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You are talking about what is in one's own best self interest. This is knowledge that can be gained from rationality. The heroin addict who shoots up even though she knows it is bad for her simply doesn't think that the pain and anguish it would take to stop doing drugs is worth what she would get back. So she shoots up the drugs because it is easier in the moment. There is an element of self interest. To her if she doesn't shoot up she will be in pain. If she does shoot up she won't be (at least for a little while). Therefore if her goal is to avoid pain then it is in her self interest to do heroin. This is not in her best self interest for the long term but you cannot deny that she has selfish intent when she does drugs. If she has no selfish intent then what kind of intent does she have? Altruistic intent? She gets a benefit from shooting up drugs: pleasure. Since she shoots up with the intent to gain pleasure, she acts with the intent to gain benefit. Benefiting one's self is selfish. Her course of action isn't rational but it is still self benefiting in the short term.


Ok, how about slavery then. Slave owners were not willing to pay their slaves anything for their work. Does that mean that the fair market value of the work that a slave does is nothing? The slave, if given a chance, would love to make money for his work but he can't because he doesn't have that freedom.


Again this is an illusion. If we go back to the monopolistic society there is no where else to go. This applies to slave labor too. It would be a fantasy to go into another profession. Where are you going to get money to pay for training in another profession? Through working? But you aren't paid well enough to be able to afford the time to take off work and train and pay for training and still provide for your family.


Ok, I'll give you an example which is as clean and yet as abstract as I can think of. You know of a man who you have never met before but he does not know you. He is good man, you have judged, in fact he follows Randian philosophy as well. You are given the opportunity (it doesn't matter how. this is fantasy) to gain something you really want for yourself. (money, a woman, skills, better looks, piece of mind, etc. Whatever you value most.) In order to get this thing that you want you must send this man to hell where he will be eternally tortured forever. God does not exist in this scenario. You could even forget the word hell if it bothers you. Just think of it as some theoretical place of eternal torture. However, no one will notice he is gone let alone that you are responsible for his disappearance. If you go through with this you will gain whatever you wanted most and you will never be caught or found out. In fact it will be as if the man never existed. But you will always know that he is and will always be, even after you die, being tortured forever. Kind of melodramatic, I know but relevant. If you would agree to do it then, well I guess we should stop the conversation right now because there are no logical ways for us to persuade each other about our points. If you do not agree to do it then I want you to point out specifically how it would not rationally be in your own self interest. Remember, keep it rational. ;)

On another note: Ha ha I am pretty much done with our limited wealth conversation. I do agree that we should agree to disagree. I do respect your thoughts on the matter, though.

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This is from the dictionary. This isn't my personal definition. All these definitions say is that a person puts himself before others and that his concerns are for his own interest, benefit, or welfare. Therefor it isn't about what the actual outcome will be it is about intent. Bank robbers rob banks because they believe that it will benefit them. According to the dictionary definitions this would be a selfish act.


Well, I guess you've given up before we have even begun this argument. I would say that there is more than enough resources to go around if everyone had access to them. Problem is they dont have access to them because only a select few have ownership over these resources or the power to harvest them.


Where did I argue with you on this? I do agree. Communism failed because it is a flawed theory. We were just debating what the definition of communism is and also what the flaws of capitalism are.


Ok, ha ha, I didn't mean literally "what would Marx do" I just meant what was Marx trying to say. I was saying that if you want to understand communism you need to understand where it comes from. Thus I look at Marxist communism since that was the original idea. I use Marxism as a guide to compare how communism was meant to turn out and what actually happened. When I think communism I think about what Marx predicted. Since his predictions never came true, communism has never existed truly anywhere. This is, of course, because his predictions were wrong and reality would prove to turn out a much different way.


I think we are getting down to a difference of opinion here because how can you really quantify exactly what the value of a specific sort of work is? Sure you can get an idea of how some work compares to others but largely putting an exact price tag on some things requires some arbitrary assignment.

I would argue that workers will tend to end up finding that almost every employer offers them less than the actual value of their work. Think of it this way. Most employers don't care about giving their workers fair pay. All they want to do is give them enough money so that they wont quit. If all employers think this way then of course the average rate of pay is going to be less than the actual value of work because the employers weren't trying to be fair in the first place. Fair would be the actual value for the work but employers aim to pay their workers as little as they can possibly get away with which is less than fair. And what are the workers going to do about it? Go elsewhere? They will find the same thing.


Don't you see you are talking about an illusion. The workers would have gone elsewhere? Like where? To a different company that took better care of its workers? Such companies had been crushed long ago at that time. Industries were taken over by monopolies virtually everywhere. There was no where else to go. You can't simply walk away. If workers were being exploited they couldn't go anywhere where they would be exploited less.

I guess it is a matter of opinion what fair market value is. I would say that by no means were these people paid fair market value for their work and the "fail safe" that you proposed about just walking away is an illusion for the reasons I stated above. If you really believe that fair market value was paid then you must think that Rockefeller did tens of thousands of times more work than one of his average workers. Thats just silly. Sure Rockefeller had more skills than average but he wasnt that skilled. Plenty of people could have done his job just as well as he did if not better. This is where you say: If there were plenty of people just as talented as Rockefeller then why didn't they rise up and challenge him and out compete him. Because it was no longer an even playing field. Rockefeller had money, power, talent, and intelligence. Someone who is born with talent and intelligence but without money or power still wouldn't be able to go against Rockefeller because he was in a position to dominate all potential competition. This isn't because no one was as smart or as talented as Rockefeller its because Rockefeller monopolized his industry before anyone else did. He didn't have to go against a monopoly in his fight to the top. It was easier for him. So you see at this point there could be a number of people who were smarter, more talented, and harder working than Rockefeller and yet they had no chance of competing with him because he had a monopoly on money and power.

And to say that employers have no moral obligation to care for their workers is silly to. Does this mean that workers have no moral obligations to their employers either? Now we have a world where workers can steal from their employers, not do their jobs efficiently, and lie to their supervisors. If workers are honest and faithful to their employers, work hard, and support their companies to the best of their abilities that earns them some respect and gratitude from their bosses. You may say, "Oh well as long as they get fair market value for their work they are totally covered." They don't get fair market value. You might as well say that no one has any moral obligation to anyone else and therefor justify crime, murder, etc. What you are indirectly saying is that if big business owners have the power to make their worker's lives miserable then it is their right to do so for self benefit. This view just destroys all ethical obligations to other people. Maybe you don't disagree with that.

I wonder how far you would take this rational self interest theory. Let me ask you this. If you rationalized that it would be in your own rational self interest to murder a mother and child, take the family's money for yourself, start a business with it and become successful, and never get caught would you do it? Just assume you would never get caught and that it would benefit your life in the long run. You would just need to crack a few heads first thats all.

