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Posts by niesaysi
Name: Jhonies Saysi
Joined: Feb 5, 2011
Last Post: Jun 14, 2021
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School: Polytechnic University of the Philippines

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niesaysi   
Mar 7, 2011
Writing Feedback / Describe the "TRAITS OF A LEADER" . Which of those fits you best ? [4]

hello!I've just made some corrections...
Rarely is one born with the ability to lead
I think you better write this way...One is rarely born with the ability to lead
A leader with an adamant set of morals and values gives give...
In order to lead and set direction a leader needs to appear show confident...

As my opinion, you have to choose best word for your sentence to point out the idea what you want to inform..just develop your vocab

True authority is born from respect for the good character and trustworthiness of the person who leads. Of these characteristics confidence exemplifies exemplify my personality the best.

nice:)
niesaysi   
Mar 2, 2011
Scholarship / "trust God and be optimistic"- lesson I've obtained During My Scholarship Examination [3]

Hi! please check out if there are incorrect grammars...I am not good in English.

Despite wasting great effort and perseverance applying for a scholarship, I learned a lesson from the experience. Indeed, I wasted not just a few hours of sacrificing but long hours of ventured. Being one of the applicants I saw the others determination, confidence, and forbearance. They were not phased and decided to never give up. After a long wait with other appliers to get the application forms, at last, I would be the one to fill it up. There was no certain expectation that, after this, I capable to pass the next process- the scholarship examination. It was the next step in applying for a scholarship program. I said to myself, "Don't let this chance go by, take advantage of this because it will help you achieve your goal". That is to study in a prolific state university in the Philippines, the PUP. For me time management was never a problem. I was always made time to review lessons for my exams, to review, and to ponder the information and ideas. To be chosen for the scholarship, I studied to be as ready. My parents always told me, "Its better go into a battle with a gun than to go without anything to use".

I carefully filled out the form and reviewed the lessons, the day I waited for had finally come, the time to apply my knowledge. It was my scholarship examination. If I could pass, I could use it to be a scholar to my dream institution. The examination was held in a cozy room where approximately a thousand test takers were competing for the scholarship. Outside the windows for the cool room it was so hot. I felt like I was outsides because I was sweating. None-the-less, it didn't affect me while answering the test questions. Instead I was visualizing the things to come if I passed this examination. In case it happened, that would be a joyous time in my life because one of my desires were granted. Trust God and self-confidence, both were what I've retained to my mind. I completely agree that God is the one who renders knowledge and we, the people, are who apply the wisdom. In philosophy, knowledge is the information we have obtained and wisdom is referred to the information we applied. Both helped me with my scholarship examination. I never forgot that time prayed with God because not only intellectual is important but of course also spiritual lessons.

Two weeks later I have been waiting for the results probably not yet processed. Although automated, it still took three weeks to get the results. Upon thousands of applicant who took the examination, only half would be considered as scholars. The basis was dependent upon the scores we've got. I expected the worse but remained optimistic still. That was the best I could do. If you expected high, frustration happened just like as you expecting negatively.

I was not finished thinking of the result since I left the house, and yet, standing to a building where it was being posted inside. It really not a joke about my hardship I spent just mere to grab this opportunity. First I fell in line beneath the very hot sun till my long time of preparation for my examination, I thought that it enough to taste the fruit of my hardship. Nervous is what I felt while walking upstairs. I couldn't escape the feeling. I answered the test questions well and read directions carefully. How really strong I was that time.

Finally, I reached the last floor. The place was so messy. Many were jumping, shouting, and saying, "Yes! I did it". Very lucky persons, I just thought. Only one word I've always spoken, that was the name of God. In the end, I touched sort of papers where many names were listed. I tried to seek my surname Just a second....my God! This was unexpected! I passed the scholarship examination. My reactions surely no one could describe. I was very happy, as a matter of fact, tears readily fell down- the tears of joy. God truly never abandoned me since before. The knowledge and stability were a great gift He gave for my birthday. Exactly, that time was my birthday. I absolutely believed to the motto that "nothing is impossible to God". My triumph verified that this saying is true.

