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milano3215   
Dec 31, 2009
Undergraduate / "I am a very messy person" - Would you want me as your roommate? [5]

Thanks for anyone who's willing to take a look at this. Please be brutally honest, would I be someone who you'd live with?

I would want my roommate to know that I am a very messy person. A common sight to see as you walk into our dorm would be desks stacked high with textbooks, notebooks, paper and brochures of where to go for a bite to eat. The floor would be decorated with every writing utensil imaginable with sports supplies such as a soccer ball or a tennis racket propped against the walls. If there's a window with a wide sill, my sketch pad would lie propped against the glass with my trusty drawing pencils. The bed is my ultimate sanctuary so it would be the one thing that I would try to keep decently clean. Otherwise, one half of my bed would covered with unfinished homework or classwork and heaps of clothing.

However, I don't want to scare my roommate away. First and foremost, I can guarantee that no foul smell shall permeate from our room. I am not a pig and that food is to be respected at all times. One should never leave such a precious item simply lying around half-eaten. I will take great care in never letting my room look exactly like it just endured a hurricane but I do ask for a little acceptance. I can never find where anything is if I try to be organized...

Besides that, I am probably the cookiest person my roommate will meet, complete with a history of hilarious mishaps that always tend to make me the butt of the joke. I am clumsy but fiercely competitive at anything I do and I am not afraid to voice my opinion and fight for my beliefs. I will have a shoulder for them to lean on should they ever need it and will try to be an asset rather than a burden. If there is ever trouble, I would like to be someone who can be counted on.

Lastly, I don't watch much TV and love naps. I don't have a preference for night or day so I can adjust to their daily schedule.
milano3215   
Dec 31, 2009
Undergraduate / NYU Supplement Shorts Answers- Summer Vacation, Famous New Yorker, Movie [5]

pass

I think you meant past and they want you to give a name to your movie

From the years of playing doctor with my little brother, watching ER and live surgeries on TLC, and winning multiple science fair awards.

This is an incomplete sentence. try revising.

Overall, I like what you've written. You actually wrote about stuff that you would do with your New Yorker and incorporated what you admired about them as well. Your movie does need a title and you might want to re-check your reasons for attending NYU for grammar mistakes. Otherwise it's all good! Could you glance over my commonapp essay? It's oober long and Im trying to shorten it. thanks
milano3215   
Dec 31, 2009
Student Talk / Application Question January [127]

hahaha I would like to know too please if anyone knows. I would hope its Jan. 1st 11:59pm tho... Regardless, I advise you to send it in asap b/c commonapp won't even let you log in when everyone is logged on all at the same time. I've had too many scholarships that I couldn't applied to b/c the server crashed before I could submit my essays.
milano3215   
Dec 31, 2009
Undergraduate / All NYU Personal Statement Prompts - "Movie, NYer, Poem, Summer and Major" [5]

Your summer story is great because it doesn't sound like you were making a laundery list and actually goes into detail, compared with the short amount of space you have to write.

I've been looking around at other people's New Yorkers and Allen G has been popping up as a regular. I honestly don't know who he is but if you do want to make it more personal, please give more info on what you two would do vs how great he is.

I'm not good at poems but from what I take it, it seems insightful and it shows some of your own personality.

I really like the movie and how you incorporated the title of the movie into your summary. I didn't think of that. It's interesting and draws attention.

Your reason for going also reads well.

I'm applying to NYU too so if you can, can you take a look at my commonapp essay? I've posted an updated version called playdough and that is the one that I'm currently roughdrafting. thanks
milano3215   
Dec 31, 2009
Undergraduate / Death by Play-Dough + Acceptance Through Dance - Common App [7]

thanks for the help and I'm trying to work on it right now. Starting with a quote sounds like a good idea as long as your essay remains consistent with the issue you are trying to present. Often times people begin with a brilliant quote and then their essay turns out to have nothing to do with it. Hope it helps :)
milano3215   
Dec 31, 2009
Undergraduate / Stacy London, NYU Supplement - Famous New Yorker. [5]

well first off, it needs to be more about how you two spend the day together rather than giving background info on her. It's good she inspires you so use that inspiration to take you down to one of her boutiques or stores to give yourself a makeover or have fun giving her one. Be creative!