If something really was in your own rational self interest then would you do it no matter what? Can you justify doing any deed as long as it is in your rational self interest? What's your limit?


Assuming that the workers would have nowhere else to go wouldn't it be in the rational self interest of their employers to pay them less than fair market value?

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Selfishness:

1. Devoted to or caring only for oneself; concerned primarily with one's own interests, benefits, welfare, etc., regardless of others.

2. Characterized by or manifesting concern or care only for oneself.

These definitions do not say anything about wether or not such concerns would lead to self benefit in the long term or about rationality or anything like that. They simply imply that if one is selfish he puts himself before others. Bank robbers act in their own self interest. They dont act in their own rational self interest. So would you say that bank robbers are not selfish? They willingly trample other's welfare in order to seek self benefit. How is that not selfish? Find me a dictionary definition that describes what you are talking about.


You think people strive to get lower class jobs? I guess if you are unemployed you will take anything... You also think that people strive to be workers in third world countries as a part of an outsourced labor team? Most of these people don't have a choice. Remember I am not talking about middle class people. Poor in America very well may be wealthy by the standards of non-capitalist countries. That doesn't change the fact that capitalism has problems. Capitalism is alot better than many other economic systems. That isnt the issue here. I'm simply arguing about whether or not capitalism has major problems. Democracy has problems and just because living in a democracy is better than living in a totalitarian state doesn't negate that point.


Why don't you present a logical progression in favor of your viewpoint then? I will say this. There are limited resources. There are limited things you can do with such resources. You can use these resources to produce things. Perhaps you can reuse some resources but only limitedly. Once resources are used up, no one else can use them. Sure you can restore some resources but only at the cost of other resources. Perhaps some resources are self replenishing. They still only give out a limited amount over a given time. People with power can use their power to take advantage of limited resources and then claim that they "own" them. Other people can no longer use such resources which makes it harder for them to "produce" things.

Just think about one of the most basic principles in physics. Matter cannot be created or destroyed. You can apply this to production. You can't simply produce things out of thin air it costs limited resources. So tell me how wealth isn't limited by that? Are you saying that there is potential for unlimited wealth and that potential could be fullfilled if every single person on the planet were a genius? (For practical purposes try not to use the idea of infinite resources in space. That may be a very good point but is not applicable in today's time period.)


Ok, point well taken. It is in the dictionary. I shouldn't have talked about dictionary definitions. I think I have indirectly addressed this, however. The part that talks about the state is the lie. Of course people may use it in today's world since it is "in the dictionary" and many states use the term today to describe themselves but it does not represent the original idea of communism. In fact, if you know anything about Marx these definitions (for the parts that they talk about the state) don't really make sense at all. It is the product of people taking communism and corrupting it for their own selfish gains, or as you say it is simply what communism must logically become even though that is not what it is aiming to be.

I think we are so used to the idea of "russian communism", "chinese communism", and "cuban communism" that we have forgotten that these regimes are and were #1 not ruled by real communists, #2 bastardizations of the original ideas of communism, and #3 only called communism in order to lie to the people of their state and to sugar coat what was really happening there.

So as ridiculous as it sounds I reject the dictionary definition, ha ha! But I think I have good reason to since it is the product of decades of lies and corruption and has little to do with the original ideas of communism. (But yes, good job, it is in the dictionary.)


I guess technically you could now use the term "communist state" if you wanted but I know that Marx would puke in his grave everytime you did. In Marx's progression, socialism is the state that controls the means of production, not communism. So I guess I do use "one of many" different definitions for communism but at least the definition I use doesn't come from a bastardization of the origional idea. When I think communism I just ask WWMD? (What would Marx do?)


Ha ha, I would never try to deliberately misinterpret you. That would be pointless and annoying. I was laboring under a misconception that has been corrected but I can't help but point out the irony of the situation. One of the "official" meanings of communism was born from a misinterpretation of the original idea. And so now the misinterpretation is considered to be official definition. It would be a misconception to believe that the misconcieved definition of communism is false! Its like saying, "It would be a lie to say that the lie is a lie." That's so bogus! But hey it's official...


I was looking at it from a Marxist perspective. You talking about the state controlling people and telling them when and how to produce things is classified as "socialism" not "communism" in pure Marxist theory. I just figure that if you want to cut the bull and really understand communism you need to look at it from a Marxist perspective. You are welcome to look at is from a different perspective but it will not be the original line of thought.


I talked about the limited wealth vs production above and look forward to your response. Those who own companies set rules for their employees. That is control. Capitalists use the point of "workers have the freedom to seek work elsewhere if they are being exploited." I say that is an illusion. In most societies you wont be able to go from one company to the next with the same skill sets and expect dramatically different pay or benefits. For each time period the people at the top of their professions set the trend for how workers are treated and the government also sets some ground rules as well. A worker is going to find largely the same conditions where ever he goes so the idea that he can simply walk away from an exploitative situation in search of a more fair situation is an illusion. His search won't yield any new results. Company owners dont have signifigantly differing worker treatment plans because whoever spends the most money on their workers will out competed by other business owners since his business is that much less profitable, efficient and competitive. (sorry if that was too long lol. My posts mostly are I guess. I want to hear what you have to say specifically against the limited wealth line of thought.)


Go back to the 1920s and see what happened. Rockefeller and Carnegie types made conditions terrible for their workers even when they had the resources to provide them with some benefits and respect for supporting their companies. These workers did show the ability and willingness to work hard for their money and they did. Monopolies held them down and those people who were smart enough to try to start their own businesses were largely crushed by big business owners without regulation. These guys at the top had it within their power to allow others a chance to rise up into the market but they did not. They also had the power to help their own workers who worked hard for them everyday and yet they did not. They accrued wealth and power as if they were addicted to it and nothing else mattered. They valued material wealth more than they valued being ethical in their treatment of their fellow businessmen and their own workers. That makes them evil men. It is because of the way that they ran their companies that the quality of life for the average worker in america at that time was so low. And hmmm... what solved helped to solve this problem again? Oh yeah, government regulation.

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Of course short term pleasure has to do with self interest. Just because short term pleasure is not a good course of action in the long term doesnt mean that it isnt pursued for selfish reasons. Hedonism is selfishness it just isn't a particularly smart form of selfishness. Maximizing one's own personal pleasure is selfish.

I challenge you to give me any possible example of someone doing something and I will tell you where the selfish intent is. It is not possible to do anything without the goal of self benefit. Just because what someone is doing may be destructive in other aspects of there life doesn't mean they don't get something beneficial from it. (I their eyes.)


I'm talking about utilitarianism which is a form of ethical thought, not a view of wealth. You can apply it to wealth.


