Writing Feedback / Power of media can influence reader perception and their viewpoint; too much celebrities in TV [2]

The media pay too much attention to the lives and relationships of celebrities such as actors, singers or footballers. They should spend more time reporting the lives of ordinary people instead.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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Power of media can influence reader perception and their viewpoint about something. Currently, famous people lives attract everyone to know regarding what they do and mass media provide many information about them. There are contrast opinions in society that it is important for media to give more attention to superstar activities or vice versa. In this case, I opine that media has to report same proportion concerning not only extra ordinary people but also ordinary people who can inspire the viewer.

Generally, the media only focus to report public figures in their news because of rating. Therefore, they can get more profit such as advertising. To illustrate, public are more curious on the Beckham's life so media crew always observe his daily activities. Finally, their report can get more attention from people who want to know about him around the world and it is opportunity. There is no doubt that famous people have magnetism for the media.

On the other hand, a few media provide information of ordinary people. For that reason, the curiosity from reader is the problem since a slight people have interest on their activities. For instance, inventor found an electrical car so it is imperative to share this information in order to motivate others. So, this activities have to get media attention so that the society will think to change their mind about energy alternative.

The aforementioned evidence shows that although celebrities always get more attention from media, news of people who can make people inspired are important too. Where possible, the mass media must have news column which talk success story of commonplace who can motivate others.

Writing Feedback / In many countries, the life expectancy is used as indicators to monitor the health of population [5]

One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing. Do you think the disadvantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

Nowadays, advance medical care brings changes in quality of human life. As a consequence, the population will have life longer and the life expectancy will increase. I strongly believe that the improvement in curative science will give better impact than drawback to development.

To begin, people can access all of the services to improve their health because there are many health care providing sub-specialty treatment which can solve health problems so that they will be life longer and will prevent from injuries. To illustrate, when someone will get surgery, doctor used sword in the past, while now they can use surgical instrument like scalpel. As it can be seen from the example, the cutting age in medical equipment will facilitate surgeons at work so it causes the patients that will be live longer.

In many countries, they are using life expectancy as indicators to monitor the health of their population. For example, the United States of America uses that indicators in the framework of their nationwide health promotion and disease prevention plan. Furthermore, if a country has the highest average number of years that a person can be expected to live longer, it indicates that their population live well. Furthermore, it is very important for decision maker that a healthy population will not burden the financial of government.

The aforementioned evidence shows that there are good effects compared to negative effects on the improvement. It is imperative that government should control this issue as soon as possible and keep do something to prevent from other population problems and also maintain public health.

Writing Feedback / The two techniques of study and each has some merits and demerits [NEW]

Some people think that it is more effective for students to study in groups, while others believe that it is better for them to study alone.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Every students have different learning styles and they can choice their ways. Furthermore, there are two arguments about effectiveness in study in which common people opine that students will efficacious study in group or study alone. In my opinion, they can use two ways in their study because all of them have advantage or disadvantage.

Firstly, in study group, the student will meet another student who have difference ability. Thus, the benefit of this way, they can correct each other when there are lack of their knowledge about subject. On the other hand, usually only few students are willing to study whereas other students are not willing to work so that the lazy student will influence the others which cause it is not conducive for studying.

Secondly, study alone is the best choices for someone who need quiet atmosphere to study in order to they can absorb the study easily and this method will train student to be independence to solve their subject problems. In addition, the good effect on learn by themselves is flexibility to manage schedule and it will make enjoy to study. Moreover, this method has drawbacks which are less socializing with friends and also no exchange ideas with one another.

The aforementioned evidence shows that two techniques of study which have merit and demerit and it will improve the concentration of student to study. Then, I believe that these modes will help student to learning. It is imperative that the best way to learn depends on the willingness of people.

Writing Feedback / Writing Task - 2 The crime rate among teenagers has increased dramatically in many countries [2]

The crime rate among teenagers has increased dramatically in many countries.

Discuss some possible reasons for this increase and suggest solutions.

Young people are the agent of change in many countries. Nowadays, the rate of crimes increased sharply and occurred in teenagers. According to studies, there are many reasons for committing an illegal act such as ignorance and poverty. On the other hand, there are solutions to solve this problem are education to reduce lack of knowledge and incentive to reduce poorness.

Firstly, common perpetrator associate with the ignorance in which they have less education about law and humanity. However, they have good education, it is not indication that someone never do something illegal or offence. For example, brawl among senior high school student, they get many input about moral in the school while more students have less sense about understanding and kindness towards other people. As it can be seen from the example, character building provision to grow sense of belonging.

Secondly, in many places, poverty is the major problem which is too hard to solve by itself. Usually, the area which have high crime rate relate to welfare problem. At present, there are global resolution to increase aid to diminish this problem in many countries. Then, the relief will empower adolescents to change their behavior such as in economy creative to make something that had added value. As a result, there are expected to drop the crime rates from this solution.

In conclusion, there are evidence that the crime close to poverty and ignorance. The authority in education have to insert about character building in their curriculum and give a stimulus to make some creativities. Where possible, government in other countries make more attention to adolescence to be involved in national development.

Writing Feedback / Task 1 - The Amount of dollars spent on Books purchasing in Germany, France, Italy, and Austria [2]

The line graph shows that the number of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy, and Austria between 1995 and 2005. Overall, it can be seen that all of countries had fluctuation trends with exception France. While amount of money in Germany had higher than the other countries to buy books over the period, that amount fluctuated from 1999 until 2005.

With regards to Germany people, they stood at 80 million in 1995 and rose steadily to 90 million in 1999 and had similar trend to Austrian. On the other hand, the total of buying in France increased gradually from 1995 to 1999. In contrast, that of Italian decreased in 1999 to 50 million.

Turning to next interval period, in German, the total of money spent on book was slow decrease to 85 million in 2003 and the graph reaching a peak of 95 million in 2005. However, those of Italian and France people rose gradually, they were under German total which spent money on book. There was a sharp growth in Austria to buy the books and it caused them in third.

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Writing Feedback / The number of hybrid cars sale in Japan stood at 50.000 in 2006 then increased sharply to 340.000 [4]

The bar chart illustrates the global sale of hybrid vehicles in US, Japan, and Other countries between 2006 and 2009. Overall, it can be seen that the greatest change was in the number of transportation sales in Japan.

To begin, the number of sales in Japan stood at 50.000 vehicles which had similar amount to other countries but that of US stood at 250.000 units and it was the highest number in which total of sales was 360.000 units in 2006. In the next following year, US transport sales peaked at 350.000 and Japan sales rose gradually to 53.000 similar with other nations at 60.000. In contrast, the sales of US plunges to 310.000 while in Japan and other countries transaction increased gradually in 2008. Finally, in the 2009, Japan sale of vehicles increased sharply to 340.000, whereas sales of hybrid in other countries rose to 110.000 units. On the other hand, the sales of hybrid transportation in US had decreased steadily to 290.000 units. As a result, the total of unit sales was 740.000 in the end period and two times greater than in the beginning period.

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