Writing Feedback / Ielts; teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work [4]

When it comes to unpaid community work, some assert that young people who are passing their adolescents ought to do unpaid work in community, which can bring huge benefits to both of them. Basically, I agree with that thus most of teenagers do not know how to manage their spare time, usually spending on computers games, TV or looking for excitement out of home. 63

Evidently, unless young generation will occupy voluntary work, like working for charity, this will be beneficial in generally on personal features as well as on skills development. Furthermore, assisting others in society makes them form a sense of fulfillment, happiness and contentedness together with making them more responsible personalities in the society. Therefore, dealing with different people like disables, gays or form other nations, it is one of the life survival lesson as teaching us of manners and sympathy.

Admittedly, there are wild range of voluntary work that has given the opportunity to be a part of the crew in particularly interested them field which could valuable in self-satisfaction and motivation in studies father. Besides, teenagers being belong professional people, flourishing/ booming ?? in a huge influence on studying hard much as appreciate someone's work and time, turning to feature requites by potential employer like their communication skills, time management, team work.

In conclusion, personally I believe there are only positive sites of working as a volunteer, though the young people needs some encourage. There will avoiding extend of problems as like unappreciated behavior towards their parent's work and home chores. Lastly, employers are now far more willing to recruit who have been engaged in voluntary jobs. Therefore those first-hand experiences eventually become their superiority.

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Writing Feedback / 'experience of survival life, South Pole' - Ielts, task 2 [3]

:Nowadays both scientists and tourists can go to remote natural environments such as the South Pole.
Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

More and more people becoming interested in remote natural environment, they are scientists, tourists and also people who want to experience new venture through wild life. Personally, I believe that there are more advantages which definitely able to outweigh the disadvantages despite of taking over an awareness of health and safety risk on a board. For example, people who putted themselves into that kind of experience they probably can look at surroundings in different way that they used to, accepting and appreciating the even little things which they have got.

Admittedly, nowadays the convenience of our life which it is make by developing of technology constantly make us, people feel too comfortable. Unless we feel guilty of the deterioration of environment like the pollution and recycling, a numbers of problem will arise.

First of all we are still able to reach an amazing place where by nature and animals are occupied, so that remain us of the Eco- system which is the essential part of the world. Scientists tend to make a forecast and protect the environment from collapsing thus it will lead to whole well-being on our planet. Moreover, Scientists working at remove natural environment can give the prognoses of the currently problem of changing of weather like being at South pole could protect from unexpected causes by observing such as movements of ice rock as well as melting process.

On the other hand, curious tourists discovering a new weird places which gave abiding them memory of the feeling by framed them into pictures. The pour beauty of nature reveal the numbers of positive feelings, helps people to forget of the congesting on the streets, work , stress and daily worries. however we are more conscious of the industrial issues.

In conclusion, everyone can gain some experience of survival life at the remove places. Obviously, there are many aim going to those places like reconversion, work or even holiday however I believe that all those who step there at last once will appreciate more the surroundings and environment on our planet.

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Writing Feedback / 'better standard of living for people' - ielts - 2 task [4]

Nowadays poor countries facing the extent problem of loosing qualified people whose are the key of country functionality. The request for educated people is appearing on over the world, while the development of technology goes so fast that the mainly in rich countries appearing the wide range of excellent vocations.

Unless people from well-off countries will migrate to rich nations to look for better prospective for them career as they are offered an opportunity job on the occupation at areas like medicine, engineering, computing, a number of problems will arise. For example they won't be able to mark any improvement without helps from other nations. It seems as the migration movement is really common and well knowing for us whereas there is no many people who can notice the whole situation of them motherland, that the infrastructure could deteriorate.

Professional people who got a job offered considerate it by taking them more personal thus they might see the potential for better position. However, frequently the rich nations temping them by giving an equal salary to qualification through the encourage could be exceeded.

On the other hand, unless the rich nations will find a way to decompensate of major specialized people like funds the training and teaching. People from all professional will be looking for better position or even salary in other countries, this might cause a problem of overpopulation although form the other side in the poor countries might appear unsatisfied of sociality and start devastation and another unappreciated behaviors.

it comprehends the way people deciding to leave them mother home, reaching better standard of living. Personally, I think it gives the necessary experience work, besides we have do considerate cheerfully before any decision will have made.

I appreciate all correction you will make .

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