There's just one problem, that wealth doesn't trickle down very well. This would only work if people actually got the money they worked for. Sure planning does take more skills than average and that should be rewarded by higher than average pay but planners shouldn't be paid thousands of times more than an average worker who probably works even harder at his job. Yes of course wealth does trickle down somewhat but most of the money is pocketed by the people at the top. Consuming mass produced goods does support corporations but in alot of cases the actual bottom level mass work force doesn't see a significant amount of benefit. Rather than improving the conditions of their existing workers with their newly generated wealth, corporations usually just employ more workers in order to maximize profits for those at the top. I'm not talking about middle class jobs. I'm talking about lower class jobs and outsourced labor.


Then a few more gorillas decide to start planting banana trees as well. Soon the whole island is privately owned by only a handful of gorillas and they lay claim to all the bananas that the island produces. Then they say, "what do you have to trade?" Some other gorillas find coconuts and want to start planting coconut trees in order to trade with the gorillas. The problem is that the gorillas own all the real estate of the island so they demand payment for the use of the land to plant coconuts. One gorilla finds out a way to produce coconut trees which is different than the process used to produce banana trees. This gorilla is really smart and he works hard but his development is hindered by those with the banana trees because they demand a cut of the profits that the coconut producer makes. Since the few gorillas from the begining own all the land and all the bananas, no one else can profit from banana production except on a very small scale. There are no labor regulations and resources are limited. Unless you are really smart like the coconut grower you will be forced to work for one of the banana producers. These top gorillas can set any prices they want for their bananas and can pay their workers as little as they want. The other gorillas working for them are hard and honest workers but they just werent born with the natural talent and smarts to become an entreprenuer. So now they have to live in squaler working for a handfull of gorillas who have a monopoly on everything and make it extremely difficult for new smart people to start their own fruit companies.

So you have to ask yourself. Does having the power and talent to dominate and oppress others give you the right to do so? I completely reject that. If you own a company and are living an extremely comfortable life why would you make life miserable for your workers for a larger profit increase? You already have enough money to live comfortably. Why are these people so obsessed with money and power that even though they have more money than they will ever need they still seek to raise up their profit percentages just a hair more at the expense of quality of life for their workers? Because they are evil.


Don't use this as a way to justify using words incorrectly. Words change definitions very slowly over a period of years but at any given time period words have certain definitions. You used the word communism incorrectly so I corrected you. Don't fall victim to the same charade that totalitarian governments play for their citizens. There is no such thing as a communist state. Totalitarian regimes want their subjects to believe that they live in a communist society so that they will feel better about where they live. This is a lie.

The definition of the word "gay" has a few different definitions and they are slowly changing even today. However, right now you can't just make up any definition you want and then justify it by saying, "words are constantly changing."


Ha ha, I don't think you understand that I agree with you here. You don't have to keep selling me on this point. I agree.


What kind of example is this? Only if you were a fool would anyone do something like this. If you want to help beggars you don't do it 5 dollars at a time and you don't bankrupt yourself in the process. Obviously this is a foolish way to help the poor. Come up with a better example where the protagonist has some intelligence.


I am responding to what you said about god. You said that god may simply be MIA or just plain mean. If he was mean then I would constitute him as a bully. I would be totally justified in using that term.


So we just sit around and let those with power dominate others? The whole basis of our civilization especially in democracy is to limit power so that no one person can dominate others. We have two choices: accept natures way (Here we will be guaranteed to live in an unjust world. or try to change our world ourselves. (this could be for better or for worse) So what is better? Guaranteed injustice or a chance at justice?

"The ends do not justify the means."
Exactly, therefore those who gain wealth by any means are not justified in doing so. But if you step in and say "No no there are rules that we live by." You would have to respond, "No No who are you to tell me what to do with what I have earned? You cant make rules that limit my freedom over what I have worked hard for! If I want to dominate others with the power I have gotten I am completely justified in doing just that! Why do I go out of my way to make my workers lives miserable for the chance of making a few more dollars? Because I have earned the right to do so!" Follow the "I can do whatever I want with what I earn" line of thought to it's logical conclusion and you will find that it justifies alot of malicious and cruel acts.

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I believe that at all times everyone acts in their own percieved self interest. With every action their is an intent for self benefit. Whether or not what people do will really benefit them in the long run is a different story. I am just talking about their intentions which are at all times selfish.


This was in response to you asking who benefits from a more collectivist attitude and in what way.


For the exact reasons I stated. It is wastefull (in some cases) and vain. From a utilitarian perspective hoarding wealth is extremely inefficient. Someone could buy a new TV for thousands of dollars in order to get a little bit more mild entertainment in their lives or they could be feeding a family of three for 4 or 5 months. This is of course taken from a utilitarian perspective which I take it you do not subscribe to.


I think it is a mixture of both. You can generate your own wealth, yes, but you must do it with limited resources. There are a limited amount of workers in the world, limited amount of real estate, limited amount of raw materials, etc. People have to compete for these limited resources. If one person takes these resources and does not allow others to use them he or she will naturally make more money for themselves and hinder other people's chances at making money.

If everyone in the world was super smart they wouldn't all become millionaires. You cannot just create wealth if you are smart enough. There is a limited amount of wealth to go around. Sure you can produce more wealth but that is only really the conversion of limited useless resources into usefull commodities or services. Even if everyone were smart and skilled in this world there would be some who would be rich and some who would be poor. There simply isn't enough wealth to make everyone wealthy. There is a limit to how much wealth a society can create. Hoarding harms others because it makes it harder for them to generate wealth by withholding the resources required to create that wealth.


I guess everyone can have their own needs in the happiness department but that does not warrant destructive behavior. You talk about production of wealth rather than simply gathering. Ok so lets say that the gorilla got really smart and started planting banana trees. He starts producing his own bananas, but he does not share with the other monkeys. Now, they all live on a relatively small island and there aren't that many trees to begin with. The gorilla uses his power to take half of the island for himself and his banana tree orchard. He hoards all the bananas that are produced and does not share them with the other monkeys. Yes the gorilla produced his own wealth so it shouldnt hurt the other monkeys right? Wrong. The monkeys now only have half of the land they once did which means that food will be more scarce and overcrowding problems will occur. The monkeys can plant trees of their own but the land (which has now been cut in half) will not yield as much as it once did. Half of the areas that the monkeys used to get their food from are now owned by the gorilla. Because the gorilla hoards his bananas and keeps everyone off of his property the rest of the monkeys suffer. Therefore his actions are destructive to everyone else.


Communism has never been put into practice. Thats the fundamental problem with your argument. People have tried to get their but have always failed. Sure people have had it as an ideology but it never came to fruition and yes those efforts led to millions of deaths. Ha ha, you dont need to convince me.


