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The day I met her will shine like a beacon in my memory forever [31]
Tiantian, you are such a nice person. Thank you for your kind words. And I know what it is like to feel discouraged. I am glad you let go of that and then wrote another great essay that reflected who you were (eagles). Even when you wrote your first essay, everyone was very impressed. You are a great writer and a great person too, and I really have faith in the fact that you will continue to work hard and get into a very good school. And thank you for your faith in me, it was very moving.
Just remember at Columbia, the academic programs are quite rigorous and not for the faint hearted.
Liebe, as hard as it may be to believe, I am not fainthearted. heh. I am a very vocal person who stands up for my own and others' rights. I simply pointed out that negative remarks can be discouraging because no one else on the forum had mentioned it as far as I have seen.
And I am aware of the rigor of Columbia. I would not apply if I did not think I had a fair shot of getting in.
again, these criticisms are supposed to fuel an energy to wanting to improve, rather than degrade the essay.
Liebe, you are right. Criticism should motivate a person to do better. And it does. However, when it is phrased discouragingly or superciliously then it's a different story. There is a difference between constructive criticism and discouraging criticism.
Let me give you an example--sorry that I am using you, you are obviously not the only one.
^LOOOOOOOOL. Alright, hand to yourself :P
Right. Here, you are laughing at what I have just written. Not very encouraging. Nor is it constructive.
conversely...
^What gets exposed? You do not talk about it in the next sentence. If you attempt to do so, then 'expose' should be replaced with a more suitable word.
This is very constructive criticism. In fact, your comments scattered throughout my essay to be more specific really allowed me to write better essays in the future. There is not a single *nice* word here; no one wants false or undeserved praise--but this is good, honest & helpful feedback that I will apply in my future writing.
In many ways, an in-depth critique is a compliment.
Notoman, I agree with everything you are saying. An in-depth critique is certainly a compliment. Just wanted to mention that, on the other hand, an in-depth shredding-apart is not. (I know that did not make grammatical sense but you know what I mean. lol) It could be
helpful to some people, and then they ask for it.
Although this discussion has been fueled in my thread, I think (hope) it is not about me personally. If I post another essay here, I really would like everyone to be honest, and tell me when/if my writing sucks. Or my topic sucks. Or both. I am not new to the forum anymore, and knowing all of you by now a little makes it very easy to take your criticism well, and apply it. I respect all of you a lot.
Just when someone new comes here and posts their first piece of writing, I would hate to see discouraging remarks when they have just begun..the worst thing is that that would misrepresent how helpful this place is; everyone here has good intentions, and is intelligent and helpful. Sadly, when the writer is new here, they don't know that yet.