Could you take a look at my commonapp essay? it's kinda long but theres two that I need to decide between. any critism will be appreciated thanks!
milano3215   
Dec 31, 2009
Undergraduate / Death by Play-Dough + Acceptance Through Dance - Common App [7]

Hey! I wrote two different versions so be as critical and brutal as you can. Thanks!!!

Prompt: Topic of your choice.

Death by Play-Dough

It only takes a second to change one's life forever. Well, how about two hours?
About three years ago, my cousins and I went swimming at a public pool. It was one of those nice scorching hot summer days where running around bare foot would provide for future giant, painful blisters. The pool was invitingly warm however, before jumping in myself, I noticed that my younger cousins had all stuffed play-dough in their ears to prevent any water from leaking inside. I always had a wonderful time in the shower trying to get the feeling of being underwater out of my ears and thus, I followed suit. For some reason though, I would have to repeatedly push the play dough more firmly into my ears before it would stick and actually serve its purpose. It got to the point where I forgot about the problem altogether. When we had all showered and cleaned up, I realized my hearing was still muffled. I had thought there was only water in my ears so when I got home to take out the water, it was a surprise when a wet blob of red play dough came out instead. I almost cried out of embarrassment and horror. For the next fifteen minutes, I sat with a bobby pin trying to pry out every little piece stuck in my ears. Eventually, it got to the point where I couldn't reach that far into my ear canal. I gave up and lived with the possibility of a loss of hearing forever, for I did not tell my parents.

Last month, while volunteering at Kaiser Permanente, one of the radiology techs, William, was discussing with me that he was unsure about a question on something called cholesteatoma during his test for his certification in radiology. When we researched on it, we found that extraneous amounts of oils and dead skin cells can become a cyst, which is a result of an infection. That brought me back to that playful summer when I had inadvertently put play dough in my ear and was a little frightened by the thought of an infection in my ear. I asked William to look up whether that infection, if left untreated over a period of time, could turn into something greater. What we found was a possibility of having ear cancer. One in my position may have been horrified at the possibility of having a foreign object rotting in their ear, slowly mutating into cancerous cells. My reaction was a simple smile. I had lived my life and even if my days were numbered, I would still have college to look forward to as I study medicine or possibly international relations from a political and economic point of view. Although, there was still the matter of telling my parents.

It turned out that I was taken to a specialist to be given an accurate diagnosis. I was ready for the news and my mother was beside me praying for my safety. I told her not to worry and joked with her that at least now she would not have to put up with anymore last minute tales of risk-related behavior, which I had a tendency for. Presently, she did not find my humorous mood at all fitting but in truth, I was a little nervous myself. The doctor came in to look at my ears and give the verdict as I retold my story. To both my mother's and my own surprise, he found nothing. I was shocked. I had almost expected to literally be given a death sentence. When I finally awoke to the reality that I may still be able to live a promised life like that of every other "normal" student, I let out a sigh of relief. That is when I truly understood how close I came to losing everything due to something as trivial as mishandling play dough.

It was a moment of self-awareness; that I had a purpose to fulfill in this lifetime, and that was to stay steadfast in my goals. I had initially made up my mind about not straying from my resolve to succeed in life despite any hardships that may have befallen me, however, unconsciously I thought of myself as something inferior because I believed that I had a physical defect. It's difficult and odd to say but I always felt that I was not going to do well because I couldn't hear as well as I potentially could ever since that reckless incident three years ago. I always sort of pitied myself in that sense whenever I failed and some of that self-pity tied into my failures. Should I fail, I would not blame myself but rather, see it as inevitable because surely, it wasn't my fault I failed that test because I didn't study for that exam. It wasn't my fault that I had to stop in a race because I hadn't stretched beforehand. It wasn't my fault if I had ear cancer because I waited three years to tell my parents. It was inevitable and therefore, I could not do my best because it was not my fault. It took almost a near death experience to realize how childish and immature I was being. I now appreciate every opportunity I have to put my best foot forward and see the outcome as a justified result of my actions. My dream of someday becoming a traveling doctor and a part of the humanitarian organization Doctors Without Borders to help cure the poverty-stricken will be the epitome of my efforts to succeed in college.

