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farbodsalahi   
Mar 2, 2013
Writing Feedback / Group Study promotes sharing ideas and knowledge, correcting faults, learning communication skills [4]

Tofel essay
I wonder if give me sop tips about my faults and errors.

Both of these styles of studying seem interesting, but when it comes to me, I prefer to study in a group instead of studying alone. Studying in a group has some merits like sharing ideas and knowledge, correcting faults, learning communication skills and also making a speech in front of others.

To begin with, I believe that studying in a group can lead me to learn better by sharing my knowledge and information with my colleagues. With no doubts, I consider only one aspect of scientific issues while my co-workers think about other aspects. Having considered so, all of us can take advantage of different thoughts and perspectives and broaden our horizons and mind about issues.

In view of the fact that I may misunderstand a problem or a topic while I study alone. By studying in a group, my friends administer help to me so as to remove and correct my errors. A few years ago, I thought the milky galaxy way is the only galaxy in the cosmos, but by arguing it in a group I lastly found out there are many other galaxy in cosmos.

Last but not least, studying in a group contributes me to improve my communication skills since I am made to communicate with my friends and workmates. Besides, I learn how to speak in front of others and by such work my confidence would be improved and prepare me to make a speech in conferences.

To sum up, I feel that learning in a group carries some advantages and benefits me in some ways. It enables me to establish close ties with my workmates and also learn a lot of things from them. So, I prefer to study in a group.
farbodsalahi   
Mar 1, 2013
Writing Feedback / TOEFL; I would purchase a house instead of a business if I have enough money! [2]

I am preparing myself for toefl test.
I wonder if you give some tips about my faults so that i correct them.

You have enough money to purchase either a house or a business. Which would you choose to buy?
On the one hand, some individuals would rather purchase a house by their capital. On the other hand, others prefer to make an investment on something which gives rise to huge amount of money in future. Both of such decisions sound interesting, but when it come s to me, I would prefer to buy a house for some reasons.

To begin first, I believe that buying a house can be a long-term investment. A case in point is, five years ago my parents bought a beautiful house in uptown. Now, its price has increased and my parents have made a good profit from buying it. Furthermore, purchasing a house is much better than investment. To put it simply, by buying a house I can play it safe and avoid losing my money and capital.

A survey shows a sizable number of people are united in one belief that buying a house makes them feel confident and also give them piece of mind. Such individuals are convinced that by buying a house they would not come across rented house difficulties. Having considered so, as a married person, I do not regularly want to move out or move in new houses and I prefer to stay a place forever.

Last but not least, by owning a house, I am able to put it as collateral in a bank so as to get loan for some purposes like buying a car or purchasing appliances. In other word, I could take advantage of it as a significant capital.

To sum up, I feel that buying a house is much a logical decision than making an investment. Moreover, I can use it as a capital whenever I need it. So I prefer to buy a house.
farbodsalahi   
Mar 1, 2013
Writing Feedback / TOEFL:Advertising is the most important cause of unhealthy eating habits. [7]

It really does lead us to buying some harmful foods
I maintain that our unhealthy eating habits is
As people who are under great pressure from working and acquiring knowledge.

Dude you have some grammatical errors in your writing. Furthermore, your message was not clear.
good luck
farbodsalahi   
Feb 26, 2013
Writing Feedback / TOEFL; Knowledge without Experience is not fruitful! [4]

I am going to appreciate those who read my writings and give me tips about it.
please give some idea about my writings.
Experience is the best teacher (2)
With the help of knowledge, individuals are able to make better decisions in their lives. However, getting knowledge without any experience does not lead to prosperous life. Nearly all walks of people are convinced that experience is essential for starting a work.

A large number of people are united in one belief that gaining experience administer helps to them to remove obstacles which they encounter in their tasks and jobs. Furthermore, experience leads them to avoid repeating same errors which they did in the past. On top of coping with difficulties, getting experience broadens our minds and horizons and contributes to making more logical decisions in the future.

Apart from all, experience does not obtain from books or sciences. In fact, experience is gained by making mistake. A case in point is, those students who are unable to solve a math problem, gradually learn the way of solving it. They make a lot of mistakes during solving it and lastly, they find out their errors and make a real effort to remove them.

