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Posts by sandeepkale
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sandeepkale   
Sep 9, 2010
Writing Feedback / TOEFL- a part time job beneficial to students? [6]

You should write general views about the topic rather than your own experiences. Sentences should be properly enclosed with appropriate meanings.

Over all, you may improve very quickly if u follow the general views about the given topics/ thanks
sandeepkale   
Sep 8, 2010
Writing Feedback / some people say TV has left family members unable to communicate with one another. [3]

Television media has great passive impact on today's human life that has destroyed the communication among family members and their views have been converted into virtual thoughts rather than oral communication. Family women can not help themselves watching serials like other member's interested in their favorite channels.

Nowadays, Most families sit in front of Television during super, even they get time to sit together, but they do not talk with each other because they are enjoying the stories of their serials or other programs. It is seen that women are not serious about their children study or home-work, on the contrary, they seem interested in serial's next episode. Father looks more serious about news and new issues in his country. Furthermore, children prefer to watch cartoon networks and live in their own world. Today, we believe on TV news more than our better half's. Therefore, verbal communication has been effected by watching more Television.

As everything has its own pros and cons, television has also a cause of less communication among family members, but we can not say it is totally responsible. While, a family sit together in front of television in the evening, they keep the ball rolling about their domestic affairs, on the other words, such condition provides them adequate time to share their all matter with one other. Furthermore, television gives them opportunities to sit together is such hectic life, otherwise, they may be busy in their hectic schedule like studying or resting after day long working in their offices.

Hence, the conclusion can be drawn from above argument is that television is responsible for decreasing communication among families, however, it should not be said that it has totally vanished the communication. It delivers very important information to us that may be more important than or household talk, but one should try to communication orally whenever they gets time.
sandeepkale   
Sep 7, 2010
Writing Feedback / Climate changes is a threat to our planet, but there is not enough political pressure [2]

Today has a lot of evidences that our environmental temperature is getting hotter day by day with our individual and collective activities. Global warming is a serious problem for coming generation. Our living standard, industrial development, rapidly increasing automobiles, deforesting, unlimited usages of petroleum and explosion of population all are its reason.

There are a number of reasons behind climate changing, first, over exploitation of natural resources like petroleum, that creates carbon monoxide and carbon dioxide after burning which observe heat and that is why temperature is getting up every year. Secondly, to implement human's infrastructures woods and forests has been continuously cutting down since immemorial time. Furthermore, industries wastage of acids and chemicals is very harmful for water creatures as well as human and environment. In addition, large number of vehicles every year is on the roads is just not more bigger threat to our climate. However, environment condition is just not worse as it may be in future. Therefore solution for such dilemma must be obliged.

However, to control changing climate Government can play most important role. There should be environment department is each country to understand the problems that up set the apple cart of balance climate conditions. Government should provide more funds to plant new trees that maintain the balance of our nature. Most biggest problem is air pollution, that, should be over come by applying new roles and methods. Government ought to deploy campaign to motivate riding of bicycle and pedestrian walking on foot.

Hence, a conclusion can be drawn from from above main problems that must be prohibited, to control over changing climate. Participation of government would be more appreciative if it bans on over use of natural resources and try to find new subordinate usage of energy. It should start campaign to guide people against environmental crisis and inspire people to grow plants and more greenery to maintain balance between oxygen and carbon dioxide.
sandeepkale   
Aug 30, 2010
Writing Feedback / 'Change will change a person' - avoiding change essay [2]

Hello I am going to take the test of IELTS. Please check this

In today's cutting edge era, all things have developed with technical and scientific breakthroughs more rapidly than our expectations. This has become possible because of adapting new ideas and innovations. Some people do not like changing in their life and they insist on same things and same jobs.

However, In last decade, most of things have absolutely changed due to technical and scientific breakthroughs. People think that, these changing makes them inconvenient and unpleasant in the life. Therefore, they resist on their views and always try to avoid new things in their job. There are a number of ways behind this, first, such people's feelings are orthodox. Second, those are lazy and inefficient always boast against new adoptions and changes. Third, they want to show that their past jobs were more efficient and appropriate for respect. In this way, they try to accomplish respect more than their expectation to keep themselves happy. Lets we have an example of Indian farmer, they ponder higher educated children would not respect their thoughts and feelings, as a result of that, they do not like their children to achieve high degrees of education.

This is true " if a person does not change him according to change, then change will change hm". In an organization, old employees do not like, their old system should be updated with advanced computer system because they can not see that their respected job would be grabbed by new efficient ones. But this change could solve a lot of problem related to time consumption. Furthermore, changes are adopted and accepted by philanthropists whose intention is to make their countries well developed and entire world prosperous. Today all type of work can be executed with the help of advanced devices and techniques with full skillfulness and expertness within no time that is why it is difficult to be agreed with this statement.

Hence, a conclusion can be drawn from above arguments, that adopting new changes, we can see our world more prosperous and advanced, providing a new jobs opportunities with new skills and new techniques, on the other hand, such achievements will help people with new comforts, luxurious things and excised facilities all over their life.
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