Whatever you dream trust in God and be an optimistic person. That is the lesson I learned during my journey of applying for a scholarship.
niesaysi   
Feb 28, 2011
Writing Feedback / It's better to have peace than prevailing war [3]

Every corner of the world, there are trouble, misunderstanding, and war. There are nuclear bombs explode and kill a thousands of innocent people. Those people wish to live with peace and solidarity because, in that way, man can obtain the aim to live and start a new life. War between two and more countries is not the essential way to maintain the understanding of everyone, it is preparing of destroying creations of God, not only man but other living and nonliving things are pathetically killed and ended life without knowing what are happening. Some countries in Asian part, therein, war is usually occurred because of sovereignty, and extension of territory. In addition, land power and illegal way of capturing a territory are constantly serve as prior to their goal in targeting one country which is infirm and has no capability to fight against. They colonize it making as a state, that is a form of colonization. War is still a war. It starts with small and comes big when it is over, resulting into worldwide war. World war is the most fearful things to be happened because it is a joint of all the countries dividing the power according to group they want to affiliate. Sky wars, sea wars, and land wars are formed if it is absolutely happened. Like the war movies we have watched out, people tend to hide, run, beg and cry- emotionally mixed. As the bombs fall down, and explode people horribly, millions are lying in the lands, bloody, trying to move up, pushing hands up, and creeping through someone also full of blood compressing the red hands just insist to hold each other before eyes will close and left a message of goodbye. War ends many life- a life God is given to us.

Let yourself notice the blue sky. How good to see the reflection of peace mingle with fresh air to breathe, right of being free. Sunlight gives the world bright to actual see beautiful things it have. The cleanliness of water and flow to its destination. That is life. Nature reflects our life including the word of peace.
niesaysi   
Feb 27, 2011
Undergraduate / "my goal is to become an Esthetician" - Educational and Career Goals Essay [4]

As a matter of fact, you're essay is nice. I have a little correction maybe you unchecked it, right?

I am very committed to fulfillingfulfill my dreams and as so, I will push myself in all the ways to succeed and graduate, so that I may fulfill my educational and career goals and be a proud part of the beauty industry.
niesaysi   
Feb 25, 2011
Scholarship / "In 10 years, what do you plan on doing with your experiences..."-Essay help. [3]

Ubisoft has always made games that matched my art style, genre and I have also enjoyed playing their games...
Be careful in putting commas...
I liked to work on Toronto branch ,since it's closer to my home then in the Montreal branch in addition their Toronto branch is smaller ,which gives me the chance to share my ideas and to get to know everyone their there.

To tell frankly, I am confused reading your essay..
But you can make it more better. I can see your potential...

niesaysi   
Feb 25, 2011
Scholarship / Failure is a proof that desire was not strong enough [5]

Hello!
I'm just editing your essay...

Success is not coming on roses, there are with many obstacles on the way, desire and determination are the best leader help you to overcome.

Desire is the perfect motivation to make focus with all your energy, your time and your strength on the aim.
To Smokers who want to quit smoking, the only thing they need to do is strong desires.
For example when I was at the high school,

This sentence can be able to brief like this..
With enormous effort for learning and doing a huge amount of excises, it was possible that I could get a good results...

I might suggest that you can make a brief sentence by which your point is directly expressed.
However, you've made the essay meaningful and interesting...
niesaysi   
Feb 25, 2011
Undergraduate / UT Essay - My life and drugs [3]

I use used to look at him with sparkles in my eyes...
Just have right shift of tenses..
I read your essay quite interesting...
niesaysi   
Feb 25, 2011
Writing Feedback / Ghost: Is it real? [7]

I'm sorry for that...
Anyway, thank you for checking it out...
Nice criticism...
niesaysi   
Feb 25, 2011
Writing Feedback / Ghost: Is it real? [7]

A lot of people are saying like this, " a ghost is real and they back for justice, love ones and deferred desires. Others conclude them just to haunt people. Whatever inferences have spread out about the ghost, only one thing I want to happen- to see actually a ghost.

