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Kjerry   
Oct 29, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS; Popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising;To what extent you agree? [NEW]

Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of the advertising
and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

This is ubiquitous that the power of advertising can hypnosis consumer. Some believed the high sales of popular products are effected by the power of advertising. What's worse, which they are sold are not what they are needed. In my personal view, power of advertising has greatly impact on consumer's buying decision when they are shopping.

To begin with, the purpose of organization , to advertise advertisement is to increase product's reputation. However the power of advertising has the ability to influence on consumer's decision making. For an example, most of all consumer, generally, are extremely rational on leveraging on a not advertised commodity. Yet when they face with advertised product, it would lose their scale easily. On the ground of consumers are impressed with the effect of advertisement. Mcdonald is an living example by adopting animation to attract children despite of whether their food is health.

What's more, when customer are in needed in certain commodities, it would associate with advertised product then probably go to buy. Perhaps they are loyal on certain band of product by blindly trust on advertisement. To do this , it could result two reasons. First of all, less understand on character of different product. To be specify, customer do not make a comparison on other product'features and price. Secondly it most likely to cause quality problem, when they know very little on a product.

To be conclude, when consumer confront with similar situation, they should be more rational to judge a product before make a purchase.

I think there is something wrong in expressing personal view but i cant tell. Hope all of you can give a good suggestion.
Kjerry   
Oct 29, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS: Are our zoos cruel to wild animals? [4]

First all all, we must know that it is human who pollute the environment most.
Human poison the environment

We cut down forest for....I think you try to use the word disafforest sounds better.

Use for example instead of ect.

I suggest you should do a lot of reading.
Kjerry   
Oct 7, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS ; The only way to guarantee getting a good job is to complete a course of university [5]

Many people say that the only way to guarantee getting a good job is to complete a course of university education. Others claim that it is better to start work after school and gain experience in the world of work.

How far do you agree or disagree with the above views?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Every one yearn for a well-paid and comfortable job. However, those 'people suppose to reach they goal either to get a good certificate or learn from work. In my personally angle, the two methods are basically no differences in learning working experiences to guarantee to get a good job.

To begin with, complete a course of university education capable of ensure a standard of knowledge to a certain position of work. It is the comfort way to guarantee a high-rank and high-salaries job. But this kind of situation is varies from person to person. Not everyone will stay for long if they are incompatible with the job. To be specify, some graduates do not combine theories and practice together. In other words they effort to spend their university time to get their certificate, but not to learn knowledge from university.

Moreover, university education equip with abilities, to give students course that relate with another field, they hardly touch in daily life.

As the proverb goes it is best learn by doing. Practical ability is the key to a employee to consider his promotion, especially those who gain experience from the world of work. They'll mater those skill easily by knowing working place.

Actually, learn from school and working are basically the same because of the both are the places to acquire knowledge. Knowledge from books is transformed from practical ability. As for learn from workplace, knowledge is accumulated and summerized from practical experiences. Reasons for employee to hire employee is employee can provides their labour hours and their skill to help company generate profit. in return company give them a sum of money.

To be conclude, practical experience and ability is the key to guarantee a good job. Complete a course in university and start work after school to gain experience both can make it. However knowledge and ability they equip with to guarantee them to get a good job is different from person to person.
Kjerry   
Oct 6, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS : What contributes for a GOOD JOB? University education or job experience? [6]

i think you are off the tropic. The whole essay you wrote about a good job but not to leverage the difference between before and after get the certificate.

You wrote ( the way to get a good job different from person to person and country and country) indeed the fact is true. You still have to describe the difference between country to country in your essay
Kjerry   
Jun 24, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTs---competition is much more importance than cooperation in school. do you agree? [2]

topic:

Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children should be taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults

It is quite interesting that some people hold the point of view about sense of competition should be advocated in school. others support that children ought to be taught how to cooperate with one another.

It is not difficult to image the sense of competition plays a significant role in educating children on the account of it greatly improved children's individual abilities on understanding and ability to do it himself or herself, not reliable to others. For example, In many countries schools always rank students exam score and separate the good and bad. However, experts explained that the world is full of competition and competition makes us better and better, especially on children, they are our next generation, competition will make them better to adapt our world.

However, other people think cooperation is much more useful than competition. This is because they believe the sense of competition is do it alone in teaching children. And they also believed cooperation can better adopt our community owing to every person lives in a group, they rely on each other therefore children should be emphasis importance of cooperation and the skill of it. In my point of view, there is not improvement on personal ability without competition and there is no efficiency to finish a job without cooperation.

In concluded, competition and cooperation both should be advocated in educating children. The purpose of it is to develop their skills and abilities to become more useful adults
Kjerry   
Jun 24, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS, To some people, studying HISTORY has very little value; what is your view? [10]

Hi! shinichi75

i think you should to make your sentences more conciseness now you see below. beside i think your example below is little bit boring. the patriotism part would much more interesting

if you set a few example on it

Moreover, knowledge and skills that we got in the past would also help us to overcome our difficulties in life. This means that we would easily make our decisions to the situations that are the same to the past. For example, in your exam, if you have made a wrong answer for a question, you would have been easy to choose the right answer for the same question in another exam. Learning the past would prevent us from doing wrong things and easily to find solutions to our problems.
Kjerry   
Jun 17, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS; Teachers would not be need anymore in the classroom as a result of computers [4]

Topic: As computers are being used more and more in education, there will be soon no role for teachers in the classroom.

This years advanced tehnologies has changed human behaviour, surprisingly it has become a trend to change the way we are study in school. Some said there will be no standing for teachers to teach in school.

To study at school was the only way to acquire knowledge but with the community demand, many advanced technologies are invented to provide convenient, quick to people. For example modern student have heavy learning pressure, they cost hours to travel to and back from school that was waste time and energy, some student even scarify their sleeping time to finish their homework. Besides school study is "stupid", it is slowing down fast learner's learning speed on account of crouse schedule is fixed in a certain time Especially some people who show great interest.

However school teaching is not play little use to student because of human contact influence them in a positive way. First school teacher has sophisticated experience. They can conduct student some knowledge that textbook or online are not often see. Second school teaching has kind of effect that make student feel real on what they learn not something learn virtually. Last but not least school teaching also teach the importance to study in group and respect one another and improve social skill. What's more parts of student have learning problem they can not work out the problems themselves hence it need better collaboration.

By the large, advanced technologies has changed our behaviour, it doesn't mean the conventional way is no use to them. we should to take advantage of this two and master our skill or knowledge better to contribute to our world.
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