Research Papers / Making this the most persuasive research essay [8]

Do people admire the work as that of an artist, or would people rather think that it was vandalism and makes the world look bad?

There might be better artists out there than you realized.

The interesting thing about the controversy was that graffiti was being recognized by art critics all over the world by the 1980's.

In this part, you seem to change your mind:

But wait. Don't you think that it's bad to do graffiti? I think that graffiti is bad because not only is it is vandalism -- defacing property -- and do you know how much the world has to spend annually to remove graffiti?

But why do kids and adults do it if they know that business people will get rid of it or not sell them the markers and spray paint they need to do the artwork ? I think that those kinds of people are just taking the art and still take it too far.

The most important advice I have for you is to say everything n fewer words. Make these sentences shorter, and it will be more persuasive. Eliminate unnecessary phrases that make sentences long and complicated. That will help a lot. There are lots of good insights in this essay.

Most importantly, state your argument at the beginning and stick with it. You are trying to change the reader's mind. Good luck!!!

Undergraduate / A time-travel machine to go back in time in your own life and change something [22]

No, that is not an example. An example would be this:

Doubtlessly, the first day of school becomes unforgettable. The four-flour building with Its faded beige-brown painting and its streaked walls reminded me...

In that example, you started by using the present tense ("becomes") and switched to past tense ("reminded"). However, in this case it is alright, so don't change it! Sometimes it is okay to switch from past to present tense.

Here is one that you might want to change:

Indeed, throughout the next years I lived through wonderful experiences that I was sure I will forget but I often wondered whether it was my fault that our friendship prevailed unfixed because I did not keep in touch. It came to my mind that...

Does that answer your question? You do not really have errors with the verb tenses. It is just a matter of style.

It sounded awkward when I switched tenses, so I decided to stay consistent.
That sounds better than:
It sounded awkward when I switched tenses, so I stay consistent.

Neither is WRONG, but one of them flows better.

Undergraduate / people set the goals in the life which they think they can achieve [6]

A great way to improve your writing is to click around in these forums and look at the advice other students have received. Also, most importantly, read Strunk & White's Elements of Style.

For your "on the spot topic" I think you should write about the things you DO know about. You do not have to write specifically about America history and culture, do you? If you do have to write about American history, it would be good to read some stories about various times in American history in BOTH English and your native language. That way, you can write about it when necessary.

Also, it will be good to practice some sentences that you read. I think it is good to commit a few phrases to memory. Does that answer your question?

Writing Feedback / English Comprehension Clep exam - essay to practice [2]

Maybe the tasks other people give us to do are just as difficult . In the next few paragraphs, I will discuss it in further detail .

As soon as a child is born, s/he has this inner drive to live and unintentionally sets himself goals he wants to achieve.

He will continue to try until he has achieved his goal and is able to get up and stand all by himself.-----> Great sentence!

Furthermore, the goals we human beings set for ourselves might also seem impossible; because as soon as we have reached a goal we are already working on the next challenge. We can see this clearly in a toddler, who...

You make some excellent points. Although your English still needs improvement, you make clear, thoughtful points in a very effective way.

Writing Feedback / War -- victor or no victor? [45]


What?! Ha ha, no, I had no intention of making a new point. I was just pointing out that Mustafa's insight makes perfect sense. It needs no further explanation. I was just stating it (my understanding of it) in a succinct way. Unless I misunderstood, what he meant was that, in order for someone to win a war, s/he must identify with a subgroup rather than with humanity in general. If you identify with humanity in general, you don't want to see any war. You want to see alternatives to war.

Strictly speaking, war hurts humanity. It's humanity hurting itself. Sean did not disprove that. Sean is just playing the devil's advocate.


This blows my mind. How can you imply that technological advancements would not have been made over the course of these 200 years if Europeans had not displaced Native Americans and settled here?! I don't even know how to comment on such a zany statement.

Maybe you believe that the technology available today is BETTER than it would have been if the Natives had not been displaced? Well, whatever way I think of it, it seems unfounded.

But even before that weird comment, you said something even weirder: How does war hurt humanity? Maybe you are over-thinking it. I am pretty sure that what Mustafa meant was that in war the warriors hurt humanity by killing humans. It is so simple.

But I know that, like Mustafa, Sean enjoys the sport of debate, so I am sure he is just playing the devil's advocate.

