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Name: Nguyễn Trần Phương Thảo
Joined: Dec 28, 2022
Last Post: Feb 12, 2023
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someoneishere   
Feb 9, 2023
Writing Feedback / Expenses for mobile phones, domestic and global fixed-line, and services in America [2]

phone expenditures and fixed-line services in 2001-2010



The provided line graph illustrates the anally average financial consumption of mobile phones, domestic and global fixed-line, and services in America from 2001 to 2012.
Overall, the significant rise in expenditure on the national landline, in contrast, witnessed the dramatic fall of the oversea landline. Especially, cell phone services cost a stable amount and remained the lowest.

In 2001, there was a contrasting trend of calling online, international fixed-line, and domestic permanent lines by US residents. The highest was the consumption of mobile phones at 700$, opposite the just 200$ above of the other services. For 5 years, Americans spent enormous money on the use of cell phones, while the expenditure trend of the nation decreased sharply and met the resemblance with mobile phones approximately at 500$ which was two and a third higher than the past amount of telephones. Also, there were unchanged financial American consumers throughout this period at 300$.

On the other hand, from 2006 to 2010, the average money for calling online services climbed considerably and reached its peak at more than 700$. US inhabitants these years prefer mobile telephones more than 1.5 times the landlines in their country with a percentage of about 400$. Finally, it is just a small growth of expenditure on global fixe-line in the US.

The graph below shows consumers' average annual expenditure on cell phone, national and international fixed-line and services in America between 2001 and 2010.



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someoneishere   
Feb 12, 2023
Writing Feedback / IELTS Writing task 1 - Museum Maps [4]

You did a great job keeping the word count around 200. The numbers included in the bulk, are outstanding figures. The comparison and application of vocabulary are in a tame and diverse way. But there are still minor bugs: demotrate => demonstrate, gallary => gallery
someoneishere   
Feb 12, 2023
Writing Feedback / Universities and colleges are now offering qualifications through online learning - pros and cons [2]

Universities and colleges are now offering qualifications through distance learning from the Internet rather than teachers in the classroom.

Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?



By the turn of the 21st century, the Covid 19 pandemic brought enormously detrimental impacts on human life, which led to the development of studying and working on the Internet. Some undergraduates nowadays prefer receiving qualifications through learning online to learning directly from teachers in class. In my opinion, the benefits gained from this phenomenon are more than the drawbacks.

Through distance studying, young people could benefit from tremendous advantages. First and foremost, as the epidemic grew, schools and teachers take responsibility to apply new learning methods - online teaching. As a result, the preparations for lessons including brief presentations are mustered more. Moreover, it is the combination of various smart modern technological devices and digital apps that helps college students study easier and more effectively, as pupils could quickly look for useful information and detailed explanations.

The second advantage is the quality of the teacher's speaking sound and teaching presentation because studying through the Internet helps shorten the geographical distance and is like having a face-to-face tutor. Because each classroom has vast sittings with a large number of young people, but only one educator and not all learners could have a close seat to teachers. Consequently, numerous undergraduates find it difficult to catch up with the lessons and earned good results for their degrees. For instance, there are a variety of social media or group communication apps nowadays such as Zoom, Google Meet, or Microsoft Teams,...providing the best fast and best features for youngsters.

On the other hand, these digital devices, social communications, or intriguing games distract youngsters from important studying and become dependent on them. Furthermore, spending various of time online can cause prejudiced effects on physical and mental health causing bad-qualified workers in the future, especially in the Covid 19.

In conclusion, the advantage of using technology for online teaching outweigh the disadvantage because of its convenience and quality for studying preparation. By combing two types of learning methods online and offline, undergraduate students could gain more effective knowledge to prepare for the qualification of their major.
someoneishere   
Feb 12, 2023
Writing Feedback / The proportion of jobless women in 4 different countries of Britain in 2013 and 2014 [2]

The number of female unemployment in each country of the United Kingdom in 2013 and 2014



The provided bar chart compares the proportion of jobless female in 4 different countries in Britain in 2013 and 2014.
Overall, while in England, Wales and Northern Ireland witnessed a fall in the percentage from 2013 to 2014, the Scotland increased sharply to have the highest proportion in this period.

In 2013, there was the greatest percentage at 6.8% of women who could not find a proper career in England, followed by the Scotland approximately at about 6.1%. In contrast, the number of unemployed female in Wales and Northern Ireland was nearly the same at 5.4% and 5.6% consecutively, all at under 6%.

However, in 2014, there were some changes in the percentage. England decreased slightly about 3% from 6.8% to 6.5%, s Scotland experienced a steep growth and reached its peak at 6.7% - still lower than England in 2013. Opposite with 2 enormous proportion of jobless women, Wale and Northern Ireland declined the same times at about 5% and 4.6%, and kept the proportion approximately less or equal 5%. Therefore, Northern Ireland became the lowest country having the quantity of female with no career with the drop of 1% in 2014.

The graph below shows female unemployment rates in each country of the United Kingdom in 2013 and 2014.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.




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