Writing Feedback / U.S. MAILING SERVICES HISTORIC COMPARISON [3]

The line chart reveals how to send the parcels by Federal Express and TNT Mail Service from 1920 to 2000 and is measured by the number. What stands out from the chart shows that while there was a fluctuation in the percentage of parcel delivered by FedEx, TNT experienced a gradual increase over the year.

In 1920, sending parcel through FedEx was considerable higher than TNJ Mail service. The percentage of Federal Express was 15000 of parcels, while the TNT mail service stood at approximately 5000. Over the following fourty years, there was a fluctuation in the figure of FedEx. This figure peaked at 24.000 in 1940. However, delivering parcels by TNT witnessed a rise to roughly 12.000 over the same year.

According to the chart, delivering parcels using TNT increased more quickly than using FedEx. In 1990, both mail services had the same number. The percentage experienced at 18.000 of parcels. After this, parcels which are delivered by TNT peaked at approximately 24.000 in 2000. It means the TNT witnessed higher than FedEx. However, the trend of FedEx was nearly stable over the same year. At the end of 2000, this reached at 17.000 of parcels.

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Writing Feedback / The picture reveals a turbine for generating electricity from wind and its best location [NEW]

Hallo guys, I need your help for improving my ability on writing essay.
Here is my essay,

The picture reveals a turbine for generating electricity from wind and where the best location is. What stands out from the diagram shows that while there are three possible locations for constructing the turbine, the best place for acquiring maximum wind strengths is in the high state.

The turbine consists of four tools such as steel, tower, generator, blades, and wind sensor. In the first stage of wind generating process, the wind turns into the blades, which is made of fiberglass or wood. Afterwards, wind sensor detects the wind direction and computes the speed which can be seen on the screen operated in the home near by the turbine. Interestingly, the generator produces at 1.5 megawatts of electricity.

In addition, the turbine located in the high area obtains optimum wind strengths. Compared to this, the turbine in the middle of sea generates lower electricity due to the landscape is not spoiled. Then, the turbine which is near by residence area produces at solely 100 kilowatts.

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Writing Feedback / Tourism in Nepal - number of foreigners visiting this country [3]

The pie chart and table below give information on tourist arrivals in Nepal in March 2008.

The chart reveals the number of foreigners from different regions who visit Nepal in March 2008 and is measured in percentage, and the table measures the increasing number from March 2007. Overall, it is noticeable that the number of tourists in several regions increased over a year. However, the Europeans were the most popular tourists coming to Nepal.

Turning to 2008, Asian (38 per cent) and European (37 per cent) experienced as higher number of tourists than the other regions when it came to visiting Nepal. On the other hand, the lowest point of visitors was Australian, which was solely less than one in twenty. Afterwards, at 21 per cent, North and South America and other regions showed as the remaining visitors to Nepal.

In addition, the total number of visitors from all regions from March 2007 to 2008 expanded to 5,910, which was 16 per cent. While the number of tourists from Europe saw as the highest point at 3,321, Asian experienced as the lowest point at merely 188.

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Writing Feedback / The people who are staying in a small community often live and communicate like among a large family [2]

Hallo guys. this is my first essay. I need your help for improving my writing skill, particularly on IELTS.

In the past, most people lived in small villages where everyone knew everyone else. Nowadays, most people live in large cities where they only know a few people in their area. What do you think were the advantages and disadvantages of living in a small community?

Several years ago, it is believed that numerous inhabitants staying in the settlement were close one another. However, in the modern time, societies living in the cosmopolitan merely have a few people communicating as well. While there are several benefits living in a small community, it also has certain drawbacks.

The mankind staying in a small community such as in the settlement will obtain kinship relationship. It is due to the fact that they can communicate regularly. To demonstrate, in the recent decades, many people living in villages in Indonesia such as Purwokerto, Cirebon and Kuningan and the other villages often make a conversation with their neighbourhood everytime. As a consequence, even though they live in a small community, yet they feel as a small family.

On the other hand, this circumstance occasionally causes several drawbacks for the inhabitants. First and foremost, living in a small community such in the rural area affects to boring condition in case local people stay in a long period. It is because they never encounter with the other people on their day-to-day lives. For instance, they always meet with the same people every day. Also, they will feel uphill when they face some accidents in order to ask a help since their neighbourhoods are busy in their garden or field in diurnal and nocturnal. To sum up, living in a small community sometimes deteriorates people.

In conclusion, it is evident that although there are some benefits obtained from living in the countryside, the people address certain disadvantages as well. It is imperative that people should come over to another community to get new experience and do not stay for a long time in the small village.