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devabe2005   
Jan 9, 2013
Writing Feedback / [IELTS ESSAY] Successful athletes can earn a great deal more money than others [2]

spelling mistake demined i think it is determined
demined by their popularity to the public instead of their contributions to the society.

corrected will be as follows
determined by their popularity to the public instead of their contributions to the society.

overall good essay.
devabe2005   
Jan 9, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS ESSAY; Students find it hard to university studies compared to school studies [6]

IELTS TASK2 ESSAY:
Question:
Nowadays, students find it hard to study at universities compared to school studies. Why this is happening. What is the solution to this problem?

Answer:
University studies now becoming hectic due to technological revolution. There are various reasons influence college curriculum harder. In this essay, I will explain detailed causes and solutions to overcome it.

University studies are not similar as school studies, profound in particular field. To cope up with technology advancement, universities are forced to start new courses and adding additional subjects in their existing curriculum. Though it will be useful in student's career but they face significant burden on time management of study-life balance. Moreover, there is extreme difference between school and college life, college students are more independent to take decision in their study pattern. For example, in my college most of the students set aside their studies in starting of their semester and begin preparation one month before the examination. Due to less preparation time, students are affected by anxiety and stress in their examination period which results in poor result.

Some of the solutions to overcome tough university studies are university should research student capability before adding new course or extra subject. They have to increase the period of study if they adding extra subjects in their curriculum. Another solution is university staff should encourage and motivate students to start their preparation on beginning of their semester. So that they can well prepare and get good results in their university examination which leads to better placement.

To conclude, both university and student should take proper steps to make their studies easier. So that students can complete their studies with full enjoyment and university will get reputed results in their academic.
devabe2005   
Jan 8, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS ESSAY, International law will not reduce crime rate in different countries [5]

IELTS TASK2 ESSAY
Crime is nearly always related to the environment in which it occurs. For this reason, international laws and international law courts are unrealistic and will not succeed in reducing crime levels in different countries. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Answer:
It is highly debatable that international law and courts are ineffective to diminish offence rate around the nations. Both laws are necessary to tackle the felony and slash its growth.

In some cases international law is necessary people who are illegally exporting rare animal species and skins to other countries. Moreover, children are kidnapped and sold them as slave or for prostitution from across the continent. In addition, drug smuggling from all over globe in which most people mind and body are affected result in death. Terrorist attacks across the world which affects global economy and wealth. cyber crime like hacking, phishing, Pornography, threatening email, assuming someone's identity, defamation, SPAM, etc. global court should take harsh action against these convicts through international laws.

On the other hand, crime mostly related to particular location. For example, robbery, rape, child labour and molestation in particular place should be taken care by the local government. Nowadays, baby stealing from hospital is increased. Furthermore, sexual harassment against women and children should be handled by local law.

To conclude, by anlaysing both the views, depends on the crime, its environment and its links to other part of the world either domestic strict law or international severe law should act on the offenders. Let's hope for the crime free world in the future.

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devabe2005   
Jan 5, 2013
Writing Feedback / ( IELTS essay) Gene or environment more influential in character [6]

HI,

Overall super essay. good work. Surely you will get good score.

still need strong in your opinion in the following sentence.
In my opinion, the environment and experiences, not merely genes mold the character of an individual.
There is confusion whether your are agreeing or disagreeing. Concentrate on introduction.

you can write like this
In my opinion, the environment and experiences mold the character of an individual rather than genes.

All the best.
devabe2005   
Jan 2, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS ESSAY; neighbours and the sense of community is lost. What is causing this? [2]

Question:
With the increasing number of people in cities, most do not know their neighbours and the sense of community is lost. What is causing this? How can we turn it around?

Answer
Many people are moving to city in order enjoy all the facility. They are not able to know their neighbour. There are various causes like scarcity of time, shyness, afraid to make relationship etc. These can be overcome by allocating some time with neighbours.

One of the main causes of people not able to know their neighbor is shortage of time. People are working for long hours which prevent them to spend more time in home. In the weekend, they are taking rest at home. Another main reason, people are shy to speak with neighbours. Expecting neighbour should first to speak. In addition, people are afraid to have relationship as it will create problem in the future.

To conquer people should allocate sometime in the weekend with their neighbour. They are encouraged to come forward to speak with their neighbor and socialize with them. Through awareness about community and neighbourship people will not afraid to make acquaintance with their neighbours.

In a nutshell, people should be encouraged to be socialize and community. They should schedule some time with their neighbours so that it will result in harmony. Neighbour in turn will be helpful in difficult situation. So that people will live affable and amiable way of life.
devabe2005   
Jan 1, 2013
Writing Feedback / 'Human nature' - IELTS; possible to prevent children growing up to be criminals? [3]

IELTS ESSAY TASK2:
Question:
Some scientists believe that by studying the behavior of three-year-old children we can understand whether they will grow up to be criminals. To what extent is crime a product of human nature? Is it possible to prevent children growing up to be criminals?

Answer:
Human nature does not have a character of crime, but situation force them to do crime. In my point of view there are chances of children can be avoid to become criminals in the future. It is true that scientists acceptance of learning characters of three-year old children to become criminals.

