Mazenjamalsalah
Nov 1, 2017
Scholarship / The UK has always been my first choice for higher education - CHEVENING SCHOLARSHIP [7]
Great essay. Best of Luck.
Great essay. Best of Luck.
Mazenjamalsalah
Oct 30, 2017
Graduate / Essay about the reasons for applying for postgraduate studies( Mechanical Engineering) [6]
I think you can use a better intro, I got the point for it but still have some negative vibes and reader could mistakenly assumed that your goals aren't purely yours and it's affected by your family way of thinking.
The relation between what your country status and your passion to study this subject need to be more clear. You detail both but without a solid relation between.
I think you can use a better intro, I got the point for it but still have some negative vibes and reader could mistakenly assumed that your goals aren't purely yours and it's affected by your family way of thinking.
The relation between what your country status and your passion to study this subject need to be more clear. You detail both but without a solid relation between.
Mazenjamalsalah
Oct 30, 2017
Graduate / My inner motivation and enthusiasm in data science - statement of purpose essay [3]
Class to .. class in
As the example.. as an example
Recommender system.. recommendation system
I think you need grammar Checker it wil be more useful and efficient. In addition, you need also to work on the sentences structure.
Class to .. class in
As the example.. as an example
Recommender system.. recommendation system
I think you need grammar Checker it wil be more useful and efficient. In addition, you need also to work on the sentences structure.
Mazenjamalsalah
Oct 30, 2017
Scholarship / As undergraduate, I was part of many scientific and non-scientific. Networking question - Chevening [2]
Applying for the Chevening Schoolarship and would really appreciate you help with my answer to the question.
As undergraduate, I was part of many scientific and non-scientific activities. I was member of one the most prestigious student activities across Cairo universities; SCOPS "Student conference of pharmaceutical studies". I started as member in sales and marketing workshop for one year, worked with three different teams each consist of 10 student from different ages and backgrounds. Year after, I was nominated to be a moderator for the whole programme. Mentoring and coaching 100 member through an interactive learning module.
As a senior student, I was assigned to be the head of organizing committee of the college student union. We organized "The Student Conference of Pharmaceutical Studies 7th Employment Fair" that took part at the faculty of pharmacy at Ain Shams University. Such experience not only gave me the chance to interact with the whole organizing team members from public relation team to event planning team but also allowed me to interact with multinational pharmaceutical/non-pharmaceuticals companies' representatives in order to convince them to sponsor our mega event.
After graduation, I was prestigiously rewarded to be member of student union advisory board. I kept being on close touch to the union. Being part of "Welcome and Orientation event" for the newcomers allowed me to interact with almost hundreds of students every year. Advising undergraduate student and offer continuous guidance on how they should utilize their capabilities and select the best fitting major and career goals according to their aspiration and traits.
After my graduation, I was part of many internships and training programmes, a thing that made me adaptable to different working conditions and have a diverse background.
As an employee in big corporate, Networking is something that should be impeded in your DNA. My first job as medical delegate was based on communication visiting physicians detailing medical information about our nutritional products and follow up with all types of health care professionals (Key opinion leaders, nutritionists and pharmacists) to gather feedback and question regarding their experience with company products.
After I got promoted early this year to be part of the brand team, interacting almost with every supporting function in my company was an experience that added a lot to me.
My volunteering work as educational tutor in 57357 "Children's Cancer Hospital" is an experience that gives me the chance to change the lives of these future leaders and to motivate them to find their passion and keep fighting for it as they did against their sickness, As I believe that the potential lies inside each child and the real challenge is to uncover this potential and encourage the child's talent and self-esteem.
All the skills I gain throughout my career and my volunteering experience make me surer that I am capable of being a determined and passionate person and a successful employee and entrepreneur.
Applying for the Chevening Schoolarship and would really appreciate you help with my answer to the question.
Networking in the dna
As undergraduate, I was part of many scientific and non-scientific activities. I was member of one the most prestigious student activities across Cairo universities; SCOPS "Student conference of pharmaceutical studies". I started as member in sales and marketing workshop for one year, worked with three different teams each consist of 10 student from different ages and backgrounds. Year after, I was nominated to be a moderator for the whole programme. Mentoring and coaching 100 member through an interactive learning module.
As a senior student, I was assigned to be the head of organizing committee of the college student union. We organized "The Student Conference of Pharmaceutical Studies 7th Employment Fair" that took part at the faculty of pharmacy at Ain Shams University. Such experience not only gave me the chance to interact with the whole organizing team members from public relation team to event planning team but also allowed me to interact with multinational pharmaceutical/non-pharmaceuticals companies' representatives in order to convince them to sponsor our mega event.
After graduation, I was prestigiously rewarded to be member of student union advisory board. I kept being on close touch to the union. Being part of "Welcome and Orientation event" for the newcomers allowed me to interact with almost hundreds of students every year. Advising undergraduate student and offer continuous guidance on how they should utilize their capabilities and select the best fitting major and career goals according to their aspiration and traits.
After my graduation, I was part of many internships and training programmes, a thing that made me adaptable to different working conditions and have a diverse background.
As an employee in big corporate, Networking is something that should be impeded in your DNA. My first job as medical delegate was based on communication visiting physicians detailing medical information about our nutritional products and follow up with all types of health care professionals (Key opinion leaders, nutritionists and pharmacists) to gather feedback and question regarding their experience with company products.
After I got promoted early this year to be part of the brand team, interacting almost with every supporting function in my company was an experience that added a lot to me.