Undergraduate / University of Wisconsin essay help - technically I am transferring [6]

That second question... students often use it to explain difficult circumstances, to explain that, "the low GPA on my transcript does not reflect my aptitude as a student"... that sort of thing. However, it is also an opportunity to do something brilliant. Like life itself, these essays give you an open-ended opportunity to come up with something innovative and brilliant. Don't pass them up! Write what you can.

Some days, I am so inspired, and other days I am not. But even when I'm not inspired I can write SOMETHING and... although I may not like how it comes out... it helps me to get to know myself better.

I don't know the priorities of this particular school, so I can't tell you anything about what effect your failureto complete the essay will have. I can tell you, though, that "preparing for the worst" should involve something more than just expecting it. Prepare for the worst by staying up all night if necessary! :) I'd be remiss not to stress the importance of writing the essays. Not bothering to write the essays would be a weak way to start college!

Good luck! When is your deadline?

Writing Feedback / School bus trip - a story [4]

This happens every school day, so nothing unusual was happening -- yet.

The bank is always busy at 8:30AM when we pass by, since all...

Okay, this is excellent, and you are very cool. Great story; I'm impressed! One thing is missing, though. In an essay like this, you can double the power by giving a reflective paragraph in which you discuss the insights you gained from the experience. Do that, and it will be complete. However, maybe the teacher is not interested in that for this assignment. Still, in general, when you tell a great story, use it to forward a philosophical point.

Writing Feedback / VIETNAM PAPER- Why did we lose? [3]

With the aid of the United States, still no victory was possible. By 1954, the Vietminh defeated the French. The French decided to return back home, but the United States decided they couldn't leave.

Every time you wrote "return back home," you can just write "return home."

This essay is great! Very clear and succinct. Those are important qualities.

Here is my only important advice: Use an intro and conclusion paragraph! It is hard to get into reading this, because I don't know what is going to be included. The formula I tell people is this:

Say it (in the intro, the main point)
Explain it (in the body paragraphs)
Say it again (in the conclusion paragraph)

That means that the start and end of the essay match up. They both convey the main idea. However, the conclusion can EXPAND on the main point that was made in the intro.

Undergraduate / University of Wisconsin essay help - technically I am transferring [6]


Nevermind how important they are. Stay up all night tonight reading inspirational books and writing down ideas for each essay. You can achieve something excellent with these essays. Even if the school did not exist, this would be meaningful. Do this for yourself, and it will be brilliant.

For the first one, write a story from the perspective of someone characterized by enthusiasm. Write about your life as the life of someone gifted with the ability to encourage others. Do not blow your own horn, but simply tell the story. When someone tells a story, s/he can be quite impressive. I read Barack Obama's blogs recently, and, no matter how anyone feels about his politics, you must admit that he has passion. This is what you can accomplish with essay #1.

Essay #2 is a great opportunity. What do you want to say to the person that is making this decision? Use these opportunities. Good luck! It is great that your grades are excellent. Make the most of college, working in a heart-ful way. Express yourself and work hard, starting with these essays! This is as meaningful as life gets! :)

Writing Feedback / Essay on Rating TV Shows and Movies [6]

Use a comma:

...down at the theater, what do you see?

You know what the worst parts are, and you know that nothing in the movie is worse than what you let your kids watch.

This is great! The way to improve it would be to aim the argument at an opposing argument that some people might actually make. What I mean is, no one would really argue with this. Is anyone objecting to using ratings? If so, see what they say and refute it. Be a warrior of argument.

This is a solid essay, already, though. It shows insight and understanding.

Graduate / 'Traveling back in time' - Physician Assistant -- personal statament [8]

The opening lines are great! I like it; you have a way with words.

The most essential insight I gained from my health care experience was a realization about how vital each health care member is to...

The whole essay seems SO improved now. I do think it will be even better, though, if you mention a few resources or faculty members that make this school perfect for you. Even though you are sending it to many schools, you should tailor it to a few of your top choices and make a few versions! It's important! :)

Poetry / William Blake Poetry Paper [23]

Hey, TheAnswer, thanks for all the great help you have been giving people. I saw very thoughtful insights from you today.

Google this: poetry analysis

It will teach you SO much!! You can have sections where you talk about the poet's intended meanings, about literary devices, about the effect the lines had on you... there is SO much.

Remember that this is a way to ENJOY literature. It is not work.

If you read 30 pages of Blake, you will definitely have something to say about it. When youget to a part you do not understand, google it. See what it means by reading articles.

