amanda98387
Apr 28, 2013
Scholarship / My dream is to work with and take care of people; Nursing career/ Scholarship. [4]
I became very serious about pursuing a nursing career my junior year in high school. When I was offered the opportunity to shadow a recovery room nurse and a nurse anesthetist, I jumped right on it.
Grammar Error!
I became very serious about pursuing a nursing career my junior year in high school. When I was offered the opportunity to shadow a recovery room nurse and a nurse anesthetist;certainly, I jumped right on it.
If you don't like certainly, try other conjunctive adverbs like thus, consequently, hence, incidentally or others that you find fitting. Without the semicolon and conjunctive adverb, that sentence is known as a comma splice.
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I became very serious about pursuing a nursing career my junior year in high school. When I was offered the opportunity to shadow a recovery room nurse and a nurse anesthetist, I jumped right on it.
Grammar Error!
I became very serious about pursuing a nursing career my junior year in high school. When I was offered the opportunity to shadow a recovery room nurse and a nurse anesthetist;certainly, I jumped right on it.
If you don't like certainly, try other conjunctive adverbs like thus, consequently, hence, incidentally or others that you find fitting. Without the semicolon and conjunctive adverb, that sentence is known as a comma splice.
Hope I helped!