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Name: SUPANTHA PRASAD MONDAL
Joined: Dec 5, 2018
Last Post: Dec 30, 2018
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School: Jodhpur Park Boys School

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Supantha   
Dec 30, 2018
Writing Feedback / Should governments set a limitation on dangerous sports or not? [3]

Hi, LizLee. You have put nice arguments in my view. But may I suggest you some more suggestion so that you can make your argument stronger favoring those extreme sports. For example :

If government bans such sports, it could be viewed as an infringement of the rights. Those who choose to participate in these sports know the consequences. They know very well what is good or bad for them. They argue that if such sports are banned, then all those other things that are harmful for individuals should be banned like smoking, drinking and eating fast foods.

What is more, those sports persons who excel in such dangerous sports bring name and fame to their country. Take an example of Olympic Ski jumping. Practitioner can face instant death even when they practice under strict supervision. But when they break records set by others and when they do so, the name of their country shines in the whole world.


- Thanks
Supantha   
Dec 24, 2018
Undergraduate / UBC PERSONAL PROFILE - traits that make me who I am and the love I have for helping others. [4]

@ValC
Even though the prompt is about describe who you are i kinda feel like that you should also focus on how you grind your day-to-day conflicts / regular hurdles and how much do you try to tackle them. This will make your admission officers to think how apt you are to handle pressures of the program you selected.

- Thanks
Supantha   
Dec 24, 2018
Undergraduate / What is important to me? PROTECTING OUR NATURE AND ENSURING ANIMAL WELFARE [6]

Thanks Mr. Holt. Actually the question is, will my essay content really have some problems with my programs? Because I'm applying for History Honors ( undergraduate) but my content is on environmental studies. Another question is should I have to edit my essay?
Supantha   
Dec 24, 2018
Undergraduate / GIVING THE NECESSARY SERVICE TO MY OWN PLANET IS MY UNIVERSAL GOAL [3]

Tell us more about one or, two activities that are most important to you. Please explain the role you played and what you learned in that process.(maximum 350 words)

UBC UNDERGRADUATE APPLICATION



CLUB:

Being a member of the club called 'NSEC ' I feel proud to say that I have done a great job exquisitely than most others. The reason is when our club held a " tree plantation" program, the leader of my club decided to buy only 2.5 kgs seeds of Ashoka tree, and 1 kg of palm trees. Right then I opined that we needed trees with wide canopies to reduce CO2 from air because generally speaking most of the tropical trees with wide canopies have thick trunks, so in general knowledge : the wider the trunk the more it will be able to suck CO2. That's why I invested a big share from my own pocket to buy such saplings like The Great Banyan(great for carbon di-oxide reduction and the finest for shading in scorching summer ) , Indian Mahogany( CO2 shortening, and gives great foilage), Tulsi tree ( it's a very small type of tree species but perhaps the most efficient in cutting off carbon), Neem ( besides it's great shade Neem is famous for aliviete the fatal Pox disease) and Sal tree ( It is also well known for providing foilage and other uses of its leafs). However in a mega city like Kolkata has hardly any space for planting such giants like Banyan. So I took them to my native village and planted four of them on my father's own land. Besides my exploits in tree plantation I have been given responsibility to spreading awareness to my own locality about child abusing, practicality of educations, environmental issues, caste problems. Recently a well known social activist called Anand Shiva, call on a country based mission which is : visiting primary schools and take a 30 minutes class to aware children of how government is brain washing common folks about how their party is ensuring the protection of natural forests while in reality they are letting corporates to eat our last remaining forests and mega faunas. So the leader and vice leader of NSEC decided that 4 members will do the job and one of them is me. Moreover, other members of my club deeply appreciate my works on spreading acquaintances on social medias on education systems, veganism, natural destruction and anti- speciesism which are one of the base motto of my club.

- Feel free to share your opinion.
Supantha   
Dec 20, 2018
Writing Feedback / In some countries young people have little leisure time and are under pressure to work hard. [7]

Ok nice ideas but you need to get little bit more formal and keep your grammar and sentence arrangement in check.
1. If I were you, I would have written
FIRST OF ALL / FIRSTLY instead of writing " First and foremost". Does it sound weird to write first and foremost? I don't know. But firstly / first of all are better

2." they apply a wealth the of methods ..." -
What did you mean by that? This sentence makes little sense to me. I think you forgot to put some words and you didn't proof read before submitting this answer.

3. And for almost parents
- TO ALMOST ALL PARENTS
Don't start a sentence with conjunctions like
AND / BUT. Instead you can start with Besides or, Henceforth, Nevertheless for such occasions.