At the end, reflect on what personality type Blake seems to have. Or reflect on the main message you got from him. Really enjoy this process. Do you have any specific questions? Post some of your progress! :)

Undergraduate / people set the goals in the life which they think they can achieve [6]


I think this is an error, but I don't know how to fix it.

Hey, as I type this, I have not yet read the essay, and I am interested to see how you answer the question. To me, the question seems silly, because there is no reason to think that my self-imposed challenges are any more difficult than the ones life naturally throws.

According to me, p People set the goals in the life which they think they can achieve. Every person know his/her strengths or drawbacks, and, owing to them, the goals are either reachable or reachable with certain difficulty for which person prepares himself. The challenges which are are set by the person himself are not far ahead of his ability . This will help the person to get prepared for the upcoming challenge and situation. when a person for example set the goal for winning a marathon he/she will be prepared with the challenges of it and in this way the results are in favour. But if suddenly on the marathon day some mishap occurs like muscle strain or toe injury then in this situation result will certainly go down.

On the contrary , the challenges for which a person is not prepared of or the challenges which have come from outside are difficult to deal. For example, something happened to me when I was preparing myself for medical exams and suddenly challenge from the university rules came and involving the fact that fewer seats were available than before because of the new reservations. The situation was even difficult then before. The reason I felt it more harder is that I was not prepared for that. Similarly when India was facing economic problems and working on politics and sudden attack ...

I give it a C! Well, you have a lot of spelling errors, but it seems that they are the kind that you would hae corrected if you had noticed them. Make time to proofread when you take the test. Also, it is not good to write "According to me..."

:) Good luck on the test!

Book Reports / Who was the tragic hero in antigone? creon or antigone? 10th grade essay. [4]

Great advice from Pia.

That question is great, too, because it challenges you to write in terms of a definition for a "tragic hero." Your reasoning is sound, but I think you should spend some time in para #1 explaining what it means to be a tragic hero. That way, you can make your case.

You also have to show how Antigone does NOT meet the description as much.

Do those things, and it will be a high-quality argument. Your writing and reasoning are excellent.

Writing Feedback / War -- victor or no victor? [45]

It makes perfect sense! You know what he means. Thinking of humanity collectively, you cannot win a war, because war hurts humanity. In the second part, he says that the onlly way you can think of "winning" a war is to think from the perspective of a member of some subgroup. To me, it makes great sense, and it is insightful. John Lennon-esque, even.

Writing Feedback / "People of MTV generation have no patience. They want instant satisfaction." [84]

I'm in good company: Wayne Dyer, Deepak Chopra, Anthony DeMello, Father Paul Cho, Rhonda Byrne, just to name a few.

All it is is being spiritual. What you are ridiculing is spirituality in general. All it is is believing in the possibility of something more than the simplicity on the surface of things. If you do not believe in anything "magic," then you certainly cannot believe in continuing your experience after the body dies.

Like I explained before, in this reality NOTHING is as it seems. The world seems flat, and it is round. The planet seems motionless, but we all know that it is flying around in space. Even molecules consist of particles whizzing around in vast space.

And the only reason you are even here to refute my idea is because you magically found yourself here!

It's pretty bold for someone who can't explain his own existence to make fun of someone for considering all the possibilities. If you discovered that life really did work much like the way dreams work, you would not even be surprised!

But no! You can just go on scoffing at people who are starting to see through the illusion, and enjoy the smug satisfaction of playing the role of the scientific one!

But scientists have to come up with hypotheses to explain what they do not yet understand. You do not yet know the answer to th Big Question, but somehow you feel justified in making fun of... of... magic. You feel justified in making fun of my hypothesis about the Magic Origin of Things, even though you do not have a hypothesis of your own!

How can anyone who has appeared into this crazy reality not believe in magic. The very foundation of life in the universe is nothing short of magic. If you want to make a hypothesis that can bring us closer to an answer to the Big Question (i.e. about the magical beginning of life in the universe), then you have to talk in terms of things that are magic -- even though some people will take advantage of the opportunity to make fun of you.

