Writing Feedback / "Honoring your parents" - my unexamined belief essay? [9]

i'm not sure if my topic "honoring your parents" is proper for my english assignment, An unexamined belief.

from my understanding,unexamined belief should be something unobserved like why human come to believe that it's righteous to wear clothes.

here's my essay
i dont know what to include in my last 2 body paragraph. should i relate a story from my past?

all answer would be greatly appreciated

Honoring your parents

Few people examine their belief about children's respect towards their parents. Why do people believe that children must honor their father and mother? According to the bible, it is stated that children were to "Honor their father and their mother in order that their days may prove to be long upon the ground" exodus 20:12. Although many people do not believe in the bible and the mythology behind it, the principle of this commandment can be beneficial to many.

People who hold this belief usually realize how tough it is for their mother to give birth, and their father to support the family. Through obeying parents, the child can learn the experience of the parents that can be utterly hard to explain. Honoring parents originated from mentors, the environment and the bible. To the people who hold this belief, they gain respect from their parents. This belief was transmitted from the American holidays, both mother and father's day. This has been our tradition for decades and will continue to pass on to our future generation.

Letters / (summer internship program) - Cover letter for position at Museum [3]

Hi all,

Basically the cover letter needs to include why i would be a good candidate for the job and what I hope to gain from the experience. Critiques, comments, improvements are all welcome. Thanks

Dear Meep intern recruiters,

I am writing in response to the opening position for Museum Education and employment program summer internship.
I believe my experience with customer service at my previous job, Keyfood will make me an ideal candidate for this opening. I'd like to think I am a humanitarian. I have worked with many customers on a day-to-day basis, am extremely patient & want nothing more than to see them walk out happy at the end of the day. I am punctual, responsible and I adapt to task relatively quick.

The opportunity to be employed here will help better explore my field of interest before I am really to be fully committed. i hope to equipped the skills and knowledge i learn to my future careers.

If given the opportunity to be apart of your program, I will establish myself to be a great asset for the team and for the business. I have attached my resume for your review. If you have any further questions or requests, feel free to contact me by email at ---------------- or by phone at ------------. Thank you for your consideration and I hope to hear from you in the coming weeks.

Best regards,

Undergraduate / 'unsure of my future route' - Why you want to transfer & what you hope to achieve [4]

I generated a pile of reasons on why i want to transfer. However, i am having difficulties getting started. This is just a rough draft, it may not make sense. Please excuse it.

Why you want to transfer & what you hope to achieve? 250 words -1000

Entering college, like many, I was unsure of my future route. I was taking a variety of general Ed classes to fulfill my Associate degree for Liberal Arts & Science. ( I still haven't found my study of interest, How should i continue my sentence)

I have lived and commute in the city my entire life. I want to be able to experience a more rural / surburan environment. I want to live independently & develop responsibilities. I want a larger school for research/internship opportunities. All of this attributes to my reason for transferring. My school doesn't offer afterschool programs, only during specific days & hours. I feel this limit the students chance to become interactive around campus. In X school, i read that there is always something to do, whether it's an event or an concert. I want to be actively involved.

What else can i include? Please help!!

Thanks in advance.

Scholarship / 'my preachers, Charlie & Kathleen' - Op Left Scholarship Questions essay [3]

Who is the most interesting person you have ever met? What makes him or her interesting? (Answer must be between 80 and 120 words.)

The most interesting people I've meet in my life were my preachers, Charlie & Kathleen. Not only did they give me a reason to have faith in God, but they also taught me some level of maturity & morality. In a sense, they were sort of like a secondary parent to me. They would occasionally take my brothers and I to visit Kingdom hall, a sacred holding place for worshipping, similar to that of a church. They would take us out to movies, restaurants and events. I was even fortunate enough to visit the factory where they manufacture all the bibles and magazines. This was sincerely a blessing from God that I have had the opportunity to meet these two wonderful people.

What was your most challenging class in high school? What did you do to overcome the challenges? (Answer must be between 80 and 120 words.)

For me, the most challenging class in High school was Ap biology. My professor had a lot of expectation from me coming into his class because my older brother was a former student of his. I was already struggling to come on time, I performed borderline on exams & I was barely ever active in class. My professor made sure this was readily apparent to me.

Research Papers / Effect of bullying - psych research paper Need help with outline intro [5]

Intro

define bullying
briefly discuss different type of bullying? physical, verbal, cyber?
lead to thesis- who bullies target, health concerns of being bullied, routes to take for change.

Any suggestions on how I can start, and helping me break down on what I should write would be greatly appreciated. Thanks!

Undergraduate / "I have a clear path and goal set"; Transfer appeal- Are you convinced? [13]

Pardon me for poor writing.

This is my last attempt to convince the committees that I shouldn't had been denied admission to the school. In my essay, I explained why my application was overlooked due to inadvertent circumstances. Any constructive criticism, feedback and assistants in editing my writing would be much appreciated. I urgently need to get into the school for the program. I planned out my goals. I've made the mistake of delaying my graduation by going through college without a major, taking classes from all various part of the spectrum and retaking failed classes. I'm done wasting time.

________ Undergraduate Admissions
Transfer Appeals Committee
____________________
Box _____
_______________17853

Dear Committee Members,

I applied for admissions as a transfer student to _________ early February. Upon completion of my application, I was asked to pay a processing fee. As a current _____ student, I was certain the fees would be waivered off. I contacted the admissions office on this matter only to get a response two month later telling me it was a mistake and to proceed with payment. While I did eventually get refunded, I was never notified with their decision to accept me on the month the acceptance letters were being handed out. I decided to follow up on this and called them. A counselor at the school told me that my application was received late on file and that it will not be reviewed. I explained to him my situation but all he could say was sorry, what you could do is go on the school's website and ask to defer my admission for the spring semester. This is why I am here writing a appeal.

I direly need to get accepted into your school for the fall 2013 semester. I have a clear path and goal set. I want to go into corporate finance. My current school does not offer that particular major/field. Last semester I purposely signed up for classes that meet the requirement for ____ College when transferring using the course evaulation webpage. I would hate to lose out on more time and be forced into a program at my current school just to graduate with a degree.

I really hope you'll reconsider me for reallocation. I would not be happier anywhere else.

Kindly yours,

Essays / FIND A STRANGER AND DESCRIBE THE PERSON IN GREAT DETAIL [4]

Okay, so my assignment is quite fun. Essentially I'll have to go out, find a stranger, secretly observe the person from head to toe and write about it.

Only problem is the essay needs to be 3-4 pages long. How on earth am I going to do that?????
This is where your help comes into affect.

I need help making an outline!!

Describe the person their action, smell touch, what they wore, where this person might work, who this person might be, what occupation, where I think I'll see this person 5-10 years down the line.