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Hargun003   
Feb 18, 2021
Scholarship / Applying the knowledge and experience essay. Sustainable Transportation SISGP [4]

... rely on the railway as it is the backbone (of what?)
... connects with the Sustainable Development Goals (SDG) but interlinked ...
... and the SL (give full form) system ...

This requires some refinement. Your intentions are good but the language needs to be more professional and less repetitive. Rest, good luck to you!
Hargun003   
Nov 6, 2015
Undergraduate / Development trajectories of Indian economy since Independence - correcting errors in the SoP [7]

It was during my undergraduate studies when I was disrupted yet susceptible by the development trajectories of Indian economy since Independence. When I was studying a semester course on "Development Process and Social Movements in Contemporary India", one issue specifically really made me question my own self and that was of farmer suicides in the country. After diligently following the newspaper articles by P. Sainath, one of the first Indians who has worked on the agrarian crisis extensively, and perusaling ( PERUSAL IS THE WORD I WANTED TO USE) Ranjana Padhi's , an Independent writer and activist , "Those Who Did Not Die:Impact of the Agrarian Crisis on Women in Punjab" revelated (REVELATION IS THE NOUN I WANT TO USE) the reality of women caught in the vortex of the agrarian crisis. I discovered that the peasant women are often not part of the frame when we are doing a research on agrarian crisis and its impact in India. And, this is why I felt that it is necessary to understand the delicate situation of the "farm widows" who have suffered from the agrarian crisis since 1991. I want to pursue my Masters in Development Studies and get to the roots of the problem as to why are we not sensitive towards those who didn't die? Why are we not giving agricultural women workers who form the backbone of Indian agriculture any attention? Why is a peasant woman denied space in her own society? My core research interest would be studying Indian peasant agriculture through a feminist perspective. Their reality and struggle compels the framing of new questions for the women's movement and the seeking of novel forms of redress and strategies to overcome their plight. Hence, It is this challenging issue to which I intend to contribute by evolving meaningful and optimal solutions through learning about theories and programs that can help me undo or prevent further damage to the women in this sector of our society.
Hargun003   
Oct 26, 2015
Graduate / SoP- Masters in Development Research on-Agrarian crisis and impact on peasant women [18]

I hope that you will not underestimate my qualifications and ability to complete this course based upon my being an undergraduate. As you can see from my supporting documents, I have managed to create an impeccable resume that details my important internship and research work that carries a direct relevance to my chosen major. It was apparent to me that I should keep in touch with the real world and that we college students are molders of society's future. Guided by this understanding, I took every chance to go beyond my textbooks and wet my feet in several extracurricular activities. I am serving currently as the Education officer for my "Connecting Dreams Foundation - College Chapter",It is a college society for which i am volunterring and it was after being a part of this organization I got to know the bitter realities of the rural India at the ground level . And, one of the incident while on a village visit ruminated and shocked me when one of the village women representative shared her story how the society instead of supporting her after the death of her husband, dissaproved her because she was a widow then and how feudal forces and the state officials attempted to crush her hopes of living by using violence and how they attempted to maintain the status quo when she had decided to lead other women like her to work on fields.

Therefore, being a part of Masters in Development Studies would help me study the impact of the agrarian crisis on peasant women from a multi-disciplinary perspective thus would help me in understanding the problem and finding solution for the same in a professional sense . I hope to develop advanced knowledge in the area of rural development and agriculture from a feminist perspective under the guidance of your faculty who have so much experience in the field of rural development and Gender...
Hargun003   
Oct 25, 2015
Graduate / SoP- Masters in Development Research on-Agrarian crisis and impact on peasant women [18]

@Vangiespen, I am in a dilemma, I find your second paragraph really good but it doesn't matches my Cv. So I thought of sharing with you my professional cv . I want to include my work experience but I am not getting as to how should I go about...The problem is coming in forming that paragraph.And, this is one of the main paragraphs off my SoP... :/






Hargun003   
Oct 25, 2015
Graduate / SoP- Masters in Development Research on-Agrarian crisis and impact on peasant women [18]

Thanks one again , one last query i suppose hahaha... my professors told me that you must include what you are studying and how that related to your course and even i checked on some websites of SoP this thing was common and this is why i wrote this...