:-)

Book Reports / Did thomas scott commit treason against the Metis? [9]

Yes, you have to know the story. That means you have to read about it. If you tell me everything you have learned in class, I might give an opinion, but this is not a site for students who want to have their work done for them. Judging by your brief posts, I think you are just looking for a quick way out. Forgive me if I am wrong! :)

Essays / Is father or mother who play the more important role in building up the children [8]

Under the cover of pitch-darkness, a man about 27 of age whose only family is his father, was being arrested for involvement with a bank-robbery . One might hesitate, pause and ponder: What compelled him to do this? Who inspired him? What embedded the idea in his head and ingrained it in his mind? Something prompted him into this ill-fated encounter. even at the risk of the "final count-down" of his lives . However it is certainly a glaring commentary on the shocking deficiencies of the education of a family.

I don't really understand what you are trying to say, but I did my best.

Good luck! Get some help from someone who is very good at speaking both English and your native language. You still need lots of practice. However, you use great words, like "ponder"! I like it.

Book Reports / Macbeth Motif essay. How motif develops Lady Macbeth [4]

In Shakespeare's The Tragedy of Macbeth, Lady Macbeth and Macbeth kill...

Actually, The Tragedy of Macbeth is a film based on the play. You are not writing about the film, are you?

Instead of saying that he used motif to convey the theme, tell what motif was used. By definition, a motif is something used to convey a theme.

In that first paragraph, it would be great to succinctly state your main points. Then, talk about each of them in the body paragraphs. You have some good evidence to show how themes were conveyed, but you should present it a little better: Simply name the motifs in the intro paragraph, and then add topic sentences to each of your body paragraphs.

That will improve the essay a lot!

Writing Feedback / Machine Learning versus Learning by Humans [51]

What a crazy insight! Power enslaves the powerful. Well, to be perfectly accurate, the exertion that is necessary in order to maintain a position of authority over others can be burdensome... so... actually... it is not power that enslaves in that case, but rather, the encumbrance represented by the effort to play your role.

So who is free, then? Someone who hasn't got a care in the world, like Chuang Tsu, when the emperor wanted to appoint him to a high office, and Chuang Tsu opted to stay in the forest and "drag his tail in the mud."

Graduate / 'Traveling back in time' - Physician Assistant -- personal statament [8]


This is very general. It seems like a very typical, and sort of boring way to start.

I see that in your second sentence, you go right into talking about your child care work. I see that you are creating a theme of SERVING others, like you mentioned in that boring opening line.

Based on all that, I think it would be good to write a solid, beautiful opening paragraph about your personal philosophy. You must have had an experience that gave you a revelation: life is meaningful when serving others. I see that you have also had an experience(s) that showed you that you have a special talent for health care. It would be great if you could write a new intro paragraph... one that explains how your personal philosophy compels you to serve others, your talents and interests compel you to do so in health care, and THIS PARTICULAR SCHOOL's resources/faculty/programs make it absolutely the best place to build your foundation for this.

With an intro paragraph that captures these main points, the rest of the essay will seem brilliant. It does not seem awkward; you write very well in English!

Book Reports / Thousand Splendid Suns Essay Argument Points; thesis [6]

Sean wanted to make sure that you know that the word "invaluable" means "very valuable." It seems like you might think it means "not valuable."

I haven't read the book either, but I see why, based on your outline, he might think that you have a misunderstanding of the word "invaluable." Does that answer your question?

Writing Feedback / "People of MTV generation have no patience. They want instant satisfaction." [84]


That reminds me of a conversation that Wayne Dyer and Deepak Chopra once had about "manifesting an apple." To me, it seems perfectly likely that a thought in my mind can affect material reality. That is because, as I discussed in another thread, it seems to me very likely that material reality springs forth from consciousness rather than vise versa.

It explains a lot. For example, magic. You describe a patient mind as one that is conducive to magic, and Zen Master Taisen Deshimaru describes a similar state of mind resulting from the practice of fasting. In his limited English, or perhaps it was someone's translation, he explains, "Supernatural powers are not so difficult. However, eat a little bit of food and you lose them."

Anyway, I think it is logical to believe that a patient state of mind can make magic possible. That would make no sense if I thought that physical matter somehow came to life and evolved into us, but it makes perfect sense if I see all this stuff, this wonderland, as imagery being projected by consciousness.

Something completely different: Also, Eckhart Tolle mentions people who say to him that he seems so "patient," and he says, "I don't feel that I am being patient," because he is forever enjoying the fulness of the present moment.

Writing Feedback / TOEFL Essay-It can be quite difficult to learn a new language. [7]

If a foreign language has grammar rules that are completely different from those of a person's mother tongue, the learning process gets hard.

