Writing Feedback / Mistakes in the tenses, could you check these sentences and their verbs? [3]

There might be some mistakes in the tenses I used. I highlighted the places where might be some errors.
''It was Saturday afternoon at about three o'clock when we arrived at the festival and hundreds of people had already got there. I spent the first couple of hours just looking at all the different styles of clothes that people were wearing and the amazing hairstyles they had.

At about seven o'clock, we joined a huge crowd of people at the main stage after one or the most popular bands had started to play. After about half an hour, I realized I wanted to go to the toilet so I left my boyfriend enjoying the the music. It took about ten minutes to walk to the toilets and there was a big queue when I got there. After about three quarters of an hour, I made my way back to the concert.

There was an even bigger crowd of people by them, so I just looked for a tall guy with dark hair, jeans, and a black leather jacket which was what my boyfriend wore. I spotted a guy who looked like this, pushed my way through the crowd and stood in front of him. After the band hadfinished, I turned round, looked at the guy properly and realized it was not my boyfriend! I had been standing with a complete stranger for over an hour! I went very red, mumbled and apology and then saw my boyfriend who had been looking for me ages! 'Where did you disappear to?' he asked. He never believed my story.

Student Talk / Hi everyone! Welcome at EssayForum thread. [414]

Hi!
My name's Tanya. I'm from Ukraine. I joined EF because I want to improve my English.

Write me about everything you want. I just want to make new friends!

Letters / Informal letter to the embassy in London to explain what happened [2]

You are studying at a university in the north of England. Your passport has been stolen.
Wright to your embassy in London, giving details of who you are, what happened and asking what you should do to get a new passport.

Dear sir or Madam,

I am writing to you hoping that you could do me a favour. Recently something really embarrassing has happened to me, so I have a problem which I think could be solve easily, but, unfortunately, I cannot make up my mind what to do.

I am a student at the university and at thee end of a week I feel so tired. That is why I decided to go to a sale to relax. I thought it would be so wonderful, but I was wrong. Usually my friends give me a lift to places I want, but that day they could not. I had to use public transport. When I caught a bus, I realized that my purse had just been stolen. There were my passport and money. The first thing I did I went to the police and filled in a form. I am giving you some details, just in case. The number of the passport is A4847009X. It was issued on 28.02.1992 and the expiry date is 27.02.2002. I lost it on 9 October at about 10.20 am. The police said that I might have avoided this if I was not talking on my mobile phone. I feel upset and I do not know what to do. I cannot wait until my passport is found. It could take ages. I wonder if you could give me some information about what I should do to get a new one.

I am looking forward to hearing from you.

Your faithfully,

Tanya Dmytrenko

Writing Feedback / ILETS: Description of a camera [3]

Use the diagram of a camera below to write a description of its component parts and how it works. I was advised to incorporate some sentences. So here is my corrected writing.

A camera is a device which fixes picture of an object on a light-sensitive film.

The case of the camera is divided into two main parts. The first part, which is cylindrical, contains focusing lens and variable aperture that is used for regulation the size of the hole in it. Another part which is rectangular has two cylinders at the sides. One of them is empty, and another has a reel inside. A shutter located in front of this case.The camera is put into operation by a button on it. These two parts are attached to each other and the camera is T-shaped.

By turning the variable aperture, we can adjust the size of the hole which determines the width of a path of light rays from a subject. The size of the hole depends on how bright the lighting is.

The light rays from a subject end up through the focusing lens. Then they go through the hole in variable aperture and a crack which appears when the shutter opens. Finally, the light rays reach the film.

In conclusion, the camera is T-shaped, composed of 2 metal or plastic cases device intended for fixing pictures on the light-sensitive film.

Letters / ILETS: informal letter to the London Information Centre. [3]

Next month you are coming to Britain to study at a university in Scotland. You have two-day stopover in London. You need accommodation for one night and you would like to use this time to see a lot of London. Wright a letter to the London Travel Information Centre.

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to you to get some information about London. Recently I have been told that I entered the university in Scotland. That is why I have to be there in a month. I have already got a ticket and I will have two-days stopover in London. I feel so excited about that. I have been given a chance to visit such a marvelous city and I am going to use it.

However, my time in London cannot be very pleasant not having accommodation. I need a room for a night, but it has to be something cheap as my finance is not very huge. Where should I stay bearing in mind my budget.

I have read a lot about places of interests in London and I am looking forward to see them. I would like to visit a much attractions as many as possible. Could give an advice what places I should go to first?

I will need to use some transport. I might go by bus around the city, but I am not sure if I can afford it. What means of transport do you think I should use.

I am looking forward to getting necessary intelligences and coming to London.

Yours faithfully,
Tetanya Dmytrenko

Writing Feedback / ILETS: The affects of smoking upon health and the benefits gained from stopping [3]

Smoking is a topical problem of modern society. Tons of cigarettes are consumed by people of different ages, despite that fact that doctors have been warning about pernicious influence of this habit for a long time.

Nicotine is the main component of tobacco. Settling in people's lungs, it troubles the breath and that affects a work of heart. All of this causes such diseases as bronchitis, lung and throat cancer and also heart illnesses. Millions of men and women have already died because of their habitude. However,

the most interesting thing is that 99% of smokers had been infirmed about the shortcomings before they first tried it.

Smoking sways on the organisms of female part of population especially strongly. Women who have been smoking for a long time have risks of premature birth of a child and even more fatal consequence - a birth of a miscarriage. Do you often stand next to your smoking friend, charting cheerfully and rejoining in your soul that you have a healthy lifestyle? however, in truth, you are inflicted as much impairment as the smoker?

Government of the more or less developed countries tries to reduce a number of smokers by conducting a policy against smoking. So that does not seem to be strange that prices on cigarettes increase every single day.

In conclusion, smoking is baneful and financially unprofitable dependence on tobacco losing which we diminish the probability of falling ill with throat and lung cancer and heart diseases.