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start208   
Apr 21, 2011
Writing Feedback / new technology school buildings wouldn't be needed in the future [4]

hi everyone; this is an introduction I want to share here. Please correct me and tell how to write an atractive introduction. THANKS

Nowadays, thanks to new technology,the students can sit at their house and take lessons, sit for exams and get diplomates from choosen schools. The internet enables students to enrole in different schools that creat their own websites to let the students meet teachers and benefit from lessons and exercises. Teachers give auditory and visual lessons on lines to better understanding. In the near future, I think there would be no need for school building and traditional way of teaching is going to be baned.
start208   
Apr 23, 2011
Writing Feedback / computer in spite of teachers [4]

hello, A simple question for annika: Is it correct to start with a singular countabe noun without an article: example: Computer, ...
thank you for advice
start208   
Apr 24, 2011
Essays / Global warming - help me for CAUSE & EFFECT essay [5]

Hello there; I try to give some simple ideas that can help.

First try to answer what's global warming? : the increase of temperature in the earth and the oceans.
Explain the definition in more details then try to state some reasons like poluton google other causes. In the other half of the essay explain the results of global warming like the see rising and the expecteddangers of that. the extention of some species, mortal illnesses, floods, drought ...

At the end propose one or two effective and practical facters that can reduce the causes and dangers of global warming.
Good luck.
start208   
Apr 24, 2011
Writing Feedback / Bribery in Morocco - citizens should stand against their leaders. [6]

In many countries around the world, people are ready to give bribe though they know it is uncivilized manner. Morocco is one of these countries where people, both responsibles and citizens, are addict to bribery. I strongly believe that bribery is a giant problem which deters Morocco from a real development and if the government takes strict procedures against bribery, the country will over pass almost all its problems.

Many Moroccans claim their country is democratic and it respects human rights. However, this is not true, others say, because ordinary citizens are suffering lot from many daily problems including bribery, a social disease that kills happiness and enthusiasm of poor people. The indifference of the authorities is the major reason for the spread of this bad manner in the society. If the government is serious about the issue, establishing...
start208   
Apr 26, 2011
Student Talk / Hi everyone! Welcome at EssayForum thread. [414]

hello every boy,

I am Ismail from Morocco and I am here to improve my English and benefit from different culture. I also look for friends around the world.

I wrote an essy about Bribery in Morocco and I want u to correct me please. thanks in Advznce.
start208   
Apr 26, 2011
Writing Feedback / Bribery in Morocco - citizens should stand against their leaders. [6]

hello Joseph. Thank you so much about the time u spare to correct my essay. I like the way you corrected me. I wish you correct my next essay. By the way, I am practising writing because I will sit for an exam this summer. Thanks again.
start208   
May 7, 2011
Writing Feedback / Numerous positive effects of the new technology on our daily life. [18]

Thanks in advance for reading and correcting.
Bad aspects of modernity.

Every body can see clearly numerous positive effects of the new technology on our dailly life. however, few people are worried about its drawbacks. Indeed, the new technology complicates our life more than it facilitates it by damaging our nature, weakening our bodies and destroying culture and good values.

No one can deny the those perfect advantages of technology on all the domains in the modern life. It facilitates communication, enabling people to move from place to place easily and in short time. It helps lot in education that students nowadays can have access to foreign universitites and contacting teachers all over the world while he's sitting in his bedroom infront the screen of his computer. In every one's house there are lot of luxurious technology devices that make the house more comfortable and give a world of entertainment and happiness for both children and adults.

This happiness, others say, is not really what it seems to be. people in modern societies live in crisis and psychological disasters due to technology. People have to have more than one job to satisfy their needs. Many luxuries become obligations in nowadays. At house there should be electric devices like the oven, a big fridge washing mashine, a plat form TV and to less degree dishwasher. Children need more expenses for schooling, clothing, entertainment and the like. Adding that the family has to have a mean of transport. These expenses push the family to get big loans from banks and then financial crisis starts.

Far from economical problems, new technology damages nature and contributes in natural disasters such as terrible floods, tsounamis and earthquakes and the like. Geant enterprises, interested merly in making profects, polluts oceans and destroy forests that give life to other living creatures. This has been leading to the disappear of many spicious and the appearance of mortal diseases. Many mortal diseases are found lately to be consequences of the use of new technologies. For example the daily use of some electric machines facilitate work but causes cancer.

By and large, New technology has both positive aspects and negative effects that necessitates a serious debat on how to minimise maximum draw backs and benefit as much as possible.
start208   
May 10, 2011
Writing Feedback / Numerous positive effects of the new technology on our daily life. [18]

Thanks lot, you are always there for help. many thanks K

Can u read this and feed me back.
About journals and articals. Can you please send me some useful sites.
I 'm from Morocco and I d like to countinue my studdies here or else where. I prefer another country like France or USA but if not I can do it here. I just don't want to waste my time doing no thing. I have a brother in USA and another in France but i don't know how to get there

I am interested in Literature but I don't have a special topic except the two researches i did one about Thomas Hardies Jude the Obscure n another about Samuel B WAITING FOR GODOT.

