EF_Team2
Oct 1, 2006
Undergraduate / Paper on an econ. concept that help u understand an issue in ur life [10]
Greetings!
You have done an excellent job improving your writing! I'd be happy to help you with the few not-quite-right places that remain. I will put the phrases I'm correcting in bold so you can see them better.
In the first sentence, the comma goes inside the quotation mark in "opportunity cost," -- assuming you are writing for an American class; the British would do it the way you did. Put a comma before economics as well as after: my major, economics, has made
In the next paragraph, don't put a comma when you say Opportunity cost is just a way
I think I'd take out my unforgettable memory and just say I often remind myself of when I was young
You need either a semi-colon or period instead of a comma after study: time-wasting to study; I wanted to
Up to now isn't used quite correctly. That sentence would be better as Now, I am an economics student pursuing a degree full-time at a university.
Say I can see clearly instead of it has helped me see clearly
Instead of we ought to be taking (or to take?) not in terms of the cost of it or others, it would be better to use talking or thinking; In other words, take just isn't the right verb there. How about we ought to be thinking not in terms of the cost of something, but the opportunity cost of it.
Say I might earn a lot of money by working instead of much and say face life with confidence.
And I made a typo when I wrote I prefer the "opportunity cost" concept to any another tool. It should have been to any other tool. Sorry for the confusion! You could say another, but it has more impact to say any other.
I'm impressed by your progress!
Best of luck in your studies,
Sarah, EssayForum.com
Greetings!
You have done an excellent job improving your writing! I'd be happy to help you with the few not-quite-right places that remain. I will put the phrases I'm correcting in bold so you can see them better.
In the first sentence, the comma goes inside the quotation mark in "opportunity cost," -- assuming you are writing for an American class; the British would do it the way you did. Put a comma before economics as well as after: my major, economics, has made
In the next paragraph, don't put a comma when you say Opportunity cost is just a way
I think I'd take out my unforgettable memory and just say I often remind myself of when I was young
You need either a semi-colon or period instead of a comma after study: time-wasting to study; I wanted to
Up to now isn't used quite correctly. That sentence would be better as Now, I am an economics student pursuing a degree full-time at a university.
Say I can see clearly instead of it has helped me see clearly
Instead of we ought to be taking (or to take?) not in terms of the cost of it or others, it would be better to use talking or thinking; In other words, take just isn't the right verb there. How about we ought to be thinking not in terms of the cost of something, but the opportunity cost of it.
Say I might earn a lot of money by working instead of much and say face life with confidence.
And I made a typo when I wrote I prefer the "opportunity cost" concept to any another tool. It should have been to any other tool. Sorry for the confusion! You could say another, but it has more impact to say any other.
I'm impressed by your progress!
Best of luck in your studies,
Sarah, EssayForum.com