"In my under-graduate studies, I was disturbed by the development trajectories of Indian economy since Independence when we were doing our semester course on "Development Process and Social Movements in Contemporary India" and "Sociology of Contemporary India", where I studied about the process of development that our country had adopted for its economic growth and how it is impacting the society and its elements.On issue specifically really made me question my own self and that was of farmer suicide due to agrarian reforms and lack of government attention. After examining the facts and stories laid down by P.Sainath ,who is one of the first Indians who had worked on the agrarian crisis extensively,I realized that peasant women are often not part of the frame when we are doing a research on agrarian crisis and its impact in India.And, this is why I felt that it is necessary to help the peasant women who have suffered from the agrarian crisis since 1991. I would like to learn about theories and programs that can help me undo or prevent further damage to the women in this sector of our society."

But, you asked me to omit this whole thing, so I am really worried as to what should I exactly include, one side say to include such info and you asked to omit .Lord!! help me again!
Hargun003   
Oct 24, 2015
Graduate / SoP- Masters in Development Research on-Agrarian crisis and impact on peasant women [18]

1. The goal of your desire to study a masters in Development Studies. What career or job do you see yourself working in after you complete the course?

After completing my masters I want to help an organisation for which i am volunteering right now i.e. connecting dreams foundation.They work for women empowerment using entrepreneurship and also in future i wish to join UN. Since I am writing that my thesis would be on rural development so I thought of working in the same.

2. The relation of that goal with your current job. For example, are you interested in the masters course because you want to get a promotion at your current job?

I am a undergraduate student and I have a pretty strong CV. I have interned for National Commission for women for a month, a Non profit organisation working for women's rights, National Human rights commission and i have been part of undergraduate research projects, but i was uncertain as in how will I incorporate these things in a paragraph because I dont want to exceed the word limit of 900-950 words...

and @vangiespen , i have thought of submitting my documents by 31st october , otherwise the last date is 13th november ^_^
Hargun003   
Oct 24, 2015
Graduate / SoP- Masters in Development Research on-Agrarian crisis and impact on peasant women [18]

Dear @Vangiespen,
First of all I want to thank you for constantly guiding me and supporting me, actually i should write that you have really motivated me to apply for my application at this institute, which is a fact, so thank you for that... Here is the latest draft of my letter of motivation, I have incorporated your ideas and views with my older letters, please have a look and guide me as always :)

Motivation letter

The motivation in pursuing a masters is to obtain both the theoretical knowledge with applicable research abilities and practical professional skills at a higher level.Within the concentration of your Masters programme of Development studies, I have a great interest in the field of gender sustainability and political economy of development specifically the rural development and agriculture.
Hargun003   
Oct 23, 2015
Undergraduate / Habit of Eating Local Food Shaped My Attitude Towards Life - Prompt 1 Common App [13]

I regard cheap local culinary adventure as lucrative as gold-hunting and enjoy sitting at these stalls smelling the mixed aromas grilled kebabs, fried rice, and meatball soup.