Prompt: A range of academic interests, personal perspectives, and life experiences adds much to the educational mix. Given your personal background, describe an experience that illustrates what you would bring to the diversity in a college community, or an encounter that demonstrated the importance of diversity to you.

Acceptance Through Dance

I have always heard that heterogeneity in any given population is destined for disaster. With such a diverse group of people come issues such as race, ethnicity and social status that tend to further divide society. In other words, being different means that one is susceptible to prejudice and that separates them from the already "diverse" crowd versus a population of people who is generally the same, considering their backgrounds. However, that very uniqueness is what brings people together.

My freshman year was when I was first exposed to the annual Multi-Cultural Assembly that our high school holds. The coordinator, my AVID teacher, was in charge of finding student judges for the afterschool auditions held to determine which of the numerous groups of kids trying out will have a spot in the show. She chose me to be one of the judges during the auditions and I was honored for the part. On the first day, I was surprised by the enthusiasm of the colorful groups performing their cultural dances. Everyone was laughing and having fun backstage getting ready to perform and cheered when it was their friends' turn to dance. It was a very light and fun environment to be in. It is really important to me to point out this fact; that the kids were getting along well despite their differences in culture or what they were representing. Our school does not always carry the best reputation in the county however; it's because of these events that bring people together that promote the whole idea of unity amongst society, regardless of any differences that may exist.

This initial experience with the Multi-Cultural Assembly inspired me to gather my own friends to represent the Indian/Fijian group because until then, the school did not have many Asian Indians or Fijian Indians attending Pittsburg High. I decided to take responsibility and show the school the Bollywood style of dance. This is when I experienced the joy of being able to express myself to a large number of people all at one time. It is similar to the motivation that one feels when he/she goes onto "So You Think You Can Dance" or "America's Best Dance Crew" to prove their skills and be appreciated by the general public for it. For myself and all the kids who perform, our motivation is to show the school and community our culture. The dancers take the diversity of Pittsburg High School and throw it back to the audience of parents, students and teachers alike like cold water, waking up everyone's senses to the fact that we can get along in such a diverse community. It's a heartwarming scene at the end of the performance when Pittsburg's future generation of successful stories get onstage and wave the American flag in the name of liberty. The audience cheers and claps for the great display of diversity and comradeship; it feels as if the they truly learned a lesson in appreciating their children and the symbolism they created.

In the end, the multi-cultural is like a potluck, where everyone brings their own dish to the table to share with one another in the spirit of enjoying a meal together. In the same way, diversity allows for a community to have people of various backgrounds to come together to share in their differences and better understand one another by appreciating those differences in morals and beliefs.
milano3215   
Dec 31, 2009
Undergraduate / Short poem + year 2050 move of my life - NYU SUPPLEMENT [5]

Hi, whoever's as crazy enough as I am to be up this late for an essay, please give me any cricism or advice that you can. Please and thank you!!!

If you had the opportunity to spend one day in New York City with a famous New Yorker, who would it be and what would you do? (Your New Yorker can be anyone -past or present, fictional or nonfictional - who is commonly associated with New York City; they do not necessarily have to have been born and raised in New York.)

I would love to accompany Gaia, from the series Fearless, on one of her nightly adventures in Central Park to find and punish those who dare try and take advantage of innocent victims. Although she normally works alone, I wouldn't mind receiving a few insults in exchange for helping fight crime. Sometimes the police doesn't get there in time and so, it is a civilian's obligation to step in and put down insurrections. Afterwards, we would find the neareest coffee shop for a box of donuts.

Write a haiku, limerick, or short (eight lines or less) poem that best represents you.

I may be fickle,
I may be loud,
I may be very fond of clouds.
I may love milano cookies,
I may love beating up my brother,
I may love running with many runners.
I may not, however, have permission to drive.

In the year 2050, a movie is being made of your life. Please tell us the name of your movie and briefly summarize the story line.

As a female from a traditional Indian family, Sheetal is expected to have an arranged marriage. Before that happens, she escapes her home in California with the help of NYU to New York City, where she indulges in her newfound freedom. There she follows her dreams of someday becoming a traveling doctor, saving the poverty stricken worldwide. With her dream fulfilled, Sheetal returns home for the first time in years. But her family disowns their dishonorable daughter. Crushed, she commits suicide.
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