I was just correcting you on the definition of communism. There is nothing arbitrary about it, its just simply the definition. You seem to think that you can just change the definition of these words around any time you want. You cant. Words have set definitions and are not up for debate. Unless you want to petition to amend american dictionaries then you must abide by them during civil conversation. If you began the conversation by talking about "it as the former" then you began the conversation with a falsehood that needed to be corrected.


I don't deny it. You dont need to convince me. (I think I understand this sentence. It isnt complete, though.)


Only in comparison to life in the jungle and only for some people. There are plenty of people in a capitalist society who work long hours for very little money and only a few who truly have easy lives and hoard wealth.


No not really. I believe that wealth is ultimately made. I just argue that it is immoral to use such generated wealth inefficiently from a utilitarian point of view. There is enough to go around so why be a pill and dash other people's chances of living happy lives when it is of little consequence to you?


If god has created a cruel world on purpose I will oppose the system because he is ultimately just a big bully. If God actively made people suffer in his world I would have no problem in bypassing his authority and suplementing my own since he would be doing a very bad job. If some bully is pushing you around should you just say to yourself, "It would be arrogant of me to oppose him and make my own, more just, rules because since he has more power he must be smarter than me."

I dont see how it is arrogant at all. If we were all on a plane and god, as the pilot, went to the bathroom and never came back you better believe that it would be in our own "rational self interest" to jump in the cockpit and take over before we all suffer as a result. (Of course how we choose to steer the weel is up for great debate because we could make things better or make things worse.)

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I see. So you subscribe to Ayn Rand's philosophy. One thing I do believe is that human beings always act for their own self interest. In fact they are incapable of doing otherwise. It is impossible for humans to act unselfishly and therefore altruism does not exist. They may not act selfishly in a rational way, however. I think that secretly the pursuit of rational self interest is actually everyone's agenda whether they know it or not. If everyone always acts in their own self interest then it is logical that they should strive to do so rationally, when they can. But that is kind of beside the point. In trying to define what truly is the "rational" way to pursue self interest people come up with a million different philosophies and ideologies. So we are still back to square one.


Yeah sorry bout that! I am embarrassed that I tried to use that crap argument.


Of course context is important. When I say "helping others" it has to be context sensitive. Mostly I would use a utilitarian approach when deciding when and where to help but of course it would be a case by case basis. Helping someone hurt others is the same as hurting others to me.


Hmmm... I dont understand what you are trying to say here. Who is exercising what powers? What powers are you talking about?


Think of it in a utilitarian way. If a millionaire gave a thousand dollars to a child living in poverty the millionaire would be only mildly inconvenienced whereas the child would have his life changed for the better.(provided he was smart with the money.) More good has been done than harm. It wouldnt really be better for the rest of us but it wouldn't be as bad for us as it would be good for others. On a large scale it would have a more positive impact than negative in terms of quality of life. It could also be better for us in the long run because it would improve the lives of people living in poverty so that they could return the favor by becoming educated and productive members of society in the world. Also regular middle class people would benefit more from upper class wealth. The only people who would really lose out would be those people who were rich to begin with.

I think that rich people in many cases are extremely vain and wastefull when they use their money because they usually use it in order to benefit themselves. Humans have certain needs in order to be happy and it does not cost millions of dollars to fullfill these needs. The concept of hoarding for self benefit is the sort of strategy suited for a state of nature where organisms attempt to benefit from other's suffering. The system of nature is immoral so it is our job as humans to rise above such brutish and unethical practices and reject the processes of the natural world as much as we can. (we cant reject it entirely since we ourselves are products of nature but we do possess enough intelligence to transcend most other organisms in the pursuit of justice and fairness.) I believe their is a limit to how much wealth is sensible for an individual to have before it becomes wasteful and selfish to the point of being evil and greedy for such an individual to hoard it away. Millionaires dont need millions of dollars to be happy. If they gave money away they would still be fine. Sure they have the choice to hoard their money but that kind of behavior is actively destructive to other people. It would be like if all the monkeys the jungle starved because one gorilla who was stronger than everyone else took all the bananas for himself despite the fact that he would have more than he would ever be able to eat by himself. You can choose to behave this way but such behavior is vain and destructive to others, therefore you are evil. (at least your economic desicions would be evil.)


Another thing I shouldn't have said. A better thing to say would be that in order for the society to remain communist people would have to play by communist rules. Anyone could, of course, decide not to play by the rules and then the society would cease to be communist. This is a major problem with communism. The freedom to oppose it within the system means that there is no slavery issue.

Also, it isn't my distiction between communism and socialism. It is the distiction between communism and socialism. You need to understand the straight definitions for both of them. They are not the same. You seem to want to use the words communism and socialism interchangably. That is a major mistake that goes beyond semantics.


Point well taken. But just remember, I was origionally talking about communism, not socialism. When you talk about slavery you are talking about things irrelevant to the original discussion. (I guess you unknowingly brought socialism into the conversation then I called you on it so now we have to deal with it.)


Ha ha, what presumption. Its not up to you to make the distinction. Its like saying, "I looked up the word apple in the dictionary and then I looked up the word banana in the dictionary and found that they have some major differences. But you know what? I personally just don't make the distinction between apples and bananas. In my book they are the same thing." It isn't up for debate. All you have to do is do research and you will find that their is an obvious and definable distinction between communism and socialism. There is no such thing as a communist state. Saying "communist state" is like saying "populated void". By definition it is an impossible statement.


You are saying this as if you just came to this conclusion yourself. It's exactly what I have been saying all along. It is ulrealistic because it is unsuited to human nature. That's what I said.


I just don't like capitalism because it is basically a reflection of how things are run in the natural world. I don't have a solution for it but I can still be opposed to it. Life in the natural world as I have said is brutish and short. Nature has no morals or ethics. It simply is. Since the natural world is not organized in a way that promotes justice, ethics, or fairness I would be opposed to live under such conditions. Capitalism is not as bad as the literal jungle but it still promotes a state of controlled nature and in doing so allows for plenty of unethical behavior, injustice, and unfairness. So I am apposed to it. I don't have a solution but I still think that capitalism is not a system that promotes ethics and justice.


Point well taken. I think human nature is greatly flawed because we are so often inclined to do harm to one another which lowers everyone's quality of life as a group.


Point well taken. In the state of nature the players are not equal and that is not fair or just. Nor is it moral. I am apposed to such a system but I am still stuck with it anyway. Thats why people always say, "life isn't fair." It's because it isn't! Humans try to create fairness in opposition to nature.

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That is a very shocking statement. You really dont think that helping others is good? Then what is good? What is your definition? I'm pretty sure that most people on the planet would agree that helping others is a good thing. It's common knowledge.

