Undergraduate / How can I improve my response to "Reasons for choosing your program and Waterloo" in the AIF [3]

the opportunity to excel in career

Is Waterloo the best engineering university in Canada? Yes. Does it have the best Cs and Se courses? Absolutely. But the most intriguing reason why I chose Waterloo is due to the opportunity to excel in career. My prodigious passion for programming and having a positive impact in the real world led me to select Software Engineering and Computer Science as my major. Waterloo is one of the most reputable universities in Silicon Valley and ranked 4th for full time hires going to Google. I believe that the Waterloo co-op program shall not only prepare me for the rigorous industry but also develop my entrepreneurship skills to create the next big thing. My interest in Waterloo intensified when I personally contacted 3 alumni from Waterloo who had work experiences at top tech companies like Google, Shopify, and Blackberry. Their positive feedback and constructive advice convinced me that I could achieve my dream of working for Google someday. In addition, courses like CS 480 and CS 486 caters to my interest in Artificial Intelligence and the advanced technology.

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Undergraduate / Waterloo; comment e.g. on your exposure to engineering through school-related and other experiences [2]

Waterloo engineering interests and goals

Briefly explain why you are interested in engineering and particularly in the program to which you have applied. Comment, for example, on your interests and abilities; your career goals; exposure to engineering through school-related and other experiences; and discussions you have had with engineers, teachers, current or past Waterloo students. (900-character limit)

Engineering provides me with the opportunity to build systems that work for millions of people. To be able to innovate in new areas, improve an existing system and solve problems are of great importance to me. One of my first engineering projects was to model a car powered by propellers. I finished as the first runner-up in the science competition and currently working on programming drones using Arduino for the National Think Science competition. Moreover, my work experience at the software development department of BAK Holdings educated me on writing well-structured and simplified codes. My father is an electrical engineer, who guided me on several trips to power stations and aroused deep interests in me about the field of energy. Discussions with one of Waterloo's recent alumnus enlightened me on the prospects available for research on operational AI and human-machine interaction.

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