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Why GWU? This new beginning. [6]
Yeah, I got an idea that probably would made this essay better.
Your essay do convey the sense that you need, and I would like to suggest a little more.
One of the most important thing in your essay is the first paragraph. I don't mean it doesn't fit, it fits perfectly. But, the thing is when you spent almost 200 words talking about a place, it made this essay sound more like a city guide than understanding the places and I had little difficult time with the transition you made. SO my suggestion is: cut some of them, not all of them though.(It's an amazing intro.)
And for the rest of the space, I suggest you say something more than studying abroad and internship. I mean, come on, this thing is offered by EVERY single university. It certainly doesn't make it special and unique.
What I would do is say more about its surroundings, Yeah you already did that, but maybe just elaborate it a little more. Cause, you know, DC is the place when politics meets reality, so maybe you should write a little more about that. For example, how you imagine you would sit at the office of secretary of state and talking on the phone with xx president, etcetc.
angela