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abedkh   
Aug 7, 2014
Writing Feedback / TOEFL - Finding a good job and increasing the knowledge are the main reasons for study [4]

There is no doubt that entering to the university and college is very important for many people. There are a lot of reasons that may motivate people to attend a college or university. Some people try to enter to the university to increase their knowledge and others hope to find a job after graduation from the university. In addition, some people attend the university and college to increase their social position.

First of all, people want to enter to the university to improve their knowledge. These people want to learn more about their favorite subject of the knowledge. For example, I have been always interested in learning Physics and I hope to progress in this major by entering to the PHD program.

Second of all, many people attend the college and university to find a job after graduation. Finding a job in our society is both very challenging and difficult. Now, having a credible degree from a university is a very important factor that can increase the chance of finding a good job. For example, I graduated from a highly-ranked university and so it is much easier for me to find a good job than a person without a degree from a college or university.

All in all, There are a lot of reasons for attending to the university and college, but both finding a good job and increasing the knowledge are the main reasons for this issue.
abedkh   
Apr 29, 2013
Writing Feedback / My Favorite Super hero is Ayatollah Khomeini [3]

There are a lot of people all around the world who I know them as superhero. But the person who is my favorite super hero is Ayatollah Khomeini, the leader of 1978 revolution in Iran. I love him Because of both his astonishing personality and his power to change destiny of his society.

I watched a interview by Khomeini that was from 40 years ago when he was coming back to Iran by flight. Those days the government had threatened Khomeini that if you come back to Iran we will destroy your plane. In this Situation, when interviewer asked about his feeling, he said "nothing". This show how calm actually he was.

Second of all, I love him because of his achievement in changing the destiny of his people. He was an powerful leader that all the Iranian people obeyed his orders. The 1978 revolution show that how an ordinary man could change the powerful government that had been in power for about 2500 years.
abedkh   
Apr 29, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS Exam writting : Child should spend more time in play or school project ? [7]

This is the first time iI am posting in this site and also this is the first paragraph writting practise for my IELTS Exam , Please help me to correct my errors .

Now a days , we have become more dependent in on modern technology . Different school project helps a children to enrich their knowledge . They learn how to take help of the technologies when they are in a problem while working with those school projects .
abedkh   
Apr 29, 2013
Writing Feedback / My grandma Phyllis is very special to me! [5]

We all have families. Some families are larger than others. My family on my dad's side is pretty small. I have three aunts and one uncle. My Grandma, Phyllis has many aspects in life that are very special to me that will be discovered in this essay. There are many wonderful memories of my grandma.

Ff rom the smell of the salty air to the extraordinary view of the Douglas firs, down the windy hill sat grandmas house.
abedkh   
Jan 15, 2012
Writing Feedback / Testing the drugs on the animals. (integrated writing task- TOEFL ibt) [2]

According to the passage, many of disease's treatment are result of experiment on animals and without experimenting on animal it wouldn't be possible to reach this point in treatment and curing of diseases. on the other hand lecture says that, testing the effect of drugs without testing on animals is possible and making the drugs that didn't test on animals in history of medical science have been proving this.

There are a lot of drugs such as penicillin which at first was tested on animals but who knows such discoveries wouldn't possible without experimenting on animals. There are a lot of drugs such as Aspirin which was discovered without testing on animals.

The passage says that some animals have same genes with humans and testing the drugs on animals would help to cure disease. On the other hand, there are some drugs which have different effects on different animals and human.

In conclusion, however testing the drugs on animals is resulted in curing and treatment of diseases in human but maybe this result would be possible without testing on animals.
abedkh   
Dec 3, 2011
Writing Feedback / Ordering a special electrode. [2]

Hi. thanks for your helpful recommendation. As I said, I should use intramuscular electrode for stimulating muscles in rat. I need a special electrode for implanting into the muscle with high stability. currently, I use a special stainless steel wire that it is purchased from A-M system Inc (catalog number: 792300) with 330 micrometer diameter. I need a electrode with 7 strands of such wires and with your electrode's configuration. The diameter of electrode shouldn't be more than 1 mm and the length of electrode should be considered.
abedkh   
Dec 2, 2011
Writing Feedback / What environment do you suggest for children to grow? Big City or Countryside? [3]

It is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big city. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to develop your essay.

Without a doubt, condition of life have a significant effect on everybody's life. One of the most important aspects of this condition is the place of living. By looking at the attitude of the persons who I've met, I have realized that the people who have lived in the countryside in their childhood have better lives than the people who have lived in a big city. In the following statements, I will describe some of the reasons that show why growing in the countryside is better.

Currently, living In a big city because of weather pollution is dangerous especially for children. they need need fresh air. By searching In hospitals we can find children who suffer from breath diseases.

Second of all, people in countryside are closer to each others. This issue have important impact on relationship of children in future. By comparing attitude of my friends, I've seen that communicating with my friends who have lived in countryside is easier. although this issue is not general, but these friends are kinder and I joy spending of my times with them.

finally, children in countryside eat more healthier food than children in a big city. currently, meals in big city has changed to fries and chunk foods and this issue has affected on their health.