If there is any possibilities to get to a university somewhere tell me. i don't care where to continue my studies here or else where.
start208   
May 13, 2011
Writing Feedback / Numerous positive effects of the new technology on our daily life. [18]

Thanks again EF-k.

My brother sent me some adresses before. I tried them but, unfortunately, I didn't have a good mark in a test (french test) to get a visa. I am not very goot at french.

I may stay with my brother, he lives in Paris. I just look for a way to get rid of french test and to get the visa easily. Is there any possible way?
start208   
May 14, 2011
Writing Feedback / Essay - is education very important for a country to be well developed - feedback [4]

Good day.
I read your essay. It is good; carry on writing good essays. however, There are some 'in my point of view, sentences that should be checked.

see here.

furthermore, a country with a high percentage of learned individuals (educated people) is more sustainable than others. T his is because, both the government and citizens can openly and wisely discuss their problems and challenges without disputing in understanding their duties towards achieving a healthy economy .

In my point of view , I strongly believe that excellent education is the main key for success. In the pat some countries around the world were totally destroyed after the second world war . However, they rebuilt themselves very fast becoming one of the world leader by giving education system high priority. (252 words )

I think there's a kind of repetition( In my Opinion : I strongly believe)
Many countries rebuilt in short time after the war due to its qualified education.
start208   
May 14, 2011
Research Papers / I need a thesis for technology and how it has changed the way people learn [6]

Hello there;
See this simple introduction and try to enlarge it. ( it would also be better if you comment it; we may discuss it together).

It goes without saying that technology has been envancing the way people learn and makes it easy and more exciting than ever. No more fear from going to school early, meet teachers and waste time looking for books on large library shelves. Nowadays with the new technology people save time, money and energy. They can do huge number of important things in short time, with simple click while stying in their beds. However, technology has got a number of disadvantages.
start208   
May 22, 2011
Writing Feedback / Numerous positive effects of the new technology on our daily life. [18]

Thanks lot Kevin.
I am checking some universities site. I gather some info that says there will be the Master in Casa about Moroccan American cultural studies next year. I wish I can be accepted.

May u plz send me some info abt "Moroccan American cultural studie" or some useful sites.
thanks
start208   
May 26, 2011
Writing Feedback / Moroccan reforms. To what extent are they serious? [5]

This is a simple introduction. may u please correct me. Thanks in advance.
Reforms in Morocco. to what extant they are serious?

2011 is a year of unprecedented arabic countries uprising. The people have been asking for serious reforms in all the domains. demonstraters in huge numbers are passing their days and nightd day on day at outsides in front of the state's armies to senticise their governments about the urgency of serious reforms. Morocco is not an exception, the inhabitants are organizing peaceful demonstration all over the country asking for freedom and reforms in spite of all the dangers they face. In its side, the government announces a sit of reforms to calm down the angry inhabitant; yet, they are not sufficient and the people wants more serious steps to be taken.

The unemployment has been being a serious problem in Morocco for decades and it becommes worse and worse every single year even
This is a simple introduction. may u please correct me. Thanks in advance.
Reforms in Morocco. to what extant they are serious?

2011 is a year of unprecedented arabic countries uprising. The people have been asking for serious reforms in all the domains. demonstraters in huge numbers are passing their days and nightd day on day at outsides in front of the state's armies to senticise their governments about the urgency of serious reforms. Morocco is not an exception, the inhabitants are organizing peaceful demonstration all over the country asking for freedom and reforms in spite of all the dangers they face. In its side, the government announces a sit of reforms to calm down the angry inhabitant; yet, they are not sufficient and the people wants more serious steps to be taken.

though the different measures taken by the previous governments to reduce its rate. Today, being employed is on the head of the list of demonstratore demands. We need to get a job, many voices raise among the crowds. Accordingly, the responsibles promice finding thousands of jobs this year. However, few diplomat holders are integrated in confused conditions. I know a friend, he is among the luckiest jobless in Morocco, who has got a Master in physics and now works as a french teacher!! the governments, indeed, finds hundreds of jobs but almost all of them are misplaced and this gives an obvious sign about how serious the responsibles are towards the reform.

Many other reforms are anounced. For example, the freedom of speech and mass media. yet, we see the way people are arrested merely because they critic the conditions and Rachid Niny, a famous Moroccan writer, is one among a lot. Moreover, officianal chanels never say the truth about what is happening in the state concerning corruption. Here again we see to what extent the leaders are faithful on their promices.

Tamazight is another issue people discuss a lot here in Morocco. No one deny the fact that the land is AMAZIGH; yet, the government prefers not to say clearly that Amazigh people have the right to use their mother tongue language officially in courts, administrations and schools.