Circumstances force children to become future criminal. For example, due to poverty many force to do crime like kidnapping, murder, snatching jewelries, pickpocket etc. If we eliminate poverty from the world crime rate will be reduced.

Moreover, another reason for crime is unemployment which is the biggest issue in this competitive world. To exemplify, unemployed graduates who want to satisfy their necessities they choose crime to fulfill their ambition.

In addition, there are more chance of grow up children in honest way of life. By guiding and teaching values of life, responsibility, relationship, ambition, confidence, obedience, etc. Furthermore, children should be encouraged to aware about severity of crime and it effects to the society. So that they will become responsible and ambition-oriented individual.

In a nutshell, crime is not a character of human nature; it is the situation makes them criminal. By teaching valuable qualities of life to children and crime brutality to society helps children to be a responsible, honest, compassionate, sophisticated individual in the future.
devabe2005   
Dec 29, 2012
Student Talk / Took the IELTS Today and didn't go as I expected :( [35]

Four times applied IELTS still i am not scored 7 band

four times applied still i am not scored 7. i am still practising to score 7 band.

Very much depressed and please suggest me best IELTS coaching class in chennai or any other ways to get 7 band in IELTS.

Below are the my IELTS Scores.

Dec 2012 jan2012 April2012 May 2012
Listening 7.5 7.0 7.5 6.5
Reading 6.0 6.0 6.5 5.5
Writing 5.5 6.0 6.0 6.0
Speaking 6.5 6.0 6.0 6.5
Overall Band 6.5 6.5 6.5 6.0
devabe2005   
Dec 29, 2012
Graduate / Express self with words; SOP for Speech Pathology Grad School [3]

Overall good essay!

There are so many "I" you used in 6 paragraph

I can see the progress I have made in my volunteer work and in my undergraduate classes as a professional. I want to expand my knowledge and experience base through applied experience in the field. As I set out on an advanced level of education in a graduate program, I ponder about the kind of student I am and the experiences I have had that will allow to me succeed at The University of Southern Mississippi's graduate school. I am focused, and I have always challenged myself. In high school, I took 21 college credit classes and in college I continue to take classes to challenge me. I will be completing my Bachelor's degree in three years.

Below is the corrected one
Due to my aspiration in the field, I want to continue my education by attending graduate school. I can see the progress in my volunteer work and undergraduate classes as a professional. Expanded my knowledge and experience base through applied experience in the field. As it set out on an advanced level of education in a graduate program, I ponder about the kind of student and the experiences that will allow to me succeed at The University of Southern Mississippi's graduate school. Always focused and challenged myself. In high school, I took 21 college credit classes and continued college classes to challenge me. I will be completing my Bachelor's degree in three years.
devabe2005   
Dec 28, 2012
Writing Feedback / IELTS ESSAY, couples decide to have children later in their life. [2]

IELTS ESSAY
TASK 2:
Question:
These days couples decide to have children later in their life. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? How is it affecting the family life and society?

Answer:
It is great debatable about couples decision of having children later in life. I strongly disagree apropos with statement that couples decision to have children later in their life. There are more disadvantages than advantage of having children in later age.

Some of the advantages of couples having children in later age are financial strong and well matured to support their children. They are financially strong to cope up needs of their children. Moreover, they can give better education to their children. Parents are well matured to handle problems of their children.

On the other hand, after age 30 both men and women face many health problems like infertility, diabetes and heart diseases. In addition, they become older and not able to look after their children. We know the proverb, "Make a hay while the sun shines" states that while on certain age itself couple should have their children. So that it prevents many problems in their future.

To conclude, as I said previously couples having children in latter age results in more disadvantage than advantage. As they face more problems in latter age, it is advisable to have their children in young age itself.
devabe2005   
Dec 25, 2012
Writing Feedback / imagine how our ancestors would have survived without Computers, televisions,internet [4]

IELTS Essay question:
Computers, televisions, internet, these are the must have assets in our contemporary world. It seems that world without media sources would come to halt instantaneously. However, if this is the case I imagine how our ancestors would have survived all those years without these information sources?

Answer:
Computers, television, internet are buttress of our society. Without these media sources, it is impossible to live. Our ancestors lived without these media sources but handle in different ways.

Computers help to complete task effectively without much manpower. It solves more complicated problems within a few seconds of time. Television helps to entertain us with various program and telecasting live events. It provides updated news daily. Internet is used to communicate effectively with in a fraction of second. Through online services, we can pay credit card bills, telephone bills and online movie banking. Thus computer, television and internet are very useful to today's world.

On the other hand, our ancestors sent birds for passing message to distant relatives as they don't have any facilities. Moreover they sent messenger to the distant relative to communicate the information. But these messages are not reliable while on the way of a bird messenger is hunt by the people. So the message will not reach the destination. The messenger will do his own work and will not communicate properly. The end user will not get the actual information.

In a nutshell, though our ancestors used some techniques like bird, person messenger to communicate. But there are some inconsistencies and information will not deliver properly. Nowadays, computer, television and internet help our society enormously and without these media sources our life is difficult to live.

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