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Posts by vafa
Joined: Apr 1, 2011		 Last Post: Apr 8, 2011
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From: Islamic Republic of Iran

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vafa   
Apr 1, 2011
Scholarship / What are your educational goals (where to start?) [7]

Hi,I agree with other friends.I think it would be better to write down your own list which you yourself like them very much.then think about every goal and write them.after that read it again to check if you use correct grammer points or not.

good luck :)
vafa   
Apr 1, 2011
Writing Feedback / Definition Essay "A Good Mother" [3]

(A mother's child grows and becomes an adult)I think it would be better to say when her child grows up and not repeat a term of mother again.

he is always there when her child may need a kiss on an injury, or simply an extra hug as they get off the bus

you can use this sentance to support your idea:some are kissing a mother and some are scolding mothers,but mothers kiss and scold together.

interest

intrests.

Without the support of a good mother a child may squander through life never living up to his or her full potential.

a mother's love is a fuel that enable a normal humanbeing to do the impossibles.

individual

it is better to say person

product

training
vafa   
Apr 1, 2011
Student Talk / How to speak English fluently and correctly? [62]

Hi,It is good to watch native movies and speak with your friends or family in English.read some story books and try to memorize some proverbs and useful sentenses.try to pay attention in using grammer points.

good luck :)
vafa   
Apr 2, 2011
Writing Feedback / "My cousin is really an emotional person" - A descriptive paragraph [13]

It is clear from ust looking at my cousin's room that she is really an emotional person.When you enter the room a set of musical chimes makes a melody.To the right of the door is her bed with a window beside it and its lace curtain with some blue ribbons on it,is hung infront of the window.Her room's walls are colored light blue.On the night table next to her bed is a lamp that she turns it on when she wants to read some books specially some poems at night.To the left of the door that her closet is located with lots of cute dolls.On the other side of her room there is a bookcase that is full of story books and poems.On the wall are two pictures one of them is a girl who is standing beside a sea and is watching moon-light and the other one is some writings that she herself wrote them.So it is easy to say that my cousin is an emotional person.
vafa   
Apr 3, 2011
Writing Feedback / "English-Opening to Horror story" - Is my horror story effective? [5]

It was pretty good.If you want to write a horror story you should watch lots of horror movies but it is clear that it wil effect on you more than your writings.I learn lots of new words through your writings!.thank you.

try to check the dictionary.for example moon-light.use dash between moon and light.a force is better in second paragraph .onto is correct not unto.

GOOD LUCK:)
vafa   
Apr 3, 2011
Writing Feedback / SAT essay. "Can succes be disastrous?" [4]

Hi it was good. i think it would be better if you starter wit these :according to (name of one dictionary)success means...or for example in this way:(in the words of (name of famous person))
vafa   
Apr 4, 2011
Student Talk / Hi everyone! Welcome at EssayForum thread. [414]

Hi every body,
I joined to ef last week.I HOPE TO MAKE LOTS OF FRIENDAS FROM DIFFERENT COUNTRIES WITH DIFFERENT LAGUAGES.I will be thankful if you help me to write and speak in the best way. I want to participate in tofel exam after a year.then I deside to teach english in some where.
vafa   
Apr 4, 2011
Writing Feedback / "My cousin is really an emotional person" - A descriptive paragraph [13]

Hi,Rebenrio do you want me to be your writing buddy?If yes, why not.it will be an honor to me.CAN I ask a little about yourself.believe in me I don't know you are male or female.please don't think that I am a stupid one.I AM 20.how old are you?where are you com from?I myself come from Iran.what about your educational level?
vafa   
Apr 5, 2011
Writing Feedback / "how stupid I am"; 5 minutes down-town [5]

Red light turned on and I should stop the car."I really hate raining weather"I muttered. "how stupid I am"."who came down-town in this bad condition?"I nagging with myself.While the windscreen wipers were moving fron side to side,I looked at the light to know if it turned to green or not, a knocking on the window made me pay attention to the left side.Isaw a little boy with lots of beautiful roses in his hand.At first I shocked a lot."who was he?"."what did he do here?"I asked from myself.I pushed the bottom, so the window opened and he wanted me to buy some of those delicate flowers which were in his caorse hands.But more than those delicate flowers,I paid attention to his pure eyes which were shining like diamond.For a while I forgot about how terrible day it was and I felt something bad in my heart.I bought all of those red and white roses to my mom.I was thinking about his pure eyes that the horn of the cars made me start my car.It was 5 minutes but passed me long time with suffer.He was so young...
vafa   
Apr 5, 2011
Writing Feedback / Choosing desirable subjects to study in the university? [3]

Hi,in my idea students should choose their major in university.because they know their ability,intrests,experience and the most important thing is their future job that they want to have.on the other hand if government choose their major they will not have problems such an unemployment. because government choose major according to its need for a job in the future.but there will be people who don't like their job and as you know job satisfaction is an impotant thing and it will effect on their work's quality.
vafa   
Apr 6, 2011
Writing Feedback / People should place emphasis on improving the skill of working within groups, not independently [3]

Hi sabrina,it was good.Iagree with you.when we work individually we just have few information about that subject but when we use others' information,ability and experience our work will pass in a good way.in addition, when we cooperate and divide duties, work will finish soon and every person can express himself ,so it can help people to increase their self-confidence.beside these resons when we do some work with other people we can be friend with them and have good relationship.in conclusion,as we know in unity there is strength!it means a group of people with the same goals can accomplish more than individuals can.
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