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Name: Kryštof Melkes
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Varlamow   
Jan 8, 2017
Writing Feedback / What would I do if I were a billionaire? [5]

billions in a pocket



Although I am not a poor student it is probably impossible that I could become billionaire however let's find out what would I do and where would I invest all the money. Does not matter how would I get the amount of money...

I´m extremely interested in confectionary, therefore it could be my first choice. On the other hand we ought to be generous and gracious thus I would look for other ways how to spend the proper amount of money.

Honestly in our country are overmuch number of schools and hospitals, which need aid. I think it is right to provide humanitarian aid for people in need. Accordingly I would support schools and hospitals which are at least appreciated.

Secondly, I would like to provide food, permanent shelters and clothes for the poor. I am aware of not being able to grant all the poor nevertheless I could help some of them.

Thirdly, it is necessary to improve the quality of jobs and ensure better working conditions. And also I would like to boost opportunities for young people such as courses and lectures at no costs.

Finally, it would be useful to improve the synergy between civil and defence space programmes...
Being billionaire is not matter of option. You must be firm and strong because of people who become your friends due to your cash on your wallet.
Varlamow   
Oct 30, 2016
Writing Feedback / A person who I admire - my mother - she belongs to people I trust the most [2]

Person I admire

Probably, it is common to admire own mother, however, she is the right person I chose for this article.

Everyone always has a person to admire. For instance it is a successful businessman or famous actor. And what is the main reason? They support us greatly, they show us the proper way of life... And yes, they are often on first pages on tabloid magazines. My mother has the same effect on me, in spite of not being world known person as actors and businessmen are.

I don't want write about her appearance or her usual behaviour. In the next lines I am going to explain few her good deeds she has done to me and which influenced me a lot.

When I was at elementary school I was bullied by older schoolmates. There were times that I hate everyone around me, except my mother and father. I have cried so many tears and felt so alone. The names they called me, they hurt real bad. I came to school and didn't want to fight, but I wanted to learn... And do you know what happened? My mum showed them the rules of law. I was extremely grateful and sure I can count on her whenever I need. It was many years ago, but how it is nowadays? She has always energy to clean the whole house after exhausting working hours, but I don't admire her due to this enthusiasm. Continue reading...

Regardless of I am 17 years, only now I am realizing, that she taught me to keep moving even though I'm close to giving up. I am type of person, who can not stand waiting for some proper moment. Easily say I am eager. She ranks among people I trust as much as I can, despite our usual struggles. In the last two years, we made a huge progress in communication. To tell the truth, I take her into my confidence these days.

My final sentence is quite unexpected. I don't want to miss her.
Varlamow   
Mar 21, 2016
Writing Feedback / My favorite author: J.K.Rowling (nowadays, the best writer) [2]

My favorite author

I have read many books, however I appreciate authors of adventure writings. These days I read Harry Potter, which is written by J.K.Rowling. Therefore my favorite writer is J.K.Rowling. The Harry Potter is a main writing of J.K.Rowling. The book is separated to 7 parts. Actually, I read a number 2 named Harry Potter and the Chamber of Secrets. J.K.Rowling`s second book is just as funny, frightening and unexpected as her first, Harry Potter & the Sorcerer's Stone.

She is known as a writer of world famous Harry Potter series. Needless to say, she received several awards such as Hans Christian Andersen Award or The Edinburg Award. The magazine Forbes estimated on February 2004 her property approximately about 576 million pounds, nevertheless she is the first millionaire, who gained all money by writing books. At the moment, she is the richest woman on British Isles.

