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Apr 12, 2008
Writing Feedback / Essay about my life and changes - can you help me? [5]
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"My life has gone through several changes since I became an adult."
"Ordinary boring jobs, nothing unusual; only the same habits."
"And suddenly I became a sailer/explorer, instead of an average American."
"The journey was also well prepared. The idea was to travel, and arrive at one of the uninhabited Fiji islands. "
"Some wind gusts; later I arrived at the island." - Hard to tell about the punctuation here, out of context.
"The plan was to make a little wooden house on the outskirts of the jungle, so I could keep an eye on the boat, not to mention it was much safer to settle on the outskirts instead of the jungle."
"Not a single cloud appeared, only clear, blue skies."
"Suddenly, as I stood up after drinking some water, something appeared among the trees,"
"Several hours had passed since I walked into the jungle. The weather changed, the temperature was a bit lower and it become darker. I gathered some leaves from the huge palm-trees, and made a bed in my wooden house."
Best of luck in your studies!
Thanks,
Sarah, EssayForum.com
Greetings!
We try to answer all posts within 24 hours, but cannot guarantee to have them by a certain time. Here are some editing tips:
"My life has gone through several changes since I became an adult."
"Ordinary boring jobs, nothing unusual; only the same habits."
"And suddenly I became a sailer/explorer, instead of an average American."
"The journey was also well prepared. The idea was to travel, and arrive at one of the uninhabited Fiji islands. "
"Some wind gusts; later I arrived at the island." - Hard to tell about the punctuation here, out of context.
"The plan was to make a little wooden house on the outskirts of the jungle, so I could keep an eye on the boat, not to mention it was much safer to settle on the outskirts instead of the jungle."
"Not a single cloud appeared, only clear, blue skies."
"Suddenly, as I stood up after drinking some water, something appeared among the trees,"
"Several hours had passed since I walked into the jungle. The weather changed, the temperature was a bit lower and it become darker. I gathered some leaves from the huge palm-trees, and made a bed in my wooden house."
Best of luck in your studies!
Thanks,
Sarah, EssayForum.com