My volunteering work as educational tutor in 57357 "Children's Cancer Hospital" is an experience that gives me the chance to change the lives of these future leaders and to motivate them to find their passion and keep fighting for it as they did against their sickness, As I believe that the potential lies inside each child and the real challenge is to uncover this potential and encourage the child's talent and self-esteem.
All the skills I gain throughout my career and my volunteering experience make me surer that I am capable of being a determined and passionate person and a successful employee and entrepreneur.
Mazenjamalsalah
Oct 30, 2017
Scholarship / After finish my master course I plan to get a job in a governmental and/or oil and gas company [9]
Linking the status and your country plans to UK gorvment is missing. Also the intro need to be more Readable.
Linking the status and your country plans to UK gorvment is missing. Also the intro need to be more Readable.
Mazenjamalsalah
Oct 30, 2017
Scholarship / Why and what I chose to study in UK [10]
I am suggesting to discuss more how each course will add to you insted of detailing course structure and topics. Also I think You should mention how studying this topic specifically in the UK is better. And your interest -if possible- in Europan culture. Also adding the status of the industry in UK and how developed it is. Best of luck.
I am suggesting to discuss more how each course will add to you insted of detailing course structure and topics. Also I think You should mention how studying this topic specifically in the UK is better. And your interest -if possible- in Europan culture. Also adding the status of the industry in UK and how developed it is. Best of luck.
Mazenjamalsalah
Oct 30, 2017
Scholarship / The challenge of leadership is to be strong, but not rude; be kind, but not weak... [3]
Applying for the Chevening Schoolarship and would really appreciate you help with my answer to the question.
"The challenge of leadership is to be strong, but not rude; be kind, but not weak; be bold, but not bully; be thoughtful, but not lazy; be humble, but not timid; be proud, but not arrogant; have a humor but without folly."
A concept that took me years to digest and implant properly. It all started in my early school years when I was selected to be the main presenter in the school broadcast; choosing topics and assigning tasks to the rest of the team. Back then, I thought that moderating a team is what leadership is all about.
Years after as undergraduate, I was a member of the college student union. Typically, a freshman student shouldn't be leading or influencing older and more senior members. But I couldn't disagree more because moving an entire group of individuals toward a singular goal is all about effective communication and clear vision of what needs to be accomplished. Through both I was nominated by me team members to lead the team to organize the closing event of the student union activities for that year.
The success of the event earned me a positon as the head of the organizing committee the year after. We organized one the most successful Employment fairs conducted in our college. Leading my team to attract 1K student from all over Egypt in addition to signing more than 15 multinational pharmaceutical company to be an event sponsor.
I was also the leader of many scientific projects during my coursework, where I distributed duties and was responsible for making the presentations of the projects for my team.
After graduation, my role as member of student union didn't end. I was prestigiously rewarded to be member of student union advisory board. I kept being on close touch to the union. Being a part of every year "Welcome and Orientation event" for the newcomers. Advising undergraduate student and offer continuous guidance on how they should utilize their capabilities and select the best fitting major and career goals according to their aspiration and traits. A responsibility that actually gives me the chance to influence student lives.
As a Nestle employee and member of the brand team. I was assigned to lead a task force team out of five employees to conduct a market research project called "Competition genotype "studying the impact of country economic status on competition marketing strategies.
I also work as an educational volunteer in 57357 "Children's Cancer Hospital", in which I tutor children successfully cured from cancer but as a result of their sickness they quit the school. The volunteering experience makes me connect with children and helping them overcoming their educational struggles and even influencing their social lives by increasing their confidence and self-esteem. I took part of many campaigns that is offering help to the poor and increasing people's health awareness in many regions.
Applying for the Chevening Schoolarship and would really appreciate you help with my answer to the question.
leadership concept
"The challenge of leadership is to be strong, but not rude; be kind, but not weak; be bold, but not bully; be thoughtful, but not lazy; be humble, but not timid; be proud, but not arrogant; have a humor but without folly."
A concept that took me years to digest and implant properly. It all started in my early school years when I was selected to be the main presenter in the school broadcast; choosing topics and assigning tasks to the rest of the team. Back then, I thought that moderating a team is what leadership is all about.
Years after as undergraduate, I was a member of the college student union. Typically, a freshman student shouldn't be leading or influencing older and more senior members. But I couldn't disagree more because moving an entire group of individuals toward a singular goal is all about effective communication and clear vision of what needs to be accomplished. Through both I was nominated by me team members to lead the team to organize the closing event of the student union activities for that year.
The success of the event earned me a positon as the head of the organizing committee the year after. We organized one the most successful Employment fairs conducted in our college. Leading my team to attract 1K student from all over Egypt in addition to signing more than 15 multinational pharmaceutical company to be an event sponsor.
I was also the leader of many scientific projects during my coursework, where I distributed duties and was responsible for making the presentations of the projects for my team.
After graduation, my role as member of student union didn't end. I was prestigiously rewarded to be member of student union advisory board. I kept being on close touch to the union. Being a part of every year "Welcome and Orientation event" for the newcomers. Advising undergraduate student and offer continuous guidance on how they should utilize their capabilities and select the best fitting major and career goals according to their aspiration and traits. A responsibility that actually gives me the chance to influence student lives.
As a Nestle employee and member of the brand team. I was assigned to lead a task force team out of five employees to conduct a market research project called "Competition genotype "studying the impact of country economic status on competition marketing strategies.
I also work as an educational volunteer in 57357 "Children's Cancer Hospital", in which I tutor children successfully cured from cancer but as a result of their sickness they quit the school. The volunteering experience makes me connect with children and helping them overcoming their educational struggles and even influencing their social lives by increasing their confidence and self-esteem. I took part of many campaigns that is offering help to the poor and increasing people's health awareness in many regions.