J.K.Rowling was born in July 1965 in England and grew up in Chepstow. She earned a French and Classics degree. Joanne visited Paris for one year and after the return, she started work as a researcher at Amnesty International among other jobs. She got an idea about Harry Potter book during the train journey from Manchester to London. At the final stop, she had created all the figures and the basic plot of a first part called Harry Potter & the Sorcerer's Stone. Then, she moved to the Portugal where she got married. In 1993 she gave a birth to her daughter Jessica Rowling. When the marriage ended, she returned back to the Edinburg. The first Harry Potter was published in June 1997. Further six parts of book were published in the next 10 years. To tell the truth, the second title Harry Potter and the Chamber of Secrets was number 1 in the adult hardback bestseller charts for a month after publication. All parts are translated to 44 world languages. Rowling has written two supplement books, too.

No doubt, she is the greatest writer of adventure books because of her talent. I admire her verbal skills and style of writing.


Harry Potter and the Chamber of Secrets

The book is at the same time amazing and exciting. Rowling uses rather folk sentences and phrases, which are understandable.
Book explains life of young wizard Harry throughout his childhood. Harry is in his second year at Hogwarts School of Witchcraft and Wizardry. Little does he know that this year will be just as eventful as the last. with his friends Ron Weasley and Hermione Granger.

Her books in particularly have a deep impact on my mind, therefore, that is why she is my favorite author.
Varlamow   
Mar 21, 2016
Writing Feedback / Nowadays, its is quite common for young people to have a break year before going university. IELTS2 [4]

countrues
become independence I would connect it differently
,and i will discuss both prespectives in following essay.
Firstly,having a gap year is an opportunity for young people who want seeking their aspiration and enrich their experience and broaden their horizons................. dont use AND two times again in one sentence

some young adult decide having a job to accommodation working conditions.........would write: decided to have
if thay do not have..............they
,and as a reult ..............result
abailiues ............abilities
However,this is not only a best way to get a clear perspectives of what they wantalso have more motivation to gain their batter life.
Varlamow   
Apr 7, 2015
Writing Feedback / Now it is almost impossible to avoid the influence of the media on our lives [2]

I don't speak English perfect, but my honest opinion is very positive. Truly say, that is very interesting and useful text.. Needless to say that you are excelent writer, I think. I am sorry, but I am not able to find any mistakes.. I hope, your another text will be sympathetic like this
Varlamow   
Apr 7, 2015
Writing Feedback / Volkswagen Passat - the car description [NEW]

Volkswagen Passat

Today, I am going to introduce the new car, that was made in our company Volkswagen. Its name is Passat. This is the car that is made by Volkswagen, one of the largest car brands in the world. The new model has become a revolution of the middle-class car. For someone it is a boring car, but one may change opinion about it now. It looks more interesting than before. Passat has a lot of innovations like a funny system called MirrorLink, which integrates various Android smartphone apps or a pedestrian monitoring system. VW Passat has two versions: sedan and estate car.

The new Passat is a spacious, comfortable and a practical car. Also, it is slightly shorter, lower and wider. It is based on the MQB platform. MQB is implemented in all models from the latest Golf to Audi TT. The car is being offered with many economical engine options. The 1.6 TDI will be the cleanest choice, but 2.0 TDI isn't more expensive, so I recommend you this engine. This is available with 150hp and 187hp. You can choose a manual or an automatic gearbox, for example, six-speed manual or seven-speed dual-clutch DSG automatic. If you want to be special, buy a bi-turbo 237hp TDI with a 4MOTION all-wheel drive and a DSG gearbox.

Volkswagen also offers petrol engines, but who can buy it? It has bigger consumption and smaller range. One would object that the gasoline engine is cheaper, but there isn't any large difference. This year, the range will expand to include a GTE plug-in petrol-electric hybrid.

The interior is new, too. When you have a big family with 5 members, you needn't worry. The new Passat can transport three adults in the back, because the space is more generous than it is in the Audi A4 or BMW 3. The new VW model has many high-tech equipments: adaptive cruise control, front and rear parking sensors or Traffic-Jam Assist, which steers, drives and brakes the car in stop-and-go traffic.

For a sheer ease of driving, everyday practicality, wonderful quality and available equipment options, the new VW Passat is close to become the class leader.
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