Writing Feedback / Humans are the most clever and talented creature across the world [2]

It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance/ or sport or music and others are not. However it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician.

Humans are the most clever and talentest creations in cross the world. One thing that separates humans with other creations is ability of thinking and analyzing. However, there are common qualities between humans, some people are much more successful than others and become well-known in different field such as sports, music science and the like. A group of people think that celebrities were born with a great talents and that's why they are succeeded. In contrast anther group believe that any person can become a good sports person or artist or scientist. these two point of view will be discussed before a well-reasoned conclusion is found.

there is an agreement that famous and successful individuals are born with a talent brain. If we read celebrities's biography we can result that this idea is not wrong because most of them were genius people in their childhood. Take Lione Messi, the best soccer player in Barcelona, for example. Barcelona's managements discover his genius and made a fantastic player of him. In other words leaders of Barcelona discover his talent in football that has existed in him. Furthermore, many singers have had a good tone of voice in their lifetime from childhood to old age.

On the other hand, it is claimed that talent and ability are acquisitive knowledge. In other words, the proponents of this idea believe that each human can reach to anythings that he/she want. They look humans as a amazing creations with great deal of skills. If we think a little more deeply we will understand this view is correct too. many scientist were people who leave school because they weren't capable students. For instance Edison , inventor of Electricity, Einstein, the best mathematician in the world, and many other individualists. What thing that made a scientist of them is their efforts and try.

Personally, I believe that however many singer and good sports person are genius persons, efforts and challenges with problems with aim of meeting success is much more important in each person's life. In my case, for example I use to go to Yoga course and I always though I can't do the movements of Yoga never because they were very difficult for me but after one years efforts I learned how I can do that.

in sum up, all humans have talent but in different pattern and the more important of talent is effort for discovering it. many successful individuals were people who had less talent than usual people but had more effort. According of attraction of law, there is nothing in the world that a person demand it and he/she can't gain it.

Writing Feedback / I believe that there is no job or major or expert which is regarded as the best in society [2]

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Inventors are not as important to society as doctors. to what extent do you agree with statement?

There are so many majors at universities and many activities toward development of technology and improvement of the world. Among them some majors are more important in point of society's view such as medical. However, doctors play an important role in society, they are not very effectiveness on introduction technology. In other words it is agreed that inventors are people who make the world change and easy for living and they are as important as doctors.

Duty of doctors is curing patient people. The serious diseases such as cancer and diabetes and ... requiring new methods and technology and in generally, doctors are not people who invent these new facilities for patients. Actually they use of new technology which are invited by other inventors. So if we look deeply we can understand besides efforts and try of doctors in people's health, inventors have roles in this work.

on the other hand, there is no doubt that what things that cause changing in lifestyle between different generations are new invention not medical advances. Take a world with strong doctors without inventors for example so in this world there is no new technology such as computer, internet, various machine and ... in this case, all generations live the same each other. Even imagination of this world is disaster actually without new invention and technology life will be so bored and meaningless. However it is usual that when a person use an amazing invention doesn't think about it's inventor and in the most of the time may be doesn't know who is it's inventor? and it is exactly difference between doctors and inventors. By the way, I don't believe that this discrepancy makes inventors introverted and secluded as a group of society in compered with doctors.

in sum up, I believe that there is no job or major or expert that be the best in the society. By this I mean for having better world than yesterday all societies need all of people's skills who live in. Not only just doctors and inventors, but also teachers, building's worker, engineers, waiters and other careers.

Writing Feedback / The internet has caused a considerable discrepancy between modern life and past life. [2]

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the widespread use of the internet has brought many problem. what do you think are the main problems associated with the use of the web? what solution can you suggest?

These days with improvement of technology lifestyle has changed. As far as I concerned among them internet has found a special place and play an important role in people's life. It has affected on communication, entertainment, knowledge and even health of people. Actually internet has caused a considerable discrepancy between modern life and past life. However it has made life easy and comfortable for humans, it can has harmful effects on customers. In this essay we will analysis the most important problems of using internet and several factors will be presented for solution them.

first of all there is widespread agreement that there is no thing more important than health so first we will explain negative effect of internet on health.Studies suggest that digital means such as PC, laptop, cell phone ,... have detrimental effects on heart and brain even overusing of them can cause of some serious diseases such as cancer also it can lead sedentary life style that obesity is a result of it . Secondly it can be addictive so it cause some users avoid to do their daily work and about student do homework.Even it is seen that employees use internet for personal activity in their workplace instead of do their duties. In addition there is a problem related to children or even young people and it is that there are some websites such as chatting rooms for making friend. I think it can be dangerous because you do not know who is the other person.

In my opinion, we should try to fell these negative effects. First we should do research and gain information about the right way of using internet for instance I read in article about detrimental effects of computers and internet on our health and in it was written distant between our eyes and desktop should be 20 cm otherwise our eyes will be week . Secondly users should manage their time in using net. Especially parents can limit hours that they children spend on net and encourage them to do other hobbies such as play football, tennis or paint.

overall, there is no doubt that benefits of internet is much more then it's harmful effects.We should know that we are living in real word not virtual world. Social web such as Facebook, Line and Viber are very interesting useful for us, providing that we devote a suit time for using them.

Writing Feedback / Life without changes means life without emotions. Psychologists help is suggested. [3]

People naturally resist making changes in their lives. What kind of problems can this cause? What solutions can you suggest?

There are several factors that are suggested by psychologists for providing to get depretion.One of these factors is making chenges in life. It means that humans should help theirself for avoiding to stable life.These days with variety inventions and improvment technologies making change is much easier than past. In these essay we will analysis problems that may be exsisted in some peaple life who have uniform life and will explain the solutions of it.

One of main problem of living without any changes can be that this group of peaple loss oppertunities of modern life.For example the new televisions and refrigerators or in general furnitures are made with new fesilities and technologies so it is useful we change our old means with new one.However, making changes is not just related to our object it can be hapen in our attituation. Some peaple espesialy traditional humans oppose changing their beliefs and I think it is the worst behaviour that a person can has because humans were created till be thinker and philosopher. Actually each book can open a new vision in our life so I think this group of peaple eventually will be solarity and sactidud also the most problem that they will have is that they can not have a good relationship with their childeren.

In my openion, there shouldn't be put great stress on beliefs. The most important factor for providing new changes depend on own person. In other words, each person should try to accept changings in his/her life and try to make changes. It is not hard, some time making new friends, or chainging hair color or even cooking new foods can be inexpensive and useful changes in our live. If accepting new changes is difficult for some peaple they can go to the psychology doctor or read psychology books or talk to some others who can help them.

in sum up some peaple with oppose making changes never able to experience some new situation and it make life uniform so life will be without emotion for them.