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Name: Liang
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Last Post: Aug 4, 2019
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Aug 4, 2019
Writing Feedback / IELTS Writing Task 2 Both sides opinion : Should elderly people be forced to retired or not? [5]

@Snoopy Jr
Hi, i try to correct some phrases, i hope it will be helpful to you. :)

1.as the population grows time after time,again and again?
2.some people believe that .....while others ...
3.Since medical technology gets ...
As medical advances and technological developments have helped people to live longer...
4.As technology improves
With the advance of technology
Jan 5, 2018
Writing Feedback / IELTS writing task2: Universities should not teach arts subjects, agree or disagree? [2]

Rising university fees and scarce employment prospects for graduates have led some people to say that universities should not teach art subjects, like philosophy and history, and only offer practical degree courses that maximize chances of employment.

don't abandon art subjects at schools!

Even though it's more and more difficult to find a position in the workplace and the tuition fee in universities is increasing, I still disagree that we should abandon art subjects due to the following reason.

We all know the technology, such as computer, digital and communication devices change rapidly in the 20th century. We are unable to master only one skill like our parents or grandparents used to do and thinking we can rely on it for the whole life. Rather we have to think outside the box and coming out with new ideas that people need it but haven't invent it. By doing so, it requires the creativities to invent the new products that haven't exist and the ability to find out the people's need.

That's why arts subjects are so importance. For example, philosophy give us the sight of question the staffs around us and finding the nature of staffs, contributing us to think creativity, in addition, history tells us how it becomes progressive one step by step, which helps us thinking more logically and find out people's need. Still, art

For instance, it's no doubt that Steven Jobs is the genius of inventor in this century, if you have read his biography, you would find that he mentioned not only one times the important of art and philosophy effected his way of thinking, making him find out the element of staff and eventually came out of the surface that people easy to use with the perfect appearance. He also said that, sometimes you don't think the two things are relevant, however as you combine them together. It turns out to be a surprising result.

In conclusion, according to the reason I mentioned above, despite the fact that the practical degree is easily to find a job, I strongly stand on the side of supporting people need to learn art subjects in order to improving the creativities and logical thinking. After all, that's why people can distinguish themselves from the robot.
Jan 2, 2018
Writing Feedback / IELTS writing task2: the advantages and disadvantages of solar energy? [2]

eco-awareness in energy industry

Solar energy is becoming more and more popular as a source of household energy in many countries around the world. Why is this? What are the advantages and disadvantages of solar system?

When it comes to the power resources, fossil fuels, coal and nuclear power play the important role in today's world. However, they all have their own limitations, for instance, fossil fuels emits carbon to the atmosphere, accelerating global warming and as it is consumed, it gone forever. As for nuclear power, we are concerned about the safety issue and how to deal with the radioactive pollutions. As the result, many governments and experts start to find other alternative sources of energy.

With its renewable, abundant, sustainable qualities, solar system starts to gain its influence on the world stage. It's definitely a better energy resource compared with traditional resources. Firstly, we don't have to worry about one day the energy resource will be run out, because the sunlight is unlimited. Secondly, there are no noise impact, because there are no moving parts in the devices, which has advantages over other green-techs such as wind turbines. Lastly, the most importance is there is no contaminations and toxic chemicals to pollute the environment.

On the contrary, expensive devices, such as the solar panel on the roof and solar cell are a big amount of money for average families and governments should also plan an large budget on the constructions, like solar storage. Besides, we know that the sunlight is limited in certain time and it's alway difficult to predict nature rhythm, in this case, its intermittence also brings some inconveniences.

To sum up, with the growing of eco-awareness, i would prefer that people should expand the usage of solar system in view of the environmental friendly aspect. However, in order to promote the using of solar system, governments should give more financial support on the basic constructions at the same time.