If every single person on this planet were to "periodically or consistently" give to others the world would be a much better place. There are alot of resources in this world. If people willingly gave them to those who needed it most (intelligently and efficiently of course) then the average quality of life on earth would increase dramatically. The reason that goods cannot be distributed equally amongst everyone is that it would create malcontent amongst those who are stronger than others. That is selfishness. That is what leads people to hoard wealth. If people had a collectivist mindset, there would be no malcontent. No one needs millions of dollars to live on. That is a waste in my mind. I would even go so far as to say that hoarding wealth unneccesarily is evil.


This doesnt make sense either. A capitalist society does not provide an even playing field at all. Everyone is born with different strengths and weaknesses. That is the way of nature. Animals in nature are not on an even playing field either. If one person is born with a higher IQ than someone else that means that the playing field is no longer equal. Then capitalism allows people with superior traits to crush people with inferior traits. That is not fair at all. Communism attempts to break this cycle. It isnt successful, of course. Namely because it is trying to break the cycle of nature which is impossible. Any such effort would be destined to fail from the start. Capitalism is more a reflection of a state of nature where those with unfair advantages dominate those with unfair disadvantages. That is the way the natural world works.


Carefully examine the central tenet of communism that you yourself quote in the next sentence. If a communist society were to be completely in effect everyone would have to do their part. You wouldn't be able to get away with putting out the least amount of effort possible. If you have the ability to produce x amount, you have to produce x amount. Otherwise you cannot recieve equal benefits. If everyone played by the rules (which I am arguing would be impossible since rules such as these go against our natural impulses) then no one would do the bare minimum as long as they had the ability to do more.


You are talking about socialism. In socialism there is a central authority that requires it's subjects to give to others. In communism there is no such central authority. Therefore no one can be enslaved. Of course this means that people could willingly not play by the rules. Only those who had a collectivist mindset would play by the rules willingly and they would not be slaves. In true communism there is no state. It would be a form of anarchy. This would also lead to disaster but only because human beings, following their natural impulses, would seek to dominate each other. If humans did not have this desire wired into them then we could exist in a society without a government that might closely resemble communism.


Ha ha, remember, a "communist goverenment" is an impossibility. By definition there is no government in a communist society. Again and again you make arguments that would apply to socialism but not communism. There have never been any communist governments in existence, ever. Any government claiming to be communist is lying. It's that simple. North Korea is dark at night because it is a socially and economically closed totalitarian state that is attempting to provide for it's own needs without the help of others. The reason it has become totalitarian is because it is being led by evil people. If these people were not evil this would not have happened.

Remember I am simply arguing about why communism isn't viable not whether it is or not. I know it wouldn't work and hasn't worked in the past. I just argue that it is because of a fundamental problem with human nature that communism is blind to.

Book Reports / Argumentative essay on 1984 - Outline [40]

I think communism also just assumes that human nature is to good. It would only work if people really had a collectivist mindset and were happy to give to others all the time. Some people are like this but for the most part this is against human nature and the natural order of all things.

I recall Hobbes saying that in a state of nature life is brutish and short. Therefore he proposed that we do away with the state of nature in favor of the leviathon. Most of humanity's efforts to improve life through civilization and laws goes against the natural order of living things. It is tricky to strike that balance between maintaining our natural desires of selfishness and competition and evening the playing field for more less able people. Communism goes to the extreme of trying to create an even playing field at the sacrifice of our most basic human traits such as competition and selfishness. It also tries to do this without a class system or central authority. That means that any potential rules about "sharing" would never be enforced because if they were enforced the system would cease to be communism and would be instead socialism. Socialism forces people to provide for each other. Communism does not. Thats why communism would fail. Because there is no fail safe if someone didnt want to play by the rules. Hence it is so easy for communism to become totalitarianism.

I do agree with most of Marxisms criticisms towards capitalism but not with its proposed solutions.

Book Reports / Argumentative essay on 1984 - Outline [40]

Who can you say from history has really given communism an honest effort? Not Russia. Definitely not china or Cuba. I don't argue for communism but I will say that I think it has been misrepresented throughout history. Communism has been a tool for totalitarians to manipulate and decieve populations. If truly noble leaders tried to make a communist society we may see a different results. Communism has failed because the people who held the power to make changes were not communist themselves. So what do you expect? Of course it will fail if every major "communist" leader is corrupt.

And by the way, you can be a Marxist without being in favor of communism. Also, when did Marxism ever become policy?

Undergraduate / Stuck on UC prompt, there is nothing really exciting in my life.. [15]

What is a typical day like for you? What kinds of people do you see in your neighborhood? If your life is uninteresting then why are you interested in going to college?

You must be excited about something in your life. What is your major? Does that excite you? Just talk about what life is like for you and how you mentally and emotionally respond to it. Give your essay your own unique style and commentary. Perhaps if you simply listed the things you do every day the essay would be boring. But if we can really view these events through your eyes the essay could be full of humor and/or emotionality through your commentary. The essay readers want to get to know you. They aren't so much interested in your "world" as they are in how you have responded to it. Boring things may have happened to you but your commentary may be very interesting. Give it a shot!

Book Reports / Argumentative essay on 1984 - Outline [40]

Oceania is not a communist society so you need to revise that point before you proceed or your whole essay will be based on a falsehood. If Big Brother has control of society then by definition the society is not communist. A communist society has no class system. The inner party, outer party, and the proles are a form of social classes. This is a sort of facist/totalitarian socialist state.

Also, your thesis is really just describing "how" big brother controls Oceania not "why." Dig deeper. Anyone who reads the book can see how Big Brother controls the proles. (propaganda, censorship, etc.) This becomes evident from reading the book jacket. Ask a real "Why" question about this book. Make sure it isnt a "how" question disguised as a why question.

Undergraduate / Capital Punishment (the death penalty) Essay. Should be allowed or not? [11]

What do you think is worse: Life in prison or execution? I think people who get the death penalty are being done a favor because I would rather be dead than spend my life in prison. You could argue that capital punishment is a more cost effective and more humane way to deal with criminals. Those who are getting life in prison dont have a chance to be released and reform themselves anyway. Most of them have also committed grotesque crimes. So why not execute them? Its better for society and better for the criminals too.

If you really aim solely to punish people then life in prison is the way to go. I would argue that this is a much more cruel punishment for criminals than execution. When an animal is suffering and has no chance of recovery do you just leave it and let it slowly and painfully die? That would be cruel and inhumane. Life imprisonment sentences cost the government more money and make criminals suffer more as well. But why the hell should my tax dollars go towards punishing criminals? I dont care if they are punished or not I just dont want them to commit another crime. (sure I guess I would like to see them punished but not with my tax dollars. Vengeance is petty and immature and should not be indulged in at the expense of other more essential things.) If you kill them then you dont have to deal with any chance of recurrence or wasted money.