In fact, it is not difficult for any body to meausre how serious the responsibles are towards their promices. It is easy to find how much they lie on their own people and mislead them to calm down and let corruption goes on and on in all the sphers of life.
start208   
Jun 1, 2011
Essays / Lazy societies always find to themselves excuses to do nothing!; What's CULTURE? [25]

Can you correct this please.

Dear Members of the Committee

Thank you so much for taking time to read my application. I bet that having read my materials, you will have an insight into my character. Before starting about myself, I would rather write a few words about my past work, then I will set forth my goals to and reasons for wanting to have access the third cycle courses on "Comparative Studies" at your university - Ibno Zohr Faculty.

Closely after my graduation, I was working at a British Company "Euro-monitor" for three years time when I stopped in 2007. My job was a freelancer composing business reports on the Moroccan market. After that, I determined to join teaching field and Maria Private School is the school I am working in currently. In the mean time, I was teaching English in a number of English Language Centres as a part time job. More than that, I took part in several workshops, on teaching, held by native speakers in American Language Centre (ALC).

As far as motives are concerned, I would say that to pursuit my studies in higher education tops the list of my reasons. Also, having taught English language for five years strongly contributed to stir up my interest to go further in and empower my studies. Additionally, the topic "comparative studies" fits my concern and my specialty - literature. Furthermore, I should admit that there are other faculties where the third cycle has been available, but always displeases me precisely as these universities are a long way from my favourite city - Agadir. In other words, the proximity of the faculty is another driving force behind the choice.

Ultimately, on the basis of my aforementioned past work and my experience, I hope that I will be the kind of candidate who will do well in the field.
start208   
Jun 6, 2011
Essays / Lazy societies always find to themselves excuses to do nothing!; What's CULTURE? [25]

Traditions are something peoples everywhere boast, respect, practice and some people even see them as sacred things. No one can deny that traditions are valuable things we inherit from our ancestors. However, we shouldn't cling lot on them because some of them are no more beneficial and peoples have to forget about them and live their generations every day life instead.

Our generations are totally different from our ancestors ones due to many factors among which the advanced technology and its impact on the globe. The world now is very small and people can learn from each other and can easily distinguish between beneficial traditions and useless ones. There are kinds of traditions that encourages laziness and hinders the progress of countries. In Morocco, there isn't only one special tradition that stands against the development of the country. There are many norms that Moroccans have to get rid of if they want to enhance their country and ameliorate their life. One of these traditions is linked to lack of understanding of the state religion and the strong, blind belief of people in some dead religious figures to whom they build big minarets and practice mysterious worships thinking the souls of these people can help them in every day life and if they do not fulfill these prayers they are going to be cursed and their lives would be hard. I personally believe these people waste their time and instead of working hard they relay on dead bodied that are helpless and hence they end their life lazily and passively.

Lazy societies always find to themselves excuses to do nothing. Morocco is one of these societies in which people hang all their lives on destiny. They think that their actions are counted and all what the are going to do is done for them before they come to live in this earth! They are acting what God wants. Some of them say it is no use working because God guaranties the living for people and that people are here to do nothing but worship. This is not true and Moroccan society should be careful and must know how to deal with these misunderstandings of Islam because it leads the society to more economical and social crisis and failure.

I insist as a Moroccan citizen on the responsibility of the government to make an end to some harmful traditions which wastes Moroccans' energy and make their country lagging behind other societies. Instead the leaders have to encourage the use of new technology and sensitize people about its goodness.

LADIB ISMAIL
Please try to read and correct this essay . thanks
start208   
Jun 7, 2011
Writing Feedback / An Unforgettable Dream (marriage and death) [9]

It happens that many dreams come true, so, be happy and expect a hansome man for you in days to comes unless you are so young!

Good luck .
hhh
start208   
Jun 19, 2011
Essays / Lazy societies always find to themselves excuses to do nothing!; What's CULTURE? [25]

Dear Kunle.
I do get your point. Thanks lot for the ideas mentioned. I do not consider traditions bad and as you said there are many of them in my nation(tamazight ones) that i fall in love with and i feel good with. My point is merely ameliorating my writing. I asked myself before I wrote the essay: what if the next exam's question is Traditions are not good. defend this point of view. This is why I am asking to correct my essay grammatically and in terms of the form and so on. Your idea is very clear and I totally agree with u. Next essay I promise will be for defending traditions.

Thanks again.
start208   
Jun 19, 2011
Book Reports / An analytical study to Samuel Beckett's play Waiting for Godot. [12]

Hello every one.
Here 's a plane to my project please time little time suggest and correct me. Thanks.

An analytical study to Samuel Beckett's play Waiting for Godot
Introduction.... ...

Chapter One

1- General summary...
2- The study of characters....
3- Setting...
3-1-The time.
3-2-The place.

Chapter Two
1- Life and meaninglessness in Waiting for Godot....
2- Human conditions in the play...

Conclusion... ...

Bibliography.... ....

Please tell me if there are ideas to add or delete.
Ladib Ismail

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