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Posts by Samt Lee
Name: Thùy Duyên
Joined: Jun 10, 2021
Last Post: Jul 2, 2021
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From: Viet Nam
School: Foreign Trade University

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Samt Lee   
Jul 2, 2021
Writing Feedback / IN THEIR ADVERTISING, BUSINESS NOWADAYS USUALLY EMPHASIZE THAT THEIR PRODUCTS ARE NEW IN SOME WAY [2]

IELTS WRITING TASK 2_NEW PRODUCT



IN THEIR ADVERTISING, BUSINESS NOWADAYS USUALLY EMPHASIZE THAT THEIR PRODUCTS ARE NEW IN SOME WAY.

WHY IS THIS? DO YOU THINK IT IS A POSITIVE OR NEGATIVE DEVELOPMENT?


There has been a common assumption that more firms, investors and companies are trying to kickstart their brand new products into the market and make their labels have something distinctive from others. This phenomenon is attributable to many explanations. From a personal perspective, I firmly believe that this could lead to an adverse repercussion.

There are two underlying reasons why businesses are heading into confirming the uniqueness of their items. First and foremost, companies need to have an intrigued commodity to compete with others. As we know, there are thousands of new industries engaging in almost every aspects on a regular basis. If your private company wants to be successful, it needs to have something different. Another driving factor that results in the demand of consumer. Given the proliferation of technology and supplied resources, people inadvertently ask for higher convenience and wider options to choose. For example, when we are able to drive a normal bike, we urge to have a better one to fix the recent mistakes of the previous item.

I would content that the increase in making new goods may bring society some detrimental effect. To begin with, there is a host of stuffs that we will never use up in the future which is turned into waste requiring a huge amount of money to process. Additionally, some businesses try to create useless suppliers, thinking that it may help to improve the profit which occasionally go to the opposite site. Apparently, some new products are not guaranteed by any professional institutions that may do harm to the users. In fact, spending time on choosing different items bringing the same value considered to be time consuming.

In short, competitive market and customer's demands are to blame for the emphasizing the exotic materials of businesses. I am convinced that this problem has a number of negative implications for the whole community in long-term scale.
Samt Lee   
Jul 2, 2021
Writing Feedback / IELTS Writing Task 2: Printed vs Online Newspapers and Books - support your opinion [4]

You should rise your own opinion in the introduction to make it clear.
The first body paragragh is absolutely in a wrong structure, you know you should write the two body parts equally. For example, you can write the first one with the first reason from your perspective with some explaination and one example. Similarly, you write the sencond reason for the next one with the same structure. That will be much more easier and represent that you are well-known about the writing instruction. Anyway, you can find some other way, this is just my recommendation.

Finally, in the conclusion, I think that it is kind of short and in this part, you should reconfirm about the topic and give out your personal ideas one more time.
Samt Lee   
Jul 2, 2021
Writing Feedback / Driverless vehicles - IELTS TASK 2 - TECHNOLOGY [4]

I think that you should gather the 2th and 3th paragragh togerther because as you can see, the lengthen between the 2th, 3th and 4th gragh are not the same and making into two main body parts may demonstrate a better structure.

In the conclusion, you need to confirm clearly the topic again and point out your main decision!
Samt Lee   
Jun 29, 2021
Writing Feedback / IELTS WRITING TASK 2_HISTORY OF A HOUSE THAT PEOPLE LIVE IN [3]

Thank you for your comment, I just want to ask you for more detail about the meaning of LR, C+C. Besides, I have read on some website that using peoples is considered to be more formal than people in an ielts essay so I learnt to use it.

This essay was too long, I will properly try to improve this issue in the next essay.
Samt Lee   
Jun 27, 2021
Writing Feedback / IELTS WRITING TASK 2_HISTORY OF A HOUSE THAT PEOPLE LIVE IN [3]

Every house has its own story



IN SOME COUNTRIES, MORE AND MORE PEOPLE ARE BECOMING INTERESTED IN FINDING OUT ABOUT THE HISTORY OF THE HOUSE OR BUILDING THEY LIVE IN

WHAT ARE REASONS FOR THIS?

HOW CAN PEOPLE RESEARCH THIS?


There was a common assumption that residents are considering a host of backgrounds belonging to the previous occurrences that happened to the house or department they live in. Whilst there are various reasons for this situation, I have a strong conviction that peoples are concerning about the safety issue. Apparently, the owners have hundreds of ways to find out this topic to fulfill their curiosity as well as their personal purposes by asking the seller or just simply searching on the internet.