Even my family, neighbors, and friends are sharing their ideas about souls that are still in these land. I am just solemnly listening to them, realizing and thinking how those ideas are real enough . They've shared story from what and how it is happened. The way the telling it, I want to believe because it's entertaining. But I am not the person who just believing to a certain thing without any proof. So, if ghost is true,well, I want to see. I am stick with the motto, to see is to believe.

When I was in high school, there was an incident truly unforgettable. As a matter of fact, I was always wondering of it until now. It was about my classmate where soul entered to her body. That was our teachers, classmates, and principal being explained. I was shocked of her acts. She seemed out of herself. Her behavior was not normal. She was so strong and had an uncontrolled moves. I couldn't described her face whether she was crying or angry. The voice was not sounded properly. It had another sound mingled together her voice. To tell frankly, I was shivering because of fears. My heart has beaten faster. I didn't explained what was my feeling that time. But in the end, I was still confused. I didn't know why. I knew my classmate. She was one of my freind. And that time, she was depressed because her grandmother died. I couldn't avoid to assume it just an deliberate acts. My classmate was a great actress and she was capable of it. What I saw probablt was not enough to urge me believing with ghost."Depression can do everything even to end a life."

Ghost, for me, is just an imagination of a man. It is being created because man opens their mind and believe easily with explaination not already prioven. I need proof not the others would experience but myself. I just believe if ghost will appears in my front and will say," I am real." In that case, I will not hesitate to believe completely with ghost... I am waiting. You? Do you already see a ghost?
niesaysi   
Feb 21, 2011
Writing Feedback / 'Important from medical point of view' - Pets should be treated like family members [3]

hello...
You have misspelled this word:
susequent(subsequent)
And please evade confusing to use appropriate punctuation marks. There are lines in some sentence with no commas.It is vital to use comma because a reader will suppose to go directly into another sentence or they will be able to confuse where would rest...that's make them misunderstand your essay...
niesaysi   
Feb 21, 2011
Writing Feedback / The Effect of Global Warming, is it changing our life? [6]

I think you've just summarize the essay...
As far as i know, it's necessary to broad your ideas about a topic by making more examples, suggestions, and information.
However, you have pointed out the effect of global warming. You will probably add more supporting details to make the readers more often about your topic.
niesaysi   
Feb 20, 2011
Writing Feedback / Tuition's hike shouldn't be implemented in some state universities. [3]

Low of tuition! That is what some of the students appeal on the CHED or Commission on Higher Education. In place of Manila, or other cities, many students conducted rallies in order to shout their feelings upon hiking of the tuition in some state universities. They believe it is a big factor that affect their studies. If it gonna be implemented, probably, students will continue to appeal, do illegal action, and the most worse is, the stop of studying. It is sought that our country suffers from poverty.In that case, students choose the state universities for it is affordable enough to acquire higher education. And also giving them an opportunities to reach their dreams and to move on from being poor. But how they will attain if the government contradict the chances of obtaining it? Education is ought for the students willing to take it on. So, government officials must lessen increasing of tuition because they just depriving them a prerogative to educate themselves. Funds should give to the schools with adequate amount in aimed to fulfill the necessary needs of an institutions. If that is could be, no need to hike tuition fees. Better than that, students will continue striving and they will offer endeavors not only with their families but, of course,to the government who subsidize them. But graft and corruption still cannot be evaded. Government schools will definitely affect much. We all know that our country is one of the most corrupt nation. Corruption is one of the reason why some state universities experience high amount of tuition fees. The government will give the school inadequate funds to be used for educational materials. Because of it, the administrators of the school might insist to increase tuition. Union of the students happen when it is officially decided to implement. We can able to see their determination, perseverance, and sacrifice just only to get good education. If the government will not appreciate all their hardships, that maybe shows of obstructing the desires of every students. Proper education may not count how an institution implements high tuition but how to impart ideas and wisdom to the students.

