Undergraduate / "Everything happens for a reason." Helping Others [13]

Grammar is not the best. Harsh feedback please!! Suggestions.
1. St. Ignatius of Loyola, founder of the Society of Jesus, encouraged his followers to live their lives in the service of others. How do you plan to serve others in your future endeavors?

"Americanos!" a young Dominican boy said pointing to my classmates and me as we walked into the classroom ready to begin our lesson. Each student smiled widely and enthusiastically, eager to get to know the foreigners who would be teaching them English. My classmates and I interacted with them, teaching them the basics such as azul is blue and counting numbers from 1 to 25. Their smiles, a sincere gesture of their gratitude, instilled in me a warm satisfaction. A few of this children resided in the orphanage I was staying at where we spent our time playing with them. All they wanted from us was to play with them, nothing else, just thirty minutes of my attention. Attention that meant the world to them.

After this trip my drive for providing service to to others, grew deeper in me, and as a result I decided to become more involved in the community service program at my school. Furthermore, I will continue my involvement in service throughout my future endeavors in and beyond college. The experience I had during my time in the Dominican Republic strengthened my desire to pursue a career that will afford me an opportunity to make a change. To provide those who face challenges such as access to an education and basic necessities a chance to have those "luxuries" in their lives. I would love to work for a non-profit organization to bring protection and necessities to those who lack it. It would be a dream come true if I became a UNICEF Goodwill Ambassador or if I could work or intern at the United Nations.

I'm excited to form part of the various programs Boston College has to offer. Through majoring in International Studies at the College of Arts and Sciences and the PULSE Program, helping others will become a possibility. Likewise, the Service Immersion Programs will give me an opportunity to immerse in the culture of the people I encounter while providing them with any services that they need. There are many different kinds of adversity people face whether it's materially, physically, mentally, or emotionally, but one thing is common among them, a helping hand means more than any material thing or money could ever bring them.

Undergraduate / I love to laugh/ Curiosity; Stanford Supplment- Roommate/ What matter & why? [2]

My grammar is not the best. Any suggestions? Does it feel like too many thoughts are jumbled together?

Virtually all of Stanford's undergraduates live on campus. Write a note to your future roommate that reveals something about you or that will help your roommate - and us - know you better.

Dear Roommate,

My name is Astrid and I'm excited to meet you! At first I may seem shy, quiet, and timid but once you get to know me you will know that and tease people. I have been told that I have the funniest one liners and that sometimes I am too blunt (Once you meet me you can decide on that). Within days of getting to know me you will find out that I love watching sports: football, baseball, basketball, and soccer, anything (I'm a huge Raiders, Patriots, Dodgers, Lakers fan, so if you are Charger, Celtics, or San Francisco Giants fan this is going to be very interesting). I hope you enjoy watching sports and hopefully can root together or against each other, while we have fun hanging out. I can be messy but I would much rather be organized. Besides that, I am pretty laid back. I love sleeping in. Languages are my thing, I speak English and Spanish and I am learning Mandarin and French (I know how to do my ABC's in Sign Language). I can be your confidant, I am loyal and will keep everything you tell me with me. Sweets are my biggest enemy: brownies, chocolate chip cookies, anything with chocolate you bet I will be all over it. One crazy fact about me I may be from Southern California but I do not know how to swim. In the end you will know that I am very friendly and care about everyone that I know; family and friends are the most important thing to me.

What matters to you, and why?

Curiosity matters to me. As I am on the bus going home, I look out the window and observe the people who are driving. Where are they going? Who are they? What do they do? And the questions go on and on, never directly knowing the answer, but indirectly knowing that no matter how different they might be from me they can be pretty similar to me. Curiosity is what drives people to seek the answers to that which they do not know. I enjoy questioning and wondering about what I do not know. I am amazed by the ways things work. What was the creator of hangers thinking when he or she created them? How did toys come to be? I love thinking about what people in the past thought the future would be like and if it did become true. I am always wanting to know, I dislike not knowing, it's as if that one thing I do not know will make or break everything I know. Everything matters when you do not know.