Undergraduate / "How will this program help me accomplish my academic goals? [6]

What program are you applying for? (I am always shocked by the amount of people who come on this site without giving us the neccessary information that is needed to view their essays in the right context. How do you expect us to help you if we don't even know what you are using this essay for? Throw me a friggin' bone here!)

Your thesis should be the answer to this question:
"How will this program help me accomplish my academic goals?"

You need to demonstrate at least some understanding of what the program is and why it can be specifically benificial to you rather than to other people. Tell us what your goals are and how this program will help you get there.

If you have bad transcripts, don't apologize. This makes the essay sound pathetic as it reads as if you are pleading with the admissions people. What else have you done with your life? Perhaps you have hobbies? Or maybe you volunteer somewhere? Or maybe you have some unique job experience that makes you stand out? Focus on things like that and how they relate to this program you are applying for. Don't just list off random things you like to do; only talk about activities that relate back to the subject matter dealt with in this "anonymous program" and how such activities have prepared you to change your habits and excell.

I agree with Sean. This essay needs to be completely scraped and rebooted with a thesis that actually answers the prompt!

Undergraduate / Georgetown School of Foreign Service Transfer Essay [11]

If you do number one you will need to do more research on 2008-09. I would suggest doing number two, though, if you think you can pull it off. The protests in Iran are a huge piece of news right now and you can easily talk about the historical signifigance this has for Iran and how technology is revolutionizing the way people are able to resist oppressive regimes. That seems more interesting.

However, if this essay must be done today and you don't really have much time to research I guess you would have to do number one. You will, of course, have to do more research for that anyway. If you have the time I would do number two. Whip up an outline or rough draft and post it asap!

PS. What is the letter for the admissions committee supposed to be about?

Writing Feedback / "tip the waiter" essay - what have you learnt from a mistake? [9]

Yes, it is important to talk about how your failure with the first child saddened you but the essay should, as Sean stated, be dominated by your positive growth experience.

Now tell me... what exactly do these things mean? (...) You gotta fix those. Just type in the word you want to write. Unless you are trying to say that you couldn't think of the right words?

Tell us what this is for. Are you applying for a job somewhere?
(what are b-skuls?)

Undergraduate / "Comrade Hu and passion for languages" - College Admissions Essay Introduction [13]

I do think it has a certain charm about it but it seems to end off rather abruptly. Perhaps some people feel that this makes a cute unorthodox little ending but to me it sounds like you are ending on a bad note. I immediately thought to myself, "Uh ok that was an interesting story but what's the point? What did you learn from this?" I do understand the point, I think, but it would be good to at least add one or two sentences at the end which explain how these experiences have confirmed, strengthened, and tested your passion for foreign languages. For instance: what is the moral of this story?

By the way you end the story it seems like you have failed to achieve what you want. Then you don't tell us what you learned or how you grew from the experience at all. It almost seems like you are trying to say that you discovered that language learning was the wrong path for you. Basically you say: 'I worked really hard to learn a language and then when I tried to practice it on one of my classmates he told me that I had gotten it all wrong.' Well geeze, that doesn't sound very encouraging!

You need to explain the relevance of the story more rather than just dumping a story on us with no reflection at all. How did this experience help you improve yourself?

Undergraduate / FSU addmissions essay ("I believe your University will give me the knowledge") [10]

What was the word limit given to you by the prompt? (I do understand that this is just the first paragraph.)

You say that you want to talk about Vires but then go on to describe something more related to character. (intellectual morals?) Perhaps you meant that you have developed strength in these areas from your experiences with a-beka and you teachers.

You also say that you started some sort of foundation at a private school. What foundation? What was it for? How does this relate to the prompt? You can't just randomly open up a subject and then drop it by the next sentence without at least explaining what it is you are talking about and how it has anything to do with the prompt.

This paragraph seems to have no focus. You need to decide on one (or more) of the words given to you in the prompt and talk about how your experiences and your life reflect its meaning. You talk about how teachers loved and supported you but you don't relate that back Vires. You also talk about your mother. What does this have to do with strength? You have to tell us what it was about your mother's influence that made you stronger. Mentioning your mother seems like it came out of left field because you do not relate it back to Vires.

As it stands this paragraph is basically just a list of different miscellaneus experiences and influences from you life that you don't attempt to relate back to any of the concepts from the prompt. You start off with the intention of focusing on strength but then immediately go off topic for the rest of the paragraph. You can make the experiences and influences you mentioned relate to strength but you need to tailor every single example that you give to fit.

So, pick some values and don't write anything about your life without explaining directly how it relates back to them. After you write every sentence just ask yourself: "does what I just wrote relate back to the point of this essay?" Stay focused!

Grammar, Usage / Logical Fallacies (for debate and persuasive writing) [23]

If you believe in cause and effect then you must understand that there is nothing random in the physical universe. (Unless you go back to the big bang or something of that nature. I will accept that that may be the exception but we do not know for sure.) Even computers can't do random. They operate on a system that is so complex and has so many variables that to a human it seems random but in reality it is just a really complicated system. Randomity is just an illusion created by humans who are do not possess enough brain power to take into account every variable that can affect a certain event. Even dice rolling is not random. If you had a brain powerfull enough to calculate every single variable that comes into play when you roll dice you could predict the result every time. Since we are not smart enough to predict such things we say that the result is "random" even though there is no such thing.

Grammar, Usage / Logical Fallacies (for debate and persuasive writing) [23]

Fallacy of Composition: Attributing the same traits that are exhibited by certain members of a group onto the entire group as a whole. Example:

Premise 1: Biological Cells are invisible to the naked eye.
Premise 2: The human body is made of cells.
Conclusion: The human body is invisible.

Fallacy of Division: Attributing the same traits that are exhibited by a group as a whole onto individual members of that group. Example:

Premise 1: A paragraph in a newspaper offers newsworthy information.
Premise 2: A paragraph in a newspaper is made up of individual words.
Conclusion: An individual word offers newsworthy information.

Masked Man Fallacy: The assumption that two elements cannot be the same if the extent of certain knowledge possessed by a party about each individual element is different. Example:

Premise 1: I know Jeff.
Premise 2: I don't know who stole the banana.
Conclusion: Jeff and the banana stealer cannot be the same person.

Grammar, Usage / Critical Thinking - to form well thought out and defensible arguments in papers [13]

Well, I certainly do appreciate all of your thoughts about abortion. However, this thread was created as a Critical Thinking thread so I would like it to stay a little more on topic with general critical thinking strategies.

Obviously the abortion debate should be thought of critically and is a valid example for the thread subject but this thread is just turning into an "abortion thread." I would love to debate abortion with you all but I would ask that we do it somewhere else.

Grammar, Usage / Critical Thinking - to form well thought out and defensible arguments in papers [13]

I think one important thing to keep in mind is the difference between arguing from logic and arguing from emotion. This may seem obvious but many people use certain arguments (especially during debates about morality) that they believe logically make sense but are, in actuality, just humanity's collective emotional response to something. For instance, I feel that most debates over abortion are differences in emotional thought rather than logical thought.

