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Name: Trinh Ngoc Lan
Joined: May 7, 2020
Last Post: May 11, 2020
Threads: 3
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From: Viet Nam
School: Chuong My A High School

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lanlan   
May 9, 2020
Writing Feedback / It is difficult for people living in cities today get enough physical exercise. Causes & solutions. [2]

The life of urban residents



The lack of physical exercise has gained popularity in many countries in recent decades, particularly citizens living in towns. Though this issue can be contributed for some reasons, there may be a feasible solution.

There are some reasons why the people of urban areas have no time to do the practice. First, living expenses are quite expensive in towns, so every adult always struggles with financial burden and they have to get stuck with work all day long to solve living expenses. They find it hard, with a tight schedule, to spend lots of time doing exercise. Second, the entertainment media in the city that people are just sitting somewhere and enjoying have improved massively. In fact, these attractive products such as computer games, movies can attract both the young generation and the old generation so they don't want to do recreational activities.

This problem has a few possible solutions. First, the government can take some measures to make people aware of the benefits of physical exercise like yoga, gym, etc. Because people would spend more time doing exercise since they recognize the importance of this. Second, the advertising campaign should be more attractive for people excited about gymnasiums, yoga, and some related activities. Actually, if people are interested in this advertisement, they tend to spend time and money to participate in it.

In conclusion, with a busy lifestyle in urban centers, more and more people are not getting enough time to exercise physically. But we should spend a lot of time doing the exercise because of our health benefits from these.
lanlan   
May 9, 2020
Writing Feedback / IELTS Writing Task 2 Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment [5]

You make some typos (capable, producing bottles, etc.)
Your ideas are not clear and well documented.
..., they are not particularly interested in the environmental issues". I don't think so ,it's just your subjective opinion and you don't state the evidence.
lanlan   
May 9, 2020
Writing Feedback / Causes and solutions of teenager's bad behavior which get them into trouble. [4]

I think that is a hasty essay. You don't write the structure of the essay and don't meet the scoring demands.
I see you're doing some typos, using the wrong relative pronouns and typing words.
In my opinion, only two causes and two solutions should be identified and then focused on clarifying those. Furthermore, you should pay attention to the balance of the paragraphs.
lanlan   
May 8, 2020
Writing Feedback / The number of cars has increased significantly in major cities. What problems and some solutions? [3]

reducing the problem of too many cars



The considerably increasing of cars has been considered one of the major social problems not only in one nation but also all around the world in many decades. Although this problem can be attributed to many reasons, some feasible solutions can be considered to address this.

On the one hand, the increase in cars is many bad effects not only on the environment but also on people. First, car hazardous substances discharged into the environment would lead to global warming. It's can contribute to the rising sea levels and the melting of ice air pollution. These definitely affect the surface of bodies of water and soil and detrimental harmful to the environment. Second, this extremely harmful to people's health because the environment be damaged, people exposed to air pollution. This is the reason for many diseases such as birth defects, lower reproductive rates, or even cancer.

On the other hand, I personally believe that we have to vary feasible solutions to environmental issues facing the world today. First, rising fuel prices can be best solution. In fact, if fuel prices are dramatically increasing, commuting costs would rapidly climb. People would take public transportation instead of driving a car. Second, the government should raise public awareness through a campaign or policy. For example, the Dutch government has adopted laws to regulate emissions. They replace gasoline-fueled cars with zero-emissions vehicles.

In conclusion, although accelerating cars could have a somewhat negative effect on the environment, I hope we can help reduce the whole problem by doing some environmental projects.
lanlan   
May 7, 2020
Writing Feedback / Some people believe that it is more important to teach children the literature of the country [2]

Knowledge about other countries' literature



The question of whether literature for children in the country or international literature should be taught has gained popularity in the past several decades. While some may suggest teaching only the literature of the country, the suggestion is groundless, and should not be implemented.

Learning about other literature from other countries has considerable advantages. First, it offers opportunities for students to discover new cultures. The pupil would find it easy to learn a new language by comprehending other cultures, which is very necessary nowadays. Second, it's a chance to meet learners around the world or make more friends. That indicates they can broaden their knowledge of the beliefs, values, and consumptions of others that are considered to be the element that builds culture.

Furthermore, if graduated children understand other traditions, they will have more employment opportunities. Thanks to globalization, they can work not only in their country's company but also in multinational companies. They would have decent jobs with high salaries which could improve their standard of living. In addition, once they have knowledge of the literature of other countries, they may be given opportunities to teach other people about their literature. These activities may help to improve this country's literature surface.

To sum up, there are many advantages to teaching students about the literature of other countries, so students should be taught both country literature and other countries.
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