Last but not least, science and knowledge play pivotal role in our lives and experience is the origin of them. In other word, knowledge is originated from experience. In olden days, novice physicians were not able to cure their patients since they could not diagnosis the cause of their illnesses due to not having experience. Which is why, a huge number of people died and no one was able to guess what was the reason of death. With the course of time, they got experience and learned about the symptoms of diseases and transfer their experience to next generation in the form of knowledge.

Accordingly, I believe that experience is the best teacher which one can have. Without experience, we confront problem in our lives. Besides, experience results us in make better and logical decision in our lives. Thus, I think experience is the best teacher.
farbodsalahi   
Feb 26, 2013
Essays / Nursing essay on goals and objectives [4]

dude I do not have any experience about mentioned topic. you can read some papers about them, randomly choose some of them from library and study, give some hands from your colleague.

if you have a problem with it, make a contact with me.
farbodsalahi@gmail.com
farbodsalahi   
Feb 26, 2013
Writing Feedback / TOEFL; Does the ease of cooking improve life? [2]

Has the ease of cooking improve people's life?



There is certain inevitability that food is one of the most important basic amenities. In olden days, cooking was a time-consuming task which individuals had to spend a lot of their time and energy preparing a meal. With the development of technologies in our daily life, we are easily able to make a food and save our time and energy. However such advancements in cooking carry some disadvantages, too.

A large number of people are united in one belief that progression of food industry helps them in some ways. First of all, they are not compelled to dedicate a lot of their time on cooking. Furthermore, with the advent of fast food restaurants in our modern lives, we are not obliged to spend their time in kitchen so as to make a food for our families. Instead of that, we can go out with our families in such places and spend much time with each other. More to the point, a sizeable number of single individuals are convinced that fast food restaurants can be good opportunity for them so as to be familiar with other people and make friend with them. In some countries canned food and processed food are prevailing. Such foods do not need any cooking and can be a good choice for people who do not have enough time to cook.

Apart from all, a series of experts warn people about drawbacks of such food habits. In-depth studies in one of the prestigious university show those people who consume a lot of tinned food during a year are in danger of terminal illness like intestine cancers. Although fast food restaurants and canned food benefit us in some cases, we should not forget their injurious influences on our health. "Because of application additives and preservatives chemicals in processed food, people are in jeopardy of indigestive disease," physicians say.

To sum up, I feel that eating out has some advantages and disadvantages. Consuming canned food can save our time and energy and also we can go fast food restaurant whenever we are tired of cooking. On the other hand, it carries some disadvantages due to the fact that having some chemicals which cause to indigestive illnesses.
farbodsalahi   
Feb 26, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS Task2 Types of music albums purchased by people in Britain [5]

It would be better off starting your second paragraph in this way:
On the one hand, 30% of women who bought pop music were at the age between 25 and 34. On the other hand, men of the same age showed almost the same percentage 28%...
farbodsalahi   
Feb 25, 2013
Writing Feedback / With no doubt, Experience is the best teacher [4]

With no doubt, experience is the best teacher which teaches individuals how to treat or make a decision in the future. There is certain inevitability that elder people have more experience than young people and they can make a better decision when encounter difficulties.

A large number of people are united in one belief that having experience helps them to handle their problems more effectively. For example, scientists who investigate natural phenomena are convinced that they can make a better conclusion when they get experience during their research and are able to cope with obstacles. Experience gives us valuable lessons which are gained by making mistakes. " Experience is a taskmaster teacher since it first examines individuals then teaches them," psychologists say.

On top of getting experience, individuals should make a real effort to learn about their faults and avoid from repeating them. It is with regret seen that some people repeat their mistakes several times and do not learn from them. On the other hand, we ought not to always get experience from our errors. Instead of that, we could learn some lessons from other individuals' adventures. For example, when some individuals come across problems in their careers and after that find a solution for it we can use their experience in favor of ourselves and avoid repeat same mistake in our job.

To sum up, I argue that experience is the best teacher. With the help of experience we are able to male logical decision so as to make progress. Having experience is a blessing. However, without experience we confront problems in our lives.
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