Undergraduate / *Strength is Success - Texas Essay Prompt C* [3]

Prompt: There may be personal information that you want considered as part of your admissions application. Write an essay describing that information. You might include exceptional hardships, challenges, or opportunities that have shaped or impacted your abilities or academic credentials, personal responsibilities, exceptional achievements or talents, educational goals or which you might contribute to an institution committed to creating a diverse learning environment.

It is natural to associate oneself with those who have th e largest amount of similar factors. I have the ability to withhold my first impression judgment on people. When I first meet someone and discern whether I like them or not I take various characteristics of their personality and overall effect on me. The trait I search for often is their amount of moral, physical, and intellectual strength. Their moral strength is determined by how they convey their thoughts and the topic of the conversation. Physical strength, I personally believe, cannot characterize someone accurately, rather it is the way they use their physical strength to attract people to them that I observe. Lastly, their intellectual strength is one of the most important traits of all. The ability to carry on a conversation and keep a good mood is a skill that grows with intelligence. As my mom used to say "Dime con quién andas y te diré quién eres" which means "tell me who your friends are and I will tell you who you are."

Moral strength can be determined in seconds after starting a conversation with an individual. Whether they talk about the news or the weather their tone of voice will convey their true feelings. I believe that to truly have a good amount of moral strength one must speak and act accordingly. For example, speaking in a warm tone and helping others whenever possible is a good display of moral strength. I can recognize those with a substantial amount of moral strength for they take situations differently. When asked for help they are able to aid others and, in doing so, support their strength. That is how one may develop good moral strength. I aid people and strengthen myself in the process. Never is choosing the just and responsible action detrimental. There is always enough time in my life to lend my strength.

When determining a person from afar one might take the other's actions into consideration. If one has the strength then they are obligated to help the weak. That, I believe, is the responsibility of those who have strength. Physical strength can create quite an illusion of true strength. Though, it is the way that strength used which defines it as true or not. My physical strength is often dedicated to those in need. If someone was carrying a heavy burden I would offer my support. Crude strength often beat true strength though in the end Vires holds steadfast.

Intellectual strength is shown in one's ability to speak and create feeling. To keep another's interest is a skill learned by observing how one interacts and adapting so as not to create any unpleasant feelings or awkwardness. I often refrain from making a sound judgment on another till after they have had a chance to express their thoughts. One can easily determine another's intellectual strength by listening and observing.

One can be determined by what he/she does and his/her reason for doing so. I have the ability to decide whether or not to associate myself with those who also share my strength. This is something I want as part of my application process. All my actions, thoughts, and skills are reflected in who I befriend and who I am.

Yes, I basically took my FSU essay and edited out the Vires. But, I still need to know how this flows and if there are any mistakes and if I can improve my essay in any way.

Thx ahead of time~ :D

Undergraduate / Role-playing games + Manga: (1)My personality, (2)My Experience = UI@UC Essays [4]

- Essay 1: In an essay of 300 words or less, please discuss your academic interests and/or professional goals.

When my family and I moved from Florida we arrived just in time to finish my eighth grade year at the nearby middle school and start high school after the summer. During my freshman year of high school I retained most of my timidity and I was prone to unwarranted crying when confused. When I look back on how my childhood was there is one word that comes to mind, confusion. I was a very confused person and till I reached high school I don't believe I had a pronounced personality. It was through my experiences in high school and the encouragement of my parents that I am who I am today.

My parents instilled in me proper values but little did I know about implementing them to my advantage in society. As I became more and more involved at school I began meeting various types of people and becoming more aware and less confused about my surroundings. The people who I familiarize and enjoy the most are either the "gamers" or the "misfits," as people would call them. While I don't particularly fall in that clique by appearance I am categorized by my personality into the gamer or nerd clique. I am not even a casual user I just know the stats of the games and speak with my friends about them. Though the rare occasions when I do play it is most often a role-playing game (RPG).

In these games I am required to strategize to win against my enemy. Often times I win due to my developed skills. I have developed these skills by combining the common sense my parents have taught me with other factors; this, in turn, creates a perfect strategy able to be used in real life and the virtual world.

My interest in computers has been boosted by these role-playing games, since most of the games were on PC. I decided that I enjoy working with computers the most when I was taking my technology related elective courses. No matter the trial I plan to work with computers and technology. For, when asked, people respond to inquiries of their job choices by saying that they initially or currently enjoy their work. That is what I hope to have someday an enjoyable life.