4. "But instead of instructing their ..." - makes sense.

"So they do not allow their ..." - Does not make sense. What do you mean by children to violate? What they would violate? Please clarify.

5." Education program becomes difficult and put ..." -
Either you write Education programs or, you write ' puts' not put.

6. "I have the feeling" -
Again,it's a formal writing. So you should write
REGARDING THOSE ABOVE FACTS I OPINE THAT.....

Hope this helps.
Supantha   
Dec 20, 2018
Essays / How to create Erasmus Mundus scholarship motivation letter [4]

What I think is you should write here first how your Personal Statement will be represented by you accordingly your prompt. Then the moderator of this forum will help you to correct your doubts / mistakes. After that you could edit your Personal Statement with rich ideas and could use conveniently.

Thanks
Supantha   
Dec 8, 2018
Undergraduate / What is important to me? PROTECTING OUR NATURE AND ENSURING ANIMAL WELFARE [6]

UBC Personal Profile (Max. 250 words)



Many people have many important task/desire/goal to focus on or to accomplish. So have I. But the most important and most meaningful motive i have to ensure that natural green zone is safe as well as all the wild/domestic/marine animals ( especially vertebrates which are in massive danger). That's why apart from my study i signed numerous petition to sustain the basic privileges of animals and joined in multiple protest on street to let our green heaven and voiceless souls thrive in peace. I'm also a team member of a non-profit organization called VOICELESS INDIA and soon going to be a workshop coordinator in my own city. Now why is it important? Because, besides trees, wild animals and other species help to maintain an ecological balance of the earth but since the dawn of homo sapiens, they're in a oath to destroy the world not only for their demand but for their endless lucrative motives. And if mother nature presses the ' reset' button, then its game over. So this message is very important to send every human's conviction to make a part of their daily life. Furthermore, now it's the ethical point. Earth is the only place where any living species can have a life and defray and we r no exception. Through ancient time till now in the age of gadgets we are heavily relying on her and all of her children. So annihilating her completely is not an option.

- any suggestion is humbly welcomed.
Supantha   
Dec 8, 2018
Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 2 - Many parents believe that their children should read only serious, educational books. [3]

I can see that you just wrote only positive impacts of reading amusement books and that's your personal preference. But I would suggest you that you should also focus on some demerits also. For instances, children can be too much obsessive on fictional/comic books. So they might start to read them during their studies. And that's a hindrance towards their study. Moreover, children might start to read some adult comics which are objectionable for them to read.

Plus. You can also add some advantages also. Example : Comic books like DC or, MARVEL often introduce hypothesis of quantum sciences/ relativity of time and other higher physics which children find pleasure to read them, thus make them much knowledgeable in those fields.

I hope you found my suggestion helpful. Thanks
Supantha   
Dec 8, 2018
Writing Feedback / Ielts writing task 2: buying products from other countries. [4]

Nicely illustrated but I'm here for only two corrections :
1. You made 5 paragraphs to bulid your essay but i think 4 paragraphs will be the classic and best to give a legitimate look. One is for introduction. One is for discussing the merits. Thr next one is for demerits and last one is for conclusion

2. Few word corrections
... people from Europe purchase china: Chinese products ( from china)
Supantha   
Dec 6, 2018
Undergraduate / I am the only teenager in my community who thinks something different unlike others. Essay about me. [3]

Tell us about who you are



How your family and friends and/ or members of your community describe you? If possible please include something about yourself that you are most proud of and why.

I believe I am the only teenager in my community who thinks something different unlike others.It's because since grade 12 I became aware of environmental destruction and overconsumption by humans of natural resources. This is the only reason I find too boring to find passion about some other hobbies like arts, tourism, club, parties etc. Because I believe that if people don't act now on fixing environmental issues, the rest of other jobs that humans often find pleasure wouldn't have any meaning. In my opinion, acquaintance on humans' wrongdoing or, wrath on nature is much needed. For my family and my community, especially the councilor of our local committee thinks I'm very shy in nature, thus I barricade myself into a single room. Thus I should join other activities which are common in our society.Well i do indulge such activities in meantimes with little interest. I'm also no longer part of a friend circle as according to them I'm weird. So the only friend i got is one of my best praisers. He thinks how ironically most of the people consider natural and animal welfare as a not-so-important subject but me. He is also my best encourager and tries to support me almost in everyway. He also stands by my side when me and other ' animal lovers' hold up protest on roads. He is the one who made me realize that apart from my study, my little contribution to environment should have my biggest pride.
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