Where do you personally draw the line where a human life begins? (can you make a logical argument for that?)

Why should we consider human life to be sacred no matter the cost? (what logical arguments can you form for that?)

Why is it immoral to kill a fetus? Who suffers from this? (you may find examples of people who suffer from abortion but can you really prove logically that killing a fetus is immoral?)

This means that such debates and arguments are in some ways pointless from a logical standpoint and are almost impossible to counter. However, we base a lot of our laws on emotional arguments that cannot be logically proven. Many people try to argue these points but in the end you cannot use logic to argue emotional ideas.

Writing Feedback / War -- victor or no victor? [45]

Dagnabit, I just returned to this site after a couple days absence and my favorite thread is already gone! But, I would be interested to hear your revisions, Mustafa, if you care to make them.

Writing Feedback / 'useless in applying theories'; Daily homework is not necessary for students [5]

I don't think that many motivated students can use the amount of time they spend on homework as a viable excuse for not getting involved in internships and community service. If you are motivated you will get done what you want to get done, homework and all.


Exams reflect a student's ability to use and apply the theories that they learn in class. It would not make sense for you to say that homework helps students get higher test scores but does not help them use and apply theories. They had to show what they learned on the test and homework is what helped them do that.


I think the problem is that most students who do not get any value out of their homework assignments would not be doing anything "inventive" or "creative" in their spare time. The people who are productive with their spare time like that are the people who value their assignments because they challenge them to apply what they have learned in the classroom.

When you sit in a classroom and listen to the teacher talk you are getting input but no output. Without assignments the teacher would just lecture for days and days and then have a test at the end of every couple of weeks. That means that all that time the students would be unable to practice their essay writing skills or practice applying mathmatical theories and working out tough problems, etc. So when the test finally came and demanded that the students apply all of their knowledge, they would have no practice doing so and would most likely fail. This is an absurd learning strategy. If you believe in "studying" before a test, or practicing skills before you have to perform under pressure then how can you say that homework has no value?

Writing Feedback / War -- victor or no victor? [45]


That does not logically make sense. If war can be avoided then yes it would be better to avoid it, but that does not change the fact that once you start to fight a war, it can be won or lost. I would avoid a fist fight with someone but if I was forced into one then I would be fighting to win. It is very possible to win a war such as getting independence or repelling invaders. Just because human life can be lost does not mean that it is not possible to achieve objectives that will be beneficial for humanity. (don't ask me what objectives I am talking about because I have repeated what they are countless times and have never been challenged on them.)


The problem is that reasons for fighting war are directly related to objectives and how we define if we have won or lost a war. So if you say that "there is no victor" it's like saying that no one achieved what they were set out to achieve. This is just simply incorrect. As I said before just because lives were lost in the revolutionary war doesn't mean that the colonists did not win independence.


My points counter what Mustafa says, so it would be impossible for you to agree with Mustafa and I at the same time. Mustafa says that no one wins a war because human lives are lost. I counter by saying that there are things of value in the world other than human lives and thus wars can still be won despite create human loss if the human loss was worth it. You can't agree with both points because they contradict each other.


It's this simple: Someone makes a statement. Someone else comes along and counters the statement with a logical argument. No one is able to refute what the second person said. Therefore, until someone is able to logically refute the argument that counters the original statement, the statement is worthless because no one can support it. If a statement is easily countered through logic then it is illogical and invalid. If you don't think that we have disproven what Mustafa has said then show us where our logic went wrong. I believe that everything needs an explaination. Thinking that some things need no explaination is very dangerous mindset because it encourages people to stop thinking about difficult questions and to accept ideas that don't make sense.


This is all irrelevant to the conversation at hand. We are talking about whether or not it is possible to win a war. Your comments relate to whether or not it would be beneficial to fight a war in the first place. That is not the topic of discussion here. I would conceed that if we could it would be better to settle things peacefully. That is not in question. This is like the strawman fallacy. You take what we are saying, change it into something we never actually said, then you defeat the new "warped" version of our argument. This achieves nothing.


Are you saying that you don't believe in evolution? Seriously, come on... I vouched for your intellectual power so many times in that horrendously long thread. The fossil record provides an overwhelming amount of evidence in favor of evolution.


Ok, you don't understand how mutation works. Mutation does not remove information, it simply alters it. The DNA code does not become shorter and shorter as species evolve. But, even if this point were true it would be irrelevant because it says nothing about the validity of the theory of evolution.


Swine flu is a new type of disease. The reason that new diseases are created is because they evolve from existing ones. New diseases are not spontaneously created.


Ok, so you don't understand what evolution is either. What you just detailed is called natural selection and it is the mechanism for evolution as Darwin detailed it. So without knowing it, you have just argued in favor of Darwin's theory of evolution.


This still does not say anything about the validity of the theory of evolution. Also over time, selective breeding can lead to a change in reproductive compatability. This would lead to the creation of a new species. This is called speciation and is a form of evolution. Speciation does not have to fully occur in order for us to see that evolution is at work. A building does not need to be fully contructed for us to see that its construction is taking place.

Writing Feedback / War -- victor or no victor? [45]


The problem is this: Mustafa says something. Sean counters it. You try to support Mustafa by repeating what he said earlier. The point you are repeating has already been countered so it is useless to repeat it. A valuable response would be one that counters what Sean said. Its like this:

David says, "The earth is flat because it appears to be flat when I look at it."

John counters by saying, "That doesn't make sense because the laws of gravity would pull the matter of the earth into a sphere and our vantage point does not provide us with a good perspective to judge the shape of the earth based on how it appears to us... etc.

Then George tries to support David by saying, "No no, David's point makes perfect sense! You know what he means. If the world looks flat to us then it must be flat!"

Obviously George's comment offers no extra logical content to the argument and does not succeed in supporting David's argument because it fails to confront what John said to counter David.

If you say that something makes sense right after we logically explained to you how it doesn't then you have to point out the flaws in our logic, not just repeat what we have already countered.

Theoretically if we had a war for absolutely no reason then it would even help get rid of extra population. Wars, however, are rarely fought for no reason. In fact some wars are fought for "human" reasons that transcend political, ethnic, and racial groups. I will present the example of a war fought for freedom or "independence." Such a war can be won and can be beneficial to humanity because it can improve the lives of millions of people who would have otherwise lived under oppressive conditions. That was point #1.

Point #2. For many people there are other things more important than simply preserving human life. Maybe you would always choose life rather than death no matter what the consequences were but many people would not. There are some causes worth dying for. There are some situations where fighting to the death to resist would be better than accepting oppression.

