Undergraduate / Common App - Extra Curric. Activity: Student-to-Student [2]

Please briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work experiences in the space below (150 words or fewer, 1000 character maximum).

They came from all over the world, but they all had one thing in common-they were little fishes in a big pond of students. Student-to-Student was a haven for the lost. We formed a family that was united by the an understanding. We understood that it was easy to feel insignificant in such a populated school, so we all wanted to stick together and help each other through our individual journeys, share our dynamic cultures, and personalities. It allowed us to wander to fascinating cultures booming from our concrete school, that I once found to be so contained. Though the English was broken and my Chinese and Spanish were never perfect, the overplayed hand gestures and friendly smiles and laughs got us by. Whether it was reading the words one by one about cellular respiration, editing their grammar in their creative essay, or simply carrying a conversation with them, I found joy in helping them transition into their new waters and give them the basics on how to swim to success-to make it easier to communicate with their teacher, meet new friends, and find a niche of their own.

191 words, need to cut it down to 150. Thanks, any help on grammar & input would be appreciated!

Undergraduate / Swings, Media, and Why I Want to Attend Supplements [2]

1. The Grotto is a cherished destination on Notre Dame's campus, a space that invites students and visitors to pray and take time for reflection. Do you have a place that you seek out, and what do you contemplate there?

I catch the last glimpse of light fade from the horizon. Sitting on my swing, my cluttered mind sweeps in. I should have been more patient with...The conditional probability is used when...Will I ever find a job that I'm passionate about...Am I becoming the person I want to be? Each time I swing forth, I let go of a worry, a doubt, a question. I let the crisp breeze wash over me and my bare feet swing along the cool air back and forth. My neck can barely capture the unending darkening skies that stretch before me. My thoughts become crumbs blown away as my mind draws a peaceful blank. The star-lit sky bears the fantastic opportunities flashing before me. All the places I've never been to and adventures I have yet to experience are calling for me. Slowly swinging to a stop, I feel assured the world has much in store for me.

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Our generation's access to technology has created the ultimate global network. My course, Communication for a Cause, explores modern technology and how it can be used to promote local to world causes and effectively communicate them to people. I'll cover the media we use for recreational time and their major impact on our future society if used properly. Facebook enables us to connect with friends and family across the globe, but it can also promote the Cure for Cancer by posting local Relay for Life events we could participate in to raise money. Not only can YouTube be used as comic relief for study breaks, but it also lets us follow the journey of Invisible Children and how we can build their education and future. Through our phones, we can instantly buy organic clothing to sustain the environment. I'm fascinated by how we can make a difference through the media and technology. My goal is to teach others different ways to provide a voice for causes through our modern gadgets.

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I love the sense of tradition and pride of Notre Dame. I want to be part of a close-knitted community that not only cheers together, but is willing to lend a hand. It's important to me that as I grow into a new person, I'll keep my strong faith with God. My school was never focused on religion, so it would be nice to meet diverse people who I am able to connect with on a spiritual level. The breathtaking Basilica and Grotto is the soil that draws me in aesthetically to the school and creates the spiritual environment I want to grow in. While being educated here, I'll develop ethical judgment that I can intertwine with my work. I'll be confident that when I enter the business world, being socially and environmentally conscious will just be second nature to me. Notre Dame would give me the chance to work in a global market and study abroad while helping others at the same time.

Any corrections or thoughts on any one of the are appreciated!