In conclusion, living in the countryside have a advantages that have a significant impact on future of children. The children who have lived in countryside are healthier

and beside of this they are kinder and communicating with them is easier.
abedkh   
Dec 2, 2011
Writing Feedback / 'job-hunting' - University should offer students more preparation for the future [5]

By developing industries , work opportunity grows, while competition increases as well. It can be widely seen that large number of universities are introducing and holding jobs fairs to graduate to cushion the blow in job-hunting. Thus, the dean, parents, and college students start to concerns that whether preparation in university is going to be greatly supported and popularized. Some contends that if so, the effort and process in applying for a position will be significantly spared, as a result, the saved time and energy can be invested into other practical projects to boost efficiency.
abedkh   
Nov 22, 2011
Writing Feedback / Functional electrical stimulation (FES) - An abstract for a paper [3]

Nowadays, functional electrical stimulation (FES) is used as an effective method for restoration of the movement in the paraplegics. In the clinical applications of FES, the surface electrodes are chosen for stimulation of muscles. The major impediments of using surface electrodes are lack of the isolated contraction and activation of the deep muscles which limit the selective muscle activation. To deal with these problems, intramuscular electrodes have been proposed. One important challenge of FES using the intramuscular stimulation is control of movement. In this paper, an adaptive fuzzy-sliding mode control is proposed to control of rat knee-joint movement which is based on the synergic combination of an adaptive fuzzy sliding mode control with an adaptive neural control. The results of experiments on the rats show that the proposed control method provides accurate tracking control with fast convergence for different reference trajectories and it can generate control signals to compensate the muscle fatigue.
abedkh   
Nov 11, 2011
Writing Feedback / The role of parents is significant. They teach their children how to live and face problems. [4]

Parents are the best teachers.

Teachers, friends, and parents are important influences in any life. Each play major roles, but among them parents have the most strongest impact on their future.

While still maturing, a child can not face troubles independently without parents showing them how to conquer everyday problems. They support their children expecting nothing in return and that's makes them a special teachers.

I have learned how to forgive easily. I have learned there is nothing important than love. They have taught me all of these. I remember years back, I had a fight with my friend, and under duress from my father, I apologized. Such behaviours have influenced me today.

Parental communication is essential with growing children. Their children must be able to trust them , and this is not possible without a amicable relationship. Parents should be able to share their thoughts with their children and allow them to take part in family troubles. I share my problems with my parents and their experience and good judgement helps me resolve them in the best way.

Furthermore, one of the most significant phases is during adolescence. In this period of life the most support is needed.

Ultimately, in life people influence change in lifestyle, but among them parents play the imperative role. Through motivation and advice, parents shape their children to become model adults; therefore, parents are the best teachers.
abedkh   
Nov 10, 2011
Writing Feedback / The role of parents is significant. They teach their children how to live and face problems. [4]

Many people such as teachers, friends and parents in life of any person have an important influence. They play an important role in everybody's life, but among them parents have the most important effect on their future.

parents show their children how to live. In childhood, children can not face troubles and parents show them how to conquer problems. Parents keep away them from danger and warn them. Beside of these they support their children with no expectation. I can't imagine my life without support of my parents. I just remember when I was kid, I had a fight with my friend and my father forced me to apologize to him. Such behavior has showed itself today in my life. I've taught how to forgive and apologize easily. They show me that nothing is important than love.

Parents should know how to communicate with their children. Their children must trust on them and this is not possible without a friendly relationship. parents should share their thought with their children and allow them to decide in troubles. I share my problems with my parents and their experience help me to solve my problems in the best.

furthermore, One of the most important ages of any person is adolescence. In this period of life they need more support than other periods. parents should know their friends and be aware about their relationship and control their behavior as much as possible.

In conclusion, in everybody's life a lot of people are influenced but among them the role of parents is significant than others. They teach their children how to live and face problems. They support them and keep away from danger and they do all of this with no expectation.
abedkh   
Oct 30, 2011
Writing Feedback / Teachers are responsible for motivating students to learn [2]

In my opinion,teachers are responsible for motivating students to learn. however, students should be interested in learning. teachers should know that their behavior have a significant effect on future of their students.

One of the must important issue is communication. The teachers should know their students. They should know about their personalities and based on it make the best decision to teach them. I remember when i was in grade 12, one of my friend had a trouble in home and this trouble shows itself in his scores. Then our teacher speaks to him and finds out his trouble and solves it. our teacher was responsible about his career and with communication with our friend solves his trouble. unfortunately, such behavior are rare in our society. I think this true that the best teachers make the best students and this is not achievable without responsibility.

they should teach them in the best way. In some situation, punishment has a better effect rather than encouragement. however this punishment should be controlled. in the past, teacher force students to learn. i think learning is not mandatory. as i said they should be interested in learning.

In conclusion, teacher should know that they are responsible about their career and of the most important aspects of their career is motivating the student to learn. they should be close to them and recognize their behaviors and personalities. they should behave to each student based on their personalities. Teachers should encourage or in some case punish them to motivate them.