379/300 word count---I will shorten it later

- Essay 2: In an essay of 300 words or less, choose one extracurricular activity, work experience, or community service project from the list you provided on the application and explain why you initially chose it, why you continued with it, and how you benefited from it.

While reading Japanese comics (manga) online I noticed how there were online groups that were dedicated to scanning and translating the comics. I was amazed by the fruit of the team's efforts and resolved to join one myself. Determined, I searched for the perfect group with acceptable ethics and time management. I eventually found Easy Going Scans. This scan-translation (scanlation) group was dedicated to the creation of quality manga and reasonable releases. I quickly requested entry into the team to work as a quality checker or proofreader.

Eventually, I was assigned the role of one of the many proofreader/quality checkers. I now work as a proficient team member and I attempt to finish a project each day when my boss is available to delegate more assignments. Otherwise it is a very tranquil job which allows me to efficiently time manage, in preparation for college, with school and my other extracurricular activities. If there is one thing my parents amplify about college it is that time management is everything. I have improved my time management skills by notifying my teammates of my work, so as to gain obligation for each assignment. This, as I have noticed, increases my ability to manage time efficiently. I have continued working with this team to gain experience in collaboration as well as time management.

Throughout my high school years I have come to realize the importance of experience. With each experience comes a new understanding and with each understanding a newfound determination. My experience with scan-translation so far has given me the opportunity to enhance my skills. In college, I plan to work towards my future decision of major and become proficient in everything I take upon myself.

283/300 word count

I would like to know how these short responses flow, if there are any mistakes in the responses, if I seem to be a horrible writer (I am often told I am), if the sentences make sense...just about everything that comes to mind when reading it.

Undergraduate / 'who I befriend' - First Impressions - FSU Essay (Vires, Artes, Mores) [3]

The Latin words, "Vires, Artes, Mores" have been the guiding philosophy behind Florida State University. Vires signifies strength of all kinds - moral, physical, and intellectual; Artes alludes to the beauty of intellectual pursuits as exemplified in skill, craft, or art; and Mores refers to character, custom, or tradition. Describe how one or more of the values embodied in these concepts are reflected in your life.

When I first meet someone and discern whether I like them or not I take various characteristics of their personality and overall effect on me. The traits I search for often have similarities to the various strengths Vires signifies. Their moral strength is determined by how they convey their thoughts and the topic of the conversation. Personally, I believe that a person's physical strength can't characterize them, rather it is the way they use their physical strength to attract people to them that I observe. Lastly, their intellectual strength is one of the most important traits of all. The ability to carry on a conversation and keep a good mood is a skill that grows with intelligence. As my mom used to say "Dime con quiïn andas y te dirï quiïn eres" which means "tell me who your friends are and I will tell you who you are."

Moral strength can be determined in seconds after starting a conversation with an individual. Whether they talk about the news or the weather their tone of voice will convey their true feelings. I believe that to truly have a good amount of moral strength one must speak and act accordingly. For example, speaking in a warm tone and helping others whenever possible is a good display of moral strength. I can recognize and aid people and strengthen myself in the process. Never is choosing the just and responsible action detrimental. There is always enough time in my life to lend my strength.

When determining a person from afar one might take the other's actions into consideration. If one has the strength then they are obligated to help the weak. That, I believe, is the responsibility of those who have strength. Physical strength can create quite an illusion of true strength. Though it is the way that strength used which makes it signify Vires. My physical strength is often dedicated to those in need. If someone was to be carrying a heavy burden I would offer my support. Crude strength often beat true strength though in the end true strength, signified by Vires, holds steadfast.

Intellectual strength is shown in one's ability to speak and create feeling. To keep another's interest is a skill learned by observing how one interacts and adapting to it so as not to create any unpleasant feelings or awkwardness. Having the intellectual strength to collaborate well with all individuals is tremendous. I often refrain from making a sound judgment on another till after they have had a chance to express themselves.

One can be determined by what he/she does and his/her reason for doing so. Having the ability to decide whether or not to associate myself with those who also share my strength is Vires. All my actions, thoughts, and skills are reflected in who I befriend and myself personally. My moral, physical and intellectual strength is similar to those I befriend and exemplary of what is signified by Vires.