Here is the right way to use a semi-colon:

For instance, a person who is native speaker of Dansk can learn Norwegian easily; this is because these two languages are in the same language family and have similar vocabulary and grammar rules.

You use it like a period; it is like a period, but it is used to separate two sentences that are related.

That is no big deal, though! You will definitely pass the test!

Writing Feedback / War -- victor or no victor? [45]

Nice! Good observations. If the goal is to live long and well, nobody wins a war. Similarly, nobody wins in an accident.

In the chess game sense, somebody wins. But what do they win, something that is worth more than the lives that were lost? You can't put a price on life, so... the only way to win is to save more lives than you sacrifice.

What if you attack me and I successfully fend you off. Did I win? Maybe winning a war means to get it to end...

Essays / Raising a teenage boy vs teenage girl - writing a comparision and contrast essay [5]

First, write an intro paragraph that starts with a witty, wise sentence about parenting. Leave some room at the end so you'll be able to write the thesis statement later.

Write paragraph 2 all about raising a boy.

Write paragraph 3 all about raising a girl.

Write paragraph 4 comparing the two.

Write a conclusion para in which you REFLECT thoughtfully or EXPAND on the ideas you gave.

Go back and write a thesis statement at the end of the first para. Let it be a statement of the MAIN observation you made.

Writing Feedback / Machine Learning versus Learning by Humans [51]

Ha ha, good call, Mustafa! Well, what is the best way to think about the term? Sean, if you are among those who believe that "power corrupts," then power must be a bad thing... that is, if you care about whether you are corrupted!

Some people do believe that power corrupts (without exception). Gandalf the wizard believes it!

I guess I do not believe it. I have been corrupted by power, but now I guard against corruption. I think power corrupts, generally. Not absolutely.

Undergraduate / Fashion is unique, it's the walking art. Short Essay for Art Institute in Seattle [4]

I am excited about workin g for a company that not only supports their employees ' imagination and creativity, but also embraces it.

Okay, this really is great writing. I still think you need to say at least 2 specific things in para #2 about what resources, faculty members, and programs "struck your heart" at their school.

You write very well!

Writing Feedback / "People of MTV generation have no patience. They want instant satisfaction." [84]


Oh, I actually had not understood at first, but I do now. I like it. Daoism is my favorite spiritual tradition, and in Daoism it is said, "Do nothing, and nothing will be left undone."

If indeed circumstances are such that doing nothing and holding still is the best course of action, then patience can be the most effective action. I guess that includes any situation for which patience is necessary.

Mayb the opposite of patience is restlessness. Or recklessness.

Writing Feedback / nothing wrong - Young people are less interested in studying than in earning money [5]

Now, things are even worse.

Well, I like the approach you took to this. You said that you agree that earning money is more important, but that you disagree that it is something that is specific to "these days." I think you could say that directly, near the beginning of the essay.

Graduate / "financial industry" - need Help in Polish my SOP [4]

I think you should cut the first sentence and start with the second one. The first sentence is boring, but the second one draws me into your story.

Like Sean said, it is SO easy to trim away he extra, like pruning a tree:

After working in the financial industry for over 4 years in various positions and organizations, I found myself inclined towards finance. hence decided to pursue the next level of education in Finance.

Here are some other corrections and ideas:

The world of finance is very big, but I gained micro-level knowledge from my father. When I was a teenage r, I came to know two features of finance: "stock market" and "income tax" from my father -- but they were not fascinating for me at that time.

However, Softex, like other financial institutions , used to insure itself against any possible shortcoming.

Few years down the line, I see myself as a financial analyst in financial services industry with extensive knowledge of the financial services industry.

Essays / I need help understanding Illustration essays. [11]

It is a kind of expository essay. The illustration essay paints a picture in the mind. It is a demonstration of that writing concept called "show, don't tell." You bring the reader into the scene with brilliant imagery.

What is the difference between an illustration essay and a descriptive essay? It is a subtle difference. When you are assigned an ilustration essay, the teacher wants you to practice imagery.

Make me see a blue hamster on a white, rectangular table next to an ancient, smelly sofa.

illustration-essay.com/2008/01/28/the-illustration-essay-wha t-is-it

Essays / Facilitating Children's Learning [11]

It was never posted. There are other good threads about similar subjects, though.

Undergraduate / A time-travel machine to go back in time in your own life and change something [22]

Decisions form a significant part in everybody's existence. Sometimes these decisions improve...

I think this second line would make a good first line. Also, combine the first 2 paragraphs.

