Writing Feedback / Do young people have influence on society's decisions that determine the future of society? [2]

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the influence of young people on the society

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people nowadays, have no influence on important decisions that determine the future of society.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

There is a discussion these days regarding whether or not the determination of important decisions in our society is not influenced by young citizens, and officials do not take their opinions seriously because they do not believe in their role. I find myself in disagreement with this point of view for several reasons.

The first reason why I believe young people have a big influence on important decisions is that they are skillful and they have enough background. Schools and universities offer governmental classes to their scholars to improve their understanding of problems in local society. When youth people attend these educational programs, they will learn how to use these skills to express their opinions, to find solutions, and to influence people. For example, last year there was a mass shooting in a high school in Florida. It was a big tragedy because 25 people were killed between students and teachers. Some students arranged a big convention to protest and to speak about their refuse to hold guns in American schools. They were well-prepared for this event by using what they got in one of study curriculum. As a result, Florida State prohibited any student from having a gun or weapon in schools and other educational facilities.

The second reason why I think young people have a big influence on the important decisions in the country is that they use technology. The advances in technology and the internet provide new platforms for these youth to express their beliefs and to influence the surroundings. To be more precise, social media, such as Instagram, Facebook, and Twitter, allows them to record videos and to do life speech. These websites offer a big opportunity for some young to become influencers or bloggers. Millions of people follow them and they appreciate their beliefs and what they say, and we can see clearly that many presidential candidates depend on these speakers change the public minds and convince them to vote for one candidate, but not for others.

In conclusion, the influence of young people on the society has been increased gradually within the last two decades. Even though some advocates believe that youth can not impact any official decision in their community, I totally refute this belief. They have a big role in their society because they are well-educated and they have the opportunity to speak up by using social media.

Writing Feedback / Reasons for seeking happiness and successful in foreign countries. [3]

success is not related to a place or a country

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People leaving their hometowns have a higher chance of becoming happier and more successful than people staying in their hometowns. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

Webster's Dictionary defines life as" the process from birth to death". During this process, we go through different experiences, such as learning, working, building feelings and relationships. We work very hard to be happy and successful in our life. Many people believe that we have to seek happiness and success in our hometowns. They claim that when people moved to a new foreign country, they would suffer from homesickness and they will have a terrible life, even though they have a good job, health insurance, and comfortable life. However, most statistical studies showed that people can be happier and more successful, when they start a new life in a strange country, even though they face many obstacles at the beginning. This essay will explain why I hold this opinion.

A lot of freshly graduated students from American universities prefer to travel to the South American countries to work there. When they finish their studies, they have low opportunities to work easily and immediately after graduation because the job-market is completely saturated and there is a little chance for them to find a job. For example, the big Mexican and Brazilian companies and businesses appreciate these fresh employees because of their experience, skills, and expertise. In addition, these young people have high degrees from accredited and well-known universities. These companies will not hesitate to offer them secure jobs with a high salary. Therefore, these newly graduated scholars will try to move to these countries to thrive and to have a successful life.

In general speaking, people like to have a happy life and they try very hard to obtain it. Many statistical studies have shown that American people suffer from a lack of a happy and relax life. Living in the United States is expensive, and people have many financial burdens, such as paying student loans and mortgages. We need not forget that most people do not have free health insurance, and this service costs them a lot of money. On the contrary, a lot of foreign countries are less expensive than in the United States and their governments offer free health services for citizens In addition, they provide a free and high-quality education system. With all these temptations, people will think seriously to move to these countries to have all these privileges for them and for their families. When my friend Jon graduated from the business school at the University of Memphis, he faced many difficulties to find a job. He had to pay his date and he had to support his family financially and emotionally. However, he got a job offer from a Chinese company, and he did not hesitate to accept it. Many years later, he told that this job changed his life completely. His family and he had a full health benefit, and he was not worried anymore about having or paying for healthcare insurance. He paid all his mortgages and he built a good credit. Therefore, he got a new loan to buy a luxury house in an expensive neighborhood. He offered his family a happy life, even though they are living away from their home country.

In conclusion, we cannot use physical measurements to know how much happiness we hold or to know how much we are successful. But we know for sure that having a happy life and being a successful person, is not related to a place or a country, and people can achieve a satisfying life by working hard, being healthy, and having fun.

Writing Feedback / Truth in relationship between people [4]

being honest with each other

What is the truth? The broad definition of the truth is to be honest and to not lie. Some people believe that not telling the truth can be an easy way to strength your friendship, marriage, or partnership. The both side can lie sometimes to complete their relationships and to stay together. However, this is not true. When one person starts to be dishonest, he or she will destroy any bonds with the other side. They cannot establish any conversation and have any agreement. Therefore, telling the truth can be hard sometimes, but it will help to have a strong relationship. This essay will explain why I hold this opinion.

The confidence can help to build a strong relationship between two people. When they trust each other, they will have a strong bind and they will be closer. This type of tie between them can be stronger and more powerful, when they are telling the truth and they do not lie to each other. In contrary, when the both sides are dishonest to each other, they will face many problems and they will have a weak relationship. The lack of truth will destroy and ruin their life. For example, my friend Jon had a very nice and beautiful relationship with his ex-wife. They were living together and they were working together. They had a successful life until Jon decided to not tell his wife about his bankruptcy. He thought that if she did not know about his financial problems, she would be better and she would not get angry. However, he was wrong because his wife was spending money like a crazy and she borrowed many loans from the bank. After one year, they had big problems with the bank and they went to gail because they could not pay their mortgages.

Truth is the platform to build a strong relationship between people. When people are honest, it will be easy for them to communicate. This honest relationship will open the door for a deep conversation and they will solve their problems easier because they trust each other. As a result, they will feel happy and satisfied about their life and relationships.

In conclusion, we have to consider that telling the truth is very important in any relationships. Even though some people believe that lying can be a good solution to be close to our beloveds, I highly recommend my friends and my family to be honest and to not lie on each other.