Writing Feedback / Tiltle: What are the positive and negative efects of tourism on a place that you know well? [2]

One place that I love is Ho Chi Minh city. Tourism has brought so many benefits to the city but also it has many negatives. For positives, it helps the city grow economic value and reputation. For example, each year in Ho Chi Minh City welcomes from one million to three millions tourists visit to many famous places such as: The Independence Palace, Notre Dame Cathedral, Nha Rong Harbour.... Then, they enjoy some local cuisines of three major regions and join many activities with kind local people in here. In addition, tourists help local people benefit and busineses are make a lot of money by hotel revenue. So, this many things help Ho Chi Minh City grow a beautiful profit and economic evelopment. On the other hand, it also brings many negatives to the life of local people, animals, and enviroment. For example, in 2024, 60% visitors littered on the streets or many travel location. It increases pollution harming the health some people, animals live in there. In addition, the high room rates during peak season is also a negative side.

Writing Feedback / Students in Canada and the US by country of origin: Table graph [2]

Title: The tables show how many international students studies in Canada and the United States by country of origin.
The table compares how many traditional students from four different countries are China,USA, India, Canada, to Canada, and USA to study over a period of one year starting from 2002. Overall, every country saw an increase in the total international students over the given period. In addition, the highest figure was seen the number of thee countries students in Canada while the figure of three countries students in USA recorded the significant increase.
In 2002, Canada welcomed 5,400 Chinese students, which increased by 45% in 2003 and it was 39% higher than the number of students in USA from the starting year of 110,000 to 116,600 oven a period of one year. The figure of Indian learners was gradually in 2003, which rose by 2,835 in Canada, and the growth of Indian learners had 35% from last year, while the proportion of Indian learners dropped from 200,000 to 182,000, it means slightly by 9% of a year.
The other two countries witnessed the increase rate of students. Finally, the number of American students had five thousands people went to the schools of Canada country in 2002, while the number of the exchange students in the USA schools took up more than twenty-six thousands learners compared with the Canada schools. One year later, Canada country added four hundreds - fifty students, it went up by 9% of people, and this percentage more than the USA country was 3% of people. Therefore, the USA country grew by 33,170, which added 2,170 students compared to the last year. The total of two countries have a significant difference in the number of students. Although, the amount of American students was 581,600 of people higher than the Canadian students - it had 59,8700 learners in 2002, but the changed percentage of Canadian learners was 17% more than the USA schools by 15% of students, because the the number of Canadian schools was increased by 70,004 learners, but the USA schools was rose only 592,230 students in 2003.

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Writing Feedback / Reasons for migration to and from the UK - Writing task 1: Pie chart [2]

Title: The pie charts show the main reasons for migration to and from the UK in 2007.
The chart shows the main reasons for immigration and emigration in 2007. Overall, The percentage of individuals moving due to having definite jobs accounted for the highest in both immigration and emigration in 2007, while the others have lower proportion in comparison.

Starting at definite jobs in 2007, the number of emigration decreased compare with the number of immigration was 1%, which was minimal by 30%. Secondly, the percentage of immigrants account for 12%, which was 10% lower than of emigration. Regarding citizens moving for formal study, there was a large difference between immigration at 26% and emigration at 4%, which was 22% difference.

Following that, amongst the remaining 3 reasons, individuals migrating for no reason stated took up the cleanest difference that was only 6% for immigration, while was triple the percentage. Next, moving onto (chuyển tiếp) people moving for other purposes, the figures of immigrants consist of 11%, which was 3% fewer than/emigration, which had a slight difference for only 3% with emigration. ast, but not least, citizens immigragrating and emigrating by accompanying their family on relatives accupied 15% and 13%, espectively.

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Writing Feedback / Writing task 1 - tourists visiting four different attractions in Scotland [2]

TOPIC: THE GRAPH BELOW SHOWS THE PERCENTAGE OF TOURISTS TO SCOTLAND WHO VISITED DIFFERENT ATTRACTIONS BETWEEN 1980 AND 2010.

The line graph illustrates the percentage of tourists visiting four different attractions in Scotland-Aquarium, Castle, Zoo, and Festival-from 1980 to 2010.
Overall, the Festival remained the most popular attraction among tourists during this period, while the Aquarium was the least visited. The percentage of visitors to the Castle increased gradually, whereas the Zoo saw fluctuations but generally maintained a steady trend. The Aquarium experienced a significant decline, especially after 1985, and the Festival showed a gradual decrease in popularity over the years.
In detail, the number of tourists visiting the Aquarium peaked around 1985 but then sharply dropped, ending at the lowest point in 2010. Meanwhile, the Festival started at around 30% and declined slightly but remained quite stable. The Zoo's percentage fluctuated but generally stayed between 10% and 15%. Notably, the percentage of visitors to the Zoo increased after 2005, surpassing the Aquarium for the first time. Overall, these trends reflect changing preferences among tourists in Scotland over the three decades.

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Writing Feedback / Writing task 2: Extinct animals [2]

TOPIC: IT IS A NATURAL PROCESS FOR ANIMAL SPECIES TO BECOME EXTINCT (E.G. DINOSAUR, DODOS ...) THERE IS NO REASON WHY PEOPLE SHOULD TRY TO PREVENT THIS FROM HAPPENING. DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE?

Some people believe there are not enough reasons to protect animal species from extinction, thinking it happens naturally. However, I disagree with this view. This essay will discuss why it is important to save wildlife and what can happen if we fail to do so.
It is true that many ancient species, like dinosaurs, became extinct millions of years ago due to slow changes in climate and sea levels. However, today, the main cause of species loss is human activity. Industries hurt wildlife habitats and disturb the food chain, which leads to many animals disappearing. Also, the growing need for products like skins and horns has led to increased poaching of endangered species, including rhinoceroses. Therefore, it is our responsibility to take action to reduce these problems.
In addition, saving wild animals is important because they play essential roles in our ecosystem and affect our lives. All parts of nature are connected, so if one species goes extinct, it can negatively impact many other animals and plants. Wild animals also have cultural and aesthetic importance. They add to the biodiversity that makes our planet beautiful. For example, in several cultures, certain animals, like cows, are seen as sacred.
In conclusion, the loss of various animal species is not just a natural process; it is often caused by human actions. We have a duty to help protect wildlife because their extinction can significantly impact many key areas of our lives. Therefore, we should take steps to conserve animal species for future generations and the health of our environment.

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