Undergraduate / Volunteering (a short extracurricular activity essay) [3]

the workers would've had a much harder time finishing the house, which would've delayed the.

and I would say either add 'it' and the end or that the 'with' off.

Just my opinion. :)

Undergraduate / "Without opponents, I might fall asleep" - ut essay TOPIC A [5]

I think you have a great idea, when I saw the topic the only thing I could think of was parents and teachers and such, but opponents, wow

Undergraduate / Illinois Urbana Champaign Essay ("Blessed are the Peace makers") [3]

'and ' should not be used at the start of a sentence.(second sentence).
Between 'peace maker' and 'being kind....', I think it should be ':' instead of ';' ?

Undergraduate / I really need help starting my UT Austin essay [9]

They are the same I think.
I think what your thinking of is a good topic because at least you could be sure your essay won't become one of the cliche 'economic crisis' or 'Obama' essays, no offence to people writing them it's just really hard to stand out when so many people are on about the same thing.

If you know everything about it then start scribling on paper first, it works for me because once I start writing ideas start coming and I go back to refine them later.If you don't know everything about it do some research,that always helps.

I'm writing mine right now!

Good luck!

Undergraduate / "Imagine a room" - CommonAPP essay [13]

I loved the way you presented the picture.
It's very unique and if you were wanting to stand out in the crowd, well, u did it. :)

Undergraduate / Common app-elaborate on one of your activities, "to understand the material [12]

OMG kumon!! are you from Christchurch by any chance??

Undergraduate / Common app-elaborate on one of your activities, "to understand the material [12]

What? I didn't mean anything. I was just excited to see Kumon here because there's kumon in my city too( christchurch, New Zealand). That's all, I'm not trying to say there's anything wrong about the essay

Undergraduate / I have earned more A's; About what I believe; Essay for Yale [9]

Nothing is impossible. Great schools are known to make decisions based on the whole, not only your transcript. So the essays are very important because you need to show the side of you marks cant show.

I think you should focus more on your turning point: the 'why' you changed and 'how' you changed, but less on the 'before' you changed.

Don't talk about your failures so much, advocate your success at the end kk!
Good on you for applying Yale!

Writing Feedback / "the land of the east and west" - my personal essays [6]

Umm I couldn't finish the whole essay which is why I wanted to comment on it.
Well there ain't a clear word limit (you writing for common right?) but I think people tend to loose interest after, I don't know, like 1000 words?

Correct me if I'm wrong, the essay is about one significant exprience or achievement or such, but I'm not sure where your focus is: the education systems, your boarding school experience, your test scores or the other things I missed in between?

So I think it's probably too long and a little scattered.
However it is a good essay with good descriptions, I just think condensing is needed.

Undergraduate / Why BU? (the opportunity for the students) [13]

Say what they want you to say.
Go on the website nd see what they advocate most about, like 'diversity', so some kind of motto like 'knowledge is power', tell them how much you can relate to it nd how you relate to it.

That's all

Undergraduate / Why BU? (the opportunity for the students) [13]

Really? They have to at least know you're familiar about what they pride themselves on right?
I dnt know it was just my thoughts

Writing Feedback / "the land of the east and west" - my personal essays [6]

Umm have you requested an interview? I know you can do that in some Unis. Tell them as much as you can then?

Undergraduate / NYU Supplements- all 5, help with strenghts/weaknesses [9]

Lmao not all hiphop songs are woman-hating nd bling blingy lol. Um like some songs by 2pac, they prbly tell better stories than normal song, that's if you like the old school stuff.

Undergraduate / Common App essay - Uniquely "Un-Asian" [5]

malaysian definitely, because asian sounds like a stereotype