Undergraduate / "the patient's life" - Common app Short Essay [3]

The prompt was to talk about one of your extra curricular activities.

The summer before my senior year I started an internship at the New England Baptist Hospital in Boston. I have always been intrigued by surgery. The idea that someone can manually fix a problem is fascinating to me .I expected to be around the operating room, the majority of the time I was in the hospital ;however, that was not the case. I was placed on the nurse's floor and I was disappointed. Some of my responsibilities were filing patient charts, discharging patients, and offering water and blankets to patients. I felt that my contributions to these patients seemed trivial compared to those of the nurses and doctors and it frustrated me that I could not do more to help the staff members and patients. But, as the weeks progressed my attitude towards these responsibilities changed. I realized how much of a difference I made in the patient's life by just offering water and how much the word "thank you" meant to me. This internship allowed me to think of more than just myself, which is why I have decided to pursue a career in health care.

Undergraduate / 'Baseball is boring?' - Extracurricular essay for common app [2]

Prompt: extracurricular essay for common app

My cousins have always said, " Baseball is boring because you are not always active". However, this did not stop me from taking up the game that I have grown to love. Baseball has shaped me into the person I am today. Baseball requires patience, composure, character, and teamwork, skills that have helped me not only in baseball but also in life. Patience has helped me manage different personalities, remove the incentive to act rashly, and see the completeness of something rather than the undeveloped. Composure has given me the strength to stand tall during difficult situations and never give up. Character has allowed me to never be ashamed of who I am, and always keep my head up. Most importantly, teamwork has shown me that it allows goals to be reached in a timely and efficient method. If only my cousins could see baseball how I see it.

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Undergraduate / college essay; describe my experience - one word: epiphany [2]

College essay:

Since I have always been interested in ways of helping people, I decided to intern at the New England Baptist Hospital in Boston. Actually, the purpose of this activity was twofold, both to use my time assisting disabled patients and also gain some valuable experience working in a medical environment. Both purposes were fulfilled. Although at first, I felt my contributions to these patients seemed trivial compared to those of the nurses and doctors, I enjoyed seeing that with my limited medical knowledge I was able to make a huge impact on the patient's experience at the hospital.

The patients admitted to the nurse's floor were patients in severe pain who just had orthopedic surgery. My job as a volunteer was to make their stay at the hospital pleasant and more comfortable. I would see the patient from the time they were admitted to the nurse's floor to the time they were discharged. Patients would not stay for more than two to three days, yet over those few days, I formed a priceless relationship that would allow me to share my everyday happenings.

When I arrived to work every Tuesday, I was greeted by my supervisor and the nurses in charge. They gave me a list of the names of the patients and their room number. I would go to each and every room and introduce myself and offer my assistance. From here on, the patients and I would get to know each other and divert our attention from reality. Working continuously, meeting with patients every day, and helping the nurses, would make many people tired. However, I was always energized because I knew if I worked hard, the sincere words of gratitude would overcome my tiredness.

At the end of the my internship, I was asked to describe my experience. I described it in one word, epiphany. Volunteering at the hospital was the most satisfying job that I have ever done. It has taught that materialistic objects will never be my ambition, but motivation for me with be knowing that I made a difference in someone else's life.