Writing Feedback / ielts the position of women in society , juvenile delinqeuncy relationship [NEW]

TOPIC THE POSITION OF WOMEN IN SOCIETY HAS CHANGED MARKEDLY IN THE LAST TWENTY YEARS .MANY OF THE PROBLEMS YOUNG people now experience. such as juvenile delinquency ,arise from the fact that many married women now work and are not at home to care for their children

Gender equality and the roles of women in our society are among the most debatable issues in modern communities. But many people believe that there are new problems which derived from these .The increase of delinquency among the young people is one of them.it is undeniable fact that many married women now work because of money or their personal interests. But is careless the main reason of juvenile delinqency.

The characteristic of a young person are influenced mostly by enviromental factors. Parent, especially mothers play very important role during the time when person's character is formed. That is why there is wrong perception in which people believe the increase of role of women in society creates a basis to juvenile delinquency . it is wrongly estimated that married women work instead of looking after their children and this is the main reason of illegal behaviours among the young people. however, in my opinon, the role of a second steady income in child's life is a real fact.Especially , if one of the family members works part-time , it will bring much more money and certainly care to his or her family.The financial maintainance will definitely impacts on child's future development.

In conlusion, Looking for reason of juvenile delinquency in such issue is not right way to go. Instead of staying all day at home , it is more useful for women to work .As we see , if woman works , it does not mean a decrease in childs' mental development. Both material and spirtual welfare are very important factors. Staying at home all day does not mean that she looks after her child .

Writing Feedback / 'History is a source of patriotism' - I E L T S - studying the past [6]

TOPIC I E L T S: to some people studying the past has little value in the modern world. Why do you think it is important to do so? What wil be the effect if children are not taught history.

History is a source of patriotism. In my opinion, depreciating the history and supporting that the past has little value in the world are great mistakes. Firstly, well all have to respect our culture, language, country and of course our nationality. Lack of respect to our history will definitely seperate us from 'us'

Secondly, learning The history is one of the biggest parts of our culture. BUt it does not only cultural issue, but also by learning the history person can make big and right decisions in his or her life.If you are head of something , or you are political or diplomatic person ,then hIstoric or diplomatic knowledge will help you much more than you expected

The will be negative effects on children ,if the history are not taught well in schools.it has always been important subject, i believe will be the best in the future. However , if one day it will lose its popularity among the countries ,we all as humans will lose our personality .I do not want to see all the nations around the wordl to become cosmopolitan.we dont have to lose our cultural diversity.

There are some main branches have to be taught in schools. From my point of view, history is on them. The educational policy without the history sounds ridiculous and international community probably will be able to suffer from its consequences

Writing Feedback / Ielts that competitive sports, both team and individual [4]

TOPIC_some people believe that competitive sports , both team and individual , have no place in the school curriculum.
Some people believe that there is no place for competitive sport in schools.But it is impossible to argue against the fact that both team and individual sports play a significant role for pupils in terms of their mental and physical developments. There are many reasons for people to appreciate the role of competitive sports.

Firstly, School years are very important for children . Skills which are obtained by pupils will definitely help them during their entire life. Creativity ,leadership, being a good team player and other abilities are crusial factors for supporting the opinion that such sports should keep their place in the school curriculum. For example during the football or basketball matches kids have chances to show themselves who are not actually good at other lessons. This is another main reason which gives everybody a lot real stories which need just to remember

Secondly, the main purpose of school subjects should be prepare children to real life. Most pupils rely on the subjects which will reveal the door of universities for them.By this way , they can find jobs and work in the future. i believe both individual and team sports might be very helpful in this contex.

Not apart from schools,potential sport stars might be taught or encouraged .

In conclusion , i think logical explanations will be very helpful for people who trying to avoid the team and individual sports role for the children

Writing Feedback / ielts young people are much more aware of and concerned about poverty, animals etc [3]

young people are much more aware of and concerned about issues like the environment,poverty, and animal welfare than previous generations. What is your opinion.

Most people believe that young adults are concerned about enviroment ,poverty and animal welfare than older people. I agree with this opinion because it is not so difficult for me to see and observe how differently The young and previous generations care about this issues. However, there are many reasons which explain their awareness.

First of all, young adulst can get information about all this issues more easily.Internet access is one of the crucial factors which gave the chance for young people to communicate with others in the world . It is undeniable fact that young adults know more information about internet than others.By this way, the young easily can get information about poverty in other places, or places which have enviromental problems.

On the other hand, The educational policy of countries plays a significant role . In my opinion, goverments intentionally are trying to provide information about all this because it is almost impossible to prevent countries from enviromental problems without giving basic information to the children or students .That is the main reason why the new generation knows about this. Not only goverments ,but also The pressure of international community make changec in the educational policy. As a student i hear almost everyday at university about how important to protect animal diversity and enviroment. This policy definitely has a great influence on us.

In conclusion, the world has many problems,but awareness and concern about this problems among the next generations will positively help to preserve The World from all thish problems lik poverty animal welfare etc .