Very well written, and your English is really good, you misunderstood yourself!! The personal touch in the second para is good, but it would be great if you could make your last paragraph more simple. Otherwise it is really nice! :-)
Hargun003   
Oct 23, 2015
Scholarship / Scholarships and the Financial Aid letter - Graduate Institute for Masters in Development Studies [10]

One thing, It is my hope that your scholarship committee will find it within themselves to be that helping hand for my future. Don't you feel that this line would sound cheesy? Sorry about it, correct me if I am wrong... and I felt that maybe the last paragraph that you deleted would sound that I am connected to my objective of coming to the Institute. Thus, I wrote that.
Hargun003   
Oct 23, 2015
Scholarship / Scholarships and the Financial Aid letter - Graduate Institute for Masters in Development Studies [10]

Vangiespen, I have worked on my Letter for Financial Aid, and followed your instructions. I would appreciate it , if you could give your comments! Thank you so much for your time and concern! :)

"You have two hands, one for helping yourself, the other for helping others." - Audrey Hepburn

I wish to earn the privilege of getting a scholarship as my family doesn't have that many resources to sustain my two year masters on a foreign land , as my father is a Central Government Employee and my mother is a housewife .We live in a government accommodation. We don't have assets that we could take help from, for financing my studies.Although my family supports me and have always supported me with my dreams, but I genuinely feel that with such limited resources I won't be able to fulfill my dreams. I have seen my parents taking the pain of loans to pay our school fees and how difficult it was for them to educate my sister and me. Also being an International Student I won't be able to work off campus for at least six months since I will be on a student Visa and thus without financial aid and work permit, it will be hard for my parents to afford my monthly expenses . This is why I believe that it is a high time that I should ease the burden of finances from my parents shoulder.

I would really wish for the scholarship, as with that I would get the opportunity to study at a world-class Institute, and I know the kind of big dreams I have for myself and the people I need to serve will be fulfilled with the kind of education I will get from the Institute. Also,the scholarship would help me in paying for my books and study materials and even part of my tuition fees and accommodation fees.And moreover, I will feel relieved and happy about not dealing with loans and I would thus focus more on my studies than focusing on finances which is very important.

I believe that if someone has a passion for something they will excel in that field no matter what but , if you don`t get the chance or if you are not able to, you will lead a life of regret forever, and with that said, I don't want to be in that situation five years from now. I have decided that I want to be a part of this Institute and I will work really hard and with full determination both academically and professionally for myself, for my education, and for those I have promised to serve.

I would be grateful to you if you could provide me the scholarship so that limited finances don't hinder my academic - professional growth and my dreams for myself ,my family and my society.

Ma'am/Sir, I am confident in joining the XXX and with the help of scholarship I am sure I will be able to study and focus on my thesis better. I really have an innate desire to work for women affected by the agrarian crisis and I assure you that I will work very hard and with full dedication and would make the Institute feel proud of my work in future.

Thanking you in advance in considering my application and giving the chance to show my motivation for the scholarship.

Thanking You
Hargun003   
Oct 22, 2015
Graduate / SoP- Masters in Development Research on-Agrarian crisis and impact on peasant women [18]

This is the new version of my letter, please guide me now...Word limit is 900 words

Motivation Letter

The actual reason that you feel the need to pursue this course.

The connection between your interest in the masters course, your undergraduate course, and your current profession

How you see the university you are applying to helping you to achieve your purpose for study. Either through research, internships, or other related activities or learning processes

What you hope to achieve in the future after completing this course.
Hargun003   
Oct 22, 2015
Undergraduate / A person want to meet - my grandfather. Personal Statement. [5]

When I was 9years old, I met my grandfather for the very first time.

At the restaurant, my mother and grandfather were mostly talking about something that I did not get, but I felt was comfortable. After their talking conversation was got over, I talked about my school and friends.

I usually get advice from my parents, but grandfather's opinion can be different. He does not know me well therefore he is unbiased which can lead to better advice.

You can end up by saying, " There are moments in life when you wish you could bring someone back and hug them. To spend the day with them jst one more time, give them one more hug, kiss them and hear their voice again. One more chance to say I love you...I want my grandfather to meet me"...
Hargun003   
Oct 22, 2015
Scholarship / CHEVENING Work in organization focused on kids with HIV/AIDS/ full scholarship award from an Embassy [5]

I believe that you have been very descriptive which is a very good thing but i think you went all emotional and wrote a lot. So, i think you need to cut down on your initial paragraph which is in green. because you next two paragraphs are more important and interesting as compared to the first one and by this you will be able to cut down on words.

