Writing Feedback / Why photo should be more beautiful? [2]

Hi guys..this is my first essay..
Help me to give feedback about grammar in my summarize article from nationalgeographic.com.

Why Photo Should Be 'So much More Than Beautiful'

Ami Vital who is the photographer covers the stories about culture, animals, and global issues with an expedient eye in her project "Through the Lens" series. She want to persuade viewer's emotions while give some information about global issues. The first picture which was important to her is when she went to the West African and planned to stay a couple of weeks to tell story about aftermath of civil war that Africa which the popular country with war and starving problem was not idealized world for safaris and exotic animal. But in her experience is quite different. She got a wonderful picture in her journey which became the dramatic headlines. Even though in the first time, she was shooting film and she didn't know what type of photographs she had created. Since that, she realized that she wanted to spend her life working to highlight our commonalities rather than their differences.

Became a photographer was appropriate occupation for her because she didn't have any plan except working as a photographer. She also said that empathy is the wellspring of creativity and it being the most appreciated possession for her. In the interview with national geographic, She also mention a suggestion for appearing photographer that make it yours, unique, and don't shoot what you believe people are going to like however shoot from your heart and find your own style and passion.

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Selvi Permata Groda

Writing Feedback / 'How to Explore the Pantanal' - article [2]

HOW TO EXPLORE THE PANTANAL
By: Selvi Permata Groda

The Pantanal is the largest wetland in the world which has over 81.000 square miles. It located in the center of South America that quietly shelters the highest centralization of wildlife in there. It is a part of nation park and UNESCO world Heritage site which considerate a serious region of the world which appraise that more than 1000 species of fish, mammals, birds,amphibians, and reptiles live in this seedbad of biodiversity

This article suggest an advice if you visited to Pantanal. The best time to go there to see mind-boogging concentrations of widlife clustered around water pit in the dry season. The flooded and receding water is speacial among photographers.

Fly into Cuiba and drive 1.5 hours to Pocone to acces the Transpantaneira which became a part of Northern Pantanal and if you want to go to Southern Pantanal, the writer mention to fly into Corumba or Compo Grade after that you can board a riverboat to reach there.

Writing Feedback / How Being a Middle Child Affects Your Finances [2]

How Being a Middle Child Affects Your Finances
By : Selvi Permata Groda

Did you know that there is National Middle Child Day? Sadly, many people didn't know that Friday is the important day for your middle child. That's because you were probably too occupied applauding the up-to-date performance of your eldest or coddling the youngest one to pay attention.

Psychologist is mention that the prior of the birth tend to have influence of their personality and characteristic. It can give an effect of their live in the future, for example in their behavior. Middle children have a reputation for being friendly and sociable on the other hand they tend to run from their conflict and looking agreement. In the financial aspect, they need to be main aware to prevent spending their money for their lifestyle. For middle children who come from families of habitually which have poor money managers, this can be even complicated. They are more likely to angry when they get a rejection to get a stuff which is they need from their parent or sibling. An arrogant behavior about money can hurt you when your middle child have attitude like that, but the parents can be able to direct them to be a pay attention of money as a consequence they can set their financial wisely as soon as possible