Your paragraphs should be put together so that they all have at least 3 or 4 sentences.

When I entered, my uneasiness was obvious to everyone . The week had awful results for me, because I knew neither the people nor the setting.

...and that facilitated my adjustment. I managed to stay at the school.

This is a very nice essay! It is important, though, that you work on writing with solid, 3 or 4 sentence paragraphs. Good luck!

Essays / The A. & B. of the I. Intoduction in an outline of an Informative Essay [2]

A would be interesting if it was more specific. Can you give a scenario that SHOWS what you mean instead?

B Understanding of concepts, such as the differences between subtleties of contracts, employee handbooks, wage and labor laws, and the difference between unjust practices that are legal and those that are not, is imperative to know in an effort to for ensuring a healthy, safe, and fair work environment to all Americans.

C. A thesis statement is supposed to be arguable. That means you are supposed to assert something that some other people might disagree with. If your thesis statement is a statement of the obvious, the whole essay is sort of meaningless. HOWEVER, this is an informative essay, so forget I said that! Yes, actually, it is a good thesis statement. Like the opening line, though, it could be better with more specificity. Can you be more specific?

:)

Writing Feedback / Mercutio's importance to the plot and theme - Romeo and Juliet [5]


This sentence has a mistake, but I don't know how to fix it... not only the plot, but also the theme... you should take this sentence away fromt he start of the essay, because it is hard to understand before explaining the plot or theme.

I think you do NOT suck at writing essays; you obviously have a strong "way with words," but you might not know what a good essay should look like.

In your writing, when you want it to be powerful, use 3 steps:
Say it.
Explain it.
Sa it again.

That means that you are not writing a bunch of things; you are writing ONE thing using several paragraphs to explain it.

SO, write a new first paragraph in which you grab the reader's attention with a witty opening line and then explain your main point. Rather than just telling all about hot-headed Mercutio in the opening para, you should tell about HIM and the PLAY together. Tell about the play a little, so that it is clear why his role is important. Write a concluding sentence for the first paragraph that explains the meaning of the whole essay.

After the intro, use the body paragraphs to support the assertion you made in the intro. You seem to have done this well. You just need to make a clear assertion in the intro -- an assertion that explains the play and his role in it.

Writing Feedback / "People of MTV generation have no patience. They want instant satisfaction." [84]

I hope the presentation is a success! When you write the 3 reasons to agree, it will be important to read about this term "the MTV generation." What is meant by it? Does it just mean the same as "kids these days"...?

I almost think it is distracting to call them "the MTV Generation." However, it implies commercialism because you see commercials on TV... so I think commercialism should be oe of the reasons.

Rajiv, the evolutionary explanation for patience is interesting! I think, though, that making a connection between patience and "uncertainty" is not necessarily necessary. Also, could we have evolved patience? Actually, in this crazy world of capitalism I see a different process going on: survival of the fittest means survival of the most competitive businesses, and the most competitive businesses are the ones that give satisfaction quickest -- thereby dimininishing the need for patience.

Writing Feedback / "People of MTV generation have no patience. They want instant satisfaction." [84]

You can write an essay for or against implementing school uniform policy, but you can't write for or against this statement. You have to write whether you agree or disagree.

Are you supposed to write "for or against" about a particular issue? If so, you need a different topic. However, if you are allowed to write whether you "agree or disagree" with the statement, you can write that you agree, because capitalism and digital technology have caused people to get accustomed to instant satisfaction.

You can say that businesses try to satisfy people quicker than their competitors can, and you can say that technology has spoiled us!

Does that help?

Research Papers / Science fair research paper - how to start/goal of? [8]

Look at what other people have done, and you will get some ideas of your own. What is your project? Check this out for ideas: all-science-fair-projects.com

When you choose a project, read some articles about th concept. For example, if your project involves battery power, read some articles about that. After each article you read, write a paragraph about what the author said. Soon, you will see a paper taking form. It'll be great!

Writing Feedback / Machine Learning versus Learning by Humans [51]

Yes, the pressure that creates pearls! I understand better now...

As for the "will to give," it, to can be deadly, because as C.S. Lewis points out in the beginning of one of his books, it is that will to give (i.e. will to love) that compels someone to jump into the water to save someone. How does natural selection cause us to evolve such a reckless, loving tendency?

And th will to power maintains the status quo, because people want to keep their comfort. Power brings comfort, and then we say, "put up the border fence," and things like that.