Posts by alexh983
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Last Post: Dec 27, 2012
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Undergraduate /
Art for Little Hearts/ Common App on ECA [2]
i think it is a good topic, but it is missing you in it. the party where you takl about food tasting and expenditures seems rather irrelevant. i think it might help if you talk more about what it meant to you personally and how you really helped push it through.
Undergraduate /
The most prestigious; BU supp/ "Why Boston University" [4]
first off, I would take out your second use of "presitigious". it sounds a little repetitive.
Its a good essay, but it almost feels slightly generic. you kind of just list all the things you like but I think you should try to make it a little more flowing and cohesive. try to put a little more of how boston will help you and why you need it.
Undergraduate /
'top-notch liberal arts education' - Vassar Supplement Essay [3]
"Vassar's allowing students' high level of academic freedom"
try to reword the beginning of this phrase- it sounds a little awkward in its current state. maybe something more along the lines of "Vassar's allowance of a broad range of academic freedom for its students" would flow a little better.
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