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Next time you will be suspended for providing useless comments (now removed) in other students' threads.

EF
niesaysi   
Feb 20, 2011
Undergraduate / "My grandmother's lung cancer" - UF Admissions [5]

The concept is imparted well.As I read it, there little bit of error I just found out like unable using of commas. However, it doesn't matter because the details urged me to be emotional. I think that's the important technique to be applied in writing an essay- to entertain the readers...
niesaysi   
Feb 8, 2011
Research Papers / LIFE AND CULTURE DURING THE PRE-SPANISH ERA [3]

Clothes for male were divided into two parts: upper and lower. The upper part was a jacket whis was consisted of colors. The red jacket was merely wore by the chief and black or blue jacket was wore by of people that below to the chief. "Bahag" was the term known to the lower part of a male clothing. It was composed of a cloth wound about the waist and passing down between the thighs.

Female clothing was also had a division: its upper and lower parts. The upper part was called "baro" or camisa while the lower part was called "saya" or skirt. In Bisayans, "patadyong" was what they were called to the lower part. The piece of white or red cloth usually wrapped about he waist was called "tapis".

In terms of ornaments, ancient Filipinos were used gold and precious stones. Kalumbiga, pendants, gold rings, earrings, leglets, and bracelets. Whether men or women wore such ornaments. In order to adorn their teeth, fillings were made. Not only the teeth but also the body and faces were adorned. Mostly in men, body ornaments were not only gold but they tattooed themselves. Tattooing, for them, had another meaning. It was a man's war record. If a man had more tattooed the more hen was admired by the people for his bravery in the battle. The most tattooed people in the Philippines were the Bisayans, that was, according to the first Spanish missionaries who wrote about the ancient Filipinos. A painted or tattooed people of Bisayans were called "pintados" by the Spanish missionaries.

Pre-spanish houses were typically made in bamboos, wood, and nipa palm. It was above the ground enclose with stakes called "haligi". These stakes were made also in bamboo where house was set on. Fowls were placed inside the enclosure. There was a ladder one had to ascend in order to go up the house. "Batalan" was a sort of gallery where household work was done. "Silid" was near the "sala" where mats, pillows, and baskets of rice were kept. Kalingas in Northern Luzon, Mandayans and Bgobos in Mindanao were places in the Philippines who made tree houses. Sea houses were built by Badjaos or sea gypsies of Sulu. Badjaos were a sea loving people.

The ancient Filipinos were divided into three social classes. That were the nobles, the freemen. and the dependents. Nobles were the highest among of the social classes composed of a chiefs, their families and relatives. They were the major class and highly respected in their community. In the Tagalog region, nobles were carried the title "Gat" or "Lakan". These words today were in some surnames, such as Lakandula, Lakanilaw, Gatmaitan, Gatchalian, Gatbonton. The middle class in a community was belonged to freemen. And dependents were the lower class. "Alipin" was called to the people who in the lower class. They were became that if by captivity in the battle, failing to pay debts, by inheritance, by purchase, being pronounced guilty of a crime. "Alipin" was classified into two: "aliping namamahay" at "aliping sagigilid". Namamahay had his own house and family. Planting and harvesting crops, rowing a boat, and helping in the comnstruction of house were what an that "alipin" served for his master. The sagigilid, in contrast, had no house of his own, just lived with his master and could not marry without a latter's consent. The two classification of "alipin" in Bisayans were: "tumataban", who worked for his master when told to do so, "tumarampuk" who worked one day a week for his master, and "ayuey" who worked three days a week for his master.

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