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rosschang   
Jan 21, 2010
Writing Feedback / My Existentialism Beliefs-Free Will, karma, and reincarnation [3]

What do you think of my paper? Please be brutally honest...
The topic is just to "Write about your existentialistic beliefs".
My teacher didn't specify on the writing structure. Do you think i need a introductory paragraph or is it okay?

I believe in free will and that choices are always available on some levels. Sure, I am not free from certain events, natural disasters, or influences, but I am free to make rational choices based on those past experiences. It's almost as if life starts off on a straight road, empty of choices. As a child, I can't choose not to go to school, nor can I choose not to eat my vegetables. In the end, the law would just get me in trouble for the long absence from school, and my parents will somehow force me to eat the sodden broccoli after threats of taking my toys away. As I finally mature and experience life, the once straight road starts diverging into different paths. Should I skip school? Should I cheat on a test? Since my past experiences guides me to my decisions, I know that skipping math class will only land me in detention, and that cheating on a test will only get me expelled sooner or later. Knowing the consequences, these instincts lead us to our free decision. Even though we are not free from influences, we are free to make rational choices.

With freewill, we possess the freedom to act any way we prefer. But I believe in karma. I believe that a person committing cruel acts will always be punished, and that a person who contributes to the society positively will be rewarded. Once, I started noticing that one of my "friends" cheats on a lot of her tests and graded homework. Of course, I was bothered since we were in a lot of the same classes together. What if she does better than I do through her means of cheating? I wondered. I was absolutely paranoid; I wanted her to be caught. Only upon reflection did I finally realize that I had no reason to be angry, because one day, her actions are going to result in consequences. She cannot possibly cheat all her life. Finally when she is no longer able to cheat, she is going to suffer with the unfamiliar workload. Then will she finally learn that she did get caught. Although not by a teacher, but by her own adaptability.

I know this may sound stupid, but I believe that karma extends to the afterlife too. Growing up in a Buddhist family, I've always believed in reincarnation. My mom always told me how the religion believes in a reincarnation swim. Basically, right after death, one has to swim across an ocean to reach land; except that the ocean is compiled of all the cruel acts that one has performed in his or her lifetime. So, between a murderer and an altruistic person, the murderer will have a longer swim to struggle through. Once one reaches land, one will be reincarnated based on his or her actions in the previous life. So again, perhaps the murderer will be reborn as a rat, while the benefactor will be reborn as human again. Whoever did well in their previous life will be granted an easier next life.

Life is like the roads; there is a right path and a wrong path. Crosswalks are life's choices; the cul-de-sacs, the dead end from pitfalls of bad decisions. We have the freedom to choose which path we want to take, which street we want to cross. But when we stray too far from goodness, we will get lost hit a cul-de-sac. Then, we will be punished as we struggle to stay on the right path the next time around. When we finally find the right path and manage to stay on it, we will reach out destination. We will reach the goal we struggled hard for and finally achieve what we deserve.
rosschang   
Dec 31, 2009
Undergraduate / MIT - the world I come from: tattoos, Carpediem, and freedom! [9]

i really liked your figurative language
but just refering back to your prompt, i felt like what you were trying to say is all a little obscure.

Like you just said how Inverness is robotic, assimilated and flat, then in the next paragraph, you said how much you love Inverness because you can actually pause to smell the roses... this is a little contradicting

But overall, i like your creative approach to the prompt.
Keep up the work and good luck!

and if you have time, will you read mine?
rosschang   
Dec 31, 2009
Undergraduate / Carnegie Mellon Essay about Cognitive Science & Psychology - Last Day! [3]

In your third paragraph, are you talking about how you're interested in neuropsychology because it differs from all the other subjects you listed? I wasn't sure.

Overall i thought it was a very well-written essay--good job!
I tried looking for mistakes, but i couldn't really find any except for the third paragraph i mentioned above.
I liked all your quotations, and the ending was very sweet.
I see what you mean by talking about an extracurricular! Your example really worked to your advantage

Good luck!
rosschang   
Dec 31, 2009
Student Talk / Application Question January [127]

I'm pretty sure they'll accept your dec ACT.
I just got mine back a day ago... there shouldn't be any reason why they'll accept mine but not yours since they were taken on the same date
rosschang   
Dec 30, 2009
Undergraduate / My Syracuse CA supplement "why + experience + realworld apply" [3]

Just a question, why do you have "Carnegie Science Center" in your last line? I wasn't sure if you intended to put it there, or if you forgot to change it from your CMU app.

I like your overall answers-- except for you last one.
See, the colleges are looking to see your specific interests of your plans in SU. They're not looking for your interpretation of their mission. They already know what their mission is... so i suggest you delete "Syracuse University is a place for a person to flourish, to learn, to experience new things, I think this is what the Scholarship in Action is about. Syracuse's curriculum is an innovative way of teaching, allowing you to apply everything you learn to the real world. So that one can learn from experience and in school, and broad their knowledge. "

-Try researching more on the school to write about how the school is right for YOU. Cause right now, the last answer is a little impersonal-- any other student could've written it.

Otherwise, i really liked the rest of your answers... especially your second one. Your personality shines through, and i'm sure admission officers will see it too.

Best of luck =)
rosschang   
Dec 29, 2009
Undergraduate / Crockett to INTERPOL - NYU Prompt 3 [7]

i like it! you're right, it's good to make the storyline more about you.

but i suggest you change your last line "and how he virtually ended human trafficking and terrorism on Earth." to make it parallel with the phrases you had before it "his...his..."

i would help you with your title... but i'm terrible with those!

I hope i helped !
rosschang   
Dec 29, 2009
Undergraduate / NYU-2050 MOVIE (newspaper incident) [3]

What do you think of my supplement?
Any critiques will be soo helpful =)
Like, is it a good plot? What would a good title be?

I promise i'll return the favor if you help me!

In the year 2050, a movie is being made of your life. Please tell us the name of your movie and briefly summarize the story line.

Living a perfect life as HSBC's financial manager, Ross never had anything to worry about. But one morning, a newspaper headline brought him the distress he hadn't felt in years-Gunmen Taken Students Hostage for Money in Indian Volunteer School. He panicked as his eyes widened at the photo adjacent to the headlines. Why, it was the same school where he has taught 40 years ago! Ross hurries and flies to India to save the children in the school. But will he reach them in time?
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