Student Talk / Can you teach me how to write and speak in English... [11]

Its not easy to start writing in a language in which you are not accustomed. It will take a little time and a little more effort. Follow these steps first to getting around the English writing skills.

1. Increase your vocabulary by reading english newspapers, watching english movies etc.
2. Find a good grammar book and work on the grammar rules before you can even start writing properly.

I can suggest you a good grammar book and one for vocabulary.
Vocabulary: NORMAN LEWIS -WORD POWER MADE EASY
Grammar: WREN AND MARTIN HIGH SCHOOL GRAMMAR

Good luck !

Student Talk / Can you teach me how to write and speak in English... [11]

It's good that u wish to learn. don't worry about failing as it will give u enough kickstart to proceed with more determination. I will help you willingly if you need any. Good luck

Writing Feedback / IELTS: Government should contol Violent Movies and TV programs? [3]

Very good essay buddy. Indeed it is almost error-free. except 2nd paragraph-1st line "UNEVENTFUL DAY". inaph
- You can also elaborate one more paragraph in this.
- In your introductory paragraph, you haven't written any theme sentence stating your opinion. You really need that .
- Moreover, in the second paragraph, you should be elaborating on your argument. You are telling advantages of violent movies while you are stating in intro that it needs to be controlled. So just write 2nd and 3rd paragraph elaborating how badly these violent movies can affect the society.

- in the fourth para, u can write the advantages but also state that the disadvantages outweigh the advantages.
-5th para should have the conclusion.

Good luck.

Writing Feedback / 'encourages to devoting'; Successful sports professionals can earn big money [5]


Rephrase the above sentence buddy.
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- The conclusion is very short, confusing. You need to write something effective in the final paragraph.

-Theme sentence -".... however, not only are the rich remunerations undoubtedly justified, but people in other professions also have their paths to successes (success ) with great incomes."

- Overall your essay is quite good and up to the standards required in IELTS tests. However, some refining is needed in the grammatical portion.

Good luck and cheers :D

Writing Feedback / IELTS GT 2: reason and solution of poverty [3]

Hi buddy,

A good structured overall essay. Maybe you could also write the following points to strongly depict the reasons of poverty:

- INFRASTRUCTURE -see, lack of infrastructure will eventually result in lesser opportunities to the degree-holders too. Hence, a proper infrastructure is needed.

-CORRUPTION- Do you know THIRD WORLD COUNTRIES- this name was coined during the cold-war era for most of the African and Asian countries, which remained non-aligned to any of the superpower blocks. However, in order to woo these countries (mostly comprising of developing or under-developed countries) the big countries started giving them billions of dollars aid. But many of these countries have still remained underdeveloped/developing only because of the wrong allocation of foreign aids, corrupt political leaders/dictators etc. Hence corruption has been a major cause of poverty in many places too.

I hope these points can help u.

Good luck and cheers.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Topic: advanced fertilisers and machine for farmers, good or bad? [4]

Hi buddy,
Your essay is very good and except a few grammatical mistakes as mentioned above by the Moderator, everything seems to be ok. However, just also add the theme sentence at the end of the introductory paragraph so as to highlight the argument you are going to support in the essay.

Hope it helps u..
Good luck and cheers!!!!

Writing Feedback / IELTS: There are many effective ways to motivate employees [4]

Hi buddy,

You have written a very good essay I feel. However, you can also write about the negative aspect of depending only on money as the sole motivational factor. Plus, self-recognition, allocation of right job to the right person , division of labour, etc.

However, overall the essay is written in a very good way. Maybe you can write an example too to clarify your points.

Good luck and cheers!!!!

Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 2 : increasing the number of sport facilities in order to improve public health [5]

Hey Dumi, I actually told him to use a 5 para approach. Discussing the counter-argument is to show what other side can say and then use the advantages of your opinion to show how the merits outweigh the demerits of your opinion !!! I actually used to follow this approach only. !!

I hope you can help out this guy in his next posts too :)

Ciao

Writing Feedback / 'the figure fluctuated between 1920 and 1940' - Birth Rates in China and the USA [3]

Hello, I hope you might find these points useful:
1. Fertility is not an appropriate term to use in such explanation. You should probably stick to terms like 'growth rate' , 'birth rate' etc.
2. This plot shows clear fluctuations between 1930-1950/55 period. You should emphasise more on this.
3. You can use your general knowledge about the population growth , especially in China, where one child policy was implemented.
4. If this essay is for IELTS/ TOEFL etc exams, you need to stick to the word limit and not exceed it. One of the purposes of these tests is to check how can you express your views in limited words and use them efficiently.

5. I think there is not a well-defined conclusion to this essay. It would be better if you merge the 2nd and 3rd para and write a conclusion at the end.

Good luck.