Writing Feedback / Should history be taught in academic life of any student? [15]

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Some people admit that studying history has a little impact on student's academic life. While others admit that studying such subjects as mathematics and science are more available than history. Whether it is worthy or not studying history today is quite an interesting issue.

I personally think that studying history in some cases is important, yet people should know where to draw a line. I mean that it depends on student's further profession. If one wants to be a historian, it becomes an obligation for him to study history. But according to the today's society and situation, the number of people who want to be a historian is decreasing non-stop. So it would be true to say that more and more people, especially youth, are more likely to study mathematics or IT (information technology).

There is no doubt that our modern world is developing rapidly almost daily. And people should go head by head with modern developments. People do not enjoy studying history as much as they did in not so distant past. Children and students are more likely to spend their time in front of their computers sitting hours and hours. Understanding and using modern technology means that students should be knowledgeable about such subjects like maths and even science. In order to function well in the society student need an understanding of the above mentioned subjects.

In conclusion,I would like to state that learning from the mistakes of history and reading ideas of generation are important to humans' experience but they should not be learned so seriously. It is more important for student's to study Mathematics and IT rather than history, because this is a field which would ensure people their good and successful life.

Writing Feedback / GLOBALIZATION: Differences between nations are becoming less and less evident. [29]

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Differences between nations are becoming less and less evident. People watch the same films, fashion, brands and TV channels all over the world.

To what extend do the disadvantages outweigh the advantages?

It has become very common to see and hear the same films and TV channels for the people all over the world. Some people think that it has much more disadvantages rather than advantages. Whether it is really so or not is quite a controversial issue for discussion.

First of all, I personally think that it is everything due to the globalization, which mainly comes from the United States of America. Those are films and TV channels which include mostly the sex and the violence. For instance, a famous American film called "American Pie" is recognized by young people all over the world and is played by young and "hungry" boys who think only about the sex and the girls.

Secondly, I advocate the view point that traditional skills and ways of life might change due to the globalization. A good example to illustrate that opinion is that it was very common for Uzbek people to wear their traditional clothes in the not so distant past, so today they willing to look like American people and try to wear fashionable clothes or even change the way of living.

In conclusion, I would like to state and that is with a big regret, that preventing the world from the globalization with comes from the United States of America seems to be impossible for people. Hence the disadvantages outweigh the advantages. I personally think that globalization includes mostly and mainly the sex and the violence which appear in American films and even on TV channels.

Writing Feedback / The importance of natural resources (forests, animals and clean water) [16]

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Natural resources like forests, animals and clean water are disappearing. Why they are so important and should be saved?

The issue of saving natural resources like forests, animals and clean water has always been a crucial virtue since the time of industrialization. It is believed that this should be the matter of global importance. This will be proven with clear examples in my essay below.

Firstly, I personally think that saving natural resources is believed to be a key for the betterment of human life. It is thought to be that animals can somehow impact positively on children's health. A good example to illustrate this point of view is that today in major part of Western developed countries special medical centres are run where animals are kept and fed in order improve children's health. The latest statistics shows that sick children can be recovered from their illnesses by spending time with animals and fish, especially with dolphins and horses, which definitely underlines the importance of animals.

Secondly, I advocate the view point that clean and fresh water seems to be the foundation of our lives. It is simply impossible to imagine living on the Earth without clean water, which is drunk and used in large proportions in different spheres of our lives. A good example to demonstrate the importance of water is the car industry. Many scientists and car industries are now producing special cars which will run only on water. Hence these ecologically clean cars will also somehow improve our environment teeming with gas and dirty air.

All things considered it can be concluded that saving natural resources should be the matter of global importance. That is why it is highly recommended for people to act as soon as possible since the humanity is not ready for the global changes without forests, animals and clean water.