The main reason for this interest is that peoples worry about their safety. As we know, the life standard is improving significantly due to the development of technology and human's demand. In this regard, peoples have more choices and opportunities to choose a perfect house for them and their families as well. In most cases, the owners do not want to buy a house that have a bad history such as accidents or safety system problems for example. Knowing more about the condition and prior events somehow benefits buyers with wiser options. Additionally, a better knowledge about the place that we will properly settle down for a long time is never be an awful thinking. In fact, almost every customers ask carefully for the full information of the house or department that they intend to buy and try to avoid ones that occurred nasty things in the past.

From a personal perspective, I firmly believe that peoples can easily look for detail instructionS about the history of their houses. In the most convenient way, we can ask the previous owners or the agencies that sell us the apartment, they must be well-known about the place and they have the responsibility to tell us the truth if they want to sell the house quickly and trustworthily. In other hand, websites on the internet also a beneficial method to search for the information as well as find out some reviews about houses, especially apartments and buildings. In this case, peoples are enabled to access into building's website to know more about them. Furthermore, joining some house's groups may provide essential history about places and events that happened in the past of the building. For example, before deciding to buy a house in district two in Ho Chi Minh city, my family considered carefully the origins of the house from my uncle and the seller.

To sum up, having a flawless accommodation require a number of factors. Society are spending more conscious thinking about the historical issues of houses they dwell in due to their own safety. According to this, we now can connect to diversionary sources to find out the facts that we want to know such as asking other people and surfing social networking sites for further relevant data.
Samt Lee   
Jun 11, 2021
Writing Feedback / WRINGTING TAKS 2 - NATURAL TALENT OR BEING TAUGHT? [3]

I think that you should put your own opinion in this essay instead of talking in generall like this.
Additionally, in the first paragragh you should write more about your explaination before taking the example of Messi
The third paragragh is too short and not well-constructed, you should build it like the same way with the first one so that it can increase your cohesion.
Samt Lee   
Jun 11, 2021
Writing Feedback / IELTS Writing task 2 : Gyms and Sports clubs [3]

I think that you need to search for some model sentences in the opening as well as the way to construct it probably. Besides, writing both consideration like this sometimes will undermine your logical thinking instead of enhance its quality, you should focus on one point of view and that would bring much more efficiency.

The third paragragh is too short and it can't serve the full requirement of the test form. I suggest you one way to express it like (1) introduction of your opinition (2) explain some reasons to support your idea (3) give some evidence or example in your daily experience.
Samt Lee   
Jun 10, 2021
Writing Feedback / IELTS WRITING TASK 2_SELF-DRIVING SYSTEMS FOR VEHICLES [3]

Many automobile manufacturers created self-driving systems for their vehicles.

DISCUSS ADVANTAGES AND DISADVANTAGES OF RELEASING CARS WITH THESE SYSTEM.



As the advent of modern technology, there has been a common belief that automakers of smart cars may cause some adverse issues to the society and pose a threat to the old generation for not updating these new high-tech equipment. However, from a personal perspective, I do believe that auto system obviously brings more merits than the bad ones.

There are many compelling reasons why peoples consider automobile manufacturers as a complex system. On the individual level, the old seems it is hard for them to learn how to use these transportations and apparently transforming into this new trend must cost an arm and a leg on a wide scale. In addition, technological advances in self-driving automobiles can reduce the security of their owner's privacy. For instance, to keep track of users destinations, auto system can hold a host of informations which can be served as detrimental purposes if there are any hackers want to use it.

Nevertheless, automobile vehicles will help us reduce remarkably accidents and become one of the most convenient devices according to its self-driving program. The system based on algorithms designed to overcome human errors by working orderly. In fact, a recent survey has shown that about 60 percent of automobile accidents can be prevented by using self-driving systems. This is because they can monitor the paths more carefully, keep a safe distance from other vehicles. Extrinsically, they do not depend on personal emotions and work efficiently without human's cognitive. This can lead to a decrease in human error and accident rate so everyone can drive safely and minimize negative consequences.

To sum up, although community still has some controversial prejudices about applying self-driving system for their transportations, it is evident that using this process will properly increase the life standard of citizens and create a number of advantages.
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