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What are the most important characteristics a public figure should possess? [2]
Hei Claudia! :D
I really liked the essay, there are however two things I'd change about it.
First of all, you are missing the conclusion at the end.
And second of all, I'd cut back on the quotes. They are pretty much all over the place and don't look so good in such a short essay. This is however just my opinion. :)
Good luck!
Napoleon Bonaparte once said
: "A leader is a dealer of hope
."make them become the inspiration of many others. -- just one full stop here.
The looming question would be: what are these traits? -- there's no space needed before the colon.
Firstly, a public figure must be passionate about what
onehe/she preach
es and s
ays .
Henry Miller once said
:_" What distinguishes the majority of men from the few is their ability to act according to their beliefs
."they are ... determined
inabout their cause.
One can only admir
e and respect
for such a person.
public figures who
hashave burning passion
isare often followed by many, ...
People continu
e to put their faith in them even though the path
where they
leadwalk is daunting and uncertain to the extremes.
" Live your beliefs and you can turn the world around
." I ndeed by being perseveran
t , change is bound to happen.
A s it has been said
: " A hero is no braver than an ordinary man, but he is brave for five minutes longer
."A public figure is actually equivalent to his followers
, mere humans. -- I personally don't like how you describe the human here, because by saying "mere human" you show actually no regard for the human, however your essay revolves around how imposing some individuals can be. I'd cut that last apposition.
Instead, by putting oneself in others' shoe
s , one can better understand
s the plight of others and offer
s assistance and aid.
For instance, Mother Teresa relinquished her status and wealth to sa
v e the poor and downtrodden people in the streets.