I was awarded a merit based full scholarship ...
... event was organized systematically and was well appreciated by all.


This is way too descriptive, dont tell them stories, limit your words by directly hitting the point.

Another exposure to networking skills began ...
...
In my current job, I am in charge of the media ...


These two paragraphs are relevant , so just work on omiting some lines in para 1 and the para in between where you talk about your experience in bengaluru. Since you have to write you conluding para also so by cut shorting and being less descriptive in the begening you will be able to save yourself. Your introductory line was really interesting and i liked the fact that you laid your theme of the letter to that itself.
Hargun003   
Oct 22, 2015
Graduate / SoP- Masters in Development Research on-Agrarian crisis and impact on peasant women [18]

Thank you Vangiespen for your valid comments, but I am really confused as from one side my professors are asking me to add valid references of people and told me that you should describe from where you are coming, what all problems are there in your country, what problem i want to study, why i want to study, how as a professional after completion of my course i would help the people or my interest group, how this institute will help me reach this objective and how this place is different from others which attract you the most and thus i had to criticise oxford and lse. So, i focused on this but now, after going through what you said i am in dilemma ass to what should i remove and what i should add. And plus the word limit was 800 words, i wrote 1393 words so that in case of editing the extra stuff can get cancelled. Please guide me
Hargun003   
Oct 22, 2015
Writing Feedback / Disadvantages of watching TV - not only personal scale [5]

Past advancements on in the field of technology have has given birth to the now-dominant media, television which has changed our lifestyle to a drastic dramatic degree.

... which would subsequently lead to many children mistakenly setting the characters they see as role models resulting in aggressive behaviors and juvenile delinquency being on the rise.<<<<====== Very well written as you have given your justification too!!

It is well written and as you have asked for it , it would give you 25 / 30 ; I am taking your five marks because of some grammatical mistakes and also you are just giving one sided view,you should be open minded too, the law of nature doesn't talk about extremist steps rather it is of a balance. So i would suggest you to bring a balance in your essay by quoting merits of media/television on children and the society in the end. This would give you a good bonus point because you are calling for a balance. Here, you can say that even though it has many side effects, media has brought awareness among the youth, they also know what is happening in the society i.e. by watching news. They get to see their role models i.e. good role models like sportsmen , political leaders etc. They start to aim high... just like this you can mention the merits. and in the end you can say that there should be a balance in life, children should spend time with family, parents should talk to their children and spend time with them, Children should make friends and have enjoy their childhood rather than wasting time on net! (Instead of putting restrictions, suggest fun loving innovative , children friendly ideas) Nobody wants restrictions in their life rather we seek for alternatives which are sustainable and fun loving and enjoyable! Rest your article is good as you have given your justification and facts...:)
Hargun003   
Oct 21, 2015
Graduate / SoP- Masters in Development Research on-Agrarian crisis and impact on peasant women [18]

Dear all,
I am applying for my masters this year, I have planned to pursue my masters in development studies and wish to study my masters thesis on "agrarian crisis and its impact on women". I would appreciate your comments, please do editing , omitting and I am open to all criticism since I want to make it perfect and I want to get admitted there!!

Motivation Letter

"I am not ashamed to admit that if it had not been for her, I would have been long dead. She worked really hard on the farm and to take care of the children and me. Whenever I felt in better health, I would accompany her to the farm or to the shops. What am I going to do without her?" - Sangishetty Yadaiah, farmer from Andhra Pradesh, India

In the last 17 years, more than a quarter of a million Indian farmers and agricultural workers have taken their own lives in response to neo-liberal economic reform policies of 1991 that have left them dependent on expensive, genetically modified seeds, vulnerable on the global market and trapped in a cycle of debt. When we talk about the agrarian crisis in India and the quarter of a million farmers who have committed suicide since 1995, we tend to think about the men and the physical act of suicide-swallowing the very pesticides that landed them in debt after addressing final letters to village heads and prime ministers. The Media coverage of the "suicide epidemic" has largely failed to capture the acute ways in which women agricultural workers have also suffered in the crisis. In India, I have seen time and again that the burden of our economic reforms often falls on the working class, and particularly the women. The farmer suicides are no different, and this particular issue affected me very deeply especially after going through the academic work of P.Sainath, who is one of the first Indians who had worked on the agrarian crisis extensively.