There are my two arguments. So now you have two choices. You can either agree with everything I have said and then agree that Mustafa's point was too overly simplistic and failed to take into account a lot of unseen factors... OR you can try to counter the two points I just gave you.

Show me the logic!

Writing Feedback / War -- victor or no victor? [45]

Kevin, if you disagree with what Sean is saying then you have to at least make some attempt give logical reasons why. You can't just say, "Thinking of humanity collectively, you cannot win a war, because war hurts humanity." You are just repeating something that Mustafa already said which Sean has already disproved.

This goes back to my original post which introduced ideas to disprove Mustafa's thesis. So far no one has even attempted to challenged these ideas so I can assume that you all have nothing to say, ha ha. If I am wrong then please show me your logic.

There are other goals in war other than saving lives. Some instances require a re-evaluation of the value of life when the conditions of such a life have dropped below a certain point. There are many situations where it would be better to die than to live under the current conditions. For instance: being free is not specifically a "black, white, brown: American, Iraqi, or Ugandan: rich, middle class, broke: intelligent, ordinary, dull: Christian, Muslim, [or] Buddhist" goal. It is a "human" goal. People are willing to die for this goal and it has nothing to do with being a member of a subgroup. So this is a "human goal" that is worth the cost of death for many people.

Writing Feedback / War -- victor or no victor? [45]

What about those people who say give me liberty or give me death. For many people, they would rather die than live as slaves under authoritarian regimes. Now don't jump to conclusions because I'm not saying that all wars are fights for freedom because they rarely are. If you define an objective and you achieve it then you have won. (Sean and I have been arguing this for days, ha ha. Maybe that will continue into this thread, oh no...) Just because there was a tremendous loss of life in the process of fighting doesn't mean that things would not have been much worse if we hadn't fought at all.


You only consider the first part: "live long" but what about the second part: living well? In World War II many people deemed that it would be better to die than to see their homelands occuppied and bastardized by the Nazis. If they had to sacrifice their culture, freedom, and dignity to the Nazis then they would rather die than live. To be honest, I would rather die than live as a slave.


You make it sound like being alive is the only thing that is valuable in the world. That is completely ridiculous. I can think of many situations where I would rather die than face the consequences of being alive. What if you were going to be in jail is some foreign country for your whole life where you would be regularly tortured and abused. If I was in North Korea and had no hope of escaping I would probably want to die rather than live my life their where I can't even think for myself. Life is worth something to me if it is a good life (I am talking about my life by the way) but it is worth nothing if it is a bad life. So yes, war is horribly wasteful when it comes to human lives but in some wars, not all, it is worth the price because death would be a better option than seeing your people stripped of freedom, dignity, and culture.

Book Reports / Did thomas scott commit treason against the Metis? [9]

Do we look like yahoo answers or something? This is an essay help forum. If you dont have an essay or at least the instructions you have been given to write an essay then we cannot help you.

Tell me what you think the answer to your question is in essay format and then we can give you constructive feedback.

Writing Feedback / Essay on advantages of computer games [16]

Yes, of course I understand that. I just happen to know a couple of elderly folks who always scold me when I play Starcraft when they are sitting on the couch watching Days of Our Lives.

Writing Feedback / Essay on advantages of computer games [16]

I would definitely bring up the differences between watching TV and playing computer games.

I have heard many people speak out against computer games saying that they are a waste of time or turn people into "zombies." I think that watching TV is alot worse than playing computer games in these regards. This is because TV is just straight input for your brain. Images flash before your eyes while you sit there and do absolutely nothing. Computer games, on the other hand, are a mixture of input and output for your brain as the player is required to recieve input from the game and output his/her response to the input. In that sense, video games are much or engaging and challenging than watching television.

I hate it when people who watch TV everyday complain about how video games are a waste of time.

Essays / Their Eyes Were Watching God . . . Need Help Outlining an Essay [13]

Ha ha, are you likening Hurston's style to that of random fruit-canvas-smashing?

Also, make sure you go talk to your teacher again in order to confirm exactly what the instructions are. Write them down as he dictates if you have to. To many people write great essays and get Cs because they got the prompt wrong.

(Most of the time those people deserve Fs, but if the teacher sees that they put in a lot of work and quality, no matter how off topic it is, he/she might give a "pity C."

Essays / Their Eyes Were Watching God . . . Need Help Outlining an Essay [13]

Remember that if you are going to be writing an essay on the types of treatment you need to go into why the women are treated the way they are. If you just talk about how the women are treated the way they are you will be essentially summarizing the plot.

Ask a question that pertains to the novel as a whole. This question will probably be about the way the women are treated. The question must be a why question. "What" and "how" questions lead to plot summary. Then you should try to answer the question. The answer is your thesis. Then you can have different paragraphs talking about the different types of treatment the women deal with and how these various types relate to and support your thesis.

(I love whiners. They are just adorable!)

Book Reports / The Crashing Symbols of The Glass Menagerie and My Little Town [27]

Dang! I'm so sorry. I will say that quote about teachers makes me sad, though, ha ha.

Do you mean formatting as in the style of the essay or citations or what?

Essays / Analytical Essay -- methods [5]

Did your instructor give you specific written instructions for this? If so then please post them here.

What is the teacher's essay about? Is it a persuasive essay? If so then you would analyze the methods that the teacher uses to persuade his/her audience.

Post the instructions.
Post a summary of the teacher's essay.
Then we can figure out exactly what it is you need to analyze.

Writing Feedback / IELTS writing: email and text messaging threats written language [6]

In the introduction you say that you agree with the idea that text messaging is "decreasing the position of written language" then the first body paragraph mostly focus on the positive advantages of texting. What does this paragraph have to do with your thesis. It seems to contradict it. You say that texting helps people communicate but your thesis is that it is actually destroying written language. Pick a side! :)

Or if you want to talk about both sides. State that in your thesis. I don't know, now that I read it again, maybe you did kind of say that but, you need to reword it to make it more clear.

Faq, Help / Tips for Being a Quality Contributor [9]

Thanks for the books.

*sniff* I don't feel special anymore...

Essays / What role has cutural difference played in the lives of 20th century europeans? [6]


As for Night, the whole point of the holocaust was to wipe out certain cultures. The countries invaded by Germany were subjugated to extreme discrimination based on cultural and racial differences. For Europeans in the 20th century, culture practically defined everything. Whether or not you would need to flee your homeland, whether or not you could get good jobs or social status, what side you had to take during WWII, etc. In a sense, culture played the role of deciding the fate for millions of people in Europe in the 20th century, especially for the two pieces of literature you must focus on.

Writing Feedback / Language-Way of Dialect- [5]

Please post the exact instructions for this assignment

Is this supposed to be an essay or a free write or what? It's hard for us to give feedback when we don't know what you are trying to do.