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Posts by Linh Hoang
Name: Linh Thuy Hoang
Joined: Mar 22, 2014
Last Post: Apr 15, 2014
Threads: 5
Posts: 12  
From: Viet Nam
School: National Economic University, Vietnam

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Linh Hoang   
Apr 15, 2014
Writing Feedback / Fixed punishment or flexible one? [5]

Some people think that there should be fixed punishment for each type of crime. Other, however, argue that the circumstances of individual crime, and the motivation to committing it, should always be taken into account, when deciding on the punishment

Discuss both these view and give your own opinion?


There are many arguments for both views of whether we should have fixed punishment for each type of crime or not.
On the one hand, fixed punishment has some advantages. It can be clear for individuals about what certain punishment they will be got when intending to commit a crime. It helps the judge become easier and more convenient. Moreover, fixed penalties also lead to stability in society because people will consider carefully before acting whatever. However, it has some down sides. Fixed punishment sometime is absolutely arbitrary. If people know exactly things they will be punished, they can find the way to avoid it because the law is required to accurate to each detail. On the other hand, the instance and the motivation to committing crime need to be examined before deciding anything. It is clear that crime of killing people for self-defense is absolutely different from serial killing. We cannot judge as the same one. Considering carefully is always a prerequisite for ensuring justice and equity.

From my point of view, there have to be fixed punishment for almost crime except for something which are serious crimes such as criminal one. The government should range penalties from minimum to maximum, and then basing on each situation to generate decision. The Law also have been foreseeable any exception. For example, people who make damage for another should remedy according to the level of harm, it is not the same in each case. We also see that some person killing for self-defense will be innocent in some particular situations. Or in some countries, the law exempts thieves stealing the food in period of famine, the need for food seem not a crime.

Overall, the answer maybe lies at the middle. We should not fix all of punishment. Everything need be flexible to protect interest of citizens.
Linh Hoang   
Apr 15, 2014
Poetry / "I Always Wonder why..." - POEM [3]

personally, i think you should keep sound, grammar is just small error. Sometime, we can forget grammar in one poem.
Linh Hoang   
Mar 27, 2014
Writing Feedback / Writing: The high sales of popular consumer goods/ advertising as extremely powerful tool [15]

i put sentence " ads... what extent do you agree or disagree" on subject name but i dont know why it is changed like what you saw. Plz, check for me why all of my topics are changed. i dont know why? when i post my essay, it's already topic as i worte but after that it is changed like one sentence in my essay. It is reason why you said about prompt and i dont know what it is. We are misunderstanding each other. I think i put topic already, but what you see is not this topic at all :(
Linh Hoang   
Mar 27, 2014
Writing Feedback / IELTS: Studying at university to be successful? Yes, but it is not main decisive element. [6]

Oh, i got your view after checking something. I dont pay attention on my subject, I always put my topic on it. But i dont know why it is changed. "Studying at university to be successful? Yes, but it is not main decisive element" is not what is wrote from begining of my essay, it just 1 idea in my essay. I always use topics in some Ielts book and always show requirement at the begining. Thanks so much for your help. I'm trying to find why my topic is changed as 1 sentence in my essay.
Linh Hoang   
Mar 26, 2014
Writing Feedback / IELTS: Studying at university to be successful? Yes, but it is not main decisive element. [6]

thank for dumi, you and Pahan always remind me about my prompt. Although he explain something for me, i still get some confuse. When i study writing, my teacher haven't mentioned to "prompt" yet. So, you can give me an example? For example, with this topic, if you include your prompt in essay, what it is?
Linh Hoang   
Mar 26, 2014
Writing Feedback / price of petrol vs traffic & pollution - temporary solution [3]

In many developing countries, the traffic and pollution issues are becoming seriously more and more. Then, goverment adopted some policies to restrict it and the increase in price of petrol is one of them. As the high price of petrol, it maybe has partly some effects on me but it not at all.

From my view, the rise in price of gasoline can be seen as temporary sollution. It brought some satisfactory results such as many people now using public transports in stead of their own cars, or some wealthy families are replacing all facilities using gas by ones using natural energy. It can be seen clearly that this method base on law of nature like the increase in price lead to the decrease in demand. Therefore, it is a good application in short-term.

On the other hand, it get some down sides in long period of time. In fact, not many people can afford to utilise clean energies rather than petrol, so it causes a big deal with a lot of people who have no choice for using gas. They must bear a huge cost per month for travelling. In addition, we should acknowledge that gasoline in inelasticity, thus the increase much in price just lead to the small change in using it. It is really not effective in long-term. In my opinion, goverment should focus on educate citizen's perception. If you know what exactly are being hamful your life environment, you could control it better. Comparing between developed countries and developing ones, there are huge gap in problems related to traffic and pollution. Maybe the reason is rich countries can implement appropriate policies on education.

Overall, high price of gasolline is not bad idea but it will be never become a best sollution to depress such kind of this issues like congestion and pollution as well.
Linh Hoang   
Mar 25, 2014
Writing Feedback / IELTS: Studying at university to be successful? Yes, but it is not main decisive element. [6]

The degree of university seem like a good evidence to prove that you were able to work in some majors. After graduating high school, people usually going on higher level and achieve some signficant successes. However, in fact, looking back to the past, there are many typical models about stoping at high school or droping out university and become very famous by their talent. In my oppinion, studying at university is realy supported for our career later on but it is not main decisive element.

