|The bar chart illustrates the Biritish male and female employees working in different occupations
4 - @ TJLuschen, thank for your detail advices. Perhaps I have misunderstood the request. I will try to improve my...
Writing Feedbackhapi_hana9hapi_hana9 - Oct 11, 2017
|[TOEFL independent task] What events (experiences or ceremonies) make a person an adult?
3 - Sophia, I think you did not post the full original prompt for the discussion. The topic sentence is missing....
Writing Feedbacksophia1942Holt - Oct 11, 2017
|I'm not confident with my essay - Chevening essay Question 1 (Leadership & Influence)
3 - @Holt Yeah...after reading some examples I realized I did it wrong. Thank you so much for your clear direction....
Scholarshipniekengniekeng - Oct 11, 2017
|I am more inclined to study with group of students rather than preparing to test alone [TOEFL]
Writing FeedbackKenChenKenChen - Oct 10, 2017
|Only by challenging existing knowledge, we are able to expand our thinking about the universe
2 - Since not all countries live under a democratic form of government, it would perhaps be best if you avoid...
Writing Feedbackimpatient101Holt - Oct 10, 2017
|Born in Mongolia, converted to Christianity, study Mongolian, job as radio editor and teaching
3 - @Holt Thank you for your detailed advise. You really saw the weakness there. I didn't know how to connect...
GraduateBillGBillG - Oct 10, 2017
|COMMON APP ESSAY PROMPT #7 - Languages and formal ways of interacting with the world
2 - Impressive work Duong. You just gave the reviewer an insight into the Vietnamese culture, mindset, and pitfalls. Excellent work...
UndergraduateswaggydhlHolt - Oct 10, 2017
|Give a brief description of your professional background and current work
3 - Taliat, you need to present your information in a chronological manner that will better help the reader to understand...
UndergraduateTaskatHolt - Oct 10, 2017
|Common App Essay Prompt #2 - My first Judo tournament and overcoming failure
2 - Josh, the essay had a very strong start. It was engaging and imaginative. It gave me an idea of...
UndergraduateJMiranda00Holt - Oct 10, 2017
|Can you review this letter of intent for a graduate program in public administration/policy
4 - Ogbonna, the letter of intent is only meant to be a cover letter, not an intricate description of your...
ScholarshipAda1992Holt - Oct 10, 2017
|Study plan required to apply for the KGSP Undergraduate Scholarship of 2018
3 - Rishu, you need to respond to each prompt as an independent essay. You are not supposed to mix references...
ScholarshipShukla SaabHolt - Oct 10, 2017
|Parent should not pressure their children to choose particular profession.
7 - - "Children must not be forced by their parents" - " I strongly agree that children should not be...
Writing FeedbackLiAnSohlamphuongta - Oct 10, 2017
|Contrast high schools and universities - Contrast Essay
6 - There are some grammatical and spelling errors . I think you mean "futher" is "further" or "shools" is "schools"...
Writing FeedbackHue Nguyenlamphuongta - Oct 10, 2017
|[IELTS writing task 1] Table: Underground railway information summary
6 - Hello hgianghgiang, based my humble opinion. your essay is not too bad actually, you wrote more than 150 words...
Writing FeedbackhgianghgiangAliminHamzah - Oct 10, 2017
|My path. I am applying for UGRAD, someone review my statement.
Undergraduatehadilakkhadilakk - Oct 9, 2017
|Educated leaders tasks; new visions of future development in a multicultural and global environment.
Scholarshipayanamipjayanamipj - Oct 9, 2017
|How Teamwork Changed My Life (Common App Prompt 1)
5 - @md1234 I think it is a great essay. i really like the topic selection and your way of writing....
Undergraduatemd1234madiefarts123 - Oct 9, 2017
|IELTS Task 1: The trend of GDP growth in post-reform China
3 - Hello Wong, according to my humble opinion your writing is quite good, that's more than 150 words and you...
Writing Feedbackwinky_wongAliminHamzah - Oct 9, 2017
|Strong Networking Skills: What does it really mean?
3 - @njal90s Dear, This is more of a Leadership essay than a Networking essay. The networking essay prompt requires...
Scholarshipnjal90sExcel2017 - Oct 9, 2017
|Leadership and Influence: How leaders exhibit leadership and influence?
3 - @Holt Thank you so much @Holt, as I understood the question it only asked for examples on one's leadership...
Scholarshipnjal90snjal90s - Oct 9, 2017
|Chevening Essay - Networking in Startups
3 - @ariesfathullah Dear, The first paragraph seems like its addressing the Leadership and influence prompt and perhaps you drifted...
ScholarshipariesfathullahExcel2017 - Oct 9, 2017
|Describe a strong memory based upon a smell
2 - Dang, you need to be more descriptive of the smell that is driving this memory of yours. The reader...
Writing FeedbackdvhanhHolt - Oct 9, 2017
|Chevening Essay, study in UK plan; I aspire to work as a lecturer of human rights lawyer
4 - @heratjalali Dear, Reading through your essay I couldn't understand what influenced your choice of the various universities you...
ScholarshipheratjalaliExcel2017 - Oct 9, 2017
|Chevening post-study career plan. Immediate and long term plans upon returning home
3 - @Lauretta you should also convince the reader why you are qualified for that position? It is easy to say,...
ScholarshipLaurettaheratjalali - Oct 9, 2017
|Networking can pave the way to engage each other in the community - Chevening Scholarships
ScholarshipFatemahEbrahimiFatemahEbrahimi - Oct 9, 2017
|How would you engage the mission of Trinity College during your years on campus? Essay Prompt.
Undergraduatemuskanshresthamuskanshrestha - Oct 9, 2017
|Television is one of the most wonderful inventions of human. And how it influence our children?
2 - Anatasia, I wish you had provided me with the complete and original prompt requirement for this essay. It appears...
Writing FeedbacklamphuongtaHolt - Oct 9, 2017
|TOEFL: Children should play and study rather than help do the household chores?
3 - Ching, your opening statement was alright until you got to the part where you were supposed to provide your...
Writing FeedbackSunnyLaiHolt - Oct 9, 2017
|IELTS TASK 2: much higher standards of living in urban areas but not in the country side
4 - Alimin, are you enrolled in English classes at the moment? If you are, how is it possible that you...
Writing FeedbackAliminHamzahHolt - Oct 9, 2017
|More time and effort on improving the world now than it was in the past?
4 - @Holt Thank you for all suggestions! I revised my mistakes below. I would greatly appreciate it if you give...
Writing FeedbackSunnyLaiSunnyLai - Oct 9, 2017