Writing Feedback / [Ielts task 2] Wealth does not necessarily guarantee happiness. [2]

Weath does not necessarily guarantee happiness.'
To what extent do yagreeeee or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example from your own knowledge or experience

Can you fix my essay and match it?

Stay Happy and Enjoy Life

Riches do not fundamentally insurance happiness.In my opinion, I slightly agree with this statement due to money is necessary, however, it is not assurance peace of mind.

Firstly, wealth is needed in life because without money we can not survive.Properties basically bring good things to our relationship, health, education. Frist and foremost, Relationship can develop and maintain easily with money because you can treat your friends, give luxury gifts for your lovers, and take care your family.Then, you can use your money to hire a personal doctor to look after your health, in addition, you can have a perfect diet with money.Finnally, you will have a lot of chances to approach the modern educational system base on your prosperity.For instance, even though Miss.Thien was born in the poor country but her family is very rich so she can go aboard for studying.

Secondly, Wealth is not guaranteed pleasure as the results of serious illness, unlimited stratification. First and foremost, IF you have a mental sickness, for example, anxiety disorder, you will always worry about everything around you, which is not needed to be worried. Because of that, you can not enjoy your life even you have a lot of money, which can not heal your mental illness completely. After that, If you lack some parts of your body, for instance, your legs, you can not use your money to have normal legs like normal people.Finnally, People will never stratificate with the amount of money they have so that even though you are a wealthy person you still thinking about money, we always want to have more and more money, this circumstance is not stopped until we recognize it is too late to enjoy life.For instance, Mr Tram has a lot of money hut he died when he just 30 years old because an unexpected stroke, which is the results of working extremely hard.

To sum up, I think wealth is necessary but it is not insurance happiness and it is important to start to find the way to enjoy life even we do not have a lot of money.

Thanks
HappyFunny

Writing Feedback / Animals do feel. Express an opinion on animal treatment. [2]

respecting the life of animals

Animals which are the same worth with human in the earth, however, Animals being eaten, worn, experimented on, used for entertainment by a human. I totally disagree with the way we are treating animals now. I will discuss three main reasons below.

First of all, Animals have emotions you can understand that, by the way, looking into their eyes. Animals feel about pain in the same way with people. We are smiling while eating them, we are beaming with other's pain, how can you say about that?. We are expending our habitats, population by destroying animals habitats, population. People can understand the feeling of losing their house but we don't want to understand animals feel. All species of animals in the world are suffering , it is because of humans. People which is the smartest creature need to respect other creatures to show humanly, by the way, stop eating, wearing animals.

Secondly, People live in the ecosystem biology environment, which included all of the species, If one element in this system disappear the system will be weaker. People tend to act on emotions, not on intelligence. We need more patience to decide which action is good for our environment.

Finally, We have many research about becoming vegetarian is good for health so why we keep treating animals like our food to harm our life ?. We love the taste of meat, it really hard to overcome this feeling but if we keep doing wrong things we will receive bad things. The weather is worse because we are destroying animals habitat so that either animal or people be affected by this action. we have to change our action now if we want our children to have a good life on the mother earth.

Inclusion, the way we are treating animals now is extremely bad so that we have to make an innovation now to respect the life of animalsrespect the life of animals also our life.

Letters / Complain about the restaurant service. [2]

Prompt: Hi guys, can you help me fix my letter. Thanks

bad quality service

Dear sir or Madam

I am writing this letter because I received bad quality service when I was at your restaurant on Monday this week. My family was waiting 30 minutes for food however, the food was not good for example the chicken is so salty.Unfortunately, The price of food was not same on the menu I saw in 45 minutes before that.

I believe it is not the way your restaurant want to treat your customers. Could you please consider your staffs?

Respectfully,

Happy

Writing Feedback / [Task 2] In many countries, children are spending several hours each evening doing homework. [3]

Can everyone help me? My writing skill is not good.

school take time from children

In many countries, children are spending several hours each evening doing homework.
Should children be given homework?

Educational students are really important for their entire life so the ways to teach are also extremely important.In many nations, young people are spending a lot of ò hours every night studying at home.This method has many dí advantages and some advantages.

First of all, Doing homework in several hours each evening í wasting time and harming brain by many reasons.First, Relaxing state, which is the best state to study and easy to get the highest productivity,cannot receive by studying a long time without relaxing.Next, emotions are the core to keep living will be lost by trying to study during days.Task Satisfaction, which keeps people feel happy during holde life os very hard to figure due to spending a lot of time for homework, which doesn't mean everything with young people's future.Childhood is the beautiful time in the life so if students use it just for studying it is going to be the worst rue when they grow up.

Second of all, Homeworks are important as many causes. Firstly,Theories, which students learn from schools, need to practice to be achieved. self-study, which is really important for life, can be built by doing homework. Stability, which is important characteristics, is prating while doing homework during hours.

To sum up, Doing homework is important, however, we should spend enough not too much time for it to get all benefits and avoid failures.

Thanks