essay for Graduate admission in Architecture (Building Technology)
5 - @Holt Thank you so much for helping me with the structure. I'll make the necessary changes. As for the...
Graduatevaletevalete - Jan 26, 2018
|A friend from another town will come and stay in your apartment. Providing keys and instructions.
2 - LAI, there are number of grammatical errors that distract from the reading of this letter. The first problem that...
Writing FeedbacklinelineHolt - Jan 26, 2018
|Something you might not know about me: essay topic for college of Maryland
3 - thanks for the feedback. I appreciate it. You must start a new topic for a new essay (useless comments...
Undergraduateapply18apply18 - Jan 26, 2018
|Some believe that vegan diet is not only better for their own health but also benefits the world
Writing Feedbackvinu460Tdkohlert - Jan 26, 2018
|You should describe clearly your research question, the methodology that you will use during study
NEW - DETAILED PLAN OF STUDY Research proposal for commonwealth scholarship application-environmental science You should describe clearly your research question,...
|A Property Officer from South Pacific Region is trying to apply for an Australian Aid Scholarship
2 - Douglas, you need to indicate what your appointment was all about. There should also be a background reference to...
ScholarshipUlahimHolt - Jan 25, 2018
|Briefly describe a time that your efforts have fallen short or a goal was not accomplished
3 - I see where you're coming from. I've been trying to think of another topic and been really struggling with...
UndergraduateTdkohlertTdkohlert - Jan 24, 2018
|'Music has been a very important part of my life' - Self Introduction for KGSP
3 - Hello! Thank you very much for your kind advise! yes I did lack of work experience which made me...
Scholarshipcaeciliajcaeciliaj - Jan 24, 2018
|Cricket fast bowling. PhD research proposal for Commonwealth scholarship Application
5 - Thanks for your feedback. But my research interests and study goals, long term objectives are written in other part...
ScholarshipBangarusaiBangarusai - Jan 24, 2018
|Prevention: The Only Solution To Our Health Problems
Writing FeedbackDragonyuHolt - Jan 24, 2018
|Personal background that encourage the future contribution to development of Nigeria
2 - Stephen, you should rethink your presentation in this essay. You should have a uniformity in the presentation that lays...
ScholarshipTshimangeMHolt - Jan 23, 2018
|You must provide a statement explaining how their proposed study relates to a development need. You
3 - Stephen, you turned the statement into a research paper. Delete all of the information regarding the government of Nigeria...
ScholarshipTshimangeMHolt - Jan 23, 2018
|Presentation of the employee sick leave issue
3 - I've added this in the post also. Here is the question : The argument claims that according to...
Writing Feedbackrahul07rahul07 - Jan 23, 2018