I wanted to connect my interest of gender studies with the farmer suicides, and I know that there are issues beyond the male farmers that needed unlocking. In my under-graduate studies, I was disturbed by the development trajectories of Indian economy since Independence when we were doing our course on "Development Process and Social Movements in Contemporary India" and "Sociology of Contemporary India", where I realized that the terms of growth gains and societal attention have not been for regions, sectors, and social classes in India. As a result, there have been a raise in development demands through various civil, political, and human rights movement. However, due to the patriarchal nature of the Indian society, women in rural India who are still working hard everyday to pay back the debt taken by their husbands, they are taking care of their children's education ,are not even recognised by the Indian government as "farmers", since they rarely hold title to the land on which they work. "They are routinely denied access to credit and loans and rarely have access to government programs. The full scope of this injustice is unclear," says Center for Human Rights and Global Justice (CHRGJ) report 2011 , because government programs do not account for this discrimination.

To be able to feel the sufferings of others, is what makes us human , And this is the reason why I want to pursue my masters in development studies and get to the roots of the problem as to why are we not sensitive towards those who didn't die? Why are we not giving agricultural women workers who form the backbone of Indian agriculture and comprise the majority of agricultural laborers any attention?Why is a peasant woman denied space in her own society just because no one is in her family? .As a student, I have always believed in the famous proverb by Brigham Young, that " If you educate a man, you educate a man. If you educate a woman, you educate a generation." thus, as an education officer with the Connecting Dreams Foundation where we adopt a village and try to look for Sustainable and inclusive growth specifically the youth and women by encouraging them and acknowledging their traditional skills by introducing them with big corporates, I tried to encourage the peasant women to study and get educated as with education they would understand a situation differently and they would know their rights and would teach their offspring about it also, they would try to eliminate the social barriers of the society which bound them within their private spheres.

I believe that I would want to study the hidden suffering of the impact of agrarian crisis on the peasant women extensively and I am certainly sure that Graduate Institute is the place which would give me a platform to understand this problem in a practical and boundless manner and would help me in understanding this problem at a global level. I am sure that this is not a problem with my own country, there must be so many stories from all over the world. I want to understand this problem from a global perspective as it would not only broaden my horizon in understanding and identifying the problem, it would also give me the practical and workable solutions that would help me a lot in helping people of my country. The Institute was a chance introduction to me by my French teacher. Thereafter, I spent quite a lot of time browsing the Institute's website, reading faculty profiles, alumni success stories and watching the YouTube clips of Roberto , Kofi Annan and Ricardo speak to packed student audiences.

At present, none of the central universities and Institutes in India are offering an Interdisciplinary masters in Development Studies. Apart from the Institute has a reputation of giving both theoretical and practical knowledge as compared to the Masters in Development studies in Oxford, which have a reputation of being so theoretical, in the sense of divorced from anything practical in the 'real-world'. I personally don't mind theoretical knowledge provided it's rigorous. But what I really don't want to do is end up spending two years fascinated by facts and theories and in the end would feel like I don't know what I've learned. I need to work along with my studies in order to implement my theory into practise and this Institute would give me professional skills along with theoretical knowledge which would make me stand out in the global level. As far as MSC. In Development Studies in LSE is concerned, it would be very expensive for me as well as being only a one year program. I'm concerned that by the time I started to get my bearings and figure out a specific focus, the course would be over.There is far too much to learn and unlearn and one year is not enough. It would be way too heavy for one year. Thus, Graduate Institute is the only place from where I will be able to work on my concerned issue effectively where I will be able to study under the supervision of professors who have so much experience in the field of development and Gender. I could relate to Prof.Elisabeth Prügl, who would teach the course on gender sustainability, an article on "Does Gender Mainstreaming Work? Feminist Engagements with the German Agricultural State," where she writes how gender mainstreaming has rekindled debates about feminist engagements with the State.and that it is in line with my academic interests and because of that I would benefit from being a part of the Institute. I have no doubt that development studies at the Institute will meet the criteria of intellectual rigor that I have set for myself, for my education, and for those I have promised to serve.

I always believe in the concept of being a "Global Citizen", and thus after completion of my masters from the Institute, I will return to my home country, and would join rural organizations who are already working for this cause in order to accomplish enormous service.And if given a chance It would be my privilege to work for women from all over the world since this problem persists not only in my country, it is a worldwide phenomenon. We all live once and I believe that with this life we should bring a change in the society that we want to see, as said by Gandhi.

I am confident that overall opportunity to study with the Institute will broaden my horizons and give me an opportunity to gain world-class education and help me become an excellent citizen of this world. I am really very sure that with my personal experience and cultural background I will exceed your expectations and bring a meaningful contribution to the programme. Also, I will work really hard and would definitely be an asset to the Institute in the future.

Thanking you in advance for considering my application.
Hargun003   
Oct 21, 2015
Writing Feedback / School paper about My Weekend [2]

Hey,
so there are some couple of mistakes which I have corrected so check it out,
My weekend starts on Friday, after office hours . Me and my office mates hang around on badminton court.We play FOR around two hours and have some chit chat within.

After playing badminton, I usuallycome back home andprepare myself to watchingwatch any films on DVD. It will takes me to Saturday without notice when the story runs too well. This line doesnt make sense to me.

When I don't have any films to watch over, I will turns off IGNORE my morning alarms and prepare to sleep because Saturday is the best time to waking wake up at noon.

On Saturday, first thing that I like to do is checking my whole kind of social media before deciding to go out side. From those kind of media social, I will find any occasion that take my interest to From those sites, i get to know what is happening around and then accordingly I decide my day. When it comes nothing to do with Apart from that, I keep make occupy myself BY going outside to buy some food for lunch, then I lock up myself in my room to hang around with my laptop and television. Sometimes I go to THE church on Saturday night when I have a lot of plan on Sunday.

I start my Sunday with watching Doraemon series on television. Then I go to traditional market to buy things that I can consume in a few days, such as crackers, vegetables, fruits, mostly I buy dairy foods. I prepare my food stock on in refrigerator so it will be easier for me, when I need to chew some food.

Basically, I like a new things, so everytime I hear or GET TO know any good place to hang around (especially when it is around my place), I make time to check that place on Sunday.

But my whole Sunday is like Saturday when it comes to nothing to do.
Hargun003   
Oct 21, 2015
Grammar, Usage / 'Be involved in strengthening community bonds...' How do I paraphrase this statement? [4]

Dear AshlyToo
There are some grammatical mistakes which I have corrected , and if you could provide me with the context you are writing, i might help you in rephrasing the whole thing in a better way :)

Be involved in strengthening community bonds,encourage volunteerism and philanthropy, engage the youth, develop and promote sports, heritage and the arts. Experience a range of challenging and interesting portfolios to build a cohesive and resilient society, and help them in establishing the sense of national identity and affinity for the country.
Hargun003   
Oct 18, 2015
Scholarship / Scholarships and the Financial Aid letter - Graduate Institute for Masters in Development Studies [10]

Greetings,
This is the first layout of my scholarship letter which i would be sending for my masters. I would be happy i you would review it and give me some guidlines or inputs to improve it and maxximise my chance to get it! Thank you :)

Respected Ma'am/Sir,

With this letter, I hereby wish to apply for the scholarships and the financial aid provided by your esteemed Institute for the academic year of 2016-2017.

I am currently pursuing my Bachelors with Honors in Political Science from the University of Delhi, New Delhi, India. I have applied at the Graduate Institute for Masters in Development Studies because of several reasons one of them being the scholarship given by the Institute to dedicated and hardworking students especially coming from the developing countries.

I want scholarship because of several reasons, first of all I want it as my family doesn't have that many resources to sustain my two year masters in a foreign land , as my father is a Central Government Employee, my mother is a housewife and my elder sister is a cabin crew member. We live in a government accommodation. We don't have assets that we could take help of for financing my studies, Even though my family supports me and have always supported me with my dreams, but I genuinely feel that with such limited resources I won't be able to fulfill my dreams.

Ma'am/Sir, Being a son, I have huge responsibilities of my family and my future family, I have big dreams for them and for which I have always worked hard and will always do.I would be grateful to you if you could provide me the scholarship so that limited finances don't hinder my academic - professional growth and my dreams for myself and my family.

Secondly, I will be an International student who does not get financial aid as an employee. I can't work off campus because I would have the student visa. Without financial aid and work permit, it might be hard for my parents to afford it.

Thirdly, I think with all the hard-work and determination I put into my high school and college and all the volunteering and extra-curricular activities I was part of I deserve financial aid for my masters. Also, I am a hardworking student both academically and professionally, I think it is a high time that I should ease the burden of finances from my parents shoulder. I would really need the scholarship as with that I would get the opportunity to study at a world-class institute, and I know the kind of big dreams I have for myself and for my family will be fulfilled with the kind of education I will get from the Institute. Also, the scholarship would help me in paying for my books and study materials and even part of my tuition fees and accommodation fees.And moreover, I will feel relieved and happy about not dealing with loans and I would thus focus more on my studies than focusing on finances which is very important.

As far as alternative funding is concerned, My aim is to apply for Student loan from a nationalised bank and pay them the loan money after completion of my masters.

I believe that if someone has a passion for something they will excel in that field no matter what but , if you don`t get the chance or if you are not able to, you will lead a life of regret forever, and with that said, I don't want to be in that situation 5 years from now. I have decided that I want to be a part of this Institute and as I mentioned above I will work really hard to fulfill my dreams and goals and the aspirations of my family.

Ma'am/Sir, I am confident in joining the Graduate Institute and with the help of scholarship I am sure I will be able to study and focus on my thesis better. I assure you that I will work very hard and with full dedication and would make the Institute feel proud of my work.

Thanking you in advance in considering my application and giving the chance to show my motivation for the scholarship.

Thanking You,
Your Sincerely,
Best Regards,
Hargun Aiden
Hargun003   
Oct 18, 2015
Writing Feedback / Essay on the climate change - check my introduction [4]

It is good enough, well you can write this quote as well , if you wish to...
It says,
Bring the change you want to see in the society- Gandhi Society consists of the people and the govt so i see that they both determine the global warming...
Hargun003   
Oct 18, 2015
Letters / Opportunity to study with the Graduate Institute of International and Development Studies [3]

Greetings,
I am Hargun from India and this year I am applying for my masters for the academic year of 2016-17. I have written my SoP but I need someone to check it because I really want to get into this institute. I am applying for Masters in Development Studies at The Graduate Institute, Geneva.

Thank you :)
My SoP starts her----------------------------------------->>

LETTER OF MOTIVATION
FOR
THE GRADUATE INSTITUTE OF INTERNATIONAL AND DEVELOPMENT STUDIES, GENEVA, SWITZERLAND

Respected Madam / Sir,

With this letter I hereby wish to apply and state my motivation for admission in Masters in Development Studies (MDEV) at The Graduate Institute of International and Development Studies for the 2016 - 2017 academic year.

I appreciate this opportunity to introduce myself and I perceive it as a perfect opportunity to support my application for the MDEV offered by your esteemed Institute.

I am currently studying my Bachelors with Honors in Political Science from the University of Delhi in New Delhi, India.

From the beginning, I wished to become a good diplomat. I use to look forward to famous personalities like Dr. A. P. J. Abdul Kalam (former President of India), Hans J. Morgenthau, Kofi Annan who established themselves from scratch, and with their education and sheer hard work they have improved lives of so many people, and they have passed on their knowledge to young generation minds. This Institute will make me capable like them who will shine worldwide and would help citizens of the world. The scholastic and professional skills provided by the Institute will make me capable of performing good at a global level and I would be in a position where I could help people. The Graduate Institute is like a team which would help me gain a lot academically and professionally. In my country I will get my own nation's perspective on certain issues, however, at the Graduate Institute due to its multicultural student and teacher body I will get the opportunity to gain perspective from different countries which I always wanted to have and this will help me become a responsible and aware global citizen.

I got to know about The Graduate Institute in a random conversation with my school french teacher one day when she mentioned about the institute and, asked me to check. And then I just went through your website and I was so happy because it was exactly what I wanted. Apart from exploring the Institute website extensively, I started discussing with my college professors and I started sending emails to Institute alumni though I didn't know them personally, but I managed to get their information from career testimonials and Institute's YouTube videos. I enquired about student life, future prospects, as I always wanted a senior to guide me, and they supported me by replying messages, those messages really motivated me, they guided me very well.

I decided to study Masters in Development Studies because I really like the curriculum. With the introduction of gender studies in my undergraduate studies, I was really motivated to study further but, unfortunately, that course was in between removed from our syllabus. However, that didn't stop me, I looked for ways like I interned with various Government organisations, NGO's where I was exposed to various issues like hunger, poverty, lack of education, child and women right issues, labour laws which made me more aware about the conditions at the ground level.It made me realise that not everyone had the same opportunities nor lived the same life . Thus, I have decided to study and understand how Gender can play an important role in the development of societies in the South Asia in my masters. Also, To be a successful diplomat it is important for me to understand the issues and to believe in equal opportunity for everyone and this course will help me in broadening my understanding as the programme has unique characteristics of giving multidisciplinary insights, helping students in challenging these issues and addressing systematic solutions to these problems . I believe that my background in Political Science would support me in exploring the field of development. Also, MDEV offers some courses in french and it was my dream to study in french language because of my love for it. Thus, MDEV will give me the opportunity to use and polish my linguistics skills. Moreover, the multicultural student body always fascinated me, it will boost my confidence as I always wanted to study in an International atmosphere where students are from different countries.

The Graduate Institute will give me a platform to shine, and will give me professional skills and tools with which I will be able to stand strong in getting a good job for myself. I aspire to work for UNICEF and UN Women as I always admired their work, they would offer a good stable job which is very important for me. It will be a great opportunity for me to help people from all over the world not only my own country and that is what I want - to bring a change at global level which I am sure I will.

Graduate institute has all the reasons that would help me reach the kind of profession I see for myself in future like it has a huge reputation as it has produced great alumni and my favorite like Hans J. Morgenthau who is considered to be the father of International Studies, I am a huge fan of his work "Politics among nations", also one thing that attracted me was the financial aid provided by the institute, as I would be able to study by my own. I believe that being a student I would not only empower my career development, I would be a position to utilize my full potentials as well.

Ma'am/Sir, I am confident that overall opportunity to study with the Institute will broaden my horizons and give me an opportunity to gain world-class education and help me become an excellent world-citizen. I am really very sure that with my personal experience and cultural background I will exceed your expectations and bring a meaningful contribution to the programme. Also, I will work really hard and would definitely be an asset to the Institute in the future.

Thanking you in advance for considering my application.

Your Sincerely,
Best Regards,
Hargun Aiden
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