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Posts by agungdanprakoso [Suspended]
Name: agung
Joined: Aug 17, 2016
Last Post: Sep 20, 2016
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From: Indonesia
School: Gadjah mada university

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agungdanprakoso   
Sep 15, 2016
Undergraduate / There is only one occasion that solidly marked my transition from my childhood. Soccer -- Chemistry [4]

can i give you little bit suggestion ?
1." Knowing that this would be harder ..." should be KNOWING THE FACT, IT would be DIFFICULT that i had imagined ( i think, it is more clearly)

2. "I found my huge potential and interest in chemistry" should be i found my huge potential and INTERESTED in chemistry (because you use conjunction "and", Then the first sentence have to be same with the second sentence)

thank you
agungdanprakoso   
Sep 15, 2016
Writing Feedback / This Article Highlight Related The Effect Of Global Warming [3]

Have you ever read the article about global warming ? nowadays, the global warming issue becomes trending topic in the world. At the moment of speaking, i want to highlight regarding the global warming effect. Checking from the Word Wide Web, Global warming is defined as process that makes the temperature of world is increasing so that inflicts vast numbers of negative effects.

In the present, many countries in the world try to prevent the global warming effect due to the fact that the effect of global warming is tremendously horrible. One of global warming effects is melting of the polar ice caps because of increasing temperature. We can imagine, if the polar ice caps melted year by year, the life creations in the polar ice caps would be extinct such as the bear poles, penguin, and seals are not found again. Then, the future generation does not know the entity of polar ice caps.

Right now, we have to become a part of the responsible individuals who participate to avert the global warming effect. It can start from ourself such as decline of the usage motorised vehicles, do not cut down the trees reckless, and do not waste the electricity resource. In my opinion, it is simple ways to do. If it is not us ? then who will ?

thank you, make use of your time to read my article.
agungdanprakoso   
Sep 16, 2016
Writing Feedback / Different Perception Of The Happiness [2]

Happiness? what is the definition of happiness? is every happiness that people thinking regarding who has a vast number of gold coins? In this article, i want to criticize related to happiness from various perception. Commonly, people bear a meaning for happiness fills full of huge amount of cash and tremendously big house. According to the survey, it depends Several human who is in isolated place defines about the happiness dissimilar. Some times, particular people like Countryman interpret the happiness is immensely simple such as filled with health, harmony among the neighbor, and simplicity activities. If contrasting Countryman between urban people there are different standards of happiness. In general, urban people has high standard due to the fact that they define happiness Become of the high class in social life. In their mind is thinking, the wealth can be complete of the desire and do all of thing easely such as what do they want to do? where do they want to go?, and when do they want to travel?

It does not blame regarding every people has different perception of happiness. From the deeply of my viewpoint, the truly happiness becomes the essential human who is useful for minkind.
agungdanprakoso   
Sep 19, 2016
Writing Feedback / Sarah Lewis - Embrace the near win (TED) [2]

could i give little bit suggestion for you.

in my opinion you should be
1. "when we value the gift of the near win" it should be "when we appreciate the gift ..." because ---> value is categorize NOUN, change to VERB

2. "Mastery closely related with the near win" it should be "Mastery closely related to the near win" because ---> related have to be end with to.

thank you.
agungdanprakoso   
Sep 19, 2016
Writing Feedback / PROBLEMS OF EDUCATION IN DEVELOPING COUNTRY [7]

Hallo @VK WSSH

could i give little bit correction for you.
here we go

1. it should be "One of the problemsis in education field it causeis most of childreenbe at work in tenderwho are exploited under age" ---> because if you want to utilize one of bla bla bla ... you have to put PRULAL on the end of sentence and it is more clearly

2. "sometime you make wrong spelling like "children" it should be "childreen"
3. it should be "education is a necessary matters for regeneration of economy.in developing country " because ---> you have to put NOUN after "of" and erase "in developing country" because it makes generalization essay.

thank you before.
agungdanprakoso   
Sep 19, 2016
Writing Feedback / The Pessimistic People of Nuclear power [2]

Have you recited the article in the neighborhood the nuclear resource ? in the amid of citizen, some people confront presence of the nuclear resource because of negative impacts. On other hand, have you imagined how is the exceedingly useful nuclear resource in our life ? nowadays, i want to highlight related to merits of the nuclear resource.

in the fact, our fossil resource is decreasing year by year. Than, if we can not obtain the alternative resources, it will be run out in the next generation. Right now, present generation has to think so hard to solve our complicated problems. From the bottom of my heart, why is great deal of citizen againts the nuclear energy with their scary ? why does vast number scientist not highlight the proper side of the nuclear resource ? can you imagine ? if we concern and exploit the source. It will replace the previous resource. The nuclear can be used to produce electricity and enlighten our cities. We will not scare any more again by run out of resources. In addiction, you have to know the reality. The nuclear resource is more sustainable and friendly environment compared to fossil resource. It will be our compulsion to control the resource.

In illation, with the full of respect, do not refuse the new things with destitute knowledge. It should be contemplating the white and black side before making decision.
agungdanprakoso   
Sep 20, 2016
Writing Feedback / The Effects of Technology for Working [5]

Hello @pokpok16 could i give few suggestions for you
here we go

In this era, technology so espouse (...), fax, and mobile phone, and many other. With itAll of the workers can communicate (...) and video conferencing" because ---> (do not forget to put on coma after adverb of time such as "In this era," and erase and before mobile phone. it is more clearly)

thank you
agungdanprakoso   
Sep 20, 2016
Writing Feedback / Service Helps International Students Bridge Cultures [2]

Service Helps International Students Bridge Cultures

Have you ever involved in public service helps ? how was the feel it ? Nowadays, i want to highlight regarding what is the merits of public service helps for life society ?

One all of organizations namely ISMA realizes that the public service helps is tremendously crucial thing for increasing caring each other in the amid of socialization. That is why, ISMA makes marvelous programs for approaching the members into citizen such as painting houses, plucking weeds, fixing fences and plating flowers. According to The Battalion Daily, impact of public service helps is exceedingly significant for raising socialization soul. Almost of ex-members who involved the programs are feeling deeply emotional. They said, when they follow the activities that feel how the vastly important of socialization is !

In my opinion, it is out of box problem solve in this era where huge amount of people feel individual and antisocial. The programs can decline the level of careless in the world. Is not that the essential of human life is taking and giving each other ?
agungdanprakoso   
Sep 20, 2016
Writing Feedback / 3 steps how to hack our brain to make our dreams come true [3]

What is the bigest question of human ? in majority, the widest question of people is how to come true their dream and purpose. Now, i want to discuss regarding TED video that gives us some tricks and method to help easily for reaching our goals.

According to Maya Angelou, a solitary fantasy can transform a million reality and just three bold steps can transform one reality yours. That is the exceedingly big quotation. The video explains that there are 3 steps to reach our goal into reality. Firstly, you have to draw a picture that contain about our dream and embed the picture on the wall or every where that you can see it easily. seeing the picture can be simultaneous our brain to make strong desire. Every morning and night when we wake up and sleep the picture will remind us related to what our goal are. Secondly, you have to believe what is your planing ? what is your imagination ? and what is your goal ? belief is the crucial key to make your dream comes true. Some days, if your belief is degradation, just see your big picture again and again. It is so helpful to raise steady willpower. Lastly, action is the last step to approach the goal. Do not forget to make list to do. Time by time, your list to do will be full of checklist. And soon with unintentionally, the goal is exceedingly close.

In illation, just draw your dream on the big paper, believe it, and action. You do not realize that your goal will come true.
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