On the one hand, higher learning, better opportunities because we are taught fundemental knowledge and adapt easily to work in the future. For many countries, especially, those are possessed of traditional fondness for learning, children usually take University exam entrant as demanding of parent. Therefore, studying at university become a popular trend like a ensuarance of future career. According to major inhabitant, going to college has been nescessary in the mordern life. Let imaging that if you applied for a company and then you did not graduate, it would be unfavourable compare to other indicates in this situation.

However, everything has two sides. If you decided that spend time for experiencing real life rather than studying rigid theories at colleges, you might gain more practice knowledge. We must acknowledge that actual experience sometime become crucial factor for jobs. Or sometime, student after completing their study at high school, they must come to an university by their parent's decision. From my experiences, if you had no interest on studying, you could gain nothing. We can see examples like Bill Gate, Steve Jobs, both of them quited university then follow their passion and become famous and rich. Nevertheless, they always encourage people continuing their learning.

In conclusion, the answer is something in middle. We should combine studying at appropriate university and try to have more activities in real life as possible. University is where support for us in the future career. We will have both nescessary knowledge and soft skills which is significant benefit later.
Linh Hoang   
Mar 25, 2014
Writing Feedback / Writing: The high sales of popular consumer goods/ advertising as extremely powerful tool [15]

The high sales of popular consumer goods reflect power of advertising and not the real needs of society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The significant development in technology lead to the booming on advertising all over the world. We cannot deny that advertising has strong effect on the taste of consumers. However, people now are really alert, they usually make a careful choice and spend money on what is nescessary.

In my oppinion, because of the competion, advertising become an essential thing for all companies. By making an unique advertising, we can attract consumers, and then our products will be welcome quicker and easier. Sometime, the product might be not good at all, but companies still gain huge profit from this product as good marketing strategy. People can consume immediately for something that is not really requisite. We can see clearly that, nowaday, from tv to radio, everything needs advertise. It í becoming prior choice when we want launch a new good.

Advertising is extremely powerful, but it never control all about customers. What they want? what they need? It is definitely depend on their decision. People always know exactly which things they should spend on. In addition, althought advertising brings more information about goods, recent ones maybe exaggerate the truth about function and quality. Thus, consumers' belief is going down and attracting them at the first sight become a trouble. Moreover, people experienced some crisises and they are economizing more and more. They would not purchase products, if it did not essential for them and appropriate for their budget.

Overall, advertising has been significant benefits and it helps booting purchasing on products. However, it not is everything, people has personal oppinion in which whether they buy or not.
Linh Hoang   
Mar 24, 2014
Writing Feedback / Begin learning EL at primary rather than secondary school?Advantages outweigh disadvantage [4]

Thanks for globalization, countries on over the world can interact and creat an openness in economy, culture and so on. English, an international language, is playing the essential role than ever before. So, when is appropriate time to learn this langgue? Primary school or secondary school?. Im my oppinion, chidren should be touch with English as soon as possiple and can be learned from primary is really an advantage.

First of all, at primary school, brain of children can adapt to new langguage more quickly and easily. They are still programed to repeat the sound naturally, it facilitate learning another language, unlike adults who are learning English by trying remember more and more new words self-consciously. Sometime, it is not effective. In addition, because of the simple in primary level, we can have flexible timetable to make the goal to study English and practice more frequently, Thus, maintaining learners' ethusiasm. Everyone now can see clearly that there is nescessary of English in morden life. By learning other languages, subsequently, your career may become easier. You can also gain much more understanding about foreign cultures.

However, this has some disadvantages. As you know, at primary school, teachers usually come from lower level than ones at secondary school. Therefore, maybe they have not enough standardizarion and nothing to ensure that children can be taught in righ way. When a fault become a habitat, it's really difficult to correct it in later time. If learning English is wrong from the first step, all ethusiasm and advantage make no sense. In fact, there is not much worry about this issue, because we can prevent strategically by adopting suitable govement policies, such as more investing on primary teachers or build more international schools, etc.

To conclude, I still believe that English is really helpful and it could be learned more effectively when you have been young. Young children who almost act according to instinct and quickly adapt to new things will have more social benefits.
Linh Hoang   
Mar 22, 2014
Writing Feedback / Can money bring happiness ? why or why not ? [7]

I have some edits, hope that everyone can improve it. Thanks much!
Many people often wonder that whether money brings happiness or not, but until now, there are many arguments.
In my opinion, actually, happiness has no identified definition. I think it depends on each person. Some people have much money, but they are still bored and lonely, while other wealthy people have it and also know how to spend it, so their lives are full of happiness.

Theoretically, that money does not means happiness, it can not be measured by material values. However, if we look at it from practical life, there are many facts that financial pressure has been destroying relationships.

For instance, some couples can not get married because they can not support for familial life or they still got married but faced enormous troubles beacause of lacking the finance . It is clear to see that, especially, in past time, your future marriage or even friendship was defined by their families financial sides.

Therefore, money is distribuing an essential role in our life. Having money, we can affort many things and improve our living standard. Thus, it can bring a comfort life and eventually, people will feel happy.

On the other hand, rich people often doubt, weather their friendship is genuine, or people get in touch with them, just to get profit. One person who live in doubts and fear can never be happy. Or sometime, children who lived in the rich family usually experience lonely feeling as their parent are always busy. In fact, the more life is morden and developed, the more children are autism.

In conclusion, money is inseparable part of our lives and it must be used to stable relationship, or support others. In that case, money will make more sense and bring happiness.
Linh Hoang   
Mar 22, 2014
Writing Feedback / Can money bring happiness ? why or why not ? [7]

i think in IELTS academic test, we should use more formal words rather than spoken words like "i think", "i hope", so on. So, "in my oppinion